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Playing Maid by Jackie Rabbit
« on: March 28, 2020, 09:43:12 AM »
You can view the story here on the plaza:

http://grometsplaza.net/eroticstories/storieslr/playing_maid1.html
MF; MF/m; sex; rom; cuckold; cons; X

http://grometsplaza.net/eroticstories/storieslr/playing_maid2.html
MF/m; F/f; fpov; bond; hum; chastity; cuckold; stocks; oral; XX

Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.

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Re: Playing Maid by Jackie Rabbit
« Reply #1 on: March 30, 2020, 12:40:56 PM »
I don't think I would call this part sexy or particularly erotic, but as the next part of this continuing story arc, it is amazing, gripping, and very tender, all at the same time.  There is a strong, almost massive, feeling of emotional vulnerability going on here, for both Jackie and Jim.  This step, moving across this boundary, bringing things closer to home, it is really changing and making things "real" for everyone involved in a way that they weren't quite real before.

What really strikes me strongly here is how dedicated Jackie is to holding on and trying to see things through, to supporting and helping her man, Jim, through this moment, even as the moment falls apart for her.  This is now well beyond a mere "fling" or a quick bit of fun, this is making it clear just how much this is now a real and solid relationship that they are building between themselves, and building for the future.

Seeing Jackie's lack of faith in her own attractiveness hurts, but it also feels all so real and genuine, really, how can it be any other way, given the history she is leaving behind, and the history they are both facing upto with this house and its history?

The birth control pills though, that really is the final nail in the coffin of her old relationship with their new maid.  Beautifully counterpointed by her firm and deliberate efforts to make sure that their new maid has plenty of cleaning up after them to do, when the bedding gets changed later.

This part brings so much more to the characters, their histories and natures, really good writing, but now I want more! :)

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Re: Playing Maid by Jackie Rabbit
« Reply #2 on: March 31, 2020, 10:43:49 AM »
I agree with the sexy and erotic observation, and I struggled with this. I wanted to put the next part I'm presently writing into this single chapter, but it just got too long in my estimation.

I wanted to show how deeply into this Jackie had become, and I wanted to also introduce the bed, and Jack's other lie as well. I also plan on using Shelia in the next chapters, she's just too good a character not to use going forward, her own perhaps irrational suspicion that Jim had a thing for Jackie while they were still married perhaps rearing it's ugly head.

Or, maybe not, maybe Jim DID have a thing for his sexy petite neighbor, perhaps Jim caught looking longingly across the street at Jackie one time wishing he had a wife of his own that was just a little "not so high maintenance."

If that were the case, both Jack, and Jackie, might be on Shelia's shit list, either or both of them possibly earning her wrath at some point.

In either case Jack is going to be doing more than "playing maid" eventually, but he deserves as much.

Thank you again for your comments, Jackie.




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Re: Playing Maid by Jackie Rabbit
« Reply #3 on: April 01, 2020, 07:11:07 PM »
Thinking about it, I cannot see how Jim did not at least "oggle", or more as he would probably put it, be aware of in a platonic but appreciative manor, of his neighbour.  He comes across as to respectful to have done more than this, but it would certainly be enough motivation to set up someone as high strung as Shelia comes across as.

So yes, I can see Shelia being angry with both Jim and Jackie, which is likely to end up mostly focused on and taken out on Jack.  After all, if Jack had been doing his "manly duties" properly and keeping Jackie properly satisfied, she would not have ended up "flaunting herself and desperately throwing herself at Jim", or going about her life normally as everyone else would see it :)

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Re: Playing Maid by Jackie Rabbit
« Reply #4 on: September 05, 2020, 10:06:14 PM »
Part 2 up today

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Re: Playing Maid by Jackie Rabbit
« Reply #5 on: October 14, 2020, 04:08:10 PM »
Still running behind :)  But getting there, I think.

