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BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Re: Sophie and Mark by Twisted...
Last post by twistedsmile - September 26, 2026, 12:06:33 AM15. "Singularity" Commentary
"Singularity" like a black hole. After the explosive super nova of chapter 13, Sophie and Mark are now collapsing back into each other. It's also a little bit of a fake out; following a break up story with a title that sounds like 'being single'.
Original title, "Serenity" fitting with the dream-like middle section, and of finding peace again.
"Exclusion Principle" - the section titles are physics references (and also puns)
This section is effectively the "no hard feelings" scene that was absent at the end of chapter 13. Call me a softy, but I want all my characters to get along. I think it would have been easy to treat Rob as a plot obstacle, and just toss him away now that he's served his purpose (so to speak). This scene is very intentionally pushing back against that.
"Rob had suffered a crushing defeat" - dual meaning. As suggested in chapter 14, Rob tried to pursue Sophie. But in the end, she chose Mark.
"Like Monopoly" - as I said in the commentary to chapter 3, the flashback was originally going to use Monopoly rather than Scrabble, so this is just a reference to that. If you wanted to read something into why Rob is good at Monopoly, I won't tell you you're wrong
"he'd told me as much himself" - chapter 14
"I couldn't hold it against either of them." - at this point Mark doesn't know if Sophie and Rob actually slept together during the break. He couldn't hold it against them because he himself was sleeping with other people, of course.
"But we never shared a bed together again" - rest assured
"Entanglement" - I try to keep to a consistent one story a week schedule (with breaks between seasons). It stops me falling down a perfectionism hole, and honestly after a week I get bored editing/rewriting the same story and want to move on. That also means, sometimes I'm forced to say 'fuck it, good enough'.
By the time I sent this story in, I really didn't like this section. It feels (felt) pretentious, over-written, and borderline incoherent. I wrote the original draft months earlier in a stream of consciousness, and when I finally came back to finish it off, I just couldn't get back into the same groove, and everything I wrote felt forced and... cringe.
Anyway, this thing is dense with references and word play and I'm not going to go line-by-line to unpack it all. I'll just pick out a few key bits.
In case it is unclear, the short version is - they're bound together, symmetrically, and they have a bunch of sex.
"we were the multi-limbed creature of mythology" - the children of the moon from Plato's Symposium. I haven't read it, but it's referenced in "The Origin of Love" from "Hedwig and the Angry Inch", which was previously referenced in chapter 11
"I prayed to my goddess in tongues" - cunnilingus, in case that wasn't clear
"I gave myself to her, in full submission" - Nymphetamine Fix by Cradle of Filth (To her alone in full submission). It sounds horrible but it's actually quite beautiful.
"My beautiful shadow, stitched to me" - Peter Pan
Various callbacks to chapter 3 (their first bondage, chronologically):
* "She held our hands, pinned above my head. An echo. A memory." -> "She put her hands on my biceps... pinning my arms above my head."
* "Familiar and different" -> "It was nice... different."
* "Not mistress and slave, but Sophie and Mark" / "It had been too long" -> "Not mistress and slave, no whips and chains. Just a belt, and two people making love for the first time in too long."
* "Our hearts slowing from their excitement... beating a shared rhythm" -> "Feeling our hearts beat a shared rhythm."
"The sweet sorrow of parting" - Shakespeare? What are you doing in this smut?
"some invisible, intangible chain" - like quantum entanglement (like the section title :O)
Originally, this was where this story ended. But the word count came in much too short. I didn't really want to stretch it out, so I had to find more story to tell. The next two sections take some dialogue which originally appeared in 15.5 and 'decompresses' them into full scenes. Ironically, I ended up liking them more than the 'main' story.
"You really hurt me, you know." - originally they just have the sex in the previous section and then all their problems are magically solved. But that felt dishonest - they each had real grievances. There needed to be a reckoning.
"we could have talked it out" - I used to listen to Dan Savage's 'Savage Love' podacast. And after a while, I noticed that his advice almost always boiled down to one thing - you need to have open and honest communication with your partner (easier said than done).
As I was writing through this dialogue I was sort of interpolating the 'blame' so that neither comes off as 'the one' in the wrong
"There was that smile of hers, warm, caring. Loving." - this is an intentional inversion. In previous chapters, when Mark mentioned 'that smile', he's talking about the mischievous smile that precedes some torment.
