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#21
Looking for a Story / Re: Permanent rubber suit?
Last post by Latext - May 04, 2025, 02:41:16 PM #22
Packaged Website Stories Feedback / Re: Scanned, Shipped, Printed ...
Last post by feline - May 03, 2025, 11:40:49 PMLooks up from plotting plots about plots and more plots on my plotting table, casually converting it before turning... nothing to see here...
OK doing this out of order, and I should start by saying that while I read voraciously I failed English at school several times in a row. But I don't think you over use commas at all. Let me find an example...
From the start of part 3
>> Maggie happily replied "That's wonderful news Paula, we'll get together real soon to start work on the next model."
>> Paula cautioned Maggie "We do need to be a bit more scientific though."
After "happily replied" there should be a comma before the speech starts. After "cautioned Maggie" another comma, but sometimes a full stop before the speech starts. It's about breaking the text into the correct logical blocks and showing what's grouped with what.
Does that make sense?
Maggie and Paula definitely come across as real characters, people with their own agendas, desires and needs in all of this. You can watch them, understand them and care about them, and care if they are also getting what they want from all of this, and appreciate that they really are getting plenty of their own rewards from all of this hard work locking up and tormenting Phil
Smell and taste, for taste I was simply thinking about having the gag deliver tiny traces of certain chemicals, tastes, on demand, rather than when Phil prompts it for water or liquid food. Since the mouth only picks up a very few tastes this would be quite simple. Smell is more complex, but can be worked on in stages.
Cycling back to touch, temperate and vibration should be easily added with time, and having vibration "move" across the skin will feel like touch, with some development... that's really going to blow some minds!
Shell game... oh my!!! Now I am thinking about the tricky game of find the ball under the moving shells, where it's never where you think it is. Never knowing which person is inside which shell, even as you are interacting with them, manipulating them, choosing what they see, hear, experience, picking who gets released first and who has to stay locked up for longer, while never really knowing for sure if you are picking the person you think you are picking... oh my! The ideas and games that start to come to mind simply by calling this a shell game...
Adding to the comment about feedback loops, another not sure how it would work yet idea, but the three shells and women, for discussions sake, woman one is teased with the "threat" of being kept locked up for another 48 hours and the system detects that this excites her.
So the computer system then starts trying to encourage women two and three by giving them pleasure whenever images or comments about keeping them locked in the cases for longer are made.
Perhaps what you are already thinking about, encouraging the women to show similar reactions and kinks while inside the cases, making it all the harder for anyone unknowing on the outside to tell who is who.
For a small but interesting addition, anytime the room the women are displayed in is empty there is a chance that the computer will engage the wheels in their stands to swap the women around, so even if you started out knowing which women was in which position, soon you know they were all mixed up. Obviously the women would know this was happening, so they could really feel it when sometime was talking to the wrong case, expressing their devotion and counting down the hours until "their" girlfriend is released back to them...
OK doing this out of order, and I should start by saying that while I read voraciously I failed English at school several times in a row. But I don't think you over use commas at all. Let me find an example...
From the start of part 3
>> Maggie happily replied "That's wonderful news Paula, we'll get together real soon to start work on the next model."
>> Paula cautioned Maggie "We do need to be a bit more scientific though."
After "happily replied" there should be a comma before the speech starts. After "cautioned Maggie" another comma, but sometimes a full stop before the speech starts. It's about breaking the text into the correct logical blocks and showing what's grouped with what.
Does that make sense?
Maggie and Paula definitely come across as real characters, people with their own agendas, desires and needs in all of this. You can watch them, understand them and care about them, and care if they are also getting what they want from all of this, and appreciate that they really are getting plenty of their own rewards from all of this hard work locking up and tormenting Phil
Smell and taste, for taste I was simply thinking about having the gag deliver tiny traces of certain chemicals, tastes, on demand, rather than when Phil prompts it for water or liquid food. Since the mouth only picks up a very few tastes this would be quite simple. Smell is more complex, but can be worked on in stages.
Cycling back to touch, temperate and vibration should be easily added with time, and having vibration "move" across the skin will feel like touch, with some development... that's really going to blow some minds!
