Author Topic: Spirit Trap by bentbliss  (Read 355 times)

Offline teanndaorsa

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Spirit Trap by bentbliss
« on: October 27, 2020, 10:59:16 PM »
You can view the story here on the plaza:

http://grometsplaza.net/special/halloween20/spirit_trap.html
FM/f; M/f+; bond; cuffs; corset; leash; public; dungeon; toys; electro; chain; ghosts; supernatural; cage; hood; cons; reluct; nc; XX

Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.

Thanks  ;)

Offline AmyAmy

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Re: Spirit Trap by bentbliss
« Reply #1 on: November 03, 2020, 06:40:42 AM »
The initial setup was good, with good storytelling and events nicely shown, but then it turned into some completely other story...

From then on it was just a stream of rushed narration, as if the author had planned a much longer story then run out of time to finish it.
The later parts were a little disappointing, sadly.

I would have enjoyed it better if it had simply ended after the 'break'.

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Re: Spirit Trap by bentbliss
« Reply #2 on: November 28, 2020, 12:55:10 PM »
Thank you for the feedback. I am sorry it didn't end up as enjoyable as I hoped. This my first experiment into a Halloween with a supernatural element and one of two of my first stories posted and read by anyone other than my friend. She has never given me any feedback on dozens of stories I will take what I get here.

 

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