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Bondage => BoundStories Website Stories Feedback => Topic started by: Gromet on December 23, 2015, 07:37:54 am
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You can view the story here on the plaza:
Part 1:
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares.html
FF/f; building; abandoned; hospital; strip; naked; hum; bond; belt; wheelchair; scare; force; cons; X
Part 2: The Kidnapping
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares2.html
FF/f; cartrunk; strip; naked; bond; saranwrap; gag; kidnap; transport; tease; fantasies; cons; X
Part 3: The Therapy Pool Chair
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares3.html
FF/f; cartrunk; strip; naked; bond; saranwrap; gag; transport; wrap; straitjacket; chairtie; straps; tease; mast; climax; cons; X
Part 4: Property Of Dana And Tracy
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares4.html
FF/f; Solo-f; D/s; enslave; shopping; storeclerk; petstore; collar; leash; nametag; hum; bond; padlock; locker; tease; cons/reluct; X
Part 5: Property Of Dana And Tracy 2
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares5.html
FF/f; D/s; naked; sheet; outdoors; car; transport; collar; leash; bond; cuffs; gag; tease; bdsm; spank; denial; cons; X
Part 6: The Summer House Pooch
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares6.html
FF/f; D/s; naked; outdoors; car; transport; collar; leash; bond; cuffs; petgirl; photo; trick; enslave; maid; cons/reluct; X
Part 7: The Summer House Pooch 2
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares7.html
FFF/f; D/s; naked; outdoors; petgirl; collar; leash; bond; cuffs; enslave; maid; bathe; sponge; gag; denial; mast; climax; cons; X
Part 8: Caught
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares8.html
FFF/f; FF; solo-f; D/s; lesb; maid; apron; naked; outdoors; petgirl; collar; exhib; denial; oral; mast; climax; cons; X
Part 9: Taