Very readable tour of the kink catalog. You really crammed a lot into this story. I couldn't tell what mood you were trying to set. It seemed at turns comic, manic, insane, creepy, and despairing. Dick and Jane were characters trapped in one of those 1970's era movies where the protagonist was tormented for 90 minutes before their last shred of hope was dashed and they died.
If in some future installment, Betty and Daisy are brutally murdered by Dick and/or Jane, that would be incredibly satisfying.
I'll be looking around for more of your work.
Eido