Shell game... oh my!!! Now I am thinking about the tricky game of find the ball under the moving shells, where it's never where you think it is. Never knowing which person is inside which shell, even as you are interacting with them, manipulating them, choosing what they see, hear, experience, picking who gets released first and who has to stay locked up for longer, while never really knowing for sure if you are picking the person you think you are picking... oh my! The ideas and games that start to come to mind simply by calling this a shell game...
Adding to the comment about feedback loops, another not sure how it would work yet idea, but the three shells and women, for discussions sake, woman one is teased with the "threat" of being kept locked up for another 48 hours and the system detects that this excites her.
So the computer system then starts trying to encourage women two and three by giving them pleasure whenever images or comments about keeping them locked in the cases for longer are made.
Perhaps what you are already thinking about, encouraging the women to show similar reactions and kinks while inside the cases, making it all the harder for anyone unknowing on the outside to tell who is who.
For a small but interesting addition, anytime the room the women are displayed in is empty there is a chance that the computer will engage the wheels in their stands to swap the women around, so even if you started out knowing which women was in which position, soon you know they were all mixed up. Obviously the women would know this was happening, so they could really feel it when sometime was talking to the wrong case, expressing their devotion and counting down the hours until "their" girlfriend is released back to them...
#23
Links / Re: tugstories.com is there a ...
Last post by emmasbound - May 03, 2025, 11:01:05 PMHi Teann, thank you for getting back on this. I had started to panic it was my PC for a while.
Have a good weekend.
Emma
Have a good weekend.
Emma
#24
BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Re: All About Control by Jack ...
Last post by teanndaorsa - May 03, 2025, 08:09:35 PMA second part to this tonight, enjoy!
#25
BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Committed by JustForALittleWhi...
Last post by teanndaorsa - May 03, 2025, 08:07:44 PMYou can view the story here on the plaza:
https://www.boundstories.net/storiesad/committed.html
F/m; F+/m; bond; chastity; discipline; punish; straitjacket; ballgag; belt; cuffs; gag; handcuffs; head-harness; mittens; spreadeagle; hospital; cheat; cuckold; drug; electro; enema; nurse; tattoo; torment; transport; reluct; cons; XX
Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.
Thanks
https://www.boundstories.net/storiesad/committed.html
F/m; F+/m; bond; chastity; discipline; punish; straitjacket; ballgag; belt; cuffs; gag; handcuffs; head-harness; mittens; spreadeagle; hospital; cheat; cuckold; drug; electro; enema; nurse; tattoo; torment; transport; reluct; cons; XX
Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.
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#26
BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Forfeit by Frosted Moonwright
Last post by teanndaorsa - May 03, 2025, 08:05:23 PMYou can view the story here on the plaza:
https://www.boundstories.net/storiesek/forfeit.html
F/f; tg; bond; rope; game; strip; tease; sex; cons; X
Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.
Thanks
https://www.boundstories.net/storiesek/forfeit.html
F/f; tg; bond; rope; game; strip; tease; sex; cons; X
Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.
Thanks
#27
Dollstories.net stories feedback / Re: Premium Playthings by Bubu...
Last post by teanndaorsa - May 03, 2025, 08:05:09 PMAnd part 7, enjoy
#28
Erotic Stories Website Feedback / The Bright Room: Preparations ...
Last post by teanndaorsa - May 03, 2025, 08:02:43 PMYou can view the story here on the plaza:
https://grometsplaza.net/eroticstories/storiesad/bright_room.html
M/f; captive; box; transport; enema; bond; drugs; catheter; climax; reluct; X
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https://grometsplaza.net/eroticstories/storiesad/bright_room.html
M/f; captive; box; transport; enema; bond; drugs; catheter; climax; reluct; X
Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.
Thanks
#29
Pet & PonyGirl Stories / Re: Vanity Mare by thepinkbish...
Last post by teanndaorsa - May 03, 2025, 08:02:27 PMPart 2 (of 5) up tonight, enjoy!
#30
Links / Re: tugstories.com is there a ...
Last post by teanndaorsa - May 03, 2025, 06:21:32 PMIt's definitely not just you, the site itself is down in a way that you won't be able to get around. 
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