"I won't ever leave you." - section title "Event Horizon" is the region of a black hole beyond which you can no longer escape its gravity
"My Sophie" - callback to chapter 1, "I wanted to break out of my chains! Not to be free, but to have... her. My Sophie."
I'm not going to pretend like this (fairly brief) conversation solved all their problems. Relationships are never that simple. But they're off to a good start.
"Escape Velocity" - kind of gives away the punchline. I wonder if anyone actually pays attention to these titles
This might be my favourite scene in the whole series to this point.
"Brett had awoken something in me." - fake out
"You're planning to leave me for this cute femboy." - I think she's a little jealous, and trying to mask it with jokes.
"teaching me how to do proper rope bondage" - I wanted them to talk about Brett, but I wanted them to be doing something interesting at the same time; not 'just' talking like the previous section. Given Brett did teach Mark some rope bondage, and given Mark's previous failed attempts at tying Sophie in chapter 10, this seemed like a perfect combo.
I did have a plan for a whole, dedicated rope bondage chapter (obvious s-title 'Shibari'), but I couldn't think of a plot to go with it. That's not to say it's off the table.
"Is he bigger than me?!" - I stole that joke from Family Guy
"I'll have to gag you." / "You wouldn't dare." - of course he would (chapter 10)
"I think this is right..." - playing dumb to lull her into a false sense of security
"We were both fully clothed." - it's specifically 'non-sexual' bondage
"It was... I don't regret it." - how do you tell your girlfriend you enjoyed having sex with another man?
"Oh, and he's got some really cool toys." - changing the subject
"I said with a mischievous grin" - turnabout's fair play
"Speaking of tying kn--" - tying knots. As you well know, I love a pun. But then the boring, realist part of my brain was like 'getting engaged right after a break is not the basis for a healthy marriage'.
"her hands already free" - in my head, Mark did actually get good at rope bondage. But like I said in another commentary, Sophie is Bugs Bunny - she has a supernatural ability to escape
"I'm not so easy to tie down" - dual meaning; both literally and matrimonially. It might even have a triple meaning - that she's not easy to interpret (hard to pin down). But 'not so easy' isn't the same as 'impossible'...
15.5 "Interstellar"
"Interstellar" goes with the physics-y allusions in the previous chapter. Originally it was "Introspection", but when I pulled out and expanded dialogue for chapter 15, it didn't make as much sense anymore.
"Did you and Rob..?" / "He asked... But I couldn't really trust him" - in the original draft she did have sex with Rob, but only once because he wasn't into kinky stuff. I didn't want to be 'precious' about Sophie's sex life without Mark - after all, Mark had sex with multiple other people during their break. But given how chapter 13 played out, it didn't seem like she would trust Rob enough to sleep with him again, especially not on his own.
"devil night" - because of the devil's threesome (MMF)
"You're not the only one who dipped a toe in the bisexual waters." - that was a bit clunky
"Stop grinning, you perv." - double standards/misogyny there; doesn't like the idea of her having sex with men, but really likes the idea of women.
"It was nice. Different." - Mark says the exact same thing in chapter 3, when he's trying to downplay how much he enjoyed his first BDSM experience.
"she said we should call her if we ever want a unicorn." - foreshadowing
"Are we gonna be okay?" / "Yeah... I think so." - The original ending was a slightly sunnier "I missed you" / "I love you". But I'm a sicko. I refuse to give readers an easy resolution.
In the long gap between chapters 15 and 16, I started to feel like this would have been a pretty good ending to the series. Alas, I already committed to at least 20 chapters, and I'm a man of my word. Actually, I have a tentative plan for another season after that. I dunno, 25 just seems like a nicer number than 20. We'll see how it goes...
"Singularity" like a black hole. After the explosive super nova of chapter 13, Sophie and Mark are now collapsing back into each other. It's also a little bit of a fake out; following a break up story with a title that sounds like 'being single'.
Original title, "Serenity" fitting with the dream-like middle section, and of finding peace again.
