Thanks a lot, I shall blush ;-) That story has been written a long time ago and I'm flattered that you profess to be inspired by it. I still harbor the fantasy to revisit it one day but somehow doubt I'll like what I find when reading it again... Meanwhile, the daily grind remains hardly conducive to creative endeavors of any kind.
Regarding slow movement: As long as there's a discernible direction or some kind of (even hidden) goal a story moves toward, I don't think pacing is a major problem. It's only when stories start floundering that I fear they might sink ;-)