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Title: Discontinued Item by 64Fordman
Post by: Gromet on July 28, 2016, 02:59:02 PM

You can view the story here on the plaza:

http://www.packagedstories.net/storiesad/discontinueditem.html
FF/f; MFF/f; bond; rope; gag; tape; suitcase; store; transport; delivery; discovery; hotel; cart; room; cartrunk; rescue; babywear; pacifier; public; hum; cons; X

Please feel free to leave your kind comments & feedback here about this story.

Thanks ;)

Title: Re: Discontinued Item by 64Fordman
Post by: superdude103194 on July 29, 2016, 01:56:20 AM

To be honest, I'm not sure the writing style worked out here. The lack of block paragraphs combined with the jumping between characters left me quite confused.

Title: Re: Discontinued Item by 64Fordman
Post by: 64Fordman on July 29, 2016, 03:03:22 AM

Thank you for your feedback Superdude, I like to experiment with different styles. It's helpful to hear when they don't work.

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