Testing the Queen's Pony Gear by Zeedrot

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You can view the story here on the plaza:

https://grometsplaza.net/world/ponygirl/storiessz/testing_the_queens_pony_gear.html
F/f; majick; fantasy; ponygirl; armbinder; harness; corset; collar; buttplug; training; electro; gag; climax; toys; cons; X

Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.

Thanks 

[Melissa M]

Wow, the sensory details are incredible: the tight armbinder, the blinders, the agonizing feet, the internal pressure from the intruders. I was completely immersed in Sylvae's intense experience. It really captured the feeling of being fully bound and challenged. Thank you for sharing.

[Revillen]

Loved this story. Thank you for sharing.

[Morkaii (Marcus)]

Really enjoyed this one, even though magic settings are usually not my jam. So kudos!

Would love a contuation if possible 🥰

[feline]

I am going to have another go at commenting as I read, so hopefully the comments will make sense.  First up, the title and story tags are drawing my eye, and giving me quite a lot of hope...  pony play can be fun, but magic...  now you really have my interest, since if this is set in a world with magic, suddenly you can do all sorts of things that otherwise don't make sense, or need far to much time trying to set up and explain.  Instead "it's magic", and on to the naughty fun!

Off to a good start, nice world building, and a lot of history between our two characters.  The history speaks to a lot of trust on Sylvae's part, which is going to be important if things are going in the direction I hope they are going   I also like the suggested dynamic of the tiny Dana ordering the much larger, stronger and more dangerous Sylvae around

Half way across the world...  not sure merely eager to help out really properly describes this!  It does beg the question of how helping out normally goes, since this level of eagerness almost suggests desperation, rather than simply helping out a friend while in the neighbourhood...

Watching the two of them talk, Dana rambling without actually offering up any relevant or useful details, and Sylvae calling her darling, it makes me think of a married couple who are quite in love with each other, rather than just friends.

The drawings showing the requested device, so clearly showing Sylvae in the restraints, play into this sense of a deeper connection between these two women.

EIGHT hours walking in a circle...  training enchantments...  it seems the queen really is serious about pony play, this is WELL beyond a "pony girl outfit", but it is also nice to know that I did get the right idea about the large circle in the middle of the room, it did suggest one of those horse walking in circles devices.  But this is only the base outfit?!  The scroll bar position makes me think we are not going to get through all of the extra bits, not in good detail, but time will tell.

Clinically professional about a naked Sylvae, makes sense in a professional setting, but still not really forming any good mental model of the sort of relationship these two have, since there are clear hints of kinky toys being tested in the past, and the eagerness and pet names suggest a very intimate relationship, but other things don't.

Ah...  wanting and praying that Dana would look at her with longing, well, that actually gives us firm, if very surprising information about their relationship state.

The nerves at having the blinkers put on are well done, and fit well with the very environmentally and threat aware woman we started the story watching, which Dana almost seems quite unaware of

The attunement time requirement seems random, but that's magic for you!  The do it yourself, and seal without coming off for a time enchantments fit with the plans so well, and make a lot of sense

The warm reaction to being called a good girl, just after the demeaning communication method is agreed upon, most sexy

Obvious logical point, one assumes the queen will be able to secure herself to the training rig on her own?  Also, editing point, missing closing speech marks here:

>> "Alright let's get you hooked up to the training rig and try a few circuits around the circle before applying the last couple adjustments. Sylvae wondered what adjustments would be necessary, but decided she would just have to wait to find out.

I think I have another editing point, since "tittering" seems the wrong word here:

>> After a few rotations Dana seemed satisfied, and she stopped the device. Sylvae came to a halting stop tittering in the boots slightly.

perhaps you were going for shuffling, or something like that?

OUCH!!!  All that pain, partly because you weren't given all the instructions!  Not fun!

Given Dana knows what the system is designed to do, how it is designed to reward the correct walking, she seems surprisingly unaware of the inevitable effect of all of this pleasure poured, forced even, into the pony!  Mixed into this is the effect of Dana getting all firm and commanding, an interesting and heady mix!

Good to see Dana finally putting the pieces together and understanding what is happening, and the effect of the orgasms on our "pony" here!

