I have to say that the fantasy of being abused by strangers isn't my thing.
(I guess I'm the kind of guy that needs an emotional connection of sorts between the protagonists)
That said I did enjoy the way you depicted the heroin her mind-space.
In particular in the first section. I think you captured that bubbly, bouncy, drunk from horniness mind space really well.
The toying with the suit before putting it on. The o so recognizable setback from having ordered something from China.
The way she got over it. It made me like her even if I didn't "get" what she was going to do.
I fully understand why it is not for everybody. It is the first time I write such a thing. I realize more and more that I like being in the grey zone. What I mean is that yes, Rosi got in trouble with two strangers, but at the same time, it as her fantasy, and she was willing to play along with the cookie jar. I know, it sounds like an excellent excuse to write something trashy. But, I would have difficulty to write something that depicts full abuse without any consent.
It was a good test. I've never written stories before, outside Feliformia, so this allowed me to explore myself a bit more. Maybe I'm a little more trashy that I thought. lol
Thanks for reading, though, I appreciate that a lot.