Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock

[teanndaorsa]

Returning to this tonight, enjoy!

[jackierabbit1]

Sally is scary evil, the kind of human weapon that you'd be wise to destroy right after using it.

Thanks for sharing this dark tale, Jackie.

[jakbird]

The inspiration for Psycho Sally came in part from an old movie (the 1956 original, not the awful remake) called "The Bad Seed", about a sweet little girl who happens to be a psychotic serial killer.  It made me wonder, what would she be like all grown up?  Assuming she finds gainful employment for her unique skillset, what then does she do on vacation?

So, off to the dark side...

Thanks for the comment!  Employing Sally would be similar to juggling hand grenades, perfectly safe unless a pin falls out.  Working for her, well, substitute live cobras for the hand grenades.

Sally has no redeeming qualities whatsoever.  Does that make her a fascinating character?  And what does it say about anyone who enjoys reading of her exploits?  Or the sicko who comes up with the story?

A bit of a disclaimer: I'm one of those nut cases who agrees with Ayn Rand's philosophy, especially about the dangers of the Good Samaritan who only wants to "help" others.  Sally loves to help too, as she so often repeats to her special friends.
  Jack Peacock

[Guardian]

Along the lines of jackierabbit1's post, I have a couple of lines you might consider adding to the Epilogue.

The force of the concussion deafened Gary when the hollow-point bullet left the .357 Magnum revolver's five-inch barrel.
Sally's head exploded.


Would it be better if Edith had come to see Sally off?

[feline]

Well, part 3 certainly answered a lot of the questions I had.  This is fascinating, and disturbing.  Certainly very well written, but the more I see of the events, and especially of Sally, the less I like it and her.  Then again, she is hardly being presented as someone with many, well, any, redeeming characteristics.

[jakbird]

I should point out anyone with the moral character needed to stand up to Sally would not be working for her in the first place....

Femdom type stories are not my forte, so even though I try to write outside my tiny box once in a while it's with the intention of Something Completely Different.  Psycho Sally is an attempt to delve into the psychopathic mentality of the individual who has no empathy, no shred of human decency, but one who is also skilled in the art of deception and misdirection.  Naturally she isn't perfect; the twin flaws of speaking in third person and of stressing words should be sufficient to warn anyone paying attention that Something Is Not Quite Right.  Fortunately (or unfortunately), the victims in the stories never seem to pick up on it.

Thanks to everyone for the comments.  If it's disturbing, then my work is done.
  Jack Peacock

[feline]

Here I would point out that Sally's speech screamed "something is not quite right" very loudly, right from the outset.  But our victim wasn't in any position to act on this warning, or get the hell out of the way, since it was already far to late for him when he first got the warning.

I am tempted to ask why the hell anyone else would ever work with her, but the answer "lots and lots of money" seems clear enough from the clues provided.

Definitely well written, interesting enough to make me want to know how it ended, even as it got more and more disturbing as it went along.