A Night in the Desert by Jack Peacock

[teanndaorsa]

You can view the story here on the plaza:

https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/night_in_the_desert.html
Sbf; caught; M/f; bond; cuffs; outdoors; naked; desert; hobble; shackles; prison; blindfold; kidnap; zipties; collar; cell; slave; training; chastity; rom; nc; reluct; XXX

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[icy]

I remember reading this story some time ago. It's a great one.

[greyjoy]

I really enjoyed this one! The moments when she realized that her last, most intimate degree of freedom was being taken away, and her reaction to it was truly delicious! What will he take from her next?!

I'd love to hear about how he uses her for sex. Is she to be gratified at all? Is he a generous lover, or will he take steps to ensure that she never experiences an orgasm outside of very specific circumstances?

I would love to revisit this couple... maybe he tasks her with coming up with a way to add to her restrictions. Something that is her choice (with his approval), but is a marked reduction in her freedom? I find that the exploration and fulfillment of a submissive's desires can sometimes be more extreme than what the dominant initially had in mind.

The desert and abandoned mine is such a great setting for this too. Desolate and also deadly without the safety net that only he can provide. And an abandoned mine must contain untold horrors within!

[jakbird]

The idea of the abandoned mine came from long experience living in the Mojave Desert.  One of the more stupid adventures in younger days was the occasional exploration of old mines scattered around a whole lot of open space.  I can't say I ever came across any heart stopping horrors; the worst was a mummified mouse.  The strangest was the discovery of old Soviet monitoring gear by a friend of mine, located in a mine just outside the nuclear test site (all legal by the way, installation was allowed by treaty).

Desolate?  Definitely!  Some of the deserts in the southwest US rival the Arabian Peninsula for lack of people, water, animals, plants or anything else.  Imagine a place where rainfall is measured in years per inch of rain (been there, looks like surface of Mars).  Dangerous?  Exceedingly so, since mines follow veins, horizontal or vertical, meaning a shaft can suddenly drop straight down in the middle of a gallery.  But take a good, hard rock mine cut into granite, reinforce the walls with concrete, and it becomes the perfect desert home, especially for someone who doesn't want to be disturbed.

One of life's great surprises is the extent to which a submissive is willing (and eager) to demand more than a dominant thinks is wise.  Shedding responsibility releases hidden inhibitions.  At first glance it's pure heaven for the control freak gene, until that old need to shelter and protect brings the dominant back to reality.

Will there be a sequel?  No plans at this time.  This is an old story, one I've never revisited.  If some clever idea sneaks up and hits me over the head, maybe that will change...

[absolutist]

Thanks for posting this engaging tale. The elaborate plot takes care to construct a situation where the heroine can forget about the concerns of everyday life and instead live her submissive dreams. I very much enjoyed tagging along on this wild ride.

However, I was a little surprised by the ending. I suppose marriage is the classical way to end a tale and the go-to trope to show two people really care about each other. In this instance, I'm not sure the protagonists would need this kind of validation, especially since - given their trouble with the law - they won't even benefit from the legal status attached to it.

[jakbird]

Thanks for the comments.  AS for the ending, since the tale was a romance it required a happy ending.  There were actually no legal troubles...neither was on a wanted list, and they had new identities   The setting for the ending was no coincidence; way out in the Nevada desert county seats are tiny little towns.  By tradition no questions are asked about background.  It's an ideal place to start over (and yes, I know of a few cases where something very similar occurred in real life).

Marriage isn't just about legal status.  It's a public commitment.  For those who take part the vows are binding for life.
  Jack Peacock

[Budman0_0]

Jack,

I just finished binge reading your entire library.
I think you're my new favorite author on the Plaza.

I started with the Island stories, and I'll comment on those in their forum.  But they hooked me.

A night in the Desert was my second read and I "almost" gave up on it.  I'm glad I didn't.
I would suggest you get Teann to add an Author's note to the front warning readers that it's really 3 stories tied together, each with a different theme.  A self bondage/discovered story.  A Arrest/Prison story and what I call a "captivity" story.  I enjoyed all three stories and by the time I finished of course, it all tied together.
But each of us has different 'kinks' and, since I'm not particularly interested in the 'self bondage' kink I almost stopped reading.  That would have been a REAL shame as I loved the third part of this story.  It and most of your other stories very closely fit my captivity and bondage kink.

