Committed by JustForALittleWhile

[teanndaorsa]

You can view the story here on the plaza:

https://www.boundstories.net/storiesad/committed.html
F/m; F+/m; bond; chastity; discipline; punish; straitjacket; ballgag; belt; cuffs; gag; handcuffs; head-harness; mittens; spreadeagle; hospital; cheat; cuckold; drug; electro; enema; nurse; tattoo; torment; transport; reluct; cons; XX

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Thanks 

[feline]

I am going to start with the short summary - WOW!

OK, I was a little hesitant settling in to read this, given some of the story codes.  Nothing really terrible there, but they are quite suggestive of something relatively "extreme" about to happen, but the title certainly got my attention, and I was rather curious to see what all of this was going to be about.

One minor point I do feel I need to make, sometimes there are significant transitions in the story, but they aren't really marked, so you are left working out that one happened after the fact, which makes it a little bit harder to read.  Nothing terrible, and it certainly doesn't spoil the story, but if the author sees this, I would like to ask you think about putting in a marker at those points.

I love the history and world building here, the history of the institute, the sense that all of this goes back a long way, explaining the extent and size of the building and how everything seems so well organised and designed for this sort of use.

Near the start of the story I wasn't quite sure where this establishment sat on the "consensual fun" scale.  It almost read and felt that it really was a functional medical facility, and you only got to visit and be considered as a "for the fun of it" patient due to their connections, that this was somehow not something that they would normally do or consider.

But it turns out to not be that "simple", or a better comment, that this was the wrong question to have been thinking about.  Instead this really is organised, structured and run as a proper medical establishment, with clear goals for helping their patients, but at the same time it is also a kinky retreat for just a certain type of person.

Which makes sense of how come all of the nurses seem to have been selected to feed the desires of a certain type of client

We see and learn enough about the couple at the heart of this, and their relationship, to understand why the wife is happy and willing to consider, and quite possibly to act on, the idea of locking up her husband for days, or weeks, at a time, leaving her without any access to him, or any company.  Under other conditions I would be tempted to ask what is in it for the wife, a question, and a point, that the director herself brings up!

I really love the focus and real attention to consent, and to testing out the experience, which is all required for everyone involved to really understand what is on offer here, and what they are talking about doing, before a patient goes into their care.  This both gave me warm and fuzzy feelings for how well they are making sure this is the right location, the right treatment, and also delicious chills when you realise that once someone is accepted into their care, they are then "stuck" there, until some end date, and there really IS nothing they can do about it, it really IS totally out of their hands!  No wonder they need to be so very careful up front!

This gives the story a real sense of realism, there is a lot of attention being paid to the general practicalities of all of this, so you can really involve yourself in the story, in the emotions and feelings that go along with it.

One of my favourite things about all of this is how firm the director is that the supervising partner REALLY has to be properly onboard with all of this!  It solves, at a stroke, the known problem of the submissive getting what they want from an experience, but completely overlooking and ignoring the question of what the dominant partner wants and gets out of the experience.

So seeing this addressed, watching the emotional balance and dance of all of this, it brought things alive, and made them a real delight.

More than this though, the wife's bull is fully onboard with this, but then again, it makes sure he gets full and uncontested access to the woman he is very much enjoying, taking control of, and delighting in, so it's a win all the way around!

I will admit that nearing the end of his test period of 3 days I found myself expecting the story to throw in the "obvious" twist that "oops, its not a test, this is real", but that would have ruined all of the work already done establishing the consent, safety and proper procedure that the story had spent time and energy doing and setting up.

So seeing how the story actually handled that, and that the wife would then be left on her own, with her husband locked up, was sexy and very well done!

The ending though, oh wow!  I was wondering when he was first committed, she was so clear about when the end date was, even though it was made clear that there is actually no need at all for the patient to be aware of the end date when they are committed.  So seeing this being handled in a more teasing, and open ended manor, especially just using his reaction as his agreement without really talking to him, it brought it all together into one wonderful package!

I sort of want to know more about this institute, and the other branches that are appearing, even though this particular story has reached such a good conclusion and end point, so I do hope the author keeps on writing

[jakbird]

Thanks to feline's review (often better than the stories covered) I took a chance.  It isn't quite my type of story, and I'd normally skip over it except I do like the background.  The choice of western Ukraine is unique; in a way it takes advantage of the ominous overtones of the Carpathian Mountains and its reputation as the home of an iconic movie evildoer.  I was willing to roll back the calendar to pre 2014 and put aside the distraction of the current day practicalities.

