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BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Re: Sophie and Mark by Twisted...

Last post by twistedsmile - July 05, 2026, 11:41:51 PM

04. "Steer" Commentary

Another pun: steer as in cow (for the cowboy motifs), and as in 'giving directions' ("not that I didn't appreciate directions").

"pink, bedazzled cowboy hat" - I thought it would be fun to give Sophie some cowboy accessories. But this is the UK, people don't just have cowboy hats lying around, and she's not going to buy a new one for a joke. Then I remembered pink cowboy hats are a common accessory for a 'hen-do' (bachelorette party)

"I lived in a 'modest' flat" - Sophie and Mark live separately mostly so that Mark could be sent away in the chastity cage at the start of chapter 2. Mark lives in a flat (apartment) because it's easier for him to give it up when he moves in with Sophie (as opposed to having to sell a house). An interesting side-effect of this choice is it suggests Sophie earns more money than Mark.

"excellent Indian take-away" - Sophie and Mark seem to eat a lot of takeaways throughout the series. Can't be good for them.
"These ones had really good reviews. Feel how soft." - I really like these sweet little domestic moments
"what would the neighbours say" - she really is just a love machine
"careful, that's bad luck" - I learned about that superstition from Yellowstone

So the thing with the cowboy hat is, I didn't want it to be just a cheap joke that's forgotten right after it's introduced. So I made a point of tracking where the hat is through the whole story, with it almost always being on either Sophie or Mark's head.

"cow-print bra" - what can I say, I like someone who commits to a bit
"She turned into a reverse cowgirl" - naturally
"Her crotch rubbed against my cock... Was she doing it on purpose?" - yep
"I'm gonna need a picture of this" - I keep a list of things like this so that I can callback/pay them off later
"She pushed the hat down over my eyes" - see the previous commentaries for why she keeps covering his eyes

"Yar" - as it turns out, there aren't many good words starting with 'Y', but I was determined to stick with it for 'yeehaw', 'yoga', and 'yellow'. Then I happened to watch 'A Philadelphia Story' - "My, she was yar." It's a boating term, meaning (effectively) easy to steer.

"picturing her topology" - in 'The Atrocity Exhibition', JG Ballard has this way of describing people in abstract, geometrical terms that I found really striking, e.g. "The young woman was a geometric equation... Her breasts and buttocks illustrated Enneper's surface of negative constant curve, the differential coefficient of the pseudo-sphere."

"I could really see myself--" - '..spending the rest of my life..' or something like that
"my back was sore" - getting hogtied is a young person's game

"Yellow" - chapter 3 proposes 'scrabble' as their safe word, but that felt too silly for general use. Instead, they use the red/yellow system, which this section is intended to show-don't-tell

"I wanted to swallow it... I couldn't make my throat do it" - something psychological, I reckon
"sharing the load" - you guessed it, another pun

"chicken Dhansak" - I wanted to pick something non-obvious for her (i.e. not korma, tikka, etc.)
"Lamb Passanda" - 'Sliding Doors' reference? Nah, that's too obscure, even for me.

"She picked the cowboy hat off the floor" - see! Hat accounted for, start to end.

"I was pretty hungry though" - this is trying to make it feel like Mark isn't TOO upset about being left tied up for however long. Otherwise it might feel too cruel. You could also chose to believe that she never actually left and was, in fact, fucking with him.

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Teann has thrown me a curveball by skipping over the two stories I submitted after chapter 10, and has just posted chapter 11. So, ignore what I said last week And I will stop procrastinating with these commentaries and get back to writing before Teann catches up to me...

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Pet & PonyGirl Stories / The Stray by ForeverAltered

Last post by teanndaorsa - July 05, 2026, 06:37:27 PM

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F/f; latex; petgirl; catsuit; hood; harness; bond; collar; straps; mast; majick; reluct; XX

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Dollstories.net stories feedback / Shiny Black Plastic by Restrai...

Last post by teanndaorsa - July 05, 2026, 06:36:24 PM

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F/m; mpov; latex; naked; coated; encase; doll; costume; roleplay; M2doll; objectify; maid; cd; pegging; strapon; climax; messy; hum; mast; toys; oral; cons; XX

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BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / The Great Conquest by lexi

Last post by teanndaorsa - July 05, 2026, 06:35:36 PM

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M+/mf+; bond; kidnap; fantasy; gag; rope; strip; rape; collar; leash; chastity; stocks; slave; sold; urine; brand; whip; cane; electro; susp; nc; XXX

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BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Re: BDSM Boot Camp by The Tech...

