Author Topic: Escape Room by Canadom  (Read 548 times)

Offline teanndaorsa

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Escape Room by Canadom
« on: November 24, 2024, 04:38:54 pm »
You can view the story here on the plaza:

https://www.boundstories.net/storiesek/escape_room.html
F/f+; bond; blindfold; cuffs; cell; puzzle; kidnap; mittens; gag; collar; electro; trick; reluct; X

Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.

Thanks  ;)

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Re: Escape Room by Canadom
« Reply #1 on: November 24, 2024, 06:49:56 pm »
The Story was quite fun, but didn't reach its full potential in my opinion.
The end felt like propped up, something more playful would have been a better fit, I think.

It felt like, fun - fun - fun - DOOM without a meaningful link between.
Such a structure can be quite effective. It seems you wanted to go for fun - fun - fun - WOW/Doom

For me it was rather fun - fun - fun - shroug/Doom.

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Re: Escape Room by Canadom
« Reply #2 on: November 25, 2024, 12:34:52 pm »
I have to agree with the comments above.  Not as good as your last one and not as sexy.  I have to wonder why they needed to be abducted from the street if they'd signed a contract.

Seeing this story, I realise I'm a bit surprised the escape room isn't a more common scenario for bondage stories.

It's prompted me to submit one I wrote a while back inspired by a drawing from Lerra22 at Deviant Art.   That ‘Escape Room Girl’ has clearly bitten off more than she can chew and from the way she is tightly restrained, hooded and gagged she has little hope of reaching the keys to her freedom which dangle teasingly from her nipple ring.

I'm looking forward to see how your story develops.

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Re: Escape Room by Canadom
« Reply #3 on: November 25, 2024, 02:51:09 pm »
Thank you for your feedback. :)

I agree that this isn't one of my best works. It's an older story from years ago when I was still learning the ropes—pun intended—of creating a good BDSM story.

That said, I will try to expand upon it in my usual fashion and see if there's continued interest when another part is posted.

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Re: Escape Room by Canadom
« Reply #4 on: November 25, 2024, 04:03:16 pm »

This setting really sparks my imagination.

What if the stipulation was that the heroïnes can either lose, or buy more time. They buy time by or shedding clothes or getting some accessories/impact play.
And I would have interaction with the mysterious Lady Dolores... Maybe in form of a lascivous voice teasing, or (later) as a physical presence in the room or not far away.
And I really wouldn't go for the doom-ending. It's just a crutch and a unneccessary one at that.

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Re: Escape Room by Canadom
« Reply #5 on: November 28, 2024, 07:14:45 am »
@T.H. Yes, that sounds like a fun idea! They start out mostly vanilla as they did, but decide not to give up, actively making the scene more kinky. The jailers become increasingly creative, many of the deals throwing the girls further back. After some hours, the jailers announce that they're closing up and have to let them go. But they offer an option to continue later: If they agree to keep wearing the chastity belts, they can come back in a week/some days to try a new room. On top of that they get another offer: To finance the kinky endeavor, they can start live-streaming the session. As advertisement, they can publish clips from the now finished session. Some kinky, consensual fun.

This could turn into a fun series about kinkfluencers that make a living live-streaming their escape room attempts while being belted the rest of the time. In between sessions they could post clips of their training for the next session. Perhaps they even have sponsoring from a chastity belt manufacturer.

This idea just exploded in my head and I had to share!

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Re: Escape Room by Canadom
« Reply #6 on: December 09, 2024, 07:39:08 pm »
@pfell

I think there is so much fun to be had with such a premisse.
Too bad I'm more a Ds-guy then a bondage guy, so I lack the technical knowledge to devise something good myself and I can't write in English which is a slight problem too, I guess. ;)

 

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