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Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.

Thanks  ;)

Interesting setup, am excited about which direction the story will take.

Agreed, an interesting situation, and I am rather curious to see where this is going, and what the plan is.  The fact that this starts with the statement its a long story is interesting, since it needs to do things, to have things happen, to make the chapters interesting, so most curious to see what sort of things are planned here.

Before starting part 2, I had been thinking about this a bit in the background, and a couple of things had really stood out to me from memory.  First the comment about our house owner having a business selling electronic sex toys, suggesting that such toys might become an interesting feature in the future.  But are any of them remote controlled over the internet?  I am sure we will find out :)

The second point that was running around in my head was how angry Paula had become when Heather just decided to go down to the cellar on her own, without talking to anyone.  It was striking how strong her emotional reaction seemed, was, without really knowing or understanding where that strength of emotion came from.

So I had been looking forward to reading more of this, and was happy that another part appeared so soon.  So, onto part two...

Um...  yep, starting with stunned silence, and some awe!  Reading part 2, one line REALLY stood out to me:

QuoteIt was obvious the group was thinking that over. Good, I wanted them to start thinking of Heather, not as someone to be protected, but as a threat to their lifestyle. It would take weeks of manipulation, but I thought I could get there. As a part of that process, I needed to dehumanize Heather in their eyes.

I had to stop reading at this point and just wonder and consider what is going on here, and how I felt about it.  It is a very powerful comment, very powerful and "dangerous" thing, possibly very dark and evil, but at the same time, this is a story, a fantasy, and the idea, but more than just the idea, the characters, their emotions, interactions and how they are going to change and develop with the story really fascinate me.  This is already feeling like a strong on character story that is really making me interested.

Looking back at how part 2 started, it is interesting how well our home owner picked up on Heather's level of kink and interest in being a prisoner, something that it seems everyone else really was quite oblivious to!  It is interesting that even with such a sexually open and experienced group, so apparently familiar and comfortable with each other, that they weren't more aware of how kinky Heather really was.

It was a massive "offer", "task", to convert one of the group into a prisoner, but on reflection, I don't think I really absorbed just how desperate the group was becoming to have secure and comfortable lodging and employment.  I think this is because for, well, all of part 1 the group were shown to be so relaxed, chilled out, and simply happy to be coasting through life without a care or a thought.  The only one who wasn't was Paula, but I wasn't really sure what drove her anger.

Now though, yes, he has worked to sow the seeds, to push the group in the direction he wants to take them, but already the group has completely split into "us" and "them", the jailers who are working hard to secure their home and housing, and food, and the captive who's main function is to threaten everything they have just received...  Really fascinating character development here, and I am wondering how much story you have here, and where you want to try and take this.

Feline,
In my intro I mentioned "The Stanford Prison Experiment" prominently.  You really need to understand this 1970s college psychology experiment to understand the inspiration for this story.
https://www.youtube.com/results?search_query=stanford+prison+experiment+ (https://www.youtube.com/results?search_query=stanford+prison+experiment+)

That said, and having written 25 chapters (to be released one per week), I must admit that the final direction didn't go quite as far down that rabbit hole as I was expecting, as you will see.  So you don't need to be quite as concerned about the quote you highlighted as our landlord can't bring himself to manipulate the group quite that extremely.
But they all do have a lot of fun and I think you'll enjoy the story.

Thanks, as always, for your deep and constructive comments.  I have really started to look forward to finding your posts.

I am not seeing any sign of this in the intro.  The intro at the start of part 1 is rather short, but tells us something important to know.  So if the intro is important to following the story properly, that's something to be aware of.

I do know something about this experiment, and knowing this is what inspired you, it actually makes a lot of sense!  It also makes me consider that I don't recall ever seeing any other erotic stories really exploring this idea, so its not a common concept, at least not where I look for stories.

Having been prompted to go back and look at part 1 again, I had a look to see how desperate for money they are, and the answer is really very desperate, but as I noted, they are coming across as so friendly, happy and relaxed, the underling desperation of their situation really doesn't come through.  But knowing that in the background they really DO need the income they are getting, and thus the level of consequences for all of them, should their "selfish and horny" prisoner break the rules, it helps a lot to explain how quickly the situation, and perception, of their prisoner changes.

Certainly looking forward to seeing how you fill and explore for 25 chapters!  That is a lot of time with one woman locked in a cell, all giddy for the potential for interesting character growth here :)

Feline,
You know, you're right.  I remember now that I removed that part of the into right before I sent the story in.  I think I felt at the time that I really had not explored the concepts from that experiment adequately by the end of the story and decided to pull  the reference.  Perhaps some day I'll try again to explore the concepts.

But I'm glad you are familiar with the experiment.  I think it says a lot about human nature and also the dangers of hiring, training and supervising law enforcement.  Not to mention explaining some Dom's that get run out of local BDSM clubs for pushing subs beyond agreed limits - and the subs that let them while they are in a scene.

Chapter 3 up today, enjoy!

I would not call part 3 as sexy, to my way of thinking, as the first 2 parts, but it is quite fascinating!

Still working on working out what is making the 5 "jailers" tick in all of this.  First we have Maggie, being very sexually aggressive, and also down right cruel with removing the vibrator, after applying it in a way that she surely knew was not going to lead to an orgasm for their prisoner.  Then the taunting, it felt much more like putting on a show, making a statement and punishing their prisoner than it did anything about sex for the sake of pleasure.

It feels like a great deal of anger being directed at Heather, their prisoner.  We do get some insight into this as the part goes on, her friend having "deserted" her for this fantasy life instead.  Still, the level of anger seems excessive, not that our prisoner seems to mind in the least.  It almost seems that the harsher Heather is treated, the more she likes it.

Then after the act, we have Maggie starting to come down from her high, for the lack of a better description, and feeling regret for how she treated her friend, seeing Heather as her friend rather than a prisoner.  Interesting that, even in such a sexually open group, she didn't seem to have much understanding of how kinky her friend really was.  Also some quick work keeping her focussed on viewing the prisoner as a prisoner, rather than a friend!

Then Paula finally gets the sex she was looking for.  Again a surprise, but this time how vigorous she was, since she seems to have had so much distrust, if not outright anger, towards our house owner since the beginning.  It is also quite a surprise that she has a history of being dominant, given how she comes across as deeply angry at the idea of a woman wanting to be, and enjoying being locked up.  But perhaps now we are going to start seeing and understanding more of her perspective on all of this.

One interesting takeaway though is that the groups financial position was even more desperate than I realised, which just adds weight to his offer, but also to her fears that he is taking advantage.  So seeing that from his perspective the costs are actually quite minor is interesting, and will perhaps reduce some of her hostility towards him, assuming she decides to believe what he is telling her.

Checking in with the prisoner, and showing her some kindness, should go a good way towards easing some of her understandable concerns.

Part 4 was a lot of fun to read, and left me with some interesting thoughts to consider as well :)

It is good to learn a bit more about our central man, and his history, slowly fleshing out the character as a person, to learn something about what he wants from all of this, and what is driving him.  Also we are slowly learning more about the other people here as well.  Good to see some well rounded characters growing as we learn more about them, and see more of them and their world.

One interesting take away is that he is clearly relatively well off, which makes it even clearer why and how he is happy to accept the rather small running costs of this "prison" and the staff, in order to live the fantasy, to indulge his desires and see where this gets him.  After all, how come he is willing to spend so much on all of this, and what is he getting out of it, is a central question to all of this.

Taking Paula along for the checkin, and confirming that both Paula and Heather knew and understood what this meant, was interesting.  We are clearly reaching the point where Paula really is on his side, and is accepting, and getting happy, that keeping and treating Heather as a prisoner, as someone less than the others, is acceptable and appropriate.  Looks like Paula is shifting from fighting all of this to supporting, encouraging and helping this along.

Seeing the blowjob and then Paula spitting it out onto Heathers face was a real eye opening moment, since it marks such a clear and obvious change in her treatment, and acceptance, of what Heather really wants and needs while being a prisoner.  And that is after the muscle pinching pain, but there is a difference between pain and that sort of sexual humiliation and taunting!

Ordering her not to communicate at all, and with the possible punishment of weeks or even months of denial!  That seems almost to harsh a threat, especially for such an odd order, so I am with Paula in wondering what the point of all of that was, but the explanation, but even more, watching the others interact with their silent and refusing to recognise them prisoner really brought home the effectiveness of this order, and the point it was making to everyone.

Watching how they got increasingly frustrated with her, and the men especially were treating her much more like a sexy object than an equal, really showed the effectiveness of this rather strange yet simple order.  A clever idea, and it is working well!

Even her friend Maggie seems to be coming around, but obviously that is going to take longer to really happen.

Then we have the shop in the village, so many fun BDSM toys available and in stock, but much more than that, leather and metal workers are available?!  Is this just general world building, or is this a hint that such skills will be useful in the future, to move things forward a bit?

Finally I am left wondering how you have worked out where to take and end this, since we have now been told clearly that Heather wants and desires a 24/7 experience, and this is something that most people simply aren't interested in, understand, let alone able to provide.  So is he going to just let her go at the end?  Or is some other solution possible down the line?  Time will tell, and it will be interesting to see :)

As it develops, this social experiment gets more interesting.

feline, I just love reading your analysis.  You see things in my stories that I didn't see when I wrote them :-).

I think you give me more credit than I deserve for planning out the story line.  I rarely know where a story is going when I start it.  I know my motivation for this one - the Stanford Prison Experiments.  But I had no clue how the characters or plot would develop.  As I've said before, my stories write themselves, they just go where they are going to go.
But I do feel these characters are becoming more real, more fleshed out, even to me.
And I have to constantly go back and re-read what I wrote to try and minimize contradicting myself.

That said, I do know how it will end.  I have all but about the last 4 stories 'in the can' and to Teann and I've written those last 4 in my head.  Just got to get them into the keyboard.

Lars - thanks for your kind words as well.

