Sophie and Mark by Twisted Smile

[teanndaorsa]

You can view the story here on the plaza:

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark.html
F/m; mpov; chastity; bond; cuffs; blindfold; gag; naked; Sbm; chain; oral; cons; X

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark2.html
F/m; mpov; chastity; tease; mast; cons; X

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark3.html
F/m; mpov; bond; straps; strip; sex; cons; X

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark4.html
F/m; mpov; bond; rope; strip; hogtie; gag; oral; cons; X

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark5.html
F/m; mpov; collar; petplay; bond; cuffs; gag; outdoors; urine; oral; messy; food; findom; cons; X

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark6.html
F/m; mpov; buttplug; remote; toys; cons; X

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark7.html
F/m; mpov; fem; cd; strapon; oral; maid; costume; roleplay; anal; cons; X

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark8.html
F/m; chastity; strip; bond; cuffs; gag; toys; sex; cons; X

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark9.html
F/m; scifi; mast; chastity; alien; oral; cons; nc; XX

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sophie_and_mark10.html
M/f; mpov; bond; rope; cuffs; gag; toys; sex; spank; cons; X

Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.

Thanks 

[Caras pet]

A nice start! Looking forward to part two

Thanks for sharing.

[Caras pet]

Part two is online (for those not following the RSS feed).

Some nice teasing here
Looks like you have more parts planned?

[Eido]

I'm a sucker for a love story. That was really sweet.
Eido

[teanndaorsa]

Part 3 is up tonight, and to answer Caras pet, yes, a few more parts in the queue.

[twistedsmile]

Glad you're enjoying the stories! Yes, I have plenty more parts planned

[teanndaorsa]

Part 5 up tonight, enjoy!

[Caras pet]

Part 5 again was a joyful read, looking forward to part 6

[Caras pet]

Part seven is online (for those not following the RSS feed).

Keep 'em coming

[Caras pet]

Part 8 is up, and once more a joy to read

[Caras pet]

Part nine is up - and it's a dream 

[teanndaorsa]

Up to part 10 now, enjoy!

[twistedsmile]

Just a heads up for the room, the next two stories that'll be posted from me are not Sophie and Mark stories. But rest assured, we've not seen the last of these horny idiots

[twistedsmile]

As a sort of celebration of 10 stories, and to hold you over until number 11 goes up, I'm going to do a sort of director's commentary; if only to show that I put way too much thought into these daft little stories

Let's start with questions I thought I might get asked about the series and my writing:


- Did you pick the names Sophie and Mark so the title would be S&M?
Yes

- But the characters aren't very sadistic/masochistic
Shh, just go with it.

- Why did you pick those specific names?
I wanted names which (to me) sounded British, millenial, slightly middle class.

- Why do all the story titles start with the letter S?
Originally, I titled the stories like "Session 1: Set up", "Session 2: Shutdown", "Session 0: Scrabble", etc. But when I came to post them to the plaza, I couldn't really call the series "Session", and titling stories like "Sophie & Mark: 3. Session 0: Scrabble" would be a bit much. Once I decided to lean in to the 'S' titles, I used it as a method for come up with story ideas - i.e. think of some 'S' words and what kink they could represent.

- Why do you write like that?
My writing background is more non-fiction, technical blogging. That's probably why the prose is so matter-of-fact. I don't have much talent for metaphor and lyricism.

Structurally I have a few rules:
1. Every story must have at least one sex scene
2. Minimise non-sex story elements (backstory, interstitial scenes)
3. Most of all - try to have fun! Sex is too important to be taken seriously

- Why are the stories so short?
See above.

I draft the stories in a plain text editor, and don't know the word count until I copy them into google docs for editing. They always seem to come out to ~2k words. So, I dunno, maybe that's just the natural limit of my imagination.

- Why don't you describe what your characters look like?
I don't actually have a clear image in my head of what the characters look like. And what they look like kinda doesn't matter; readers can imagine them looking any way they like.

- Why did you do X?
Probably because I thought it was funny.

- Are the stories true?
Not literally. But they contain a lot of true details.

- How many stories will there be?
I have 20 stories clearly planned out - 4 'seasons' of 5 stories each, with a short interlude between each season. I'm committed to finishing and posting all of those, at least. I have ideas for more stories after that, but whether and when they're posted will come down to motivation. The series doesn't have a planned, definitive end.

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If you have any questions I didn't cover, feel free to ask - either here or via my author email.

Next time: 1. Set up (Commentary)

[Teann - if this isn't the right place for this sort of thing, let me know where to put it instead ]

[twistedsmile]

01. "Set up" Commentary

The title is a pun (a lot of them are). Establish (the series/relationship), preparation (self-bondage), and deceived (into a chastity cage).

