Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock

[teanndaorsa]

You can view the story here on the plaza:

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sallys_subject.html
F/m; bond; cuffs; headcage; frame; whip; chain; chastity; electro; punish; conditioning; sold; reluct; nc; XX

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sallys_subject2.html
MF/mf; bond; prison; cuffs; chastity; collar; kidnap; nc; XX

Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.

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[jackierabbit1]

It's a dark tale to be honest, but something about the mystery of it appeals to me all the same. What's the "subject's" occupation, or his net worth, as in will anybody really be missing him if/when he disappears? If he was a defense contractor (and Sally in the employ of the opposition) I could see this taking quite the turn. If not and Sally is just a psychotic spider looking for a bug to play with (before eating it) it gets very dark. I also look forward to learning why Sally refers to herself in the third person, but my assumption is that there are at least two Sallys, and one of them is a bit evil.

Some of the most evil serial killers in history look frighteningly normal in pictures, so maybe this goes with Sally's manner of dress. I'm looking forward to where you take this, but as far as anonymity, paying cash and all that stuff, your cell phone and car know where you go, and when you go there, so if somebody really comes looking for him they will have a place to start. As far as no identifiable body to pronounce dead, without one I'll bet that could linger on for several years at least in some unsolved missing person's file someplace.

A final thought; does the subject have an ex-wife that was short changed in court, or perhaps wants a bit of revenge for some other reason?

Thank you for sharing, Jackie.   

[jakbird]

Thanks for taking the time to comment.  Responses are as rare as $1/gallon gas.

There is a movie from 1956, "The Bad Seed", which in part is the inspiration for Sally.  The cute, little 8 year old girl in pigtails and a pinafore dress, who just happens to be a psychotic serial killer.  What happened to her when she grew up?

The story is clear, Sally is on vacation, so no, there's no competitor involved.  Like the original "StoxBox" stories that introduced her, sometimes she takes time off from her busy schedule to recharge the batteries.  I like the analogy to a spider with the bug trapped in the web.  No ex-wife either, well, not in the context you imply....

As for the electronic tracking, that is being addressed in part 2.  I'll try not to get too technical, though that's my field (electronics engineering).  Suffice to say it's not an issue.

I tend to write stories with happy endings.  Too much Hollywood, I suppose.  Sally came about when I thought about trying something new, the not so very happy ending.

What makes a character memorable?  Is it some kind of quirk, like Holmes' Deerstalker hat, or Charlie Chan's pearls of Confucian wisdom?  Why does Sally talk so oddly?  Tune in to find out, same Bat-time, same Bat-channel....
  Jack Peacock

[bentbliss]

This is in interesting story that could have a couple more stories if you wish to explore Denny's plight in Sally's hands. Really I enjoyed the mental aspect of the story. Sally's third person made things a bit more chilling as you can feel she isn’t right. It leaves a psychologicl thriller story vibe if expanded. I tend to enjoy darker themed stories, but want good characters and enough setting and fetishes to help. This one contained that. I know everyone likes different things. This one sets up a number of scenarios that could lead to interesting follow ups, for me.

[jakbird]

As always, I appreciate taking the time to comment on the story.   Denny's fate will not be left hanging.  Naturally, Sally is there only to help.

There is a previous Sally story, "Reversal of Fortune", told in three parts, if you find the character interesting.  It illustrates Sally's caring and sympathetic nature, in a Kafkaesque sort of way.  Part 1 sets up the background to the surreal legal proceedings that follow in parts 2 and 3.

Superficially the tales of Psycho Sally could be placed in the femdom category, but that's largely irrelevant.  It's about the mental aspect, the dark side of the supposed "Good Samaritan".
  Jack Peacock

[thepinkbishop]

I agree. This story certainly drew the reader in. The conversations between the women build tension and Psycho Sally is very intriguing.  Her coolness is perhaps the best part.  His loss of control is well described. As far as I’m concerned, he’s made his choice - he has to face the consequences and, hands over eyes, I want to see what happens.

[jakbird]

In the spirit of Halloween, you might think of Sally as a mental vampire, sinking in psychological fangs to drain the life out of the victim's ego.  She is neither sadist nor serial killer, but something far, far worse, the predator that walks among us, unseen and unknown.

Thanks for taking the time to post a comment.  Opinions are always appreciated, good or bad.
  Jack Peacock

[feline]

I am left not quite knowing what to think about this story.  The two woman come across as evil, that is simple and straight forward, but the man, the "subject"...  he is so full of half truths, twisting what he says, trying to say what he thinks his mistress wants him to say.  Trying, it seems, to top from the bottom, while also trying to be the submissive with no responsibilities, no role here except to relax and enjoy himself.

The plans they have for him certainly don't fit with the level of sin he seems to have committed here, but at the same time, it is hard to view him as blameless and a well behave sub.

I am just left not knowing quite what to think, so something that made me think.

[jakbird]

Thanks for taking the time to comment!

All is not as it seems.  The entire story is in three parts, with the second in the queue.

Is Sally evil?  No question about it.  This event is a vacation of sorts, where she can indulge in her favorite pastime, at the "Subject's" expense.  Edith?  True, she has a cruel streak, and for some unknown reason a marked disdain for apparently weak men.  Is she evil on the same level as Psycho Sally?  That's a moral judgement left up to the reader.
  Jack Peacock

[teanndaorsa]

Part 2, as promised! Enjoy (more than Denny will)...

[jackierabbit1]

I find myself curious as to why Denny was chosen for this experiment, this experience at Sally's hand. Is she just honing her dark skills, practicing with a disposable subject before using such techniques on a more valuable victim; or is this just the way she entertains herself in her off time?

In any event you've drawn me in, made me curious as to Denny's ultimate fate here, thanks for sharing, Jackie.

[thepinkbishop]

Eek !

[jakbird]

Sally is on vacation.  This is merely a break from work.  The difference is, she doesn't have to satisfy a customer.  Think of a busman's holiday...

The character started out as a one off.  Everyone writes stories about (more or less) attractive characters.  Why not turn the paradigm on its head?  How depraved can a character become without driving away readers in revulsion?  I confess I like the happy ending, since I grew up on classic movies.  It seemed like a natural fit, a psycho and a most unpleasant resolution to the plot.  Did I mention Hitchcock's "Psycho" was one of those classic movies?  Thirty seconds on the screen redefined the simple act of taking a shower, and it was all in one's head.
  Jack Peacock

[jakbird]

Thanks for the comment, though I'm not sure if it's positive or negative.
  Jack Peacock

[feline]

After part 2 I am still mystified as to what is going on, still not at all sure what I think, but at the same time, I am fascinated by the questions all of this is raising.

The precautions taken when Denny visits, this is not normal behaviour.  Caution, keeping a secret, yep, that's understandable.  But this...  it doesn't tell us much at all, but it doesn't half hint at things!  Then we have the vague comments from Sally about what her investigations revealed.  Her guess comment at the end about his wife and his car...  we know he removed tracking from his car, but the comment and the reaction all suggest a great deal more happened.

There is nothing here to really suggest Sally is anything other than a monster in human form, but the little pieces and hints about Danny are starting to suggest, to hint, that he is far from the "innocent victim" that he seemed more like at the start.  But Sally didn't know all of this when he was selected, so we don't even have the justification of evil preying on known evil...

Perhaps more answers will appear with the next part, and perhaps not.