Another good chapter. I Check in every day to see if there's a new one. I like the setup where her friends see her more and more as an object instead of one of the group. Looking forward to the next release!

I've been thoroughly enjoying this story so far, and was happy to read you've got 25 chapters of it (but also don't want to wait!). 

You've done a good job with building up how the group is ok with Heather's transformation, the use of Stanford Prison Experiment psychology is nice, because I know there's realism in their behavior.  To fully round out the characters it would be nice to see some similar evolution in Heather- at the moment she's almost a BDSM Mary Sue, up for pretty extreme treatment at the drop of a hat for prolonged periods.  Which is fun and makes for a great story, but doesn't quite match with the super realistic portrayal of psychology you have going for the rest of her group. 

That's a pretty nitpicky bit though, the story is great, and plot/character wise way beyond most bdsm stories, including anything I could write.

There's a ton of fun directions you could take this one from here, I can think of some scenarios that would appeal to me but I trust whatever you've planned and written is going to be great, based on what you've published so far.  Thank you for sharing!

Kinkykusco,
Thanks for the kind words and the suggestions.  I guess, as the author, I kind of viewed Heather as an Object too.  I don't think I explored her motivations or thoughts much at all.  You're right, I probably could have done more of that.

Enjoying part 5, but having to re-read it since I didn't work out my comments as I read it, and I got confused.

Going back over it, I now know why.  After being chained up and before being led upstairs, there was no mention of a blindfold, which makes sense, since she has to navigate the stairs in chains.  When she gets upstairs there is a comment about her working out where she is going since she remembers the layout of the house, which is odd, since she can clearly see where she is going.

Once secured to the post, Heather takes the time to look into her eyes, making sure that she is still OK with what is happening, and how she is being treated, harshly, as an object and about to be used as a general purpose sex toy by the rest of the group, but rather in keeping with her wishes, desires and fantasises, plus her clearly deeply submissive nature.

So clearly no blindfold here, but then, as we are getting ready to eat, she is once more blindfolded.

Happy to accept that I am nit picking here, but keeping consistency of these sorts of points is important for the story to flow, and the reader to follow the flow of events.  I assume you are suggesting a blindfold was applied at the top of the stairs, once the most dangerous part was done, and then lifted for the check in, only later to be replaced by the hood.

Focussing back on the events and the characters, the rest of the group is generally accepting and getting used to her new role as prisoner and lesser, even her friend is slowly coming round, the "simple" lack of communication is doing a great deal to drive that gap, that growing gulf, between the two sides.  More than that though, it is interesting to see how Heather has shifted from such a protective "keep your hands off of her" tiger to the chief jailer and torturer, since the enema was simply harsh and painful, and could have been done more gently, but Heather clearly had no interest in doing so.

Then we have the interesting dynamic that showing Heather as well groomed, with makeup, and the main sex object and focus of the group is going to fuel jealousy and anger in the other women, as Heather is probably seen as "cheating" to get this extra attention from the men.  At the same time, Carl is going to be struggling with seen as going soft on Heather, and given how going soft on her is a direct threat to their very cushy situation, he is then going to need to become stricter to avoid being seen as a weak link himself.

Then, during the meal, the blindfold becomes even more important, since she has no warning about the incoming clothes pegs.  But also, it gets everyone naturally and casually involved with her punishment.  No one is "forced" to partake, but everyone does, yet again reinforcing that punishing the prisoner is a natural part of the order of things, and something that everyone just does as a natural and normal part of their day.

And again, as the hood comes out, the blindfold has mysteriously disappeared.

The reaction to the hood going on is well done and powerful.  Having your head suddenly so enclosed, so covered, so many senses effected, is powerful, more powerful than you might expect, so good to see this captured and reflected here!

The panic at the blindfolded hood is good, it feels genuine, and keeps our prisoner feeling like an actual person, not just an empty shell.  But also, it shows and reinforces for everyone listening that everything for Heather is now all about her next orgasm, that she is "nothing" more than a sex object, someone who is all about her own personal pleasure, quite possibly at the entire groups expense!

Seeing Paula step up and reassure Carl, showing how "acceptable" it is to treat their prisoner like this is appealing, and continues to show the massive shift in perspective and approach Paula has taken since the start of this.

The silent communication between Paula and the house owner, the sense of two people who understand BDSM leading and educating the others is interesting and fun.

I wonder if the rule about not talking is going to change later, it seems odd to keep her silent for ever, missing out on her begging for orgasms will be a shame, since it reinforces the whole point that its all about sex and orgasms for Heather, while everyone else is more aware of the bigger picture, and what she is "buying" for all of them with her imprisonment.

feline,
You are SO right about the blindfold.  And the funny thing is - I caught it myself last week.  I was re-reading several chapters to make sure of my continuity on the chapters I'm writing now (Chapter 26) and I noticed the same thing - it's there, it's off, it's there, it's off.
I fixed my copy.
But one thing that Teann, the owner of this site, requests is that we authors not constantly send her revisions of stories we have already submitted.

The other thing I'm constantly having to watch for is character confusion - I'm always writing Heather when I mean Maggie.  I seem to confuse those two names more than any other.  I think I've caught myself most times I've done that - but I note you may have the same problem :-).
I'm not nit-picking but reread your 6th paragraph, second sentence above.

But seriously, I do appreciate your well thought out comments and suggestions, even the nit picking.  Keep reading!

Oh I definitely get characters names confused, and without a handy cheat sheet on hand here, for who is who, I often just think of them more by their role / nature, than their name.

As for editing it, if this is as good as it looks to be, its something I am going to be re-reading, so I am doing some clean up editing of my own, for a saved out to re-read copy, where I also fixed the blindfold.

Having said that, turning to chapter 6, eager to see where we are going...

So, our prisoner is all wet and eager, no shock there!  In a sense she is living the dream, it just needs more orgasms to really come alive!

I had to go back and check, but yes, it is her friend, her closest companion and one of the women who have tried to stand up the hardest for our prisoner who has started things off, making use of her mouth and getting two men to start playing with her!  That is both a delight, and a fascinating change of perspective in only a few days on Maggie's behalf.  Then again, she was also the only one who seemed aware that our prisoner had a thing for the cell, so perhaps it is easier for her to make the mental shift to this point of view.

Well... there we go!  She stops licking, and her best friend is the one ordering the punishment to get her back to licking and providing pleasure to others!

And then the humour from Mal, laughing that soon our prisoner won't be tight at all...  again, clear signs of a shift in their thinking and perspective, and looking at her much more as an object than a person.

*nods* proper consideration for the others, and not spoiling their fun by letting the prisoner orgasm to soon.  Also learning and remembering to warn the woman on her mouth before giving her her first taste of anal sex!

OOOOH!  Everyone is joining in on the fun of the prisoner being taken in the arse for the first time!  No sense of shame, as expected, but more interestingly, so far no sense or any hints of sympathy, concern or empathy either!  Then again, they are high on good food, some alcohol, and plenty of sex, so have other priorities.

I wonder how aware, how much Carl is remembering that our prisoner needs g-spot stimulation to orgasm when he oh so casually suggests no one bothers to fuck her pussy...  is it just a selfish focus on the mans pleasure, or a bit of wicked teasing of the prisoner as well?

The move to Maggie biting Paula's ass though, it is a reminder that they have had the time to learn each others kinks and preferences over time, and also shows a clear willingness to focus, at least on Maggie's part, to give the others what they want and need.  So I do wonder how much she is trying to give her friend the BDSM experience she wants, and how much she is simply accepting the change of status and world view that is being encouraged here.

Interesting insight into what Mal wants and needs from sex, and the casual cruelty along with the clear excitement and massive high of all of this, it seems he is someone really embracing having a captive slut to use and abuse!  The group dynamics really are starting to shift heavily here!

Tying our prisoners orgasm to her giving one to Paula is appropriate, but what almost interests me more is the sense of a growing relationship between Paula and our house owner.  She doesn't care who he fucks, but she does want company and cuddles with and from him.  Perhaps another small reminder that in her own way she is also an outsider in this group, and is looking for something slightly different.  At the same time, having the two aware and experienced BDSM practitioners working smoothly together and on the same page is going to be very important to keep all of this tickling along well.

Now THAT is interesting, Maggie's comment that only now does the slut talk...  really reinforcing the point that from Heather's point of view, its all and only about her own pleasure and orgasms, and the rest of the group just don't matter, and their priorities aren't her priorities.

Desert though, I don't recall plans for desert.  Also good to see Paula looking out for our prisoner and making sure she gets more than one orgasm.  We do need to keep her happy, in her own kinky way after all.

There is an interesting, almost subtle fun to the food play, when the other women are smearing chocolate and cream before making the prisoner lick it off of them, this is virtually the first, and only treat food she has had since locking herself in the cell without discussing or planning things with anyone else.  So another point linking pleasing her captors with her own pleasure, as if that needed to be reinforced.

Blindfold time again, Paula showing Heather the giant strap on, but the blindfold has not been removed.  Deciding it is removed when the ankle chain is released.

OK...  yet, going for WOW, that is WELL done!  Just seen the red, the small tear, Heather wanting, needing to go "home", but not wanting to be released.  The changes going through the group, the different reactions, the concern, then the...  well, acceptance I suppose.  If the after care wasn't such a priority then this would be going to a bad place, but she is still being looked after, cared for and treated well, for all that her home is now the prison cell.

The next morning, that is a shock...  Curled up as if cold, dead to the world, yet still found the energy somewhere during the night to so very firmly reject the "luxury" of the sleeping bag blanket!!!

Then the jump forward in time, but we need the jumps to move events forward at a reasonable pace.  With nothing happening most of the time, why would the prisoner not just sleep a lot?  The very casual and accepting way everyone is now using her for sex though, while being careful that only they get pleasure, the shift is clear and well accepted by all now.  So now I have to wait again to find out what the next step in all of this is going to be.

I do hope you have given some sensible thought to where all this is going to end, our prisoner isn't going to be happy, or particularly functional for a while, just released back into the world as a free woman, especially not with this group.  They have all become far to used to these new roles and relationships...

