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Title: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: teanndaorsa on October 12, 2024, 11:31:25 PM
You can view the story here on the plaza:

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sallys_subject.html
F/m; bond; cuffs; headcage; frame; whip; chain; chastity; electro; punish; conditioning; sold; reluct; nc; XX

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sallys_subject2.html
MF/mf; bond; prison; cuffs; chastity; collar; kidnap; nc; XX

https://www.boundstories.net/storiessz/sallys_subject3.html
F+/m; bond; cuffs; prison; susp; hogtie; straps; rack; trick; nc; XX

Please feel free to leave your kind comments and feedback about this story here.

Thanks  ;)
Title: Re: Sally's Subject: Dungeon Visit by Jack Peacock
Post by: jackierabbit1 on October 14, 2024, 01:22:05 AM
It's a dark tale to be honest, but something about the mystery of it appeals to me all the same. What's the "subject's" occupation, or his net worth, as in will anybody really be missing him if/when he disappears? If he was a defense contractor (and Sally in the employ of the opposition) I could see this taking quite the turn. If not and Sally is just a psychotic spider looking for a bug to play with (before eating it) it gets very dark. I also look forward to learning why Sally refers to herself in the third person, but my assumption is that there are at least two Sallys, and one of them is a bit evil.

Some of the most evil serial killers in history look frighteningly normal in pictures, so maybe this goes with Sally's manner of dress. I'm looking forward to where you take this, but as far as anonymity, paying cash and all that stuff, your cell phone and car know where you go, and when you go there, so if somebody really comes looking for him they will have a place to start. As far as no identifiable body to pronounce dead, without one I'll bet that could linger on for several years at least in some unsolved missing person's file someplace.

A final thought; does the subject have an ex-wife that was short changed in court, or perhaps wants a bit of revenge for some other reason?

Thank you for sharing, Jackie.   
Title: Re: Sally's Subject: Dungeon Visit by Jack Peacock
Post by: jakbird on October 15, 2024, 02:06:57 AM
Thanks for taking the time to comment.  Responses are as rare as $1/gallon gas.

There is a movie from 1956, "The Bad Seed", which in part is the inspiration for Sally.  The cute, little 8 year old girl in pigtails and a pinafore dress, who just happens to be a psychotic serial killer.  What happened to her when she grew up?

The story is clear, Sally is on vacation, so no, there's no competitor involved.  Like the original "StoxBox" stories that introduced her, sometimes she takes time off from her busy schedule to recharge the batteries.  I like the analogy to a spider with the bug trapped in the web.  No ex-wife either, well, not in the context you imply....

As for the electronic tracking, that is being addressed in part 2.  I'll try not to get too technical, though that's my field (electronics engineering).  Suffice to say it's not an issue.

I tend to write stories with happy endings.  Too much Hollywood, I suppose.  Sally came about when I thought about trying something new, the not so very happy ending.

What makes a character memorable?  Is it some kind of quirk, like Holmes' Deerstalker hat, or Charlie Chan's pearls of Confucian wisdom?  Why does Sally talk so oddly?  Tune in to find out, same Bat-time, same Bat-channel....
  Jack Peacock
Title: Re: Sally's Subject: Dungeon Visit by Jack Peacock
Post by: bentbliss on October 15, 2024, 10:15:28 PM
This is in interesting story that could have a couple more stories if you wish to explore Denny's plight in Sally's hands. Really I enjoyed the mental aspect of the story. Sally's third person made things a bit more chilling as you can feel she isn't right. It leaves a psychologicl thriller story vibe if expanded. I tend to enjoy darker themed stories, but want good characters and enough setting and fetishes to help. This one contained that. I know everyone likes different things. This one sets up a number of scenarios that could lead to interesting follow ups, for me.
Title: Re: Sally's Subject: Dungeon Visit by Jack Peacock
Post by: jakbird on October 16, 2024, 03:59:51 AM
As always, I appreciate taking the time to comment on the story.   Denny's fate will not be left hanging.  Naturally, Sally is there only to help.