Written as I read this wonderful part - *giggles* Jim can keep as many secrets as he wants, but even as she is saying this, apparently believing and accepting this, she is considering and scheming to learn the answer via other means...  I want to argue that this isn’t accepting he can keep secrets, but at the same time, given the ongoing sense that her “husband” (well, ex husband in a sense) is hiding things from her, important things, one can hardly blame her for this approach or attitude.

What is particularly interesting is the thought / wonder about the cost of asking Sheila.  Is this in the sense of asking behind Jim’s back being seen as breaking his trust, or is it more in the sense of wondering what price getting closer to Sheila will enact on her more directly?  Or a bit of both?  Plus the first time that introducing Sheila back into events has really come up, from memory.

Yes, you really are moving very quickly with Jim now, but look at how carefully you set off down this road, and the steps it took to really start moving with any speed.  The speed now came on and was built up slowly, reasonably and sensibly.  Also the very telling comment about making up for time lost...  that hints at a lot of rather deep seated regrets, given the new perspective on things, the new way of seeing the world.

The switch / jump from being supportive of Jim, looking to take him to “your” other bed, to distract him from his worries, to the poison, might I almost say a bit of hate, for Jack...  wow, talk about powerful feelings having been set in motion!

Jim going soft on you, or you being to much of a bitch...  I know what is happening now, my mind is still half on our conversation about your first experience with a second lover, how it was difficult for him to take the cruel and tormenting role with your boyfriend...  carrying a lot of those thoughts over still :)  So, let’s focus a moment...

better :)

The comment about her limiting her contact with her new maid, I had forgotten that, but of course, thinking back, we have not long had the discovery of the hidden second key for his chastity cage, the ongoing mystery of what was done to her key for the cage, and all of the anger that came with learning that they have both been played for the fools, at least in their eyes.  Talk about making a mess!

It is good though to see her offering up what help and support she can, to help reward Jim for taking on this terrible burden...  *evil teasing smirk*  and yes, what can a naked woman offer to her dominant lover to help reward him...  I am sure he will think of something eventually :)

*OH* oh wow!  Now that is interesting and opens up some really interesting avenues...  Sheila’s aunt thinking Jim and Sheila are still together, the need, for good reasons, to keep up this illusion...  I wonder how much anger / jealousy Sheila is going to start building up now that Jim has a new woman, and look, the perfect maid to both fulfil the ongoing need / expectation in her life for a maid, and somehow to take out her feelings on...  oh this is delicious!

An interesting “jump” from the falling out between Jim and Sheila to the bed, but also logical, given it is very much in the forefront of your thoughts.  But it does also loop back to the possibility that Sheila did not respond well to Jim’s naturally dominant nature...  we shall see.

OK...  WOW!!!  Talk about anger over the hidden / secret key, clearly this is building on previous lies and secrets, other sins that her husband has committed over time.  Off the top of my head I am not sure what these are, they came across as having a loving and supportive relationship at the start of this, as I recall.  But clearly something deep and powerful is at work here.  The famous comment about a woman scorned comes to mind, but in a sense it is more than that, if secrets are felt to strike at the heart of their marriage and life together, then with this change, it is no wonder that the thought that “he is my husband” now triggers anger and hate, especially when considering the “making up for lost time” feeling.

Ooooh, poor Jim, he really is feeling emotional and rather vulnerable at the moment, obviously what ever issue is behind this moment is really big for him.  He was the one who brought up Sheila, but at the same time Sheila is clearly a big part of his feelings and history here.  Again, the complex, real, believable characters that draw me in and keep me interested!  This is so important to all of this, as far as I am concerned.

And there we are, birth control pills are now required, the original lie, no wonder she is SO FUCKING ANGRY, talk about bringing hell down on his own head...  yep, a very cruel and terrible treatment for their maid is very much in the future.

I love the imagery of the new sexy underthing’s, making her a new and exciting surprise for Jim alone :)  And then forgetting how to cook, well, there is a saying about why have a dog and bark yourself :)

The re-telling of the job problems, very well staged, everything reinforcing who has the power and who doesn’t.  At the same time everything about the work experience screams that they are just looking, quite eagerly, for the justification, or the excuse, to fire “her”.