Release Heather?  I would never be so cruel. ;)

Having read part 7, I REALLY enjoyed it, since I find the character development, and what is happening here, really interesting and fun, but I am not sure how sexy I would call this part.  Then again, it is doing something more important than "just" being sexy, it is building the story, the situation and the characters, moving us forward, and preparing for something new.

What is really striking is how busy everyone else is becoming, and the point that you can only laze around and do nothing for so long before it becomes just far to boring is interesting, and resonates well with me.  It also makes the contrast with our prisoner in the basement all the more stark.  The image of Carl becoming the stereotypical IT nerd buried in his laptop all of the time makes me giggle, especially since there is a slut ready and waiting for use in the basement cell *smirk*

Seeing the group finally reach out to the local community in a more useful, constructive and sensible manor also works well.  Playing to your strengths is a lot more sensible than wanting some piecemeal work while passing through, or trying to "sell" without selling drugs.

Again though the ongoing contrast, hot showers for most of them, but still only cold water in the basement cell.

It wouldn't really be a surprise if Tim is starting to turn into a sadist.  Consider that you have been busy trying, and mostly succeeding, in separating the group into two quite different sides, the jailers and the prisoner, while also clearly dehumanising the prisoner, and encouraging and rewarding her punishment.  Given all of this, having at least one of the jailers start to simply enjoy hurting the prisoner doesn't seem that surprising, but it is definitely something that needs to be monitored, lest it cause problems and bring an early end to everything.

OK, its a Gor reference, including an odd name that doesn't mean anything to me.  I do remember reading the first Gor book many years ago, but I don't think I ever really got any further than that, so I do find the fact that Gor seems to be a cult classic for its slave rules for women amusing, since I don't really remember much about that from the first book.  Not that this much matters, but it does, as noted, speak to Paula having a deeper history in BDSM than explained so far.

Yep, Tim is showing considerable, and perhaps unwise, interest in punishments.  At least this is being picked up.

At the same time, clearly Maggie is still not expected to be a fan of keeping her friend as a prisoner, which is reasonable, since she really doesn't seem to understand at all.  Which is one of the elements that helps to keep the characters fun and interesting!

The conversation with Maggie, about the submissive needing to be punished, needing to feel that someone cares enough to monitor and correct her behaviour is interesting.  You get the sense that Maggie is trying to understand, but also that she simply doesn't get this at all.  Then again, why would she, why should she?  She has no reference points and no experience here.

The idea that you need to treat the prisoner, still nearly never referred to by name, as if she was Dr. Hannibal Lecter makes me giggle.

Maggie is still taking the view that he is taking advantage of, and using, Heather, which is still a fair and reasonable perspective by many standards.  It is good to see this, it stops all of the characters blending into one, and it makes sure that we have the interesting experience of seeing someone who is basically completely vanilla getting something of a forced education in all of this.

The conversation in the cellar, apart from the clear and growing frustration on Maggie's part, as clearly her friend is not responding how a "normal woman" should ever respond, the bit that really stands out is Heather's comment that this was never a game to her.  Again we are reminded that she has been looking, for a while now, for a full on 24/7 experience, which is something most people simply cannot provide or offer her.

Keeping your mouth shut when the mad Maggie returns from the cellar, GOOD call!  You do NOT want to be the lightning rod for her anger!

Another "small" bit, turning down Reese offering to help with your raging erection, for all that you have joined this free love group quite often, and are so interested in having a helpless captive, you really do come across as someone looking for a 1 on 1 sexual relationship, which makes the idea of having a sex slave as a prisoner all the more amusing, since this is in addition to your 1 on 1 relationship.

You may not be the enemy in Maggie's eyes, but you come DAM close, since you are the root of this evil, you introduced it, and brought Heather's needs fully into the light...

Tied to the bars, and Maggie is still so angry.  Reese saying she would like to sexually torment and watch Heather really isn't helping, but at the same time, from such a sexual group, what else do you expect?  At least it wasn't one of the men offering, since that would really have set Maggie off.

We end without an update on Maggie's anger, but it is interesting, how the different people are feeling here.  Our man is caught worked up and desperate, Reese is willing to help with sex and teasing, while Maggie and Paula are much more preoccupied.  It is good to learn more about Paula and her history, but also, I am now left waiting to see what is going on with Maggie, and how she is going to try to reconcile what is happening in the basement with her clear views on the fact that her friend is being "taken advantage of", and that this is not what women should want, or how women should be treated...

It's incredibly valuable in my development as a writer, to see how you view the story, the characters and the various interactions.  It's even more interesting because I already know where the story is going, having most of it "in the can."
I just wish more readers would take the time to give their thoughts and input.

It is constant issue, that authors are crying out for feedback and thoughts on their writing.  But, at the same time, a lot of authors never make any effort to then engage when people do try and comment on their stories.

It obviously takes a chunk of time and mental effort to comment at great length, not comparable to writing in the first place, but not nothing either.  So when you do have a lot to say, and the author shows no interest, you don't tend to bother again.

Plus, I only tend to comment if I have something positive and constructive to say.  Simply being negative about writing is easy, but hardly helpful or encouraging.

I just read this part when it first came out, and while I did enjoy it, I found myself not sure about our captive, she seems so lacking in details, just not fleshed out, which stands out compared to some of the other characters who we are really starting to learn more about, and know more about.

So having another look, to try and pin down some of these thoughts and perspectives while deciding what I think about events.

OK, and yes, I remember being really "confused" by how part 8 starts.  Why do we start with Paula being asked if she still considers herself to be a switch, it seems like an important question, a question that should thus have baring on what is about to happen, but it never seems to actually matter at all.  Of is this part of some general and ongoing conversation where he is working out where his relationship with her is going?  Still, after the chapter break, you start the new chapter by focusing on something, and this comes across as something to focus on, but then we don't care.

OK, I had to go back and double check, but we do have Heather, our prisoners best friend, taking obvious and sadistic glee in teasing, tormenting, basically torturing her with the vibrator and by the looks of it, plenty of planned orgasm denial.  This seems a big and significant shift in her perspective and behaviour, but perhaps its just the way her anger at her friend is playing out.  She did decide to put her into this difficult position and leave her there after all, so that could fit.

Realistically no one else gets, or expects, our prisoner to be SO desperate to be kept as and remain as a prisoner...  then again, thinking back on it, was anyone else present for the conversation when she explained that she has long wanted a real, 24/7 slave experience, and that this really is her dream come true?  Most people wouldn't really believe a comment like that, but all of the evidence points towards this really being who and what she is.

So the test of having her refuse to orgasm if she wants to be kept a prisoner, after all of the weeks of basically begging for and clearly being desperate for an orgasm is one hell of a way of showing and proving this point to the rest of the group.

Perhaps Maggie has always had a hidden sadistic side to her, but this change in character seems extreme.  It looks like she has finally come round to accepting that her best friend really does want and need this treatment though, and that she is no longer going to fight to save her friend from herself.  Still, some understanding of her thoughts here would be nice.

Its an interesting mixture, the instructions for taking the prisoner out to get some sun.  Looking after her emotional state by making sure she is in enough restraints to be reassured that she is not being released from her captivity, and looking out for sun exposure, while also reminding people to make use of her as a human sex toy.

Getting back from his errands, I was caught up on the whole cum dripping from the captives arse, since I clearly remember the comment that condoms needed to be worn before anal sex during the orgy, but on reflection, given she is a human sex toy, and no one was moving between her different holes, this is safe enough, and normal enough.  Still, it gave me pause to wonder about it.

So the growing relationship between Heath and Paula gets addressed, and he is quite willing to give up a sex toy for his woman - that is something I very much approve of.  It does beg the question of if Paula is still having sex with the others when the mood takes her, but it doesn't really matter, so long as they are honest and open with each other, that is what matters.

Its the description of her being "their slut" that makes me smile though, both the possessive and casual nature of the comment :)

OK, so possible translator, but also just a possible new character to get involved in things.  The mayors daughter is clearly rather open minded, but also has commitments.  Still, simply asking her to work as a translator, and nothing else, is reasonable enough, and there is clearly a good need for this skill.

I am tempted to wonder about the value of all of the tools that have just been purchased for the building, but given his apparent wealth, and the fact that this is becoming a long term base and project, its reasonable and clearly required.  I am more interested in and curious about the sex toys his company makes, and the fun to be had with those!

Nice to see that our prisoner can and will be rewarded with orgasms occasionally.  I mean, some rewards and encouragements are rather important after all.

She is still quite the black box, we have some understanding of what drives her, but she feels more like an object the story is built around at times, rather than an actual part of the story.  Still, I am very much enjoying the journey, and am curious to see where we are going here.

feline,
As soon as I looked at the story online, I realized I had cut chapter 7 and 8 at the wrong place.  That sentence about Paula switching belonged on the end of Chapter 7.  But then I also needed more of a transition sentence to start Chapter 8.  My bad - I've fixed it in my copy.

I see Maggie and shifting her perspective from one of anger at Heather to learning to support what Heather really wants - captivity and sexual torment.

All I will say about the "cum dripping from her ass" is, note the involvement of Tim.  You are picking up on some foreshadowing - which gives me pleasure that you noticed.

Lucija will become a major character - and you'll get your wish about the companies sex toys.

Yes, not fleshing out Heather's personality and character more is a conscious choice.  I may fill her out a bit more in the conclusion of the story, I'm writing that now.  But for now in the story she is largely an object.

Another fine analysis feline.  And I DO appreciate the effort you put in!

captive - chapter 9

OK, going to start with a slight tangent, but you really do need to try and pay more attention to your speech marks, at both the start and the end of people talking.  When they are missing it makes it harder to follow what you are reading, since you are missing important 'context'.  I can still work it out, but this chapter seemed to have more of this problem than normal, or I just noticed it more.

Now, back to the story and the characters.