"Exclusion Principle" - the section titles are physics references (and also puns)
This section is effectively the "no hard feelings" scene that was absent at the end of chapter 13. Call me a softy, but I want all my characters to get along. I think it would have been easy to treat Rob as a plot obstacle, and just toss him away now that he's served his purpose (so to speak). This scene is very intentionally pushing back against that.
"Rob had suffered a crushing defeat" - dual meaning. As suggested in chapter 14, Rob tried to pursue Sophie. But in the end, she chose Mark.
"Like Monopoly" - as I said in the commentary to chapter 3, the flashback was originally going to use Monopoly rather than Scrabble, so this is just a reference to that. If you wanted to read something into why Rob is good at Monopoly, I won't tell you you're wrong
"he'd told me as much himself" - chapter 14
"I couldn't hold it against either of them." - at this point Mark doesn't know if Sophie and Rob actually slept together during the break. He couldn't hold it against them because he himself was sleeping with other people, of course.
"But we never shared a bed together again" - rest assured
"Entanglement" - I try to keep to a consistent one story a week schedule (with breaks between seasons). It stops me falling down a perfectionism hole, and honestly after a week I get bored editing/rewriting the same story and want to move on. That also means, sometimes I'm forced to say 'fuck it, good enough'.
By the time I sent this story in, I really didn't like this section. It feels (felt) pretentious, over-written, and borderline incoherent. I wrote the original draft months earlier in a stream of consciousness, and when I finally came back to finish it off, I just couldn't get back into the same groove, and everything I wrote felt forced and... cringe.
Anyway, this thing is dense with references and word play and I'm not going to go line-by-line to unpack it all. I'll just pick out a few key bits.
In case it is unclear, the short version is - they're bound together, symmetrically, and they have a bunch of sex.
"we were the multi-limbed creature of mythology" - the children of the moon from Plato's Symposium. I haven't read it, but it's referenced in "The Origin of Love" from "Hedwig and the Angry Inch", which was previously referenced in chapter 11
"I prayed to my goddess in tongues" - cunnilingus, in case that wasn't clear
"I gave myself to her, in full submission" - Nymphetamine Fix by Cradle of Filth (To her alone in full submission). It sounds horrible but it's actually quite beautiful.
"My beautiful shadow, stitched to me" - Peter Pan
Various callbacks to chapter 3 (their first bondage, chronologically):
* "She held our hands, pinned above my head. An echo. A memory." -> "She put her hands on my biceps... pinning my arms above my head."
* "Familiar and different" -> "It was nice... different."
* "Not mistress and slave, but Sophie and Mark" / "It had been too long" -> "Not mistress and slave, no whips and chains. Just a belt, and two people making love for the first time in too long."
* "Our hearts slowing from their excitement... beating a shared rhythm" -> "Feeling our hearts beat a shared rhythm."
"The sweet sorrow of parting" - Shakespeare? What are you doing in this smut?
"some invisible, intangible chain" - like quantum entanglement (like the section title :O)
Originally, this was where this story ended. But the word count came in much too short. I didn't really want to stretch it out, so I had to find more story to tell. The next two sections take some dialogue which originally appeared in 15.5 and 'decompresses' them into full scenes. Ironically, I ended up liking them more than the 'main' story.
"You really hurt me, you know." - originally they just have the sex in the previous section and then all their problems are magically solved. But that felt dishonest - they each had real grievances. There needed to be a reckoning.
"we could have talked it out" - I used to listen to Dan Savage's 'Savage Love' podacast. And after a while, I noticed that his advice almost always boiled down to one thing - you need to have open and honest communication with your partner (easier said than done).
As I was writing through this dialogue I was sort of interpolating the 'blame' so that neither comes off as 'the one' in the wrong
"There was that smile of hers, warm, caring. Loving." - this is an intentional inversion. In previous chapters, when Mark mentioned 'that smile', he's talking about the mischievous smile that precedes some torment.
"I won't ever leave you." - section title "Event Horizon" is the region of a black hole beyond which you can no longer escape its gravity
"My Sophie" - callback to chapter 1, "I wanted to break out of my chains! Not to be free, but to have... her. My Sophie."
I'm not going to pretend like this (fairly brief) conversation solved all their problems. Relationships are never that simple. But they're off to a good start.
