Author Topic: Discontinued Item by 64Fordman  (Read 4198 times)

Offline Gromet

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Discontinued Item by 64Fordman
« on: July 28, 2016, 02:59:02 pm »
You can view the story here on the plaza:

http://www.packagedstories.net/storiesad/discontinueditem.html
FF/f; MFF/f; bond; rope; gag; tape; suitcase; store; transport; delivery; discovery; hotel; cart; room; cartrunk;  rescue; babywear; pacifier; public; hum; cons; X

Please feel free to leave your kind comments & feedback here about this story.

Thanks   ;)

Offline superdude103194

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Re: Discontinued Item by 64Fordman
« Reply #1 on: July 29, 2016, 01:56:20 am »
To be honest, I'm not sure the writing style worked out here. The lack of block paragraphs combined with the jumping between characters left me quite confused.

Offline 64Fordman

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Re: Discontinued Item by 64Fordman
« Reply #2 on: July 29, 2016, 03:03:22 am »
Thank you for your feedback Superdude, I like to experiment with different styles. It’s helpful to hear when they don’t work.

 

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