OK, I have to start with the first line.  Why would Maggie not still consider our prisoner to be her friend?  She is slowly coming around to seeing and accepting that her friend has needs, definitely needs since this is beyond simple desires, that she didn't really know about, and certainly doesn't properly understand or accept, but she can still be your friend.  It's just going to require some reworking of how the friendship and relationship works is all.  Someone needs to remember this is a living, breathing human being with needs and desires.

The toy selection that gets put on display is indeed impressive, but its the comment, perhaps the leading hint about the electronic toys, and the fact that they actually need training to use well that is really interesting!  Not sure what that is supposed to be hinting at, or referring to, but it really does suggest some serious fun could be coming down the line, since that suggests something rather more interesting than just a remote controlled vibrator.

The risk of a boyfriend being replaced by a vibrator half amuses and half upsets me.  Amusing since it is nice to see the women finally getting the attention they need, and upsetting since it speaks to far to many men who don't set out to properly identify or satisfy their women's needs and desires.  Just because its common doesn't mean I have to approve or like it.

I am with Paula, not seeing a lot of current interest in experimenting with the bondage toys, but with the toys out and available, who knows?  Curiosity can be quite the driver.

Nice to see that romance isn't dead between Paula and our man *smirk*  The cock ring is clearly working well though, good to see!

The "show" of our prisoner being punished, apparently Tim doesn't understand sarcasm.  Or he is so busy getting sex elsewhere that he doesn't care for Paula having a low opinion of him?  Given how he seems to be so caught up with the harsh punishment, perhaps just didn't notice, since all his blood was in the little brain.

The whole talk with Maggie about how to treat a submissive, it is just a big reminder that simply hoping this group can become full time keepers and dominants for their submissive prisoner isn't going to just work without quite a lot of training, support and guidance.  Most of them simply have no idea what to do, what is required of them, or what is and isn't a good idea in all of this.  One of those "subtle" but actually massive problems that needs to be addressed before everything just blows up.

Lucija and taking up the job, yep, wise to make sure her father, the mayor, is in the loop in some suitable manor, before the locals all turn against you and the group, and things go bang, in a bad way, in a whole different way!  It will be interesting to see what happens here.  As it stands it reads and feels like this won't move forward, but the comments on the forum tell us something is going to work out here, since she is still going to be part of the story.  So I shall wait and see on that front.

Offering up the vibrator, I was also expecting Maggie to take her friends side, and try to short circuit the requirements to earn the orgasm with the vibrator, so that was actually a rather surprising result.  It is the "right" result in the sense of supporting our prisoner in her needs and desires, but it still goes against the grain of Maggie's instincts.

It is amusing that everyone has come around to calling the cellar her home :)

OK, seeing Maggie articulate so clearly what our prisoner wants and needs, it just brings very clearly into focus the fact that having the story end with everyone just going their separate ways, and setting their prisoner free, saying "game over, have a nice rest of your life" would be a very weak and unfulfilling ending.  Something has been set in motion here, and there are growing longer term responsibilities that are building up here!  So don't just give us a pointless ending, make the journey and experience actually worth while!

Getting Maggie involved, as a tough negotiator, for ideas for punishments for points is interesting, but it also helps to push her understanding and acceptance of what her friend really wants and needs in all of this, since it isn't what she expects.

The ending is fun, I do enjoy Reece's reactions to things :)

Guilty as charged, feline, on the quote marks.
And sadly, Microsoft Word, which does such a good job of catching most of my errors and typos, doesn't help me notice when I've missed quote marks.
I'll try to do better - but most of the chapters are already submitted and Teann doesn't like constant resubmissions after she's prepped stories for the web site (which I completely understand!)
So you may catch some more of these but I hope not many.

And we have reached part 10!

So, Lucija did call back, but still clearly thinks the whole thing is pointless.  Definitely trying to strike out on her own, away from her parents.  That is fine, but it isn't going to work well while still living in the village your father is the mayor of!

Well, I would say that meeting is not off to a good start, and that is before the mother wants to disappear, and the daughter and her father end up in a blazing row, completely ignoring him, and his attempt to actually have a conversation here.  Lesser men would just give up on the whole thing as a lost cause at this point and look for a plan B.

*smirk* win one by getting the headstrong daughter to actually shut up and listen.  Being the possible boss is a different position of power, and just shouting at your boss really isn't the solution to work problems.  Looks like she has learned something along the line at least *smirk*

An interesting reason for needing to hire her, and it does suggest some significant long term plans for the Chateau.  Then again, if he can get an open minded community it will be better for his business going forward, things like that really do matter longer term.  Good benefits for his employees is also good.

*smirk* oh dear, power plays by getting up and leaving.  Then again, the point does need to be made, if she is translating this is actually what she needs to do, rather than having side conversations and arguments with her father.  If you cannot show the require strength, this is never going to work.

Yep, translation needs to happen, rather than just being angry at an understandably protective father figure, and he actually does have good answers and points here, if they ever do get translated and passed on *rolls eyes*

LOL, yep, definitely complaining that the BDSM kit is the basic one, rather than the fact that it is a kinky item!

Yep, business as normal, children cannot see their parents as sexual beings.

Perhaps her mother both likes that you have given her daughter a job, and that the toys are good :)

Interesting, if not entirely surprising, that the people are starting to pair up.  Having the longer term stability is changing the dynamics, even thought they are clearly not giving up on the freestyle sexual lifestyle most of them have long enjoyed.

*sigh* I am getting a strong flashback to a 1960's style robot going "Danger Will Robinson, Danger!"  I wonder why...  oh yes, since Tim's general attitude and approach is starting to scream arsehole, and while arsehole may work very well for objectifying and using a captive slut in the basement, it really doesn't speak well to keeping her safe, looking after her physical and mental health, and the underlying respect that should still be present, in my personal opinion.

The writing is on the wall, at some point Lucija is going to need to learn about your captive slut, and what is really going on here...  if she isn't told, some form of accident is going to bring things to light, and that probably won't go super well...

Yep, Tim is a classic arsehole with apparently next to no respect for women.  Having a living sex object for his regular use really isn't going to be doing anything to control this personality defect.

The collision between Lucija and the captive slut is on peoples minds, but I do wonder how this will be handled.

Well, this is going to be quite the trial by fire, just going by the initial "helpful" comments about her tits and the lube.  She is handling this very well for someone who is quite young really, but having gone to university in another country does show that she has some real willpower to deal with strange situations and push through.

Tim pretended not to notice the negative reaction from the other women?  Seems more likely he really didn't notice, or noticed and simply didn't care in the least bit.  After all, he can get all the sexual relief he wants from the basement slut sex toy, why would he care for the views or reactions from any of the other women in the chateau?

Well...  you know, I find myself thinking that the massive knee to the balls couldn't happen to a more deserving individual.  Thinking longer term though, I do worry that this is just going to encourage Tim abusing and mistreating our captive slut, and not in a healthy way.  Hopefully the others are doing enough to keep him generally in check.

OK, maybe Tim isn't going to go the way I feared.  I would like to see him go in a different direction, and this does sort of hint at him needing a very strong woman to take control of him, certainly not something he is going to get from a chained up captive in the basement.

Getting more and more of the people here on the pay roll is interesting, and helps to build and develop what is happening here.  So of course we are building towards the inevitable discovery...  and things go bang...

*nods* yep, the contrast with Paula being both polite and considerate, while calling her a slut, and completely ignoring the blood is going to make people's heads hurt.  This point took quite a while to reach for everyone else after all!

*giggles* the slut can show you to her cell, well we do need to go straight for the deep end by now!  So lets see how this goes...

Well, to be fair, the escalating panic from the "brainwashed prisoner" is going to slow Lucija down a bit, while she sees more of this, but its going to need quite a bit of trying to talk her round to make much progress here.

Ah, its starting to sink in that the world is a much more interesting, complex and kinky place than you really considered or have seen...  good start, there is some hope here.

LOL, don't unchain me, I might attack you!  Glorious!

*smirk* this is how you lock me back up, yep, just like that...

Well, strictly speaking letting the blood flow is "natural".

Well...  I am tempted to question ending this by taking her arse, but actually, this works best by showing and convincing Lucija that this really is "normal" for then, that this really is what Heather wants and has chosen.  This is going to take some getting used to though for her!

Also there are the clear and repeated hints that something in all of this is getting Lucija worked up and horny, so it will be interesting to learn more about that, and where her interests and desires are going to fit into this growing and complex picture.

I usually read my own stories when they are posted.  And in spite of proofing them multiple times, I always find errors when I read the "live" version.
Yep, in this latest chapter I typed "Maggie" three times when I was referring to Heather.  That's becoming a bad habit of mine.

But thanks for the commentary Feline, as always.

I didn't even notice the wrong names, I think I have corrected them in my copy.  Much jumping around between different books and stories, its very easy for me to loose track of who is called what, just remembering their roles and places in the story instead.

Onto part 11

I already read and enjoyed this part, and it has been rumbling around in my head for a little while now, so time to have another look, and see if I can pin down some of my thoughts, questions and observations about this part.  Maybe also pin down some of my own thoughts on the developments here...  since I find myself wanting a clearer sense of what is going on inside Lucija's head.

Lucija spending all this time with Heather is a good sign, since it shows she is becoming quite comfortable with the whole "keeping a sex slave prisoner" part of this, which is one hell of a step.  At 18 and of questionable experience though, I do happily agree that putting her on the list of people in charge seems rather a big, and far to early step to take.

It is interesting that she spends so much time talking to Heather, since there is no real sense that anyone else is reaching out to connect to her like this, but it does beg the question of what she is looking for in this connection, even as I feel strongly that some contact and human connection is important for our prisoner!

The dildo with the sensors is very interesting, and I rather like, in a way, the soulless computer voice for the instructions, since it works well with the whole objectifying part of this.  I do wonder what it is doing to Heather's internal state though.

It is interesting, and unexpected, that Lucija wanted the pain from the collar to start at a higher level.  Then there is her obvious sexual response.  At this point it really isn't clear if this is because she is getting pleasure from dominating, and watching the punishment and pain, or if she is looking for something else in this.  Is she picturing herself in the cage, being trained on the dildo?