"Escape Velocity" - kind of gives away the punchline. I wonder if anyone actually pays attention to these titles
This might be my favourite scene in the whole series to this point.
"Brett had awoken something in me." - fake out
"You're planning to leave me for this cute femboy." - I think she's a little jealous, and trying to mask it with jokes.
"teaching me how to do proper rope bondage" - I wanted them to talk about Brett, but I wanted them to be doing something interesting at the same time; not 'just' talking like the previous section. Given Brett did teach Mark some rope bondage, and given Mark's previous failed attempts at tying Sophie in chapter 10, this seemed like a perfect combo.
I did have a plan for a whole, dedicated rope bondage chapter (obvious s-title 'Shibari'), but I couldn't think of a plot to go with it. That's not to say it's off the table.
"Is he bigger than me?!" - I stole that joke from Family Guy
"I'll have to gag you." / "You wouldn't dare." - of course he would (chapter 10)
"I think this is right..." - playing dumb to lull her into a false sense of security
"We were both fully clothed." - it's specifically 'non-sexual' bondage
"It was... I don't regret it." - how do you tell your girlfriend you enjoyed having sex with another man?
"Oh, and he's got some really cool toys." - changing the subject
"I said with a mischievous grin" - turnabout's fair play
"Speaking of tying kn--" - tying knots. As you well know, I love a pun. But then the boring, realist part of my brain was like 'getting engaged right after a break is not the basis for a healthy marriage'.
"her hands already free" - in my head, Mark did actually get good at rope bondage. But like I said in another commentary, Sophie is Bugs Bunny - she has a supernatural ability to escape
"I'm not so easy to tie down" - dual meaning; both literally and matrimonially. It might even have a triple meaning - that she's not easy to interpret (hard to pin down). But 'not so easy' isn't the same as 'impossible'...
15.5 "Interstellar"
"Interstellar" goes with the physics-y allusions in the previous chapter. Originally it was "Introspection", but when I pulled out and expanded dialogue for chapter 15, it didn't make as much sense anymore.
"Did you and Rob..?" / "He asked... But I couldn't really trust him" - in the original draft she did have sex with Rob, but only once because he wasn't into kinky stuff. I didn't want to be 'precious' about Sophie's sex life without Mark - after all, Mark had sex with multiple other people during their break. But given how chapter 13 played out, it didn't seem like she would trust Rob enough to sleep with him again, especially not on his own.
"devil night" - because of the devil's threesome (MMF)
"You're not the only one who dipped a toe in the bisexual waters." - that was a bit clunky
"Stop grinning, you perv." - double standards/misogyny there; doesn't like the idea of her having sex with men, but really likes the idea of women.
"It was nice. Different." - Mark says the exact same thing in chapter 3, when he's trying to downplay how much he enjoyed his first BDSM experience.
"she said we should call her if we ever want a unicorn." - foreshadowing
"Are we gonna be okay?" / "Yeah... I think so." - The original ending was a slightly sunnier "I missed you" / "I love you". But I'm a sicko. I refuse to give readers an easy resolution.
In the long gap between chapters 15 and 16, I started to feel like this would have been a pretty good ending to the series. Alas, I already committed to at least 20 chapters, and I'm a man of my word. Actually, I have a tentative plan for another season after that. I dunno, 25 just seems like a nicer number than 20. We'll see how it goes...
#22
Personals / Re: slave want buried alive
Last post by bound4fun - September 25, 2026, 04:38:36 PMI sent you a PM. I think I can help you out with this.
#23
BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Re: Belted by Zoe Cordelier
Last post by Caras pet - September 25, 2026, 03:21:04 PMMaybe part of the confusion comes from the fact that on DA, there are three Amelie stories, published in the following order:
- Bitche
- Belted
- Locked
#24
Packaged Website Stories Feedback / Re: Scanned, Shipped, Printed ...
Last post by feline - September 25, 2026, 02:15:37 PMNow look here, I am not that easy to bribe!
*considers*...
OK... maybe I am
*considers*...
