First the comments I made while reading, then some further thoughts, now I know how this ends.
weekend maid part 5 and 6
Again I am going to comment as I read, since the first 4 parts went so well, I have very high hopes for the next two parts. First a minor "formatting" point, you have duplicated the last paragraph of chapter 4 at the start of chapter 5. It made sense at the end of chapter 4 when chapter 5 had not yet been published, but now chapter 5 is up, it makes much more sense, to my mind, at the start of chapter 5.
Oooh, a good place to start, Sophia being caught in the act both by Jessie and the oh so recently tongue lashed Bruce! And so far unaware of both witnesses! *smirk* This is going to come back to bite her, real fast, and real hard, I am sure of that! But this won't change the basic dynamic of her marriage, will it? Or will it be a turning point?
Now that is an interesting side effect of Jessie being so immobile, passing out before anyone else has their orgasm. This means she knows what happened before, when Sophia will think she won't, but Jessie won't know what happens next, she will have to wait and see what the outcome of this "little moment" was, an interesting dynamic and emotional situation in the making
Now that is interesting, I did not expect Bruce to sneak away like that, but to be fair this is probably the best thing he could do at this time, especially since his wife has not long finished reading him the riot act. Still, he has left a semen stain to mark his presence, if anyone were to notice this later on. How is he hoping to use this discovery? He isn't going to just want to let it lie, or will he just watch and hope that events take an interesting course from here on out?
So I am going to have to wait and see who gets caught out first after the nights naughtiness, a fun tease
But also some very important context here. Until now the attraction Sophia has been feeling towards Jessie seems to have come somewhat out of the blue, the only obvious "clue" being her husbands lack of interest in her body, in her sexually. Now we find that this is not the first time she has been attracted towards a woman, so this helps to make things a lot clearer, it gives more context, and makes things make more sense.
Jessie's reaction is reasonable enough, she is living a sexual dream, and while I can see her not wanting the uninvited advances of Bruce, having feelings for a woman she is watching, and who has helped her to realise such happiness seems fairly reasonable.
Of course, down the line, Bruce may be less than considerate of what Jessie may or may not want, now that she is a controlled maid...
Well Jessie, if you are going to walk around with happy and eager nipples like this all of the time, well, people are going to conclude that you are really enjoying this experience... *evil smirk*
I really do enjoy these moments, these insights into how Jessie is feeling, her looking forward to preparing breakfast and wondering what the reactions will be, her wicked side is showing
Ah, interesting! I was wondering if there was a point to the system cleaning out inside the suit making the outfit cling even more tightly to Jessie's body, but of course it is just going to enhance her appeal for her "owners". And now the flip side of the system keeping her near the wife, the same rules and programming is going to keep her near, and offer her up to Bruce... Jessie's changing views on Bruce are interesting, but again, given context and an explanation they make sense, and help to keep me interested and invested in the characters and what is going on here.
Now that IS interesting! Bruce is still very "guilty", for what of a better word, about his fascination with the maid bots and touching them, but Sophia seems almost proud of her actions the night before, almost wanting to rub Bruce's nose in it. Perhaps she does, it is a good way of reminding him that she is a sexually alive being after all!
The systems response to all of this is very interesting, now Jessie is being "allowed", or perhaps "forced" is a better word, to put on a slightly more sexy wiggle and walk. It does beg the question of where the dividing line is between maid-box and sex-bot, especially since Jessie is fully equipped to function as both... *muwahhhh*
I would say the back and forward between the parents is subtle, but it really isn't, not that there is any risk of Valerie noticing or picking up on any of this! It is enough for her parents to make sure she slept well, and isn't aware of what is going on around her.
The sexual encounter between Valerie and Jessie is very well done! I really did enjoy how you wove the rising physical passion together with the mixed emotions, Jessie's already heightened state from earlier, Valerie having no idea of what first started this, thinking that most of it was down to her, and getting carried away with her own desires. The moment completely overtakes and overwhelms both of them, and then Valerie starting to come back down to earth at the end, and suddenly remembering that she is not alone in the house.
Powerful, sexy and very well done!
Now that is interesting, Jessie has a history with girls it seems! THis again adds some important context, and helps to explain why she has taken, so quickly and easily, to the female side of all of this.
The playful teasing and flirting between the two friends, a sure sign they are settling into their new roles, feeling happy and comfortable again with each other and what is happening, its also just fun to read, to see
"Caught in the bedroom" by Bruce, it is amazing how far Jessie's reactions to Bruce have come in such a short time. Apparently ply her with enough orgasms and things take on a whole new perspective *evil smirk*
OK, this needs to be flagged up. You have just finished setting the scene, telling us how Jessie knows something is up, something is coming, and that she is even getting worked up in advance. Then we see her thoughts, her acknowledging in her own mind how much Bruce fancies her bottom, then with the next paragraph you start with:
>> Jessie was initially shocked again to find the wandering hands of Bruce on her rear, but the erotic appeal soon overcame her first thoughts
I will give you "initially surprised" here, but shocked? Really? Nope, shocked just does not work here, you are breaking your own scene and emotion setting here.