The whole throwing up, struggling with this in the back of her throat, and the totally mechanical, and merciless nature of the machine, I find myself quite torn here.  On one paw I really like the evil and relentless nature of this machine, its total lack of compassion, mercy or even the concept of compassion.  It makes for the "perfect" trainer and will always keep her motivated and on task.  But on another paw, she is throwing up, this is taking a significant physical toll on her, is her health and condition being properly monitored through this?  Is someone, is anyone, actually making sure that she isn't being pushed to hard, used and abused to much?  There isn't much sense of balance here.

At least the lack of sleep with the training is noticed finally, and all of the hard work on getting better at sucking is appreciated.

Then though we have the strange interaction between Tim and Lucija.  He is showing very clear signs of falling for her, in some sense, but she doesn't really seem that aware of this.

OK...  are we supposed to take Lucija comment that she will move into the chateau and join the whole free love world seriously?  Her comment seems to be being given seriously, but this seems like a massive, and unreasonable step to take.  What is she actually looking for here?  What is her goal?

Yep, well, you are an 18 year old who has mostly grown up in a small village, how are you going to be anything other than sexually inexperienced?  Yes, there are possible options, but they are hardly likely!  So this is exactly what we would expect from you.  If anything, we should all be pleased with how open minded you are to things already!

*sigh* *rolls eyes* yes, I can completely see that Tim is revolting, but Lucija seems remarkably blind to things here...

OK, so is her past boyfriend a large factor here?  Is she left feeling inadequate and sexually incapable?  That would actually make a great deal of sense, since there is nothing in her brief comments to suggest much maturity or support from her brief boyfriend and single lover.  So if she is then comparing herself to the building full of sex-fiends then it makes sense that she feels terribly inexperienced and incapable.  But this is just guessing, and trying to piece together the clues.

*rolls my eyes* wow, shock, her mother probably has given her father blowjobs over the years.  From any form of mature perspective that hardly qualifies as a revelation or a surprise, but I can see how it is a big thing for this little one to wrap her head around.  But why the strong focus on making and selling realistic fake cum?  Is it just a business idea, or is something else driving this interest?  It just feels like there is a lot more to this than something else to sell at work here...

Interesting that he thinks getting the right pump will be the biggest issue, but I do like that, since that sounds like a very realistic and real world issue and consideration to be tackling!  The fake cum is really just a "food" production problem, so much more normal once someone settles on a suitable product.

OK...  so we have gone from wanting to test the products, with a totally solid and logical reason, to wanting to be locked into the shock collar...  for the trainer that she now wants to produce very realistic fake cum...  you know, I cannot help but think she really wants the dildo she is practising on to be producing fake cum that she then has to swallow...  actually, how long before she is demanding / wanting it to be updated to make sure the person being trained actually does swallow all of the fake cum, so that none is found to be leaking?

The entire group knowing she is locked into the shock collar and being trained on blowjobs is a good thing...  what is she looking for here?  Or is this hyper sexual world becoming her new normal?

OK, so now I want to read the next part!  I cannot see Lucija being satisfied with "just" being locked into the shock collar for the trainer and then released when she wants to be released...  so what lines, limits and timescales are being discussed here?  How willing and happy is Maggie going to be here?  At least she is wise and sensible enough to be double checking before moving forward with this rather shocking / surprising request!

And off to see what fun and wicked events happen in part 12.  The comment about people not noticing, not being aware of the cameras is amusing, since I recall a comment from a little while ago about the fact that Lucija had not even been told about the cameras in the cellar!  As for everyone else, well, they are so sexually open and free that the cameras are hardly going to register or matter to them.

It is interesting, at the start, how natural it seems for Maggie to be calling her friend, our prisoner, slut, rather than by her name.  It is also amusing that Lucija, who has asked to be locked into a shock collar so she can use the trainer, is reacting badly to the idea of being called or considered a slut, even though she wants to be trained like a prisoner...

Finally, a better bit of insight into our prisoner, and while this is what we have come to expect, it is still surprising to hear her say it, how she wants and needs to be treated like this.

I still marvel at how Maggie has finally come to accept her friends needs and desires here, and is so supportive of them.

I do feel that there is a significant step up between keeping Heather prisoner and locked up all the time, and so quickly and firmly moving to get the nipple clamps for punishment as soon as she speaks out of turn.  Yes, she needs this control and structure, but it still feels surprising how fully her friend has managed to really embrace and implement all of this.  Then again, we have seen clear, if intermittent, signs of Maggie having a sadistic streak in her.

Seeing Maggie insist, with reasons, on Lucija stripping to try the device, I do wonder how the conversation between these two went when it came up that Lucija wanted to try the device, and was asking Heather to help her, and what Heather learned about what Lucija is looking for from this experience.  Clearly this is not how she expected this was going to go though!

*rolls eyes* Lucija is struggling with the concept of having to take her clothes off for this to happen, she is hardly going to make the obvious, OK, painfully obvious to us, on the outside looking in, conclusion that the handcuffs have to be for her.  Still, what stands out is the somewhat cold and harsh response she is getting from Maggie at this point.

I wonder if Maggie really was hoping Lucija would bolt.  Obviously our watcher thinks so, so he must be picking something up in her reaction, or is he projecting his own thoughts and expectations here?  There isn't much in the somewhat firm, if not harsh approach Maggie is taking here that suggests to me she wants Lucija to bolt.  She has already said do it properly or not at all, but is, to my mind, carrying on as if it is going to be done properly and all the way.

OK, having to specify which slut she was talking to, to my mind, reinforces the thought that Maggie is taking a "we are going all the way here" approach to Lucija, rather than expecting or looking for her to back out of events.  It is also surprisingly harsh from someone who has often come across as so very soft hearted and kind, at least when she is not really worked up and in the zone.

True, the machine refers to the one sucking the cock as a slut, but this doesn't require that Maggie does the same thing, but it looks like she is going to be doing so.

Nice to see Heath being properly concerned about what Maggie is doing, and how Lucija is being treated.  At the same time though, I do wonder how the conversation between Lucija and Maggie went, since naked and tied up like this is hardly starting gently with learning to use this blow job machine, and learning the skills it teaches.

It is good that for all of her harshness Maggie is being supportive, letting Lucija have a good try, then stepping in to stop events and reassure her!

I am tempted to ask where did that come from, Maggie is so supportive and gentle, then is suddenly pushing Lucija's head right down onto the dildo.  Then again, she must have worked out that Lucija needs the help to get past her sticking point.  Clearly this is a hard and new skill for her to try and master, and I do have to wonder if this is the right way to go about it.  Not for the first time I wonder what is driving her here, and what she is really looking for in all of this.

I feel rather proud for Lucija, managing to deep throat so very quickly, so I am a little surprised at the high bar Maggie is setting, for how easily and reliably she needs to be able to deep throat.  Then again, that is what is required to actually use the trainer properly...  and Maggie has tried to get Lucija to walk away from this for today, and Lucija has firmly refused...  so really Maggie is respecting her wishes.  Still...  it feels harsh.

OK, both Maggie and Heather is right.  Heather is right, that machine setting seems far to high, to fast.  But Maggie is also right, our prisoner isn't allowed to talk back to anyone.

Maggie's comment about not having her friends patience for teaching skills is interesting, and gives me a flash back to the switch on the legs scene when Heather was trying to learn to walk quickly with hobbled ankles, between the two trees.  So does this suggest that our prisoner will be helping to teach Lucija more things in the future?  Or am I just guessing wildly here?

I like the mental image of these two women locked named in the cell together, no shock there :)

But again, referring to Lucija as a slut, this time quite deliberately and in a different context...  what is Maggie thinking with all of this?  What is going on in her head, and what the hell did Lucija tell her to be getting this reaction from her?

OK, internal logic point, when Maggie leaves the cell, she cannot be caught coming up the steps since the video is on a 10 minute delay.  So she would have to be hunted up somewhere in the building.

Jumping right into it I see, but that opening line makes sense if she really was caught coming up the stairs, rather than found several minutes later.

Asking the question I have been asking, why so hard on Lucija, when she has been so protective towards Heather for so long...

*nods* while the treatment of Lucija was definitely surprisingly harsh, you cannot argue Maggie's point, and she did have a serious conversation, or more than one such conversation with Lucija before setting all of this in motion, so she should have some idea of what Lucija is looking for in and from all of this.

OK, so Lucija now wants to wear the clearly painful nipple clamps!  Yep, this is proving Maggie's point, but I still have no real sense of where Lucija wants / needs to go with all of this.  I still remember quite clearly that Lucija was the one who said Heather's shock collar should start on a setting of 5 while being trained, since she wanted to make sure the prisoner didn't avoid her pain and punishment!

Heather is doing a remarkably good job of treating Lucija the same way she is treated, wants to be treated.  Then again, she certainly knows how a submissive should be treated and used, but to see her managing to apply that knowledge to Lucija is quite the surprise, almost as surprising to see how quickly and strongly Lucija is moving into the submissive role here!

*SNORT* I call bullshit - there is no way Lucija is locked in the cell like this just to do a better job of selling sex toys!!!  I don't really know what the reason is, but she has to see that she is moving towards being offered up as a sex object to most of the chateau residents...  if not all of them, including the one she doesn't want fucking her.

Yet again left waiting and hanging for days before more of this is posted...  *sigh*

Hi love the story and they it is going. But I think it's going the wrong way with Heather. I am sure she wants to be objectified even more. No talking from her. Of course consenting from her and the rest of the group.

dengamle68, remember that a few parts back Heather was basically shutting down, becoming overly passive, not interacting.  She was just an isolated prisoner and sex object, nothing more.  This was causing problems, problems that were only going to get worse over time.  Which is why the iPad time came along, along with the exercise.  You have to decide what you want here, and having her as a functional prisoner and sex object is going to be a lot more satisfying, at least in my opinion.  I mean, what is the point of the electric shock and the blow job trainer if she is so far gone she doesn't respond, learn, or give satisfaction when you torment her?

