I am going to write this as I read part 10, commenting as and when I have something to say, since I suspect I will miss key thoughts if I just wait until the end to write my comments
It is no wonder Gregory is suspicious, and this being something this friends organised is the more likely course of events. Still, more likely does not actually mean its what happened, life does like its little surprises. The club? Now that is an interesting word, full of possibilities, openings and potential
Something that deserves further exploration, hint, hint!
Having watched the show as Jackie got out of the car and showed herself off so, it's no wonder Gregory things this was all staged and arranged by his friends, his suspicions make even more sense now.
His present... how delicious! The thoughts and feelings that must be going through Jackie, and her friends, at the perfectly reasonable, to Gregory, line of thinking that she is a treat being offered up, without having a say in it or what happens... surely to good an opportunity for her friends to totally dismiss, but it has to be handled carefully.
A more dominant Tracy, the Tracy / Dana dynamic is growing, and becoming ever more interesting. Oh my! Tracy, you evil genius you, that's inspired! Now it is a common statement that actions speak louder than words, and clearly Tracy wants to push the pet angle, still, converting a flustered and accident prone Jackie into one who is "basically begging" to be treated as a pet, regardless of her words, I do admire and respect that, and it puts a very happy smile on my face
Oh Jackie, Jackie, Jackie, punished for your "alleged misbehaviour"? You don't yet seem to have worked out that firstly, your friends know about your actual, real misbehaviour, and secondly, we are getting well past the point of needing excuses for punishing you, it is enough that your friend's want to, and that you crave it and love it *evil smirk*
As for your new status as the "spoils of war", or as I would think of you, the trophy / slave, its not so obvious yet just from the story, but given the story and the forum conversation, the bet between your friends shows that you have been the spoils of war for a while now, you just haven't fully caught up with your new status is all *muwahhh*
Considering Dana vs Tracy, I am starting to think that perhaps Tracy is the more subtle, more conniving one of the two. Dana is starting to feel more direct and up front about her dominant behaviour, while Tracy is starting to emerge as someone who is sneaky, watching for and exploiting openings, settings things up in advance. Which can appear less dominant from the outside, but is actually just a different approach to control. Plus we are seeing they have a fluid dynamic between themselves.
Ah, and the bets expand in the story, and Jackie is discovering how much she does not know about the internal dynamic of her friends
I really like how you are mixing the internal relationships in with the bondage and naughtiness, I feel we need both to bring the characters to life and to really involve the reader in the bondage and wickedness
Tracy, wow, so much said so quickly and efficiently, and really ramping up the power and intensity of the experience for Jackie, all while letting Jackie know her friends are onto her naughty behaviour, and consequences are going to start arriving any moment now...
I find myself pausing to consider and think through:
>> If I specifically asked for things in my diary that I had no intention of doing it made me a hypocrite before my friends, as well as challenging the trust I had placed in them.
Strictly speaking yes, I agree, but I don't see this in simple black and white terms. Until very recently, arguably until about 10 minutes ago, Jackie did not realise how fully and completely what was written in her diary might be realised by her friends. Her diary has been all about expressing and communicating her fantasies, dreams and desires. Now one key element of these is that she not be in control, that all of the decisions be taken out of her hands.
Still, there is a fundamental difference between fantasy and reality, a fact that Jackie is suddenly being confronted with, and that I am sure her friends already realise. Also, there is the whole class of "I like not liking it" fantasies, where not wanting to do something, experience something, but being made to experience it anyway because her friends push her into it, is what the fantasy is all about.
Being exposed to a stranger fits well here. A significant part of the power of the fantasy lies in really NOT wanting it to happen, but having it happen even as Jackie is desperately wishing it isn't happening, so in that sense it's something she wants, while not wanting. Something she would not do herself, but will end up very much enjoying, even as she is massively embarrassed, when made to do so by her friends.
