Help wanted for correcting a story

[Sirius]

Hello Mebers.

I have recently written my first story, but as I am completely new to writing and English is not my first language I would like help from someone with both so that I can submit a readable story.

[corabowen]

I think many sentences are grammatically fine but longer than they need to be. This slows pacing, especially in intense scenes. During editing, you should look for sentences with 2–3 commas, split them in half, and cut filler phrases ("she felt that," "she began to," "it seemed like").

Example:

She felt her perfectly manicured fingernails.

This doesn't add much unless it means something. Either connect it to emotion or remove it.

Shorter sentences = more control, more tension.

[umdrumjet]

Hi! You can definitely get help to make it more readable in English. A good approach is to share your draft here or via a private message, and someone with editing experience can help correct grammar, sentence structure, and word choice. Even small adjustments can make a big difference without changing your style or ideas.