Your stories are extremely well done, excellent writing style, and great character development which is mostly what sucks me in!

Thanks for sharing and as I have time I'll add comments on more stories.

[jakbird]

I just finished binge reading your entire library.

Cruel and unusual punishment, there oughta be a law against it.

I would suggest you get Teann to add an Author's note to the front

Ahh, the tyranny of storycodes.  A note wouldn't help if stories are filtered by code at the start.  The alternative is no storycode, but that's just as bad since it will never appear in a search by code.  Maybe there should be a "doesn't fit into category" storycode?

great character development

Thanks for the comments!  The way I see it, there are plenty of "scene" type stories, so I didn't want to be just another in a long line.  Why not a different approach?  Instead of what's happening, explore why it's happening.  Go mental (in a good way), explore emotions, motivations, the evil ways society programs us to conform...

Or, since it's an amateur effort, write solely for the fun of it.  Whether I have five readers (wildly optimistic) or five thousand (about when the Sun goes nova) the royalties are exactly the same (zero, it is public domain), so I can safely and economically ignore the potential audience.  There are only so many permutations of the empty house, the isolated farm, the old castle, all mixed in with rope, leather and steel.  But add the mental activity hidden behind blindfolded eyes, yup, then it gets interesting.

Night in the Desert was a very early story, and as you can tell originally stopped at the first part.  I read it a few times, thought about it, and decided to keep on going, and going, and going.  I spent many an evening, banging away on the keyboard, with nothing but XEW (radio station) to keep me company while I explored the mysterious mountain in the Mojave.

Once again, thanks for the response, and I look forward to any comments on the Island series.  Part 3 is slowly coming along.  Several years effort went into the first two, part of what I like to think of as my magnum opus trilogy.
  Jack Peacock

[Budman0_0]

Perhaps the story code problem could have been solved by breaking it into three chapters and posting each separately - but I know Teann isn't going back and split it up now :-).

With my "Chain" series I tried to keep to the length suggested in the writers guidelines and as such, what is essentially one long "book" of stories all set in a fictional town turned out to be 40 chapters.  As you have, I've experimented with both MaleDom and FemDom and so having all that seperated out made the codes make since but thankfully all of it is bascially "bondage" so it all winds up in one section of the Plaza.

It sounds like we write for the same audience - ourselves.  It sounds self centered but I honestly enjoy re-reading my own stores almost as much as I enjoy yours.  After all, they cover all my kinks LOL.

[jakbird]

breaking it into three chapters and posting each separately

I have a firm rule, each story is complete unto itself and posted in its entirety.  No matter the length there is no "same bat time, same bat channel" waiting for the next installment.  There are multiple stories with the same background, but they don't form one continuous narrative.  I assiduously avoid any kind of serialization.  I leave that to the Saturday matinee cliffhangers.

I'm well aware of the curse of TL;DNR (too long; did not read) and short attention spans requiring instant gratification.  There are plenty of stories for those who can't get past 2000 words.  For those with a bit more leisure time, and patience, I hope to offer an alternative.
  Jack Peacock

[Silver]

Hi Jack!

I am not sure on the rules around here on commenting on older stories, resurrecting older threads.  I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed you story! 

You reeled me in with my favorite type of story "Self bondage gets caught". That was a delightful start to the story.  Then suddenly the story makes an abrupt turn into the justice system and jail.  I was expecting that some guard or another prisoner would take advantage of our /f main character and was surprised when that didn't happen.  The suspense was terrific and you writing was very well done.  The level of detail in your descriptions made me feel like I was present, observing this.

Then you gave the story one more twist, back to the start in a way.  But over the course of it all, the characters and story had grown, matured.  It was very well thought out and had a perfect ending.

Great work!

[jakbird]

I always appreciate commentary on a story, even if it goes back a few years.  Night in the Desert was the second story I foolishly attempted, and it goes back further than the Gromet website (1990s).  It's made the rounds of several defunct websites.

My goal, aside from writing for the fun of it, has been to offer some kind of alternative for readers who might like the occasional change of pace, so yeah, I try to avoid the obvious plot lines.

I like to add in a bit of realism for the background.  The ending, that dusty town in Nevada?  It's based on a place called Caliente, north of Las Vegas, an old railroad station.  It's a part of the Old West, where everyone minds their own business, you check your gun with the bartender, and nobody asks questions...
  Jack Peacock