The section titles all starting with 'P' isn't significant. Usually, I pick a word or a random letter and try to think of a set of titles starting with the same letter. If I can't, I pick a different letter.

The idea for the first story (and the start of the second) came to me in a dream. The first version felt a bit lifeless. The female character especially felt very two-dimensional, like she only existed to provide pleasure to the narrator (a 'sexy lamp'). So I spent a lot of time thinking about who the characters are, what their relationship is, why they're doing this, etc. Then I did significant rewrites. The opening section in particular was a late addition, and I was quite pleased with how efficiently it answers those questions.

It felt important to show Sophie being affectionate and caring towards Mark before the domme persona, and that she gets affirmative consent before starting. Admittedly, that was partly to soften how cruel the ending is.

I wanted these stories to feel grounded, like they could plausibly be true. One of the elements of that was being considerate of money. This is Sophie and Mark's first proper BDSM session, and potentially the only one, if Mark isn't into it. So they're not going to spend a load of money on bondage gear that might only be used once.

The workbench is a contrivance; I needed something that could be used to spread Mark's legs. Why does Sophie have a workbench in her garage? I dunno, maybe she does recreational woodworking. Likewise, I don't think the pipe along the ceiling is typical. Even if it is, putting weight on it is probably a bad idea.

When I sent the story in, I apologised to Teann for using so many ellipses. Re-reading the story now, I'm realising I also did way too many rhetorical questions.

"Once the cuff was tightened, I would be trapped." - Pink fluffy handcuffs usually have a safety latch, but we're not going to worry about that

It was important that Mark was the one binding himself. As he applies the restraints he has several opportunities to back out. And when he closes the cuffs around his own wrists, he's actively choosing to give up his freedom and submit to whatever Sophie might do to him.

"One thing that doesn't come across in porn is how quickly a ballgag makes your jaw stiff." - a running theme in this series is the little imperfections of real life. It goes back to the groundedness - the sex is by no means bad, but nor is it some perfect idealised fantasy.

"I wanted so badly... to be released." - oh look, another pun

"There was something unfamiliar in her voice - a confidence" - I imagine Sophie being quite reserved prior to the series. As it goes on and she embraces her domme-ness, she becomes more confident in life in general.

The downside to writing the story from Mark's pov is we can't see directly Sophie's thoughts and motivations. So a lot of stuff is only hinted at. In this story, Sophie has an obvious motive - she wants to indoctrinate Mark into the cult of kink. But that's not her only motive. Prior to this story, Sophie and Mark have not had sex in a long time (chapter 3 goes into more detail). A side-effect of this is that some part of Sophie is worried that it's because Mark doesn't find her sexually attractive anymore. So her secondary motive is wanting to feel desired by Mark. This comes out in two ways. First, she blindfolds Mark, and works him up into a sexual frenzy before finally letting him see her. Second, her domme look is relatively modest because a part of her is hedging - if she goes hard on making herself look sexy and fails to get the desired reaction, it would hurt her even more.

The choice of outfit also goes back to financial considerations. She's not going to buy a new domme outfit that she might only get to wear once. So either this is underwear she already owns, or new underwear that she could use again in a non-sexual context.

The shoes being described as 'professional', combined with the earlier statement implying she doesn't wear heels often is meant to suggest that these are shoes she already owned for work or formal occasions; and only wears them when she has to.

In the end, she succeeds - "She'd gotten the reaction she wanted... It had been so long since I'd looked at her like this"

When I submitted the story, I said to Teann I was worried American reader might be confused by my use of 'pants' in the British sense - i.e. 'panties', a word I do not like.

"OW! (did she just bite me?!)" - I think of the prose like we're hearing Mark's inner-monologue, narrating things as they happen (kinda like 'Scrubs'). And sometimes the 'real world' interrupts his train of thought.

The final title 'Perverted' is another pun. Sexually perverted (obv), but also misrepresented (tricked) - she let him think that she was finally going to let him cum, then locked him in a chastity cage instead.

The trick for deflating an erection was something I read about a long while ago. It kind of works, but not as effectively as depicted here.

I think Mark goes in to the session with a general awareness of BDSM from pornography, but likely never looked at anything involving chastity cages. He seems like the type that mostly watches girl on girl.

I wanted to end on the cliffhanger so that readers would come away feeling 'unresolved' like Mark. At the same time, I knew it was a risky move to leave reader frustrated. Truth be told, I felt like this story was the weakest of the series and was worried that people wouldn't come back for the later, better ones. So the positive response it got was reassuring and very much appreciated.