Last post by picofarad - July 05, 2026, 04:51:57 AM

Great beginning.  Very well written.

Too bad about the CC companies.  But awfully nice of the author to publish his book/story here.

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Mummified Stories feedback / Drider Princess's New Purse Pu...

Last post by teanndaorsa - July 04, 2026, 11:48:13 PM

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F/f; bond; spider; web; mum; silk; kidnap; outdoors; drider; collar; leash; petgirl; rom; reluct; cons; XX

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BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / BDSM Boot Camp by The Technici...

Last post by teanndaorsa - July 04, 2026, 11:47:09 PM

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Solo-F; cons; X

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BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Re: Sophie and Mark by Twisted...

Last post by twistedsmile - July 04, 2026, 11:14:59 PM

03. "Scrabble" Commentary

As mentioned in (1), after writing the first version of chapter 1 I spent some time thinking about the characters and their backstory, and this chapter is the direct result of that. Even tho the events take place before 1, I kept it as chapter 3 because it takes a long time to get to the sexy stuff, and I was worried that might put readers off.

The first line I wrote was something like - "it all started with too much alcohol and a losing game of monopoly." I was just making a dumb joke. But then I thought, well what if I take it seriously - how would that play out? Turns out, pretty well. I changed it to Scrabble mostly because it starts with the letter 's', but it ended up providing a useful plot device (the tiles).

"Why don't we have sex anymore..?" - while I was figuring out the backstory, there was a column in the newspaper from a woman who hadn't had sex with her husband in over a year (despite her best efforts). Eventually she discovered he had been watching porn on the sly.

For my story, I didn't want it to be solely either character's 'fault' that they weren't having sex. The way it went in my head was: Sophie had this secret desire for doing BDSM. And since she was too scared to talk to Mark about it, she had to settle for vanilla sex. Naturally, this is less satisfying for her, so maybe she's less interested in - and less inclined to have - sex at all. Meanwhile, rather than questioning or trying to push for more sex, Mark is gets his gratification elsewhere (porn). Granted, none of this is explicit in the text, tho Mark's multiple references to pornography is meant to imply that he's a voracious consumer.

"C H A I N S (11 points)" - I like a good gimmick. These Scrabble words are scattered throughout the series. The choice of words isn't random. The scores come from an online Scrabble score calculator.

"I like BDSM" - around the time I was writing this, I'd just read volume 1 of the "Tease Me Harder" manga; in which a sub confesses to her boyfriend that she wants to be dominated. I didn't want to copy that, so I flipped it to the domme confessing. I think it works better this way - it makes the pov character the newbie being taught about all this stuff; like a Doctor Who companion, but with more ball gags.

"I'd seen images, videos" - as noted, Mark clearly consumes a lot of porn, and has at least a little interest/curiosity in BDSM.

"you want me to, um... tie you up?" - Mark comes out of this story in the sub role, but that doesn't mean he has no interest in being a dom: "It was kinda hot"

"there were other videos" - I didn't want this to come off as kink-shaming. It's more a statement of the kinds of things that won't appear in this series - because they're things I (the writer) am not into, so I couldn't write about them authentically.

"if I win this game..." - It's not like the bet is legally binding. I think of it like the confession - it was something Sophie wanted to say, but the alcohol gave her a way to save face if she wanted to take it back. By making this a bet, she's allowing Mark to save face if he ends up regretting it, "I HAD to do it, I lost the game."

"sexy french maid" - I like to imagine Mark having really basic, middle of the road sexual tastes prior to Sophie corrupting him. French maid, specifically, was added retroactively to set up chapter 7

"You watch too much anime" - maid cafes are a common trope in anime/manga.
And to quote Marin Kitagawa from 'My Dress-Up Darling': "is there a single person on this rock who hates bunnies?" Rest assured, bunny girls will come back around as soon as I find a good place for it.

"L O S E C R V" - I don't know if I can claim to be the first person to put a Scrabble joke in a work of pornography, but I can't imagine there's much competition. Mark's tiles include the words LOSE and LOSER, but also LOVERS and CLOSER. And for those playing along at home, there are the 7 letter words CLOVERS and VELCROS; but I can't find any 8 letter words containing all those letters, so Mark couldn't have played all his tiles for the 50 point bonus.

"The tiles were mocking me." - Mark isn't trying to lose, exactly, but his subconscious is clearly sabotaging him.

"S [E] R V E" - [E] means the 'E' tile was already on the board. "Serve" is a loaded word, of course.

