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Title: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: 64Fordman on December 11, 2016, 12:35:57 am
You can view the story here on the plaza:

http://www.trashcanstories.net/storiesad/automart.html
MM/f; machine/f; cuffs; hogtie; messy; bagged; trash; dumpster; compacted; dumped; truck; landfill; rescue; nc; x

Please feel free to leave your kind comments & feedback here about this story.

Thanks
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: Trash girl on December 11, 2016, 01:54:23 am
Thanks for posting this story 64fordman it was a nice and good story
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: superdude103194 on December 11, 2016, 08:28:42 am
Ah, automated cleaning bots. One of my favorite concepts. Thanks for the story, 64Fordman! Her predicament was fun to read about.

Even if it was inspired by the New York Post.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: alsrx700 on December 11, 2016, 03:00:53 pm
Great story!  Thanks for sharing
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: 64Fordman on December 11, 2016, 07:36:48 pm
Thank you Trash girl, superdude103194 and alsrx700.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: MaxRoper on December 12, 2016, 05:20:23 pm
Excellent story! I like the short ones and this has everything with minimal words.
Well done!

Max
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: 64Fordman on December 12, 2016, 10:05:07 pm
Thanks Max,

I wanted to write a 1000 word story. Went a few over but I’m still satisfied with it. Glad you liked it.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: malus_infantia on December 21, 2016, 04:58:27 pm
This was a fun and thrilling tale with a happy (and pithy) ending. Well done, and thank you for posting, 64Fordman
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: 64Fordman on December 21, 2016, 06:10:39 pm
Thank you Malus, I’m glad you liked it. I hope you have more stories in the works.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: malus_infantia on December 21, 2016, 08:04:15 pm
I have some in the works.

I've been in a massive creative slump/gradually deepening hole of depression since getting my grad degree, so I need to work some of that out before I can really settle into writing. But thank you for the encouragement!
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: trash princess on January 26, 2017, 06:33:51 pm
A wonderful read. Thanks for sharing it with us! ^-^
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: 64Fordman on January 26, 2017, 10:15:31 pm
Thank you Femboy, I’m glad you liked it.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: TeaSer on January 26, 2017, 10:32:42 pm
I'll join the choir of applauses - this is an excellent story: Catches the reader, it's probable (even if still, I hope, a bit futuristic), no real harm done and the mess I like about trash-stories. 1000 words? That's pretty clever to do such a story in so few words.

TeaSer
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: 64Fordman on January 27, 2017, 02:57:16 am
Thank you TeaSer, it was an experiment to see what I could do with a thousand word limit. The story got a generous amount of feedback, and from the gracious comments was well received by readers. Including elements that visitors to the trash and machine sections have said they like to see in a story didn’t hurt either I’m sure.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: ElectroPainLover on February 11, 2017, 10:23:09 pm
I can't believe I forgot to post a reply to this Fordman. Really nice story. I enjoy 'machine's going awry' stories. I keep trying to think of some, but everything seems to be covered that I can come up with. I guess that's why I had to design Synthia instead of a failed 'receiving warehouse' or something of the sort.

Anyway, wonderful story with a lot of happenings in such a short format. Great Job!

Dana
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: 64Fordman on February 12, 2017, 04:21:12 am
Thanks Dana, I’m glad you enjoyed it, and I know what you mean. Machine stories are my favorite so you would think I’d have written more of them, but so many of the things I am interested in have been done so well by others it’s hard to come up with new ideas, or at least new ways of telling old ideas since there are no new ideas.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: ElectroPainLover on February 12, 2017, 03:30:48 pm
You're Welcome Fordman.

Yep...it's a mousetrap Fordman...very difficult to better upon the old 'spring-bar' style of the old ones.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: TrashyJadey on February 18, 2017, 10:19:35 am
Gotta say. I really enjoyed this. It shows that we can't have machines do everything. And now i'm wishing they did so I could sit on the floor of a shop and be "cleaned up". Obviously without the binds because I'd want to go after.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: 64Fordman on February 18, 2017, 04:11:10 pm
Thank you for the kind feedback Rosapetal, I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
Title: Re: Automart by 64Fordman
Post by: TrashyJadey on February 18, 2017, 04:18:28 pm
Heh