I liked this, nicely written, a solid stream of kinky and naughty moments, one experience after another
Personally I would like to feel a bit more involved with, and connected to the characters. The story works well as it is, but I want to feel a bit more connected with the feelings, thoughts and desires of the woman and her friends. You have explained her motivation, shown what drives her, but its more a stating of facts than showing us the feelings.
It's all a matter of personal preference of course, and what you have done here works well, and I do find it fun and sexy
Seeing the events not really go to plan, and her needing to be rescued by her, thankfully well briefed and prepared neighbour actually works well, it is good to be reminded that plans don't always work, and that a backup is both important and sometimes required. It also allows you to introduce a 3rd person into the events, and opens up more options for where this story is going.