Almost feeling sorry for their maid...  that is interesting and telling.  Some of the old feelings are still there I suspect, but also you are just a decent person under it all.  Still, this is where things have been going for a while now, and the shock of the moment, does this mean the maid is ready for the next step?

WOW, things really have come a LONG way, so eager and happy for the power of attorney, seeing the freedom from the debts, rather than the loss of so much...  but the loss has already been accepted and embraced though, hasn’t it.

Now that is a bit naughty, reaching out to Sheila behind Jim’s back.  Then again, something has to be done to address this issue, and all of the emotions tied up in it, from both Jim and it turns out Sheila.

*stunned silence*  OK...  So much for thinking bad things about Sheila, suddenly I really need to give her a giant HUG and feed her lots of nice chocolates.  It is surprising news that Jim has had a thing for our lady for so long, and while I sort of want to be angry with him for his reaction, his comment, that isn’t actually what I think or feel.  Instead it is much more sadness, a sense of two people who are just not properly compatible.  Seeing Sheila describe Jim’s lovemaking as “aggressive”, it confirms that she really wasn’t the submissive to match his dominant.  Blaming Jim for reacting to a sexy sight isn’t really fair, but to see a reaction like that, after Sheila has just done her best to satisfy his sexual needs...  OUCH!

It’s no surprise that Sheila knows that Jackie (for want of a better name) is having an affair with Jim, after all, they  have hardly tried to keep it low key.  But without more context, seeing this other woman replace her so fully and totally, a married woman at that...  by default Sheila isn’t going to be thinking nice things here.  This is going to take quite a few truth’s to try and move past.

Yep, let me demonstrate this custom bondage bed on you.  Really not coming across as submissive at all!

Well, in a sense this begs the question of why Sheila got her (ex) husband such a wonderfully kinky bed, but that’s a silly question, it was clearly born of love.  The depth of emotion and hurt tied up in all of this proves that quite clearly!  Still, nothing about her locking Jackie into the bed, and setting out to change the game and learn more speaks of her being a particularly submissive person, but at the same time, she is looking more and more perfect as someone to help look after the maid, if she was so inclined.

“man thief”, in a sense this seems wrong and unfair, at least on Jackie’s part, since she didn’t do anything at all until long after their relationship was already over, but Sheila is hardly going to see it this way or feel this way about it!  And in this room, with this bed as well...

The comment about the maid, it is as if Jim has already raised the point with Sheila...  but if so, either he hasn’t filled her in much at all, or she simply doesn’t believe him.

I was wondering if she had a plan for the teabag when it appeared, without somewhere good to put it, but I didn’t expect that elegant and quite devastating solution!

Ah...  that explains the maid comment, it seems Sheila thinks you are going to be her new maid...  this could well get interesting :)

*smirk* yes, you stuck between Jim and Sheila, as they compete over you, quite the mental image...  and perhaps also a way for some healing to come between Jim and Sheila as they find a new normal, a new way forward, since handing the existing maid will require some cooperation and coordination between everyone involved.

Oh my, this is a very interesting side of our lady.  We already know how very responsive you are to Jim taking charge, but taking your control over Sheila’s orgasm, and denying her so you get punished...  this is a new step and does make it more reasonable to see you moving between Jim and Sheila yourself to some degree...

LOL, how much can you take before you are finally forced to give Sheila her orgasm?!  Yep, definitely not a “pure sub”, but we already knew that, and Sheila really isn’t coming across as someone who was terribly keen on being all sub all the time for Jim.

Oh WONDERFUL!  So, the idea of a maid has been floated, and Sheila reached the totally reasonable and logical conclusion, it was just wrong.  But two maids, now that is an interesting solution, and should also help to remind Jim that being commanding with his new lady is more than acceptable...

Warm happy feelings, and roll on the next part!

