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Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« on: May 28, 2016, 09:17:53 am »
You can view the story here on the plaza:

http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/paradicelost.html
FF/f; F/f; game; dice; bond; leather; gag; hood; straps; nipple; toys; insert; hogtie; susp; tease; caught; hum; denial; climax; cons/reluct; X

http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/paradicelost2.html
Solo-F; cuffs; strip; F/fff; F/f; D/s; bond; chairtie; rope; gag; leather; straps; nipple; toys; insert; tease; torment; hum; denial; climax; cons/nc; X

http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/paradicelost3.html
F/fff; D/s; bond; rope; gag; leather; straps; hogtie; toys; insert; tease; torment; latex; corset; boots; collar; enslave; force; climax; cons/nc; X

http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/paradicelost4.html
F/fff; bond; cuffs; gag; latex; armbinder; toys; insert; nipple; breast; cupboard; torment; bedtie; analhook; bdsm; crop; tease; vibrator; climax; femdom; cons/reluct; X

http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/paradicelost5.html
F/fff; D/s; bond; cuffs; gag; latex; armbinder; toys; insert; nipple; breast; cupboard; torment; bedtie; analhook; bdsm; crop; tease; vibrator; climax; femdom; lesb; oral; torment; denial; cons/reluct; X

http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/paradicelost6.html
F/fff; FF/f; D/s; bond; cuffs; gag; latex; force; torment; tease; femdom; lesb; nipple; oral; hum; denial; revenge; cons/reluct; X

http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/paradicelost7.html
FF/f; FFF/f; D/s; dungeon; bond; cuffs; gag; hood; collar; toys; insert; nipple; clit; torment; tease; climax; cupboard; rope; straps; revenge; cons/nc; X

http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/paradicelost8.html
FFF/f; D/s; revenge; lingerie; bodystocking; bond; cuffs; gag; hood; latex; bench; bdsm; crop; toys; insert; nipple; torment; tease; denial; climax; cons/nc; X

http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/paradicelost9.html
F/f; D/s; dungeon; basement; latex; bond; cuffs; collar; gag; hood; bfold; toys; insert; nipple; electro; torment; tease; stuck; denial; FF; rom; lesb; game; dice; cons; X

Please feel free to leave your kind comments & feedback here about this story.

Thanks  ;)
« Last Edit: May 15, 2017, 10:23:40 am by Gromet »

JackBonder

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #1 on: May 29, 2016, 08:36:33 pm »
A really original setup, with this game leading to these nice predicaments. I can't wait to see what Gabrielle has in store for these 3 girls. I hope you will write more. Thanks for sharing.   8)

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #2 on: May 30, 2016, 01:54:27 am »
Thanks Jack, I'm glad you liked it!

This is actually the first of a 9-part series, all of which continues an original story called "The Dice Game" (http://boundstories.net/storiesad/dicegame.html). The other parts are available on the forum already and I'm hoping the rest will be posted later.

Arkane also wrote a work of his own based on the dice game story (http://boundstories.net/storiesad/anonymoushoodedbondagepinup.html) which is a lot of fun!

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #3 on: June 02, 2016, 05:29:12 pm »
Hello to you "A Pensive Pen!"

I had to register in order to reply.....and I must say. What a privilige too! A  fantastic story to start off with. I love the plot.......which is very convincing and extremely well thought out, so well done! It also holds that "real factor" which I love to get into and from what I read, doesn't seem to divert like a lot of rushed stories I've read in the past.

This is a gem and yes, I mean it. The problem you might face with such a charismic story such as this; is that old devil called, writers block! So my advice (if you want it) is to take your time......do little and often updates and keep those mental cogs turning!

I'm SO looking forward to reading the next instalment!

My best wishes to you.
C6M.  ;)

 

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #4 on: June 03, 2016, 04:14:54 am »
Thank you, crazy6muppet, I'm glad you liked it!

Never fear, all the remaining parts of the story (there are 8 more!) are written and submitted. It's because of writer's block that I make sure a story's all done before I send anything in. I start so many stories that end up on a back burner, though I hope to finish them eventually. Some are all but finished (or stuck in editing hell), others just a couple pages in:

- an escapist self-bondage romp by a woman with a high pressure job.
- an homage to a story about a bondage boutique that I read years ago.
- a story about a struggling college student who finds stability in submission
- a naive receptionist who tries bondage to surprise her boss while his wife is gone, not realizing that the boss is the one traveling and it's the wife who's still at home.
- a self-discovery piece about a (financially) struggling dominatrix who's torn between a client's unhealthy desires and a paycheck.
- a completely new installment of the Dice Game series.

So if any of those sound good... ;)

crazy6muppet

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #5 on: June 03, 2016, 01:51:36 pm »
Oooh! I feel as though someone has just offered me a chocolate from a glittering box!
One and four have certainly grabbed my attention!