I think that makes sense when written down
After this, it will be interesting to see what Jackie writes in her diary going forward, now she realises anything and everything she writes down may actually come to pass... such power, such freedom, such a rush... so long as she is suitably, actually massively horny, this is likely to encourage her, while discouraging her when she has just cum and feels more sensible and level headed *evil smirk*
Gregory offering mentorship, very mature, sensible and level headed. This is really nice to see, someone adult and mature, being sensible, yet careful about this, opening the door to the girls, but not pushing or pressuring any of them! The world needs more people like this, and being like this is generally the better approach longer term as well.
Oooh, a private discussion between Gregory and the two friends, Jenny's stomach must be doing flips at this point! Plus of course they are right, the cage does need to be checked for size *radiates innocence*
*rolls eyes* I wonder if this is me being far to cynical, or Jenny not really catching up yet with the way things are going, and what her friends are clearly thinking. Tracy's recently revealed sexual leanings have very little to do with who will be "paying" for things here, instead it is all about who is the slave and who is the master. The whole point of having a slave is that they are the one who gets offered up in payment, especially when Gregory has just made it clear he is already eyeing Tracy up and getting ideas.
Again I find myself wondering if it's me or Jacky... Jacky does not seem to have caught up with the thought that a pet does not need a coat in a cage... perhaps I really am a pervert
Muwahhhh, Jackie is so busy fretting over the lack of a lock, which I suspect will be very swiftly fixed, that she didn't even see the coat removal looming in her immediate future, yummy!
Now that is an interesting statement, why would Tracy think that Jackie had conspired with Dana? Is there reason for this? Or just the emotions, the uncertainty, fear and delicious submission speaking?
<< 'Command me firmly' I thought in my mind, and I will try to be worthy of such commands.
Now that's a striking turn of phrase, and sounds like it would make an excellent quote from her diary, or more likely an excellent addition to her diary at the next opportunity, since I am not sure it would have made it there yet *smirk*
Oh my, absolutely delicious, absolutely wonderful! The change in Jackie's mental approach, the liberation, the acceptance, the embracing of being a bad dog, since she is not in charge, and thus no longer has responsibility for things, for any of this. The clues and hints have been there for a while, but things really are coming together now! Of course, I do strongly suspect Jackie is wrong in one particular, I very much doubt her friends, her owners, will allow her such freedom of motion and action for being bad, but that is a "little detail" that she has yet to discover for herself
*sigh* and *grrrr* I feel a short rant coming on fast. I cannot fault Jackie here, the pet or the author, but it still depresses and upsets me. Why should Jackie the pet have to think in terms of "my rather ordinary small breasts". Ever look at any of the websites devoted to female beauty, rather than raw porn? Those websites tend to celebrate small, pert and beautiful breasts. Watch men, watch Gregory, breasts and women are all beautiful! The constant diminishing of women, and calling out their perceived faults rather than their self evident beauty and attractiveness... I find it all so depressing and upsetting. It is simply not right!
Settled down in the cage, such a lovely sight and mental image
Now that is a very interesting dream! Also, the first strong hint, from memory, of a more male sexual aspect to the bondage games, and the possible fate of our bound lady. More than that though, hinting in her diary about being abandoned at the hospital? Such wicked dreams you have... such naughty fantasies *teasing smirk*
That ending, so teasing, so wicked, so perfectly well timed! I mean, her friends must know what Jackie is likely to be doing all alone in the cage, she has demonstrated that tie her up and leave her alone and this is what happens, after all. And now Gregory, a man with extra toys, is in on the open secret...
I do find myself wondering if he has a chastity belt, or other devices that will have the same result, in his possession, and that is up for negotiation... he has just seen first hand that Jackie needs the "help" *evil smirk*
Having read this, and thinking back, I am of the opinion that the title of part 9 should be "Taken In Trade?", with the question mark added, since even here, at the end of part 10, the nature of any payment is still not clear. I think the sense of wondering and hinting works well.