There is a previous Sally story, "Reversal of Fortune", told in three parts, if you find the character interesting.  It illustrates Sally's caring and sympathetic nature, in a Kafkaesque sort of way.  Part 1 sets up the background to the surreal legal proceedings that follow in parts 2 and 3.

Superficially the tales of Psycho Sally could be placed in the femdom category, but that's largely irrelevant.  It's about the mental aspect, the dark side of the supposed "Good Samaritan".
  Jack Peacock
Title: Re: Sally's Subject: Dungeon Visit by Jack Peacock
Post by: thepinkbishop on October 18, 2024, 11:00:33 PM
I agree. This story certainly drew the reader in. The conversations between the women build tension and Psycho Sally is very intriguing.  Her coolness is perhaps the best part.  His loss of control is well described. As far as I'm concerned, he's made his choice - he has to face the consequences and, hands over eyes, I want to see what happens.
Title: Re: Sally's Subject: Dungeon Visit by Jack Peacock
Post by: jakbird on October 20, 2024, 06:31:47 PM
In the spirit of Halloween, you might think of Sally as a mental vampire, sinking in psychological fangs to drain the life out of the victim's ego.  She is neither sadist nor serial killer, but something far, far worse, the predator that walks among us, unseen and unknown.

Thanks for taking the time to post a comment.  Opinions are always appreciated, good or bad.
  Jack Peacock
Title: Re: Sally's Subject: Dungeon Visit by Jack Peacock
Post by: feline on November 06, 2024, 05:03:00 PM
I am left not quite knowing what to think about this story.  The two woman come across as evil, that is simple and straight forward, but the man, the "subject"...  he is so full of half truths, twisting what he says, trying to say what he thinks his mistress wants him to say.  Trying, it seems, to top from the bottom, while also trying to be the submissive with no responsibilities, no role here except to relax and enjoy himself.

The plans they have for him certainly don't fit with the level of sin he seems to have committed here, but at the same time, it is hard to view him as blameless and a well behave sub.

I am just left not knowing quite what to think, so something that made me think.
Title: Re: Sally's Subject: Dungeon Visit by Jack Peacock
Post by: jakbird on November 07, 2024, 10:55:16 PM
Thanks for taking the time to comment!

All is not as it seems.  The entire story is in three parts, with the second in the queue.

Is Sally evil?  No question about it.  This event is a vacation of sorts, where she can indulge in her favorite pastime, at the "Subject's" expense.  Edith?  True, she has a cruel streak, and for some unknown reason a marked disdain for apparently weak men.  Is she evil on the same level as Psycho Sally?  That's a moral judgement left up to the reader.
  Jack Peacock
Title: Re: Sally's Subject: Dungeon Visit by Jack Peacock
Post by: teanndaorsa on November 11, 2024, 08:55:46 PM
Part 2, as promised! Enjoy (more than Denny will)...
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: jackierabbit1 on November 16, 2024, 07:04:31 AM
I find myself curious as to why Denny was chosen for this experiment, this experience at Sally's hand. Is she just honing her dark skills, practicing with a disposable subject before using such techniques on a more valuable victim; or is this just the way she entertains herself in her off time?

In any event you've drawn me in, made me curious as to Denny's ultimate fate here, thanks for sharing, Jackie.
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: thepinkbishop on November 16, 2024, 11:12:46 PM
Eek !
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: jakbird on November 17, 2024, 02:11:55 AM
Sally is on vacation.  This is merely a break from work.  The difference is, she doesn't have to satisfy a customer.  Think of a busman's holiday...

The character started out as a one off.  Everyone writes stories about (more or less) attractive characters.  Why not turn the paradigm on its head?  How depraved can a character become without driving away readers in revulsion?  I confess I like the happy ending, since I grew up on classic movies.  It seemed like a natural fit, a psycho and a most unpleasant resolution to the plot.  Did I mention Hitchcock's "Psycho" was one of those classic movies?  Thirty seconds on the screen redefined the simple act of taking a shower, and it was all in one's head.
  Jack Peacock
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: jakbird on November 17, 2024, 02:12:57 AM
Thanks for the comment, though I'm not sure if it's positive or negative.
  Jack Peacock
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: feline on November 19, 2024, 04:12:02 PM
After part 2 I am still mystified as to what is going on, still not at all sure what I think, but at the same time, I am fascinated by the questions all of this is raising.