Well, that's my thoughts and view on this anyway.


Turning to part 13, it felt like a while waiting for the next part, a sign that the story has hooked me.

Well, that isn't what I was expecting from Maggie.  She is being remarkably casual, almost casually cruel, about leaving Lucija locked in the cell, and certainly isn't showing any signs of searching out someone else to take care of her.  I do wonder how long she would have waited to remind someone that she was down there - not that she really needed to, already knowing that Heath had been keeping an eye on events with the cameras.

Then we get the strong contrast between her casual, almost dismissive attitude towards Lucija, and looking out for Heather, and suggesting her friend is rewarded above and beyond the normal.  That just drives home the different way she is treating and viewing these two women.  Then again, she is also showing a lot more insight and understanding of Lucija than others have shown, and getting Lucija more comfortable with everyone is actually a big and very important step here.

Down to the cell, and Lucija rushing to hide her nakedness actually makes Maggie's point for her rather well, when you think about it.

I am torn on Lucija knowing about the cameras, simply because it is both "obvious" that there is some form of monitoring required for the prison cell, but also they are such a normal and known thing now that no one is ever going to think to bring them up without a reason.  So I see it both ways, but yes, she never knew, and he knew that from the way she was acting on camera!

Evil and unfair teasing, but really good to see Heather stepping up and looking after Lucija!  Interesting to see more of Heather as a person, and a bit of personality from her for once.

I do feel torn about prodding Heather about being in conversation mode, and possibly punishing her for trying to defend and protect Lucija.  It seems right and proper that she should try to protect the "innocent and vulnerable" who is really rather out of her depth, but at the same time, Heather wants, needs and benefits from the strict structure of all of this.

Joining the stunned shocked crowd at watching Lucija call Tim to order like that!

Well... talk about ripping Tim a new one!

And then another jaw dropping moment, it's Sir to Heath, while basically "worm" to Tim...  she really is learning to embrace these different sides of her nature, and explore more of this world.

OH MY GOD!  There is Tim trying to help, to do something to protect his "princess", and he gets shot down again!  Glorious, and bloody hilarious!

I must say, it is nice to finally see Tim being put into his place, and stopped from being such an endless arse!

I do share Paula's amusement at Heath's sexual frustration at working with the naked 18 year old, but also applaud him for both sticking to his own rules for treating his employee properly, and for sticking to the relationship he has built, and is building, with Paula.

Overall I would call this a very amusing part, and it certainly moves the story along nicely.  Not really a sexy or erotic part for me, but we need this story progression to keep things going, and to explore things well and properly.

This does all leave me with one fairly major question though, what effect does Lucija so completely taking Tim in hand have on Tim's interactions with our prisoner Heather?  He still talks to her like a slut, putting and keeping her in her place, but beyond that, is Tim still making good and regular use of our prisoner slut as a sex object?  Or is that now off the table for him?  In one sense it doesn't matter, but I do find myself rather curious about this, since it is another very non standard relationship issue that Lucija is going to have to grapple with, with this entire group.

dengamle68,
Stories, at least for me, seem to write themselves.  I have a general plot in mind when I start, but as the chapters unfold sometimes I'm as surprised as my readers are at the direction they take.  Such is the case of Heather (the slut).  I originally just viewed her as a prop in the story, an object around which the other characters revolved and interacted.  A sex toy if you will.
But over time, she took on a personality and I needed to feed that personality.
I spend a good bit of time on FetLife.com and am members of several 'captivity' or 'prisoner' type discussion groups.  I've also read stuff written by madams at some facilities in Europe that offer long term bondage experiences.  I think the writings of people who have actually tried these long term bondage scenarios has given me a sense of what happens to subs in these situations.

Just to tease you - stand by for Nurse Gruba and her experiences in the Cistern coming in a few chapters.  Especially the research and preperation for her stay at the Chateau.

*GRRRR* where is my baseball bat...  come here budman and we can discuss "placement"...  teasing has consequences!

And chapter 14 is here!

Interesting to learn about the demerits system, and how it works.  Obviously the "guilty prisoner" needs to be brought up in chains, she wouldn't have it any other way after all, now would she :)  But the mind fuck with no food since they don't want her to throw up, that really is getting into her head, and playing up the power difference at work here!  Nasty, yet powerful, and certainly effective.  And again it speaks to how everyone has accepted and adjusted to all of this, and their roles in the chateau.

Making her remember and account for her demerits seems "unfair", which is obviously the point, but it also makes her keep them firmly in mind, so a good way of reinforcing the expected behaviour and rules, and keeping her on track, which we have seen is important to her.

Again the reference to the mind fucks, the growing group sadism is interesting, again, a reminder of the massive distance things have already come, and it does leave me wondering where things are going.  Obviously the sadism has to be kept controlled, but so far this seems to be well in hand, thankfully.

Lucija wanting to know if she gets a vote on holding position during the punishment.  I do wonder, is she just looking for inclusion, or is she looking to encourage greater or lesser levels of punishment for Heather, our prisoner?

The first strike, I was wondering what you were thinking for a moment there, since that was clearly massive overkill, as prove by Paula stepping in and stopping events.  Actually though this is good, instead of presenting Heath as some form of "perfect, all knowing" dominant, he is human and fallible, and can recognise when he is wrong.  He is far better at understanding what Heather wants and needs from her punishment, but this doesn't make him all knowing at all.

No shock that Tim felt the second strike wasn't handled well enough, and the logic of requiring two votes to count suddenly makes a lot more sense, it avoids giving any one person to much power here, over the level of punishment to be dished out.  Plus, yes, Heather is clearly still going to be realing big time from the first overkill strike.

*sigh* yep, so Tim is still an arse, even if Lucija is mostly keeping him under control.  I am with Paula here though, is Heath taking the belt back for the "last" strike really a good idea?  Only time will tell, but he needs to have learned from his mistake and show some sensible control!

Yep, definitely needs practice, but again, this is actually good to see, since while things like this look easy, and are easy to describe, it can be much harder to actually land the strike where you want it, and with the desired force, so it is good to see this feeling realistic and accurate in this important sense.  As for the groups reaction, Tim is still an arse, Lucija is looking out for Heather, but Maggie is pushing for her to be punished more!!!  Yep, that really surprises me as well!  I doubt this is just her sadistic side coming out, I suspect, am guessing, that this is her working to make sure that her friend keeps on getting the treatment, and mis-treatment that she clearly needs to be happy and content with life.  Still...  the distance come is amazing!

Handcuffs back on before she even gets a chance to rub her arse, now that is cruel!  As for Maggie's unclear reaction, perhaps her sadism was showing through again?  We have seen it before, so maybe a split between "how dare you!" and "that was HOT!"

*giggling* at Paula being the one in need of a mercy fuck for once.  Good to see her getting so much pleasure from life here :)

OK, not happy about heat of the moment breath play!  Well handled though.  Clearly this was something that Paula responded well to, and she is showing a seriously massive amount of trust and faith here!  Still, Heath is right to be worried and concerned, heat of the moment is a thing, which is why anything serious is better done calmly...  and breath play not at all, or only with great care and caution if you must.  I know, I am a bit sensitive on the topic, but for good reason :)

The trust in Heath may feel extreme, but the entire group are trusting him enough to have let him turn one of their member into a prisoner, sex slave slut!  That already says a whole hell of a lot about trust!

Good ending, the prisoner shouldn't really be apologised to, but she does deserve to know that it is known and understood that things went to far, and that this is being learned from!

chapter 15

*giggles* yes, it would be nice to take your full service sex slut to the beach with you, but I cannot help but suspect that not only the heavy chains and securing her to a heavy rock, along side the way she would want, and obviously end up being treated there might raise some "concerns", causing a whole pile of problems!  So the locals will have to get by with the other, clearly desirable, and not in the least bit shy or inhibited naked women to lust after.  It's a hard live for the local boys *smirk*

Well, Lucija has a point that the blow job trainer was rather more challenging than she had expected, but she never seemed willing to back out early either...  so not much of a leg to stand on to complain here to be honest.

Interesting idea for the moving weights on the nipple clamps, it makes sense and is a logical addition to what the company already sells.  Not sure what to make of Lucija wanting to be spanked over a mistake she made but then handled though.  The reality of life is that people make mistakes, how they handle them, and their willingness to own up to them, is what matters most I feel.  Is she still pushing boundaries?  That makes sense, but why with Heath?  He has always been quite clear where the lines lay, and there are certainly others around the chateau who would be more than willing to spank her...  yes, they don't have the same "authority" over her, but the authority is the very boundary issue here.

The model numbers being listed for the equipment describing Lucija's punishment feel jarring, but at the same time, do support the feeling that this is someone who really knows their own companies products.  Still, most people would be more focused on the young and strung out naked woman than the exact products being used...  most, but I do accept, not all :)

As for "poor" Tim, *evil smirk*

ROFL first at Lucija bossing Tim around even while tied up and being punished, and then at Mother Paula being right!  I mean, who would have thought that someone with plenty of actual real world knowledge and experience would know what they were talking about?!  *rolls eyes*  why even have experts around if you are not going to listen to them?

LOL, yep Paula is in charge, so Paula gets to be in charge!  Lovely way to stir the pot here :)

Oh my!  The casual overlap between the cellar is quiet, so he won't be distracted while working, and his girlfriend sending him off to get the required sexual relief from their prisoner sex slave...  it sort of makes your head swim from the different directions the thoughts are going in!

As for Lucija, well, why wouldn't she be proud she is causing Heath an erection?  She has pushed for him to do things to and with her on a few occasions now, so clearly wants to get some form of reaction from him, and this is quite a fine and solid reaction to be achieving!

*SHUDDERS*  a fucking sjambok!  I know most people aren't going to be familiar with that beast, but I have seen one a few times, and its NASTY!  That is one fucking hell of a session that Lucija has put herself through!  No wonder people are worried Heath is going to hit the roof!