Then her wicked nature telling her to push her bottom back into his wandering hands! OK, all is forgiven
The maid-bot has not moved away is consent. I find myself with mixed feelings on this point, but it is a maid-bot, not a person, as far as Bruce knows, so in his context that is fair and reasonable. It does make for a considerably more interesting situation from Jessie's point of view though!
I do like the aspect / consideration of Jessie used and discarded as soon as her owner has achieved their release, regardless of her release or satisfaction level, definitely something that is going to play into her submissive and controlled feelings.
Now Sophia is catching up with Jessie, and this works so well. Effectively it feels like Jessie the "slut" corrupting and encouraging the tempted but well behaved Sophia, but at the same time, Sophia's concern for Jessie, for proper behaviour, and her embarrassment over what she did all ring true and fit so well with what we have seen of her so far.
It has taken me a few moments to put my finger on it, but of course, Jessie is about as emotionally mature as Valerie, certainly at times. Here is Sophia breaking down into tears, so embarrassed and upset, and she is laughing?! In a way a good way of reassuring her, but not what I would have looked for or expected, but that is a more adult and less teenager perspective.
Watching the shocked and horrified reactions of Sophia, compared to the warm and happy glee of Jessie, I am strongly reminded that Jessie has had all night (all be it asleep), all day, and all of the various encounters with the family to get used to these new ideas, feelings, and this new role in the family. In contrast Sophia is being presented with everything that happened in one shocking moment, combined with the guilt of feeling responsible for everything! No wonder they are on different pages here!
Sophia is coming round quickly, but Jessie's wholesale enthusiasm clearly has a great deal to do with this, plus, I suspect, her ongoing sexual feelings.
Moving onto part 6, the reprogramming title is somewhere between ominous, fascinating and delicious.
Lots of fun dreams going on I see, but I am really interested in Bruce's dream, watching while unable to interact, that parallels Jessie's suggestion very closely, so I wonder how come? Just coincidence, or something else at work? Could the computer system be feeding Jessie hints as to what Bruce wants and will enjoy? That would explain this surprising closeness.
Bruce likes her bent over and her bottom presented like this? Well, who would have guessed! *snort*
Sending her off to be cleaned, exactly what Bruce should do here, but it also delightfully reinforces the "just a maid, just a robot" aspect.
*smirk* Sophia is still thinking ill of her husband for taking advantage of Jessie, while she herself is eager to. Then again, it is going to take time for her to adjust to all of this.
Ah Sophia, but a woman, even a woman in latex, is different to a controlled, available sex-bot woman, different to a controlled, helpless, willing and eager woman...
Called back to the maid room by Sophia, with control, its the turn of phrase, "what do you require of me", not "what do you want", or "what are you interested in", much more a question that assumes she will have no say, no control in what is to follow, and that she is happy about this.
UM, what the hell?!?! Sophia is a sex-bot? Where the hell did this come from? Then who is Jessie? What is going on here?
Ah, now the explanation starts to kick in... things start to fit together finally.
As it stands, this ending feels very "hollow" to me. As Jackie says, she is simply stuck in a loop, going round and round the same steps time and time again, yet somehow wanting or expecting a different outcome to come of them, which is never going to happen given how this system works and is designed.
Trying to pin down my thoughts and feelings here, "hollow" seems like a good word, by revealing everything, and so many of the feelings and emotions that I have been enjoying, and bonding with, to be a repeating cycle, with no sense of progress or hope, this makes a lot of it feel "empty and meaningless", it also leaves Jessie in an ultimately terrible place, becoming more and more unhappy with each repeating cycle.
No, to my mind this needs to be taken further, the cycle needs to be broken, and Jessie needs to find contentment and purpose in her life. Her concerns are valid, but the story already contains a sensible seed of its own salvation. Jessie wants this life, wants to go down this road, a mixture of time as a maid and time with a loving family of "humans" who care for and about her. So change the system, upgrade the system, to give her "human" owners who are still programmed, who are thus guaranteed to keep her safe, guard her, stick to the outlines she wants, but to give them freedom to be "alive" within those rules, the trustworthy and safe people that she wants, but does not think she can find in the world outside her home.
Let Jessie accept the "natural learning system upgrade", and then slowly discover for herself what has happened, that her dreams and life are now real, and so long as she is happy and content, she has no freedom to break free of her own free will! Give us some closure, a real sense of going forward properly. That is what I find I am looking for here, something to bring this to a "proper", non circular ending.
