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Other Worlds Section => Machine Stories => Topic started by: Gromet on February 09, 2017, 01:09:53 PM

Title: The Laundromat by DownTheHobbittHole
Post by: Gromet on February 09, 2017, 01:09:53 PM
You can view the story here on the plaza:

http://www.grometsplaza.net/world/machine/storieslr/laundromat.html
Solo-F; laundromat; accident; machine/f; process; strip; wash; scrub; foam; insert; denial; dried; packaged; bagged; conveyor; cons/nc; X

Please feel free to leave your kind comments & feedback here about this story.
Thanks  ;)
Title: Re: The Laundromat by DownTheHobbittHole
Post by: ElectroPainLover on February 09, 2017, 04:18:57 PM
Interesting story DownTheHobbitHole. A nice job. A few rough edges that should work themselves out as you write more and gain experience...experience we writers never quit learning from.

As it appears to be your first story; at least here on Gromet's; it is a very nice piece of work. Keep up the writing. I look forward to reading more from you.

Dana
Title: Re: The Laundromat by DownTheHobbittHole
Post by: 64Fordman on February 10, 2017, 03:42:09 AM
Quite interesting how you switch between first, second and third person narrative, yet make it work. Very nice story, thank you.