The precautions taken when Denny visits, this is not normal behaviour.  Caution, keeping a secret, yep, that's understandable.  But this...  it doesn't tell us much at all, but it doesn't half hint at things!  Then we have the vague comments from Sally about what her investigations revealed.  Her guess comment at the end about his wife and his car...  we know he removed tracking from his car, but the comment and the reaction all suggest a great deal more happened.

There is nothing here to really suggest Sally is anything other than a monster in human form, but the little pieces and hints about Danny are starting to suggest, to hint, that he is far from the "innocent victim" that he seemed more like at the start.  But Sally didn't know all of this when he was selected, so we don't even have the justification of evil preying on known evil...

Perhaps more answers will appear with the next part, and perhaps not.
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: teanndaorsa on April 26, 2025, 04:15:37 PM
Returning to this tonight, enjoy!
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: jackierabbit1 on April 26, 2025, 08:13:07 PM
Sally is scary evil, the kind of human weapon that you'd be wise to destroy right after using it.

Thanks for sharing this dark tale, Jackie.
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: jakbird on April 27, 2025, 08:36:48 PM
The inspiration for Psycho Sally came in part from an old movie (the 1956 original, not the awful remake) called "The Bad Seed", about a sweet little girl who happens to be a psychotic serial killer.  It made me wonder, what would she be like all grown up?  Assuming she finds gainful employment for her unique skillset, what then does she do on vacation?

So, off to the dark side...

Thanks for the comment!  Employing Sally would be similar to juggling hand grenades, perfectly safe unless a pin falls out.  Working for her, well, substitute live cobras for the hand grenades.

Sally has no redeeming qualities whatsoever.  Does that make her a fascinating character?  And what does it say about anyone who enjoys reading of her exploits?  Or the sicko who comes up with the story?

A bit of a disclaimer: I'm one of those nut cases who agrees with Ayn Rand's philosophy, especially about the dangers of the Good Samaritan who only wants to "help" others.  Sally loves to help too, as she so often repeats to her special friends.
  Jack Peacock
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: Guardian on April 27, 2025, 10:59:08 PM
Along the lines of jackierabbit1's post, I have a couple of lines you might consider adding to the Epilogue.

The force of the concussion deafened Gary when the hollow-point bullet left the .357 Magnum revolver's five-inch barrel.
Sally's head exploded.


Would it be better if Edith had come to see Sally off?
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: feline on April 28, 2025, 01:41:11 PM
Well, part 3 certainly answered a lot of the questions I had.  This is fascinating, and disturbing.  Certainly very well written, but the more I see of the events, and especially of Sally, the less I like it and her.  Then again, she is hardly being presented as someone with many, well, any, redeeming characteristics.
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: jakbird on April 28, 2025, 09:43:01 PM
I should point out anyone with the moral character needed to stand up to Sally would not be working for her in the first place....

Femdom type stories are not my forte, so even though I try to write outside my tiny box once in a while it's with the intention of Something Completely Different.  Psycho Sally is an attempt to delve into the psychopathic mentality of the individual who has no empathy, no shred of human decency, but one who is also skilled in the art of deception and misdirection.  Naturally she isn't perfect; the twin flaws of speaking in third person and of stressing words should be sufficient to warn anyone paying attention that Something Is Not Quite Right.  Fortunately (or unfortunately), the victims in the stories never seem to pick up on it.

Thanks to everyone for the comments.  If it's disturbing, then my work is done.
  Jack Peacock
Title: Re: Sally's Subject by Jack Peacock
Post by: feline on April 29, 2025, 11:46:49 AM
Here I would point out that Sally's speech screamed "something is not quite right" very loudly, right from the outset.  But our victim wasn't in any position to act on this warning, or get the hell out of the way, since it was already far to late for him when he first got the warning.

I am tempted to ask why the hell anyone else would ever work with her, but the answer "lots and lots of money" seems clear enough from the clues provided.

Definitely well written, interesting enough to make me want to know how it ended, even as it got more and more disturbing as it went along.