Heath is right to be worked up, but this was deliberate and demanded, not a mistake.  At the same time, "research"??!!!  No, I am not really buying that!  Yes, I can understand Lucija feeling she needs to have experienced each of these items, but that does NOT need to be done in one go!  Something else is going on here, but what, and are we actually going to clearly see and learn about it?!

Lucija smiling and so happy?!  Yep, proof, as if I needed it, that this is not really about research, even if it does double up as that quite well.

Talk about near total control that Lucija has over Tim!  Bloody impressive!  Especially with seeing her in that state as provocation.

Hey, no need to be sarcastic at Paula, its fucking hard work putting someone through all of this!

Interesting progression with your prisoner, but then again, she does need the exercise, and why not make more use of her?  So long as she is kept heavily chained, and constantly controlled, it shouldn't spoil the feelings she needs from all of this, it is still captivity, just with more being used by her "owners".

Interesting that Tim is still making regular, if not near constant, use of the prisoner slut for sex, but no one else is.  Then again, word games in a sense, since she is clearly providing plenty of oral sex for others.  I did wonder if Tim would ease up on her, but it makes sense that given that all Lucija is doing is using him and giving him the cold shoulder that he needs to take his urges somewhere.  Also Lucija seems quite happy that the prisoner needs and wants to be treated this way.

*giggles* the mental image of the women being well dressed for a slutty event is fun :)

Oh my!  Finally Lucija is seeing signs that she has bitten off more than she can chew with Tim!  Then again, I will admit to being somewhat surprised quite how far he is willing to go for Lucija, and in his adoration of her!

OK, editing point, changing "days" to "weeks" for Lucija to become an amazing whip mistress.  Yes, hours a day is a LOT of practice, but some people have been at this for YEARS, so lets be a bit realistic here.

OK, for Tim being whipped, what is he supposed to be wearing, and where is he being hit?  A mark on his arse isn't going to show well if its only his top he has taken off.

Oh dear, you know, I almost feel sorry for Tim at the end.  Not for his whipping, but from Lucija's clear disgust at the idea of ever having sex with him.  He is so totally infatuated with her, and she makes so much use of him, but just isn't going to give him that...  maybe he should have been less of a shit head for so long?

Chapter 16 is now up.  Having already read this, I am not quite sure what I think, or how I feel about this, so lets have another look, and see if my views seem clearer on a second pass.

Well, things start with Tim, yet again, proving that he is a total arse, and probably should not be left in charge of, well, anyone.  Certainly not a sex slave who is overly compliant.  At the same time, I do feel the need to take issue with the sense of the comment that anal sex = pain.  Obviously, and I totally agree, what is happening here is clearly painful for our slave, on several fronts, but the words paint the suggestion that in general, or perhaps just in Lucija's mind, anal sex has to hurt, which begs the question of why she is looking to try something unpleasant.  Not for the first time, left wondering where Lucija is coming from in all of this.

And there we have it...  blood on the condom...  safety 101 has been FAILED, big time!  Tim the bloody menace and arsehole strikes again...

It is interesting indeed to see Lucija stepping up to handle this situation, and to try and make sure both that Tim is taken care of, and that Heather gets the experiences, sexual usage and teasing that she needs and wants as well.  This is so far from the "default and expected" reaction of a strong woman, to go out and make sure that the woman kept locked up in the cellar is getting used enough for sex.  Also, Lucija is showing a surprising amount of responsibility towards Tim's behaviour, where no one else has stepped up to try and take him in hand, or make sure he isn't doing things he shouldn't.

I can hardly fault Lucija for crying, she has shouldered a LOT of responsibility here, taken things onto her shoulders that by most standards are clearly not hers to shoulder, but she has shouldered them anyway.  She needs some outlet, and here is one form out outlet.

OK...  WHAT THE FUCK?!  Lucija has ordered Tim to get a prince albert piercing, and he has gone to do so, and he is also going to be paying for the matching cage...  this is WELL past puppy love, and if Tim wasn't such a complete and total arsehole, I would be very tempted to call this whole situation abusive.  Well, the thing is, we do have abuse, Tim is abusing the slut in the basement, and Lucija is abusing Tim.  But at least Lucija's abuse is driven by Tim being the arsehole he is.

Still...  what the hell?!?!

Then we switch to Lucija stepping up and moving to take care of Heather, to actually fix the problem that they are no longer making good use of her as a sex slave...  how come she is the one realising and fixing this?  Then again, she is still an outsider in some senses, and also, she didn't come to this realisation "naturally", it was definitely driven by walking in on that nasty abuse...

OK...  now I didn't really catch this the first time through, but Lucija is actually smiling when pointing out that it is cruel to lock up the slut without constant sexual stimulation...  the key word being stimulation, rather than any comment about orgasms...  Lucija is, it seems, once more delighting in, and taking real and direct pleasure, from the idea of making sure that the slut in the basement is "punished" and "tormented", just sexually this time...

I can hardly fault Lucija for enjoying how much pain Tim is from his piercing, clearly very well deserved pain and punishment there!

Interesting to see Heath and Paula working out where they stand, relationship wise.  A nice bit of character development there.

Seeing Heather's clear happiness at people appearing to abuse her makes it quite clear how much she has been missing out down there...  the "fun and games" with Tim really weren't what she had signed up for, wants or needs, and also, quite simply, weren't safe.

Interesting to see what it takes for Heather to show concern at what they have planned for her!

OK, pins through the nipples, and pulled tight, I just really don't like needles.  Just a personal thing, I don't have a phobia of them, I just don't find them sexy or erotic, so this just bothered me a bit, so moving on.  But it was another point where I felt...  unsettled, yes, that is a good word, during this part.

Nice to see Heath preferring his girlfriend to the captive slut, and it probably plays into her desires to be lesser, to be left out and not involved in his orgasm.

*sigh* vanilla Maggie...  we need a whole-scale intervention!

All in all, one of those chapters that is important, has plot and character development, and even some fun sexy time, but for me, personally, not much fun sexy time, and plenty of bits that were just unsettling, or worse.  Nothing wrong with that, but not a part that left me with the warm and happy feelings that other chapters have managed to do.

On to chapter 17 now.  Good to see Heath and Paula making their feelings, and status together official, even though it has been obvious to anyone paying even a little bit of attention for a while now.  At the same time, the sense that Tim is viewed by everyone as an outcast is a bit of a surprise.  Yes, he is a total arse, but does everyone now know how he has been treating their prisoner?  The reactions around the table to him do rather suggest so.

Nice to see the various couples working out and actually communicating where they stand and how they feel.  This sort of thing really is important after all!

OK, so the group started as clearly very down on Tim, yet when he went to speak up, it doesn't seem that anyone other than Lucija is massively down on him, and for her, this is an odd mixture of reward, encouragement, and just shutting him down hard and fast.  Not sure what we are supposed to be taking away from this.

OK, so, a thought that has been wandering around in the back of my mind, how come it is Lucija who has taken on the role of looking after, guarding, and making sure our prisoner is being rewarded, rather than Maggie?  Or is this one of those situations where the outsider can see how far from "right" things have gone, while those inside the situation are blind to how far they have come?  That was one of the points about the original prison experiment as I understand it.

Nods, how come Lucija seems so keen to string Tim along, when she clearly loathes him?

With Lucija there, this is neither the time or place to correct her English *rolls eyes*

*sigh* yes, we all know Tim would love to be the one Lucija went to for sex, but its clearly never happening.

Well, Lucija is completely focused on getting laid, clearly more than a little frustrated and worked up here!

Well, now we know how come Lucija has such complete and total control over Tim, and this definitely speaks to her getting off on the control, and quite probably, taking out a whole pile of bad memories and emotions about how she, and other women have been treated by arsehole men over the years, out on a very deserving target.

See, now it is explained to the group the state Tim has left their sex slave in, now it becomes clear to everyone the degree to which he is a total arsehole and cannot be trusted.  So why the massive downer on him at the start, before this became clearly and widely known?

The ending comments about the metal bars and the chains, I assume this is to do with the attachment points for splaying the prisoner out spreadeagled for her punishment, and sex, but that isn't entirely clear.

All in all an interesting, but not to my mind overly sexy chapter.  But definitely interested in what the next two weekends are to bring, and looking forward to seeing our slut given free reign and I suspect plenty of encouragement to abuse Tim!  It is going to be interesting to see how a submissive prisoner responds to that...

Jumping right into it with chapter 18, but then again, all of the setup for this was already done, so we know what we are planning.  Watching Heather effectively "crumple" in the face of all of the bugs that are found just feels mean and harsh.  Of course this is the point of the exercise, still, that, along with the clear sense of total unfairness, is what stands out to me as this chapter starts.

Well that explains the leaves in the jar, and the holes in the lid.  I had guessed it was something like that, that was being hinted at and planned, but now we know for sure, and Heather has plenty of reasons to be very worried about what is coming her way in a few hours time!  Lots of time to stew and worry...  much better than being ignored, even if it does feel random and unreasonably unfair.

*ah* that makes a lot of sense, and is a lot more reasonable!  But also, that is one very serious and significant mind fuck at work, with the swapped out caterpillars!  I find myself really feeling sorry for, and a lot of sympathy for Heather, followed quickly by the memory and thought that this is actually exactly what she wants and needs, and has been missing out on.

OK, so quite a few details about the odd solid item just under the ground.  Is this just fleshing out the world, or does this somehow relate to the vague and odd hints you have dropped about things that are coming?  Going to have to wait and see I suppose *grumble, grumble*

Now ants and honey!  Paula really is going all in on poor Heather's head space!

Then the fun comment about how to make a woman feel completely penetrated...  more hints about what is to come, sounds like its going to be a very mixed evening for our prisoner!

The casual and "indifferent" teasing of our chained out and silent prisoner is hot, definitely enjoyed that!

I did wonder when Lucija appeared though, just who the strapon was for, and if Tim was about to get "lucky" in a most unlucky manor!