Come the end, really enjoyed this!  It feels sort of romantic, but also sad in the sense that Dana really does seem quite oblivious to the major feelings her "friend" has for her!  Even after various sexually themed tests and experiences!  Assuming there is a follow on part ever, I wonder if the mysterious patron will do anything to help nudge these two closer together.

From a logical point of view, I was left with the impression there were "loads" of extra bits that went with the outfit, but we didn't get loads of extra bits, just the expected bits.  Also no mention of how the queen would connect herself to the walker, but that bit is hardly required or important.

I did love the imagery and feelings that all of this evokes though

[Zeedrot]

Really enjoyed this one, even though magic settings are usually not my jam. So kudos!

Would love a contuation if possible 🥰

Happy you enjoyed it! You are one of my favorite fetish writers, so I'm glad I was able to give back with a story of my own that you enjoyed!

As to a continuation, I do plan to eventually write a second part to conclude this story. Sadly, other projects are ahead in my queue so probably not until well into next year.

[Zeedrot]

I am going to have another go at commenting as I read, so hopefully the comments will make sense...

Clinically professional about a naked Sylvae, makes sense in a professional setting, but still not really forming any good mental model of the sort of relationship these two have, since there are clear hints of kinky toys being tested in the past, and the eagerness and pet names suggest a very intimate relationship,...

The attunement time requirement seems random, but that's magic for you!...

I think I have another editing point, since "tittering" seems the wrong word here:

>> After a few rotations Dana seemed satisfied, and she stopped the device. Sylvae came to a halting stop tittering in the boots slightly...

Come the end, really enjoyed this!  It feels sort of romantic, but also sad in the sense that Dana really does seem quite oblivious to the major feelings her "friend" has for her!...

From a logical point of view, I was left with the impression there were "loads" of extra bits that went with the outfit, but we didn't get loads of extra bits, just the expected bits...

Really happy to read another of these comments from you!

First off, thanking for catching those editing errors. With tittering it was supposed to be teetering, but both are proper words so Word did not catch them and I glazed over them when editing because of the similar spellings. Funny enough I did this same mistake in a couple of other stories lol.

On to the story itself, yes there are actually extra bits of gear to test, but those are for a second day of testing (if I ever get around to writing the sequel). The first day was just to test the basics, and honestly since this was both of their first time with such gear the basics probably already felt like a lot to the two characters.

As to the attunement time, that was a nod to Dungeons and Dragons where magical items take a short rest, 1 hour, to attune to. As a forever Game Master (Mistress)/Dungeon Master (Mistress) I couldn't help putting in some nods to dnd. Besides Sylvae and Dana are loosely based on two non-player characters I created for the dnd campaign I run for my wife and a few of our friends lol.

And lastly to the dynamic between the two, and here come some spoilers so read on at your peril I suppose lol, they both harbor deeper feelings for one another they just don't notice each other's feelings and are too afraid to lose their friendship and perhaps even each other if they were to confess. Plus Dana is the archetypal absentminded genius inventor type character, so that doesn't help. I know that this sort dancing around one's romantic feelings between two friends is a bit cliche, but personally I really enjoy that sort of dynamic. And when you are queer, I think it's even more likely to be true since it is harder to know if someone might reciprocate your feelings. What can I say? I love this style of dynamic in sapphic romances especially.

And just wanted to say again thank you for sharing such a detailed run of your thoughts on one of my stories. I genuinely enjoy reading them! Have a wonderful day!

[Zeedrot]

@Melissa and @Revillen thank you for the kind words! Really appreciate them and glad you both enjoyed the story!

[feline]

Given how sort of romantic this was, really pleased that you have plans for more to come eventually.  Something to look forward to

Given what went into all of this, I really do wonder what more pieces of gear have been ordered.  I cannot help thinking about a cart for the pony to pull, but at the same time, this carries a lot of risk of begging for a passenger, which goes against what the Queen seems to be looking for here.  Another fun thought is some form of stable for the Queen pony girl to sleep in when she wants an over night stay.

There is definitely a sense of these two dancing around each other, especially with the drawings, and the overall sense of eagerness at work here