Thanks for commenting Fordman (I always wonder, is it ok to drop the 64?)
It's hugely encouraging to get even a single positive comment. With each new story, I wonder if people are going to read and enjoy it, and sometimes they don't do either, or so it seems, because all there is to go on is feedback. If a story doesn't stir people enough to comment, from an author's perspective, it's as if nobody read it at all.
I'm curious whether people think Nilma or Lauren are characters they want to know more about, and to see where they might go. I don't think the rest of their story is necessarily erotic though, and there might not be much call for such a thing amongst most plaza readers.
Trivia fact: I didn't use named chapters in this story, so the names for the parts are Gromet's addition.