I'm happy to hear you enjoyed it!
I admit, I tend to be a bit bad with proof reading my own stuff, a bit silly and generally like to redo a bunch of things, which leads to flailing and probably never posting it otherwise, so try to limit it to just reading over it after writing and hoping I didn't miss things (Spoiler: I totally missed things!). I know some of the wording choices were definitely odd, but was trying to find a bit of a middle ground between being vague (Since second person, was trying to really push the reader to fill in some of the blanks, especially pre-transformation), and giving enough for the mind to work with.
But this was a delightful little surprise. Never expected someone to do a reading of something I wrote! I had fun listening to it~