Author Topic: Subspace - Emma's Fetish Cruise Adventure  (Read 13068 times)

Offline bentbliss

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Re: Subspace - Emma's Fetish Cruise Adventure
« Reply #30 on: December 29, 2023, 07:47:13 pm »
Thank you for replying. The dynamic between Emma and Miss Keys is the heart of this series. It is what I have intended to be the backbone even when not at the forefront of each story. But other characters are very relevant and affecting the dynamic as well. The f/f was a direction I purposely took for most stories. Emma is very much bi and will have interactions that include men on top of what there has been. It will just be significantly less.

Thanks again for posting.

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Re: Subspace - Emma's Fetish Cruise Adventure
« Reply #31 on: January 27, 2024, 09:25:32 pm »
Part 17 up tonight, enjoy

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Re: Subspace - Emma's Fetish Cruise Adventure
« Reply #32 on: March 03, 2024, 08:54:17 pm »
And part 18, enjoy.

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Re: Subspace - Emma's Fetish Cruise Adventure
« Reply #33 on: March 08, 2024, 05:26:46 pm »
You’re a geniusss ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️haha. New chapter is so fun to read and also scary at the same time with the torture setup for the tour. Is there a movie i would like to watch it tho and for some parts i do hope to see a picture cause some of the part i can’t grasped it in my mind as english is not my main language😅. I dont know how your brain can make this stories but i do love like it. Thanks a lot for sharing these. Hopefully there more to come.

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« Reply #34 on: March 08, 2024, 10:52:26 pm »
You’re a geniusss ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️haha. New chapter is so fun to read and also scary at the same time with the torture setup for the tour. Is there a movie i would like to watch it tho and for some parts i do hope to see a picture cause some of the part i can’t grasped it in my mind as english is not my main language😅. I dont know how your brain can make this stories but i do love like it. Thanks a lot for sharing these. Hopefully there more to come.

Thanks for the response and the nice comments. I do have moments some enjoy. I understand wanting pictures or movies to handle my descriptions. Unfortunately I am not an artist. I have pictures in my mind and many of those ideas stem from things I have seen or read over the years with my own take on them with new ideas mixed in. I wish my brain articulated my descriptions better as I get stuck with my normal literal and logical thought processes when I need to be more descriptive.

As you mentioned and most of the people who have responded here and privately, are not native English speakers. I find it interesting the number of international readers interested in my stories. It sometimes makes me question my writing to simplify certain words or use some of the more common ones in situations I don’t. It also makes me question the dialog I use. Some of my references are more specific to my local area or even just the state or country I live in. It makes me wonder how many people I confuse or lose or if they see it as a way to see or learn more cultural slang, terms, or expressions.

How does my brain make these stories? Well that is a complicated answer. But if you take the first four letters of my pen name, you get one of the aspects of how I view myself both physically and mentally. But mostly I read a lot. Lots from this site and others but regular stuff as well. Also I have a deep interest in most of the stuff I write or at least a curiosity. In my mind, it is the only way to explore these things for me nowadays. I just finally decided to put some of my twisted thoughts in writing and offered to share mostly to give back for the number of stories I have seen over the years. Plus I wanted to add more of the things I wanted to see or takes on things as everyone has their own wants, desires, opinions, and quirks. I felt I had some reasonable ideas especially for this one that were different enough it would garner some attention.

At least where I am at, there is a saying that there is a fine line between genius and insanity.  I am no genius or would want the weight of being one. I am far too lazy and unmotivated. I will take insanity. It at least sounds fun.

Speaking of fine lines, stories like part 18 are difficult and interesting to write. One, because I have to try to balance the tone of the story I am trying to convey. Two, because I am naturally inclined to go full dark and extreme and some of the partially written early versions that I have saved from this and some of the others started or ended up in some very life changing, yeah we'll just call it that, changes and situations of some of the characters including the protagonist. As I was asked, that is not what I want from this series as a whole. I want to tread the line at moments while developing the characters in the story and offering a range of experiences. The cruise ship offered a chance to try out many things at an excelerated pace. I took the setting to be close to potential near future with hinting at possibilities we could have but don't at least publicly starting with the medications and treatments used on Emma to allow her to endure and push herself so far. These choices will turn off certain readers but that is the reality for anything that is written or done. I usually don’t expect much comments from the more intense ones not that there is from most of them any way. That's just how it is here and other places for writers based on what I witness. So I and many others appreciate the responses when someone takes the time to give us their thoughts.

As far as more to come, part 19 is in queue. I have written through 21 and in the early stages of part 22. I do mean early as in 2 to 3 paragraphs that are setting up something I have been waiting for since like part 4. My biggest concern is articulating and making it interesting in a way I am happy enough with.