As feline points out the story does need section markers (i.e. chapters) between events to smooth over breaks in the timeline or setting.  Some of the characters tend toward the stereotypical but given it's a short story that's practically a necessity and does not detract from the plot.

In general, I found the story to be well-written quality, with the only complaint being the aforementioned lack of breaks.  It's the kind of story I'd like to write myself, although with some significant differences based on personal preference.  So how do I shamelessly rip off another author's ideas without being obvious about it...
  Jack Peacock

[JustForALittleWhile]

Thank you for the nice comments feline and jakbird! You are both absolutely right about the breaks. The original story actually has them, but they appear to have been lost in editing (this may have been my own fault during submission). For completeness sake, there should have been four major breaks to help the reader anticipate the change of scene/time at these points:

From her office on the first floor, Directrix Kovaleva watched the couple leave. Anna and Sean... Three weeks, she estimated; three weeks before she would receive the application for Sean's first stay. She rarely missed the mark.


For this holiday, Sean had made a meticulously prepared itinerary [...]

[...] The rhythmic sound of Nurse Oleksandra's footsteps were his only support as he slid into a deep sleep.


"Wake up, F408."

Knowing that he was here restrained in a straitjacket with her full consent – that she actually wanted him here like this – pushed him into a deep state of subspace of a kind he had never before attained.

During one of the feeding moments [...]

Whether he screamed at that point or not, Sean could not recall afterwards.


One year later.

I don't know if it is possible to add these in at some point.

I will admit that nearing the end of his test period of 3 days I found myself expecting the story to throw in the "obvious" twist that "oops, its not a test, this is real", but that would have ruined all of the work already done establishing the consent, safety and proper procedure that the story had spent time and energy doing and setting up.

Seeing someone do an in-depth review of your (first!) work is actually a bit scary! I'm really happy you picked up on essentially all of those points that I put in to give the story at least a veneer of plausibility. I'm particularly flattered that you like the worldbuilding.

So seeing this being handled in a more teasing, and open ended manor, especially just using his reaction as his agreement without really talking to him, it brought it all together into one wonderful package!

Thanks! Although to be honest, part of that last bit was partly an excuse to put that "rock-hard consent she held in her hand" bit in.

The choice of western Ukraine is unique; in a way it takes advantage of the ominous overtones of the Carpathian Mountains and its reputation as the home of an iconic movie evildoer.  I was willing to roll back the calendar to pre 2014 and put aside the distraction of the current day practicalities.

Or the future, one hopes. It felt somehow nice to write about Ukraine in a setting where tourism would be both possible and desirable, even if it is just in a piece of erotica. I needed a country where a building like that which houses Anánke could conceivably be lost in time and ownership — this is utterly impossibly in my native Netherlands — and it was fun to gather up a bunch of Ukrainian names for the staff.

so I do hope the author keeps on writing

Pff... If I do it will be a while. Writing is hard! I figured I could do at least one tolerable story. As they say, everybody has one novel in them, and this is mine.

[lockedup4eva]

This story was right up my alley and had some really good writing in it, especially some of the dialogue which is where I often struggle. The timeline has been covered by others and is the only criticism from me. I hope there will be a part 2, as there are lots and lots of opportunities to explore at the institute, and so many ways Anna could find to keep him locked away there - after all they will both end up financially dependent upon her bull at this rate so he will likely end up being decision maker for our so far willing patient!

Very well done.

[feline]

Hearing that this is your first story is a surprise, since you have really done a very good job!  The flow, the world building, the internal logic, the sense of characters that I can get behind and care about...  Yes, the nurses aren't fleshed out, but they are not the focus, instead the director, and our married couple are the focus, and there we have the depth and interest that we need for this to work

I actually went hunting for other sites where this had been posted, in the hopes of finding more of your writing to enjoy, which really says it all

We can hope that one day you feel inspired to return to this, and yes, writing will be hard work, when you produce something really solid, so trying to thank and encourage is only fair, when I feel I have something worth saying

[JustForALittleWhile]

This story was right up my alley and had some really good writing in it, especially some of the dialogue which is where I often struggle.

Nice to hear that the dialogue works for you. I found it tricky to get something which sounds natural in your head in writing in a way which still conveys the same message and emotions.

I actually went hunting for other sites where this had been posted, in the hopes of finding more of your writing to enjoy, which really says it all

Sorry to disappoint! I've only reposted this on Literotica, and if you're on FetLife you can find it there too (as well as the Dutch version). I deliberately use a different pseudonym for spreading this story beyond FetLife in order to keep the two things somewhat separate (my kink-identity and my smut-author-identity, if you will). I think the story should stand on its own without the author's kink-persona intruding.