Plaza Forum
Halloween Specials => Halloween 20 => Topic started by: teanndaorsa on October 27, 2020, 10:59:16 pm
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You can view the story here on the plaza:
http://grometsplaza.net/special/halloween20/spirit_trap.html
FM/f; M/f+; bond; cuffs; corset; leash; public; dungeon; toys; electro; chain; ghosts; supernatural; cage; hood; cons; reluct; nc; XX
Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.
Thanks ;)
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The initial setup was good, with good storytelling and events nicely shown, but then it turned into some completely other story...
From then on it was just a stream of rushed narration, as if the author had planned a much longer story then run out of time to finish it.
The later parts were a little disappointing, sadly.
I would have enjoyed it better if it had simply ended after the 'break'.
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Thank you for the feedback. I am sorry it didn't end up as enjoyable as I hoped. This my first experiment into a Halloween with a supernatural element and one of two of my first stories posted and read by anyone other than my friend. She has never given me any feedback on dozens of stories I will take what I get here.
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I just read this from a few years ago, very hot and kinky, I loved both the devices and the deceit.
Thanks for sharing, Jackie.