Ah, there is the answer, I was wondering if Tim was locked into a chastity cage yet, but no, since he isn't yet fully healed.

Yep...  no sympathy at all for Tim, while I do feel sympathy for the prisoner, who is actually "only" getting exactly what she really wants from all of this...  yep, that amuses me on reflection.

Oh that's glorious!  Tickling her feet for begging for the pleasure to stop!  I can get behind that, plus it is still really evil, wicked and controlling!  Yep, that works well!

Interesting watching the tone and mood being managed as the trial happens.  It is clearly a con job, but everyone is playing along.

Then the peg zipper and the whole complex situation...  Lucija has definitely decided that she is going to be more involved, and more accepted, and this is one way of pushing and forcing the issue through!  Looks like sheer determination and just putting herself out there is going to be her approach to this.

As for poor Heather...  I really do feel for her, but at the same time, she needs and wants to be made the centre of things on occasion, and really put through the ringer, and this more than qualifies for that!

Feline,
Thanks as always for your excellent commentary.  I have been reading it, but I've also been traveling and I just hate "typing" on my phone.  Had to wait till I got back home to a real keyboard.
You will be interested to know that I just e-mailed Teann, the site editor, the last chapter of The Chateau.  It finished up at 30 chapters, the last being very much a "wrap up" chapter to close out the story arc and give each character a future.
I hope you enjoy the rest of the chapters and I'll be watching for your commentary.

Chapter 19, and onwards.  A bit of catching up is called for.

The tickling is a good alternative to pain, to torment and torture their prisoner.  Mixing things up a bit is good, and keeps things more interesting.

Fun to see Lucija getting more involved.  But the idea of using the roasted marshmallow, yep, again the "boring" but important point that these things need to be tested first, and determined to actually be safe, before rushing off and doing them to someone else!  Sort of expect people to be more up to speed on this idea by now, but so many things seem reasonable, when you don't actually know enough about them to know or understand if they are dangerous.  Assumptions really can be a problem and get you into trouble!

The caterpillars going inside of her, and being crushed there, not sure how I feel about that threat, even knowing that it is just the threat and head-fuck.  Just not really sexy to my mind, but it is effective at pushing and driving her in the desired direction.  Then of course she is lied to also about the nature of the hot cream, so choosing between two "impossible" options, back to the full on head-fuck...  its powerful, but again, more harsh than sexy to my mind.

At least all of this was put to good use, and using the massive intensity of all of this to really drive her over the edge.  Another good way of really putting her into a very helpless place, and making her feel, and be, completely helpless and vulnerable.

Chapter 20, the hard labour is required to set the scene for something, obviously, and it is interesting seeing that for all of the obvious pleasure Lucija gets from tormenting and torturing people, she doesn't want to punish the captive slut the same way she does Tim.

Once we know about the big hole in the ground, I am guessing our captives reaction to the idea of being locked into it is nearly all massive excitement, but I suspect terror is also mixed in there, which probably just makes her more excited.  But why is the welder required?  I can think of a couple of obvious reasons, but it's not really clear to me why this is the first required port of call.

Then we have the doctors visit.  There is a clear sense of Heather almost panicking at the idea of being released from her chains and taken away from the castle.  Interesting, and a good reminder of how much she has embedded herself into this lifestyle and way of living, of being.  Even knowing logically that this is just for a visit, and she isn't being released form being a prisoner, she is still upset.

Medical monitoring is clearly important though, even if this does risk opening a can of worms.  A can of worms that promptly gets a LOT bigger, and gets opened.  Watching this happen though, and while I really do applaud the medical staff for stepping forward and trying to protect, save and look after a stranger, I am left puzzled by Heath's overly calm reaction to all of this.  He comes across as very detached from his emotions, just logical, as if he fully expected this and has long since planned for it.  Not at all bothered by the fact that people with local power, outside of his control, could bring everything crashing down around them.

It doesn't seem enough to simply say "its all consensual and legal", this seems really quite blind to some of the other risks at work here.  Then again, the doctor clearly knows what sort of things are going to happen on Friday, but still wants to visit then.  But still, not really easily able to put the excessive calm of Heath out of my mind here *shrug*

Chapter 21, just glancing at the story codes, piercing, urg, just not a big fan of needles.  Never have been, not really expecting that to change.  Well, lets see what is happening...

Interesting to see Lucija putting on such a show for the cameras, even if that wasn't really in her mind.  She is making great strides in becoming a lot more sexually free and involved with the group and its ways.  Still nice to see Heath keeping a respectful distance from her, even if he cannot avoid perving at her, and the sight and sounds of her orgasms.  A bit of a fine line he is walking there, but he is trying, and that stands for a lot.

Hmmmmm how well does the doctor understand English?  I don't buy that the doctor doesn't understand, at least slightly, the word "slut".  Also discussing something in private with Heather, I am not convinced this is just about her test results.  Medical privacy makes a solid and reasonable excuse, but ignores the whole thing with the cameras, which I rather doubt that Lucija has completely forgotten...  so lets see if I am on the right track here...

Oh dear, and oh yes, the doctor knows the word slut very well, and seems to understand a great deal of what is going on here.  Asking how Heather gets any sewing done!  Oh lord, the story hasn't been that funny for several parts!

I am a little surprised that the doctor has never met a woman who finds it so hard to orgasm, but I have no knowledge of the actual statistics at work here, I am just very familiar with the fact that men, in general, are very poor at making women orgasm, but it often isn't that hard to make a woman orgasm with the right level of attention and interest *shrug*  Still a useful plot device though.

*smirk* the doctor is going to check Tim's penis piercing, I do wonder what is motivating this from her, but the way Tim is being treated, the doctor is coming across as quite the dominant personality in a kink sense.

Well, piercing is looming.  Still no idea what to make of the doctor though.  She is coming across as very kink aware and supportive, but none of this seems to line up with the very vague hints you offered a while ago.  Just have to wait and see what is going on here, but certainly no sense of concern that the doctor is going to call time on the harsh treatment of the slut.

Chapter 24

Interesting and rather amusing how casual Ada is about the sexual contact, the sexual usage of our prisoner on her return.  It has to be said that checking her mouth before and after is a good use of the scientific method.  Obviously that is all, and not at all just sexual usage *smirk*

*snort* clearly the doctor is also aware of just what sort of low life Tim has proved to be.  Good to see his actions are still catching up with him.

Explaining free use to the doctor, a lovely extra humiliation for Heather, but again, the doctor just accepts this and takes it in her stride, interesting.

*loud snort* well, yes, tying her tongue to her nipples is certainly one way to remind her to show respect!  I am also left quite curious as to what history the doctor brings with them, but given the chapter numbers, I doubt we will lean that much more about her as a person.

Oh dear, what a punishment to threaten Heather with!  Treating her like a free and respected woman *smiles* then again, it does manage to send a certain message about things.

Interesting to see Lucija finally come out and describe what Tim really is, personality wise, since she really has been treating him badly, but also, he is clearly lapping it up.

chapter 23

Well, that is a VERY well teased Tim!  Cruel, wicked, yet rather satisfying and fun to watch :)  All this bullshit about the slut having permission to bring him off, but then again, I really don't buy his comment that he was just giving her what he thought she wanted.  He was using her without any consideration at all, that is really quite clear at the end of the day.

Lots of sex, its an orgy, but to be honest I don't really care, I don't feel that moved or excited by it.

The locking up ceremony was fun, and big piles of extra bullshit, but all with the aim of putting Tim into his place, and into the proper head space...

The nurse and the hole in the ground though...  now that IS a fun and interesting tease to end the chapter on!  I am looking forward to seeing where we go with that :)

Up to chapter 28 now.

Things have suddenly moved quite quickly and quite a lot, with several changes happening to our cast of characters, clearly things are drawing to a close, although we already knew this, given we have been told to only expect 30 chapters.

For our captive slut, who was the star of the show for a while, things just seem like they are marking time.  We see moments, flashes of action, but not much to really care about, or be moved about.  So much of the passion, at least for me, seems to have disappeared.

The nurse going into the cistern was wicked, and some excellent mind fucks thrown in, really making me wonder what was going on here, and what to expect.  There was a strong sense of her husband really being pushed into unfamiliar and unwanted territory, and only doing it for his wife's sake, so she could have and live her fantasy.  This did leave me with mixed feelings, it seemed unfair to push and prod the loving husband so, but at the same time, it added such an intense extra layer to the experience for his nurse wife.

I did enjoy seeing her captivity start so suddenly, without proper warning or time to prepare, that was fun :)

And with that...

Fin

And we have reached the end.  It was interesting, a little sad, but well drawn from a character point of view, seeing and learning about Paula's history, and how she cannot have a husband who would let her be in control.  Tempting to point out how extreme the reaction is, but she has always said she was a switch, and the scars the deaths left were clearly massive and very deep.

It is good that the story has been wrapped up and actually reached a finish point.  The conclusions reached make sense, it is good to see how everyone has moved on, and how such a good revenue generator for the village has changed how the local businesses work and handle customers.  Logical and reasonable.

By now this feels a lot more like a general story, and a look at characters, but for me, personally, it has lost the sexy elements.  I don't feel emotionally invested or caught up in things.

Seeing steps being put into place for the slut to have a retirement fund does work though, and feels deeply important and sensible.  The fact that they make so much money from people who insist on giving her orgasms makes me giggle.

The final line seems an odd way to finish the story.  It is fitting to have this information, but it feels like something that should be in the middle, rather than as the final line of such a long work.

This has been a Wonderful story arc, with many surprises along the way and like most good things, they come to an end. But you did an expert job of "tying" up the loose ends.

Looking forward to many more stories from you in the future!!!

Ace 

Thanks feline, ace35 and all others who have made comments over the 30 chapters of this "book".  I appreciate the time you all took to give feedback.  If you haven't already, consider reading my "Chain" series.
At the moment I'm kinda burned out on writing but the bug will probably bite me again at some point.