"S P A [N] I E L S" - I picked the word 'spaniel' as the title for the pet play story (5), and when I noticed 'spaniels' was 8 letters I retroactively made it Sophie's winning word

"pulled my t-shirt up over my shoulder, covering my face." - as I mentioned in (1), the dry spell has left Sophie doubting whether Mark finds her attractive. She covers his face because she's self-conscious about getting undressed in front of him.

"she pulled my jeans and my pants and my socks all the way off" - I can't abide people who keep their socks on during sex

"She was still wearing a pink bralet" - a bralet is a bra without wiring or padding (for those unfamiliar). She wasn't expecting to have sex that night (why would she, after so long?) so she chose her underwear for comfort over sexiness. In my mind she was also wearing mismatched pants. But since our pov character had his eyes covered, he didn't see the pants before she took them off, so that detail isn't in the text. She's still wearing the bralet because, as mentioned, she's feeling self-conscious... until she isn't, and takes it off.

"not yet" - going back to 'realism', men have that troublesome refractory period to reckon with, meaning most of the stories only have one male orgasm.
"She came. I came." - on the other hand, Sophie & Mark almost always orgasm at the same time, which is a little unlikely. But it is convenient!

"I filled her with all that wasted time." - poetic or gross?

"when do the chains come in?" - retroactive foreshadowing (back-shadowing?)

"guess I couldn't have escaped after all. Huh." - there are some sinister undertones to Sophie's behaviour, which slowly become less 'under' as the series progresses.

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Looking for a Story / Female gang leader made her ma...

Last post by ANnon82 - July 04, 2026, 09:06:17 PM

Looking for a story in which a tough female gang leader is turned into her male rival's plaything. I recall that she may have gone from a goth chick to being forced to be a girly girl with cute pink dresses and bond pig tails, etc.

On a wider note any female sissy type story where a butch, tomboy, goth, etc. It forced to be a sexy girly girl, bimbo, or ABDL girl.

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BoundStories Website Stories Feedback / Re: Leatherbound Hearts by Dar...

Last post by Darkwolf - July 04, 2026, 12:42:22 AM

So as I understand it there's often a large crossover between ttrpg & kink communities, and being a gm is a lot of similar skills to being a dom(me). Two-way communication being absolutely vital, and also the ability to improvise and to trust your partner's improvisation. Most of my experience with ttrpgs (d&d 5e specifically) is as a gm, which for me is in many ways an act of service - I want to give my players the experience of pulling off a cunning plan, or toppling an insurmountable foe. Of course, the foe can't really be insurmountable, but I have to make them seem that way. Compare and contrast Elise putting on a show as austere domme, but in actuality, as you say, being unable to refuse her subs anything.

I've spent a few days thinking about all of this so I could get my thoughts in order and I have to say you've hit on some interesting points.  There is certainly a lot of overlap between running a ttrpg and being a dom(me) as you say.  Trust, communication, working together to create a fantasy (story) with all the improvisation and unexpected twists and turns that naturally happen.  I had never really considered it as an act of service, but the more I think about it the more it does fit.  While the GM usually has a story they want to tell, it is ultimately the players and their own enjoyment that guides both the adventure, which I suppose circles back to my much earlier comment about being in charge versus being in control.  It is interesting to think about.  I've done a lot of different games in a lot of different systems (multiple editions of Dungeons & Dragons, both old and new World of Darkness, Rogue Trader and a few more object games as well) and the way each plays out is very similar and very different.  D&D is mostly about fighting monsters, WoD is rooted in intrigue while Rogue Trade is about exploration and building a dynasty, but at their core its the same kind of communication with the players.  Challenging them without pushing them too far and finding a balance that everyone enjoys and is comfortable with.  Much like BDSM it can a real challenge, but its definitely worth it.

Recently I started playing in someone else's campaign for the first time in a while, and I think I was a little bit of a bitch about not being in control. At the start, at least - I'm working on that. But y'know how, for some people, subbing has an element of "Someone else is making the choices, so I feel more free"? I am definitely not getting that! I think I feel more pressure as a player than a gm! I don't have any irl experience of kink to compare that with, but I'm curious as to how that would transfer.

I'm not sure myself.  I've been doing TTRPGs since I was a kid, and I've been on both sides of the lines many times, and that's never really been my experience.  Not being in control of the campaign ever really bothered me, and while I certainly felt pressure as a player, that was more about trying to make sure I didn't disrupt the campaign and worked well with other players (I can extremely cautious as a player and that frustrates some people) but I would be curious to see if anyone else can relate.