I had to change my initial plans for part 19. I had pushed Emma pretty hard in 17 and 18. The original plan for 19 would have been even more intense than that. So I shifted that plan to a later date and went with a different but also planned turn. I think I titled it An Unworthy Turn but won't give away too much yet. You can guess who plays a big role but there is more within the story with others and a new side character who could show up more, possibly.

Part 20 I think I currently have titled Conjugal Visits as Emma is back in Subspace Prison and gets visitors and time with the new associate warden.

Part 21 is the next demonstration with Janice. This one has its own twist in that Emma takes charge and runs the demonstration/show. Naked musical chairs anyone? Just remember the losers' backsides get a bit red. What does the winner get? That is just a tease of what's in there.

Part 22 is Emma taking Janice on her promised walk to surprise her damsel with something she mentioned she desired and that Emma herself has interest in experiencing.

What comes after in some form likely in 23 and 24 is the first night with Master Robert for Emma followed by the return of Nix. What is in store and who else is involved? Those are still evolving though I have the base ideas.

There are plenty more things to come, some announced or hinted at in earlier stories. There is plenty of other unannounced stuff coming to. Emma and many of the others are in for a wild ride and this is only pushing a third of the way through the cruise. The ideas I have for how it ends are constantly in mind that I am tempted to write it now just to stop distracting me.

I also have the first story I wrote before this series and the other stories posted here. It was written to introduce a vanilla friend with some of her input in what she wanted to see. It is different from most anything you have seen from me. At least it feels that way. I mean there is no chastity. There are threats of it but no actual chastity unlike I think everything I have written so far including the two Halloween stories I literally wrote right after that over the course of a couple days.

My attention lately has been split between Subspace part 22, a brand new story that isn't related to anything so far and on my list of ideas to do maybe, and part four of It's Good To Be The Queen. Queen 4 has gotten most of my attention in recent days after months of deciding what to do with it, where to go, and the biggest issue I have had, how I want to get there.

So I am still working on more. My problem is I started taking it more seriously and it has turned into a bigger project than expected. Their are pros and cons to it. Mostly I spend a lot of time thinking and that slows me done. I end up looking ahead and trying to set things up and often times get distracted by what the future holds. Writing a one off story is so much faster to write. So I am slower at this than I would have preferred but I am hoping the quality and enjoyment improve.

Thanks again for the comments and I am sure many other writers would appreciate more as well from readers. Enough of my babble. Have a good day.

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Re: Subspace - Emma's Fetish Cruise Adventure
« Reply #35 on: March 09, 2024, 06:23:50 pm »
🤯 i never tought to get reply from the writer itself and with a long comment at that😁. Dont bother with those movies or picture. It’s just some part of the situation/scene i cant imagine how its work or looks like, that all if u understand what i mean 😅. Dont worry much about language/slang all that cause in my part as a reader if i cant understand i will translate it that all.

I do read  but to get an idea and create a stories like yours/other that for sure will never happened for me.like i said before most of the stories genre that i read and like mostly  f/f, bdsm stuff and the one you sharing  get me hooked with it. Your interest, curiosity and wicked thought is why part of the stories a super good and scary for me to read but in a good way 🥵😈

From my pov i dont want any hint from the author with the next chapter.  i like it to be a surprise. So no need to rush or anything. Just take your time with it. Im just glad the stories keep get updated with new chapter. Take care of your health cause if you get sick there wont be any new chapter for me as a reader to read. This  “https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=4879500&page=submissions” like this author i really like the stories “kim new life” but at the newest chapter it feels like its still unfinished tho.some part of me hope it will get new updated but its been years already.

Urghh i dont know what im write here and i dont know if you can understand it hahaha whatever it is my point is your story is good and i like it. Just do whatever you want with your story and take your time with it, cause we cant satisfied everyone needs who read it rite. Youre the owner so make it however you like.

Have a good day too. Thanks for keep updated it. Cant wait for emma next adventure~



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Re: Subspace - Emma's Fetish Cruise Adventure
« Reply #36 on: March 09, 2024, 08:11:04 pm »
I am glad you like the stories. As I mentioned the cruise is coming up on a third of the way through so there is much more planned. I have been submitting one a month for roughly a year now and it will likely stay that way unless I get really ahead. My goal has always been to write through the whole trip and give it an ending for Emma and some of the others that may set up more in the future. Anyway, thanks for the comment.

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Re: Subspace - Emma's Fetish Cruise Adventure
« Reply #37 on: April 13, 2024, 11:21:14 pm »
Part 19 up tonight, enjoy!

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« Reply #38 on: May 11, 2024, 06:54:03 pm »
Part 20 up tonight, enjoy

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« Reply #39 on: June 08, 2024, 07:21:50 pm »
Part 21 up tonight, enjoy!