OK... maybe I am
#25
BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Re: Belted by Zoe Cordelier
Last post by feline - September 25, 2026, 02:14:44 PMI am starting to write my thoughts on this while half way through reading the story, since I have already collected quite a few thoughts, and want to start getting them into order, since more thoughts keep on appearing
To start with, we feel dropped into the middle of things, but that isn't a bad thing, since we start with a great deal of emotion, feeling, torment, and raw sexiness, with the massive torment, this teasing, the punishment, this is a very harsh situation! The belt and its settings seem FAR worse than Helen is prepared for, but Helen did this to herself, by herself, it seems. Didn't she have some idea, even a small one, of what she was doing and getting into here? This really isn't clear at the moment.
I am confused as to why the belt seems to punish her when it hears people talking around her. Not against this at all, it is a VERY wicked, delightfully wicked setting and behaviour, but I am wondering where it came from, and what the thinking is behind it. It just seems a random thing. If it was punishing Helen for talking then it would make more sense, since that would be another form of control and dominance from the belt's settings. But why anyone talking around her? Then again, it does produce massive torment as she is trying to get to meet Amelie at the cafe, which is delightfully evil!
Then we have the choice of her key holder. Why choose a friend who seems so set on punishing her? Why choose someone who seems to angry at the role of unasked, of surprise key holder?
Next another "why" question - when Amelie sees the belt she seems to know what to do, how to control it, how to remove the remote control instantly, and her way around the settings. This seems a strange level of knowledge, but there is so much we don't know yet that I don't know what to make of this. But looking at how the belt's settings are changed, Amelie really knows how to work the belt, and is seriously pissed!
Helen dressing up to visit Amelie and beg, loving the slutty outfit, but again, the instructions to dress like that, it speaks to Amelie's anger level. When Helen gets to the apartment, things start to make a bit more sense. For whatever reason, Amelie is clearly very familiar with the belt and the other tools that come with it, since she has other tools for Helen to wear, and be punished by, and we get a better insight into why she is so angry, so upset!
The thigh cuffs, Helen being shocked so much for trying to take a bigger stride is a wicked surprise, but also, look at how much delight Amelie takes in this suffering and punishment! Talk about either a brilliant, or a MASSIVELY STUPID choice of a key holder!
Watching Helen sleeping next to Amelie, how her submission is deepening, it does make me wonder how much of this was the "intention" all along. Not deliberately it seems, but sub-consciously, setting herself up to fall under Amelie's control, her total, domineering and cruel control...
Finally released, the strength of the conditioning, even after only a week, is striking! But the story makes clear how strong the conditioning pattern was, how she was constantly teased, pushed to the edge, then punished and denied! But this also brings out the caring, gentle and loving side of Amelie... but even then, she is looking at Helen and thinking of her as a chaste submissive...
The ending... this actually wraps things up very well, brings us full circle, and answers many of the questions that I had formed while reading this. This is good, without the answers this would be quite irritating. But with the answers, what really stands out is the sheer intensity of the emotions, feelings and torment that the story is full of and describes, such strong and delicious emotions and torments!
To start with, we feel dropped into the middle of things, but that isn't a bad thing, since we start with a great deal of emotion, feeling, torment, and raw sexiness, with the massive torment, this teasing, the punishment, this is a very harsh situation! The belt and its settings seem FAR worse than Helen is prepared for, but Helen did this to herself, by herself, it seems. Didn't she have some idea, even a small one, of what she was doing and getting into here? This really isn't clear at the moment.
I am confused as to why the belt seems to punish her when it hears people talking around her. Not against this at all, it is a VERY wicked, delightfully wicked setting and behaviour, but I am wondering where it came from, and what the thinking is behind it. It just seems a random thing. If it was punishing Helen for talking then it would make more sense, since that would be another form of control and dominance from the belt's settings. But why anyone talking around her? Then again, it does produce massive torment as she is trying to get to meet Amelie at the cafe, which is delightfully evil!
Then we have the choice of her key holder. Why choose a friend who seems so set on punishing her? Why choose someone who seems to angry at the role of unasked, of surprise key holder?
Next another "why" question - when Amelie sees the belt she seems to know what to do, how to control it, how to remove the remote control instantly, and her way around the settings. This seems a strange level of knowledge, but there is so much we don't know yet that I don't know what to make of this. But looking at how the belt's settings are changed, Amelie really knows how to work the belt, and is seriously pissed!