The first looks like a blackmail plot could find its way in there (caught out by her mousy receptionist, perhaps?) 'Oh the humiliation of it all!' Haha!!!! (strawberry surprise!)
Four kinda made me think of "Scorned!" Very nice indeed! (walnut whip!)

And..................the last. Lets see how this series pans out!  8)  Yum!

kind regards
C6M.  :D

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #6 on: June 03, 2016, 10:09:05 pm »
Good ideas every one of them, in particular I'm sure the escapist story will be a damn good read... By the way, indipendent of that, while I love an element of tension and danger in escapist romps, I'd like to read something in the quirky spirit of escapist Baylea Kensington's classic tales (by Richard McGill) and I think A Pensive Pen is the man who could do it.
Quite curious about the receptionist who binds herself for the wrong person, and the new Dice Game story (what is still to be said about the dice game, I wonder?? maybe a lot).

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #7 on: June 04, 2016, 12:11:45 am »
Haha, the receptionist one actually already has its beginning posted on the plaza, "Heart of a Saxon" (http://boundstories.net/storiesek/heartofasaxon.html) and it's my personal cautionary tale. I wrote and posted the beginning without a plan for where to take it, which is why it's fallen by the wayside. I could make it a priority again but finding good writing time is tough. A new Dice Game is a long way off. The idea is barely on the drawing board.

Also, I haven't read any of those Baylea Kensington stories. Are they available somewhere?

Now I wish I was working on all of these at once!
« Last Edit: June 04, 2016, 03:15:31 am by A Pensive Pen »

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #8 on: June 04, 2016, 12:35:14 pm »

Baylea stories are definitely offline. I'm sending them privately to you.
Keep up the good work.
 ;)

crazy6muppet

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #9 on: June 04, 2016, 01:01:09 pm »
Just read "Heart of a Saxon" and how funny!

Way to go....................Tricia!  :)

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #10 on: June 16, 2016, 01:48:03 am »
A change of plan is now coming on :)

I came here to share some basic thoughts on this, and to say that I hope you keep on writing this, only to discover that you have already finished this story, and posted it!  So now I need to wander off and read it here, since I really don't want to wait for all of it to get posted on the website.

I loved the dice game when I read it, so I am really pleased to see you returning to this world and these characters.  This first part seemed very short, as I got into it.  You have set up the world, and laid out the ground rules, and it is becoming clear that for all of the stories that Cheri has shared, she has never really explained, never properly shown or touched on, the massive trust and long history that exists between the three friends, to allow them to play this game together.

Not understanding this, and apparently completely new to the emotional realities of helplessness and bondage, Gabrielle is trying to run before she can walk, at least in some senses.  I do find myself all curious and eager to see and to learn where this is going!

9 parts is a good number, since you have a lot of potential and interest here, with this setup, and "all" you have done here is to wet by appetite and get me interested :)  So, something else to add to my reading list :)

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #11 on: June 18, 2016, 12:38:58 am »
I'll make sure not to spoil anything! Gabrielle is definitely inserting herself into a set of friendships that are deeper than she knows, but I wouldn't count her out. Even by the end of part 1 she's shown herself to be a formidable force, and there's much more to come.

dek11434

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #12 on: June 25, 2016, 03:40:34 pm »
Awesome story and I can't wait to read the follow on parts.  I haven't seen any of your other parts posted and I was wondering if you had a link to the additional parts or will it take time to post on the website.  Please try to reply if possible.  -dek11434- 

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #13 on: June 26, 2016, 04:56:23 am »
Hey Dek!

Glad you liked the story! All the remaining parts have been submitted and Gromet will post them when he can. If you really can't wait, though, they are posted in their "raw" form in the thread where Gromet posted the backlog of stories when he took a leave of absence. Link to Part 2 is here: http://grometsplaza.net/forum/index.php?PHPSESSID=0630dacc6c3c571a38dd8792e7acfd43&topic=1005.msg2903#new

Read them there if you like, they just won't look as pretty!

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Re: Paradice Lost by A Pensive Pen
« Reply #14 on: June 26, 2016, 08:52:20 pm »
Thank you for the link to the additional part.  Was there additional links within that one to different parts or were they all on a different site?  I was able to read part 2 and that definitely got the twisted plot and I didn't see that happening yet from Gabrielle to do a lil blackmail against Laura.  I hope to try to see the other parts, but if it is still being edited or added I can wait.  I do like the other story ideas you listed as well from the escapologist, the receptionist, and hopefully you might write up one on college friends who join a class designed for photos and videos but is secretly ran by a dominatrix who blackmails the rich girls and hypnotize them for money and to build her business from escape videos with their friends.

Hope to hear your reply and look forward to the additional reading.  I do enjoy writing also, its been tough like C6M said, the writers block, then it is balancing school and work but I will find the time again but I took a break.  Thank you again.   -dek11434- 

 

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