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« Reply #40 on: July 07, 2024, 09:08:16 pm »
And part 22, enjoy :-)

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« Reply #41 on: July 24, 2024, 09:09:14 pm »
Hello,

Sorry that I'm that late to the party, but life got a bit in the way of my smut-addiction.
I had a lot of fun with the first parts, I found a tad too extreme for my liking but as the parts tended to become more extreme with every part I decided to abandon the serie at part 11 of so.

Your writingstyle is elaborate and aproachable at the same time and I had fun, it is clear to me that I can't follow Emma further into her adventure.

Thanks a lot for sharing!

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« Reply #42 on: July 25, 2024, 12:20:32 am »
T.H.

Thank you for your feedback. Better late to the party than miss the experience all together, even if it doesn't turn out well and you leave early. I'm sorry I am not a better writer and lost you and others all around the same time. It was my first time trying to create a longer series that covered many things. Unfortunately I knew my audience was limited and I doubt there is much I can do to regain interest at this point.

With that said, I have been reevaluating my writing future. I have lost plenty of motivation in between dealing with real life struggles. Most of my feedback from the start especially which almost all died after the first 4 then by 9 and 10 it was nonexistent. I'm well aware parts 7 and 8 put off many though I felt they were vital  to the story I wanted to tell. But the feedback straddled two sides predominantly. The erotic romanticism which are who I see as many of the more public vocal ones on the forum who wanted more of a love story which it is and is building towards in my own way. Then privately there was a majority of the feedback looking for an incredibly dark downfall for Emma. Mind you, I do enjoy that and not against reading and writing that type of story. This one was intentionally being made to not go that far by choice. I am pretty sure I immediately lost that portion of my potential audience when I told them that I didn’t plan for this series to go that route.

Are there intense scenes? Yes, because that is what the protagonist desires in my vision. There are other scenes to build up some of the other characters and allow you to see the background of not just the cruise but the little world I have envisioned. Not everything matches what is reality now, but I wanted something that could be attainable in the near future or maybe has in another version of the world.

In the end I find myself writing something those who have provided feedback and asked questions with something none of them seem to enjoy. If any people do enjoy, I haven’t a clue. That isn't a me problem as much as an issue for anyone wanting feedback, whether it's writers on this site or other within any genre, online stores and other businesses, and just about anything else really.

Reality is I don’t like going back on my word as I promised to write the whole cruise out. I may expedite some parts while trying to cover up some loose ends. It's just lost a lot of the luster for me it had since the beginning. Then again a majority of the story has gone through my head multiple times over the years. It may take longer than it already has to finish. I have restarted part 23 three times now and the negativity in my mind has me looking at doing anything else when I start writing most the time.

I had been considering asking which characters people enjoyed so far and wanted to see more of, but that is a selfish desire to see what has worked and what hasn't.

I am thankful for the feedback once again for anyone who sent any over the years. It shows you cared enough to give a little of your time to say something.


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Re: Subspace - Emma's Fetish Cruise Adventure
« Reply #43 on: July 25, 2024, 07:11:00 am »
First and foremost, It isn't that your writing is lacking.
It's good and I was very willing to follow. It was just that the fetishes and the intensity of those fetishes weren't up my alley this at this point in time.

As a reader I can't really help you.
The same reader who wanted something very dark yesterday, is in desperate need of a warm and fuzzy lovestory today. In that aspect I'm guilty as charged.

Maybe in a few years (or next week for that matter) some extreme scenes may be just what the doctor ordered.
I may devoure the story then and wished there was more of it.

In my case, I loved the extreme stuff when I was 20... the more extreme the better.
I'm 40 now, the world is going to shits - what was Dystopian Satire yesterday is becoming reality today...
I don't need extreme or fringe practices in the moment.

As a fellow writer (I don't really have the time as before and its in German but I have my experience in writing). My composition for a fetishcruise story would have been:

- a strict selfimposed timelimit (probably 7 days (10 days max). Having 7 or 10 chapters.
- I would have given myself a sort of itinerary for my cruise grounding my story a bit. Maybe alternate between timeouts and public play.
- have a predetermined story arch... probably a holiday fling because I'm lazy.

It helps against a meandering story where the only progression is the ever deepening intensity of the play.

What happened to some early stories of mine: The "storycrowd" left when they felt that there was no emotional progression was made - and the "fetishcrowd" left shortly after, because those guys are adrenalinejunkeys always looking out for something new and exciting and you can't deliver those kicks forever.

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« Reply #44 on: July 25, 2024, 08:27:38 am »
Thanks again for your comments and feedback.

 

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