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Re: Playing Maid by Jackie Rabbit
« Reply #6 on: October 17, 2020, 10:26:42 AM »
First of all, thank you for such a thoughtful response, I love to see how others "see" this.

 I don't think Jackie is willing to let a man like Jim slip away, or even lose interest due to something she can control, so in this context finding out what the mysterious bed is all about makes sense. I had thought only in terms of "cost" with Sheila originally, but if and when Jim finds out there will be a cost associated with that I'm sure. Something that hurts or chases him away, from Jackie's perspective, is something that needs to be understood, or better yet fixed, Jackie therefore willing to pay the proverbial price. I think there is also a feeling of Jackie making some mistakes of her own with her lying husband, and she doesn't want a repeat with Jim.

I like the character of Sheila personally, and that she is an understandable human with human emotions, (and not just some irate ex-wife), so I had to bring her back into the arc of the story to explain her side of things. She isn't perfect either, but she has a side and some complexity to her too, and Jackie has some empathy for her woman to woman. I haven't decided if Sheila will in the end steal Jackie away from Jim, it could be an interesting plot twist, but I'm curious what you think of it.

Jack is so screwed, but he deserves as much, at least from my point of view. He also needed to lose his job so he could focus on being the perfect maid, and this character crushing way that his boss went about it was just too much fun. Guys DO identify with their jobs, and taking his away from him like this, panties and chastity cage and all, sort of crushes his remaining spark of manhood. It's really as if Jack's boss was in on things, especially with the timing of the sale of Jim and Sheila's home, but I don't know if I should make it Jim, or Jackie that anonymously tipped off Jack's boss to Jack's hidden "perversions." I might just let that one go too, but I'm also curious as to what you think.

... As far as Ken warming to treating hubby badly in Cuckold, he eventually warms up to it, reluctantly, but at a price later on as the two drift apart friend wise. That part is a little sad, but I think a natural result of treating someone as less than yourself while stealing away their girlfriend, and later wife, for anything goes sex. What seems as if a good and kinky idea pre orgasm, often turns into "what the hell did I just do?" post orgasm...

As far as Sheila's aunt thinking Jim and Sheila are still a thing, I have wanted to weave this kind of story plot into a cuckold themed story for years, I can't imagine what it would be like for the partner left home while you and your ex basically pretended to be married again, sleeping together and all. The emotions would be off the charts for the one left home, but the ex's might not see it that way, as sleeping together was something they had likely done hundreds of times when married themselves, and "no big deal."

I have no real world reference on the whole "I'm infertile, but didn't want to tell you" angle on things, but I see it as the ultimate lie, especially if known before you both said "I do" and started planning for a family of your own. Not that such things are a deal breaker, but to lie about them surely might be. I have this theme running in another story I'm currently working on, but I know that you know this.

I think Sheila isn't the least bit submissive, but the bed hints at her trying to be, for Jim, once the two realized that two dominates can't ordinarily have a lasting relationship. There are exceptions obviously, but Sheila wants to take charge, and if fully capable of doing so, and Jim at the same time NEEDS an at times submissive to get what he wants from life. The two eventually will come to terms with each other, perhaps even shared custody of one of the maids, assuming that Jackie doesn't end up the possession of Sheila at some point.

I also think that there may be a element of "I deserve this" in Jack's submission, even including the power of attorney, he having some serious guilt at lying to Jackie over the years as he obviously has. He knows, deep down, that he must pay a huge price himself to make things right, hooking Jackie up with Jim just the down payment on that debt. Does Jim know this, and is this the real reason that Jack can't summon the courage to challenge Jim in the slightest of ways? What other secrets could Jim be privy to, and how might they have been learned? I don't know the depth of Jim's motivation here, but he could end up being a real scoundrel, or just a man that knows what he wants, and willing to do anything himself to keep Jackie.

As far as the title, it might be a fun twist if Jackie was the one who ended up playing maid in the end, or even if they both did, but for different masters.

Thank you again for your thoughtful words, Jackie. 





 

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