Helen dressing up to visit Amelie and beg, loving the slutty outfit, but again, the instructions to dress like that, it speaks to Amelie's anger level. When Helen gets to the apartment, things start to make a bit more sense. For whatever reason, Amelie is clearly very familiar with the belt and the other tools that come with it, since she has other tools for Helen to wear, and be punished by, and we get a better insight into why she is so angry, so upset!
The thigh cuffs, Helen being shocked so much for trying to take a bigger stride is a wicked surprise, but also, look at how much delight Amelie takes in this suffering and punishment! Talk about either a brilliant, or a MASSIVELY STUPID choice of a key holder!
Watching Helen sleeping next to Amelie, how her submission is deepening, it does make me wonder how much of this was the "intention" all along. Not deliberately it seems, but sub-consciously, setting herself up to fall under Amelie's control, her total, domineering and cruel control...
Finally released, the strength of the conditioning, even after only a week, is striking! But the story makes clear how strong the conditioning pattern was, how she was constantly teased, pushed to the edge, then punished and denied! But this also brings out the caring, gentle and loving side of Amelie... but even then, she is looking at Helen and thinking of her as a chaste submissive...
The ending... this actually wraps things up very well, brings us full circle, and answers many of the questions that I had formed while reading this. This is good, without the answers this would be quite irritating. But with the answers, what really stands out is the sheer intensity of the emotions, feelings and torment that the story is full of and describes, such strong and delicious emotions and torments!
#26
General Discussion / Re: More stories
Last post by Observer - September 25, 2026, 12:57:54 AMQuote from: Rachelsiss on September 18, 2026, 01:39:51 AMWhat what what where do I search these!?with this search feature https://grometsplaza.net/search.html
enjoy!
#27
BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Re: The Disappearance of Ella ...
Last post by DV-artkink - September 24, 2026, 08:24:14 PMReally liked the story. I'd be interested to see an alternate ending where Ella's neighbor was successful in his plans to turn her into his cat.
#28
Book Reviews / Re: Eudeamon
Last post by boundbinder - September 24, 2026, 01:40:15 PMI've read that. It's not normally my cup of tea, kink-wise, but it kept me interested. I loved it. It was very well-written. I did not realize it was an actual book.
#29
Book Reviews / Re: What Is Your Favorite 'How...
Last post by Observer - September 23, 2026, 07:36:25 PMI highly recommend "SM 101" - it's over 20 years old, but it's still a great source of pragmatic advice.
The author, Jay Wiseman, unfortunately passed away recently.
The author, Jay Wiseman, unfortunately passed away recently.
#30
Book Reviews / Eudeamon
Last post by Observer - September 23, 2026, 07:35:09 PMI'm surprised that no one has mentioned this book here before.
Erika Moak's story was first published on the web in the late 2000s, and caused a bit of a splash at the time - remember "banes" - that's her creation. It is now available in book form.
This is a story about a reporter who decides to investigate a new alternate form of incarceration, banishment, by going through the process herself. This involves being poured into a latex-like suit and oval helmet that cuts off the prisoner from society (the "banes" - those banished).
This story is what convinced me to write. It covers themes of love, identity; it's a critique of how we treat criminals and the homeless, of the dangers of corporate answers to government problems. All that *and* it's a very kinky story too, covering latex, total enclosure, mind control... a must read for any fan of heavy rubber or droning.
Link to the author's profile and purchasing option here: https://bsky.app/profile/evildolly.bsky.social/post/3ltpa5v6xl22x
Erika Moak's story was first published on the web in the late 2000s, and caused a bit of a splash at the time - remember "banes" - that's her creation. It is now available in book form.
This is a story about a reporter who decides to investigate a new alternate form of incarceration, banishment, by going through the process herself. This involves being poured into a latex-like suit and oval helmet that cuts off the prisoner from society (the "banes" - those banished).
This story is what convinced me to write. It covers themes of love, identity; it's a critique of how we treat criminals and the homeless, of the dangers of corporate answers to government problems. All that *and* it's a very kinky story too, covering latex, total enclosure, mind control... a must read for any fan of heavy rubber or droning.
Link to the author's profile and purchasing option here: https://bsky.app/profile/evildolly.bsky.social/post/3ltpa5v6xl22x
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