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TrashcanStories Feedback / Re: Her Desire to be Trash by Jordan Laine
« Last post by DumpsterLife on May 24, 2019, 09:04:16 PM »
I think you planned it out brilliantly. The gap between finding out both had switched allowed you to get used to thinking she was safe, and as you become used to that, you then find out she’s apparently not so safe after all. I think that was the perfect way to do it.

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TrashcanStories Feedback / Re: Her Desire to be Trash by Jordan Laine
« Last post by JordanLaine on May 24, 2019, 11:42:28 AM »
Thanks; I had a lot of fun writing this story. My biggest concern was that I couldn't decide whether to tell the reader right away that both the men switched the bins, or tell the reader that only one of them did and leave the second to be a surprise when they actually got home. I wound up going with this version because it seemed a bit more suspenseful and exciting.

I think at some point I might write another story with these characters, but I have a lot of story ideas so I can't make any promises that it will be any time soon.
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TrashcanStories Feedback / Re: Her Desire to be Trash by Jordan Laine
« Last post by DumpsterLife on May 23, 2019, 10:17:59 PM »
That twist is brilliant. You relax knowing she’s safe, just to find that both men did the switch...just to find she played them as well!

Brilliant story, love how the men are trying to please each other while thinking it’s fine, she’s safe, when in fact if it wasn’t for her own actions that wouldn’t have been the case! The panic afterwards, just for them to find her (wrapped in a trash bag too, immediate turn on), and her reaction to them not even checking was great!
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Thanks for kind words Jordan
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TrashcanStories Feedback / Re: Jessie's Journey by DumpsterLife and Trash girl
« Last post by taurired on May 23, 2019, 05:06:56 PM »
When I read this, story reminds me of Alice Long series (Perilous Waif, Merciful Troubleshooter) by E. William Brown.

It's about future but in this version of future real difference between android with AI and human is how they were born (one of  minor differences is that humans usually(but not always) have biological brain, sometimes with a lot of implants and  human-level AI's brain is usually heavily protected hardware module, but it's for DRM reasons(!), also, androids are almost always loyal to humanity in general, thanks to a lot of mental programming, but same methods can be applied to humans). Somebody call this 'slavery',others create androids who crave abuse...)
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Machine Stories / Re: Hospital Escalation by Leexxx
« Last post by taurired on May 23, 2019, 04:58:53 PM »
There are other kinds of stories with 'mistakes' in hospitals.
I remember 'Observation' by Coated where girl gets hospitalized for a long time but she was nurse and wanted to play just a little (and somebody other wanted to play a little more).
It's interesting theme, at least for me.
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TrashcanStories Feedback / Re: Her Desire to be Trash by Jordan Laine
« Last post by Trash girl on May 23, 2019, 04:31:07 PM »
Yes Jordan it helped very much I was on edge all the time wondering if that girl was alive or not and felt the relief of bot men when thay found her alive
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Machine Stories / Re: Hospital Escalation by Leexxx
« Last post by Trash girl on May 23, 2019, 03:40:27 PM »
I'm sorry but I think mistakes like that are stupid a regular girl that wanna get a job suddenly gets taken as a patient because of a stupid robot that is just idiotic sorry for saying it
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Thank you for the bit of backstory, DumpsterLife! It's always fascinating to know the inspiration behind a story.
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TrashcanStories Feedback / Re: Her Desire to be Trash by Jordan Laine
« Last post by JordanLaine on May 23, 2019, 12:07:35 PM »
Thank you, Trash girl; I'm glad you liked it. Although not all the things I fantasize about have "happy" endings, I do quite like writing stories like this one which makes it look like a "sad" ending only to turn it around at the end. Of course, that only works if sometimes there actually is a "sad" ending to a story, or else it becomes predictable.

Though... really, the goal of any story I write will certainly be to bring forth a "happy ending" of a different sort from the reader. ;) I hope this story did its job for you in that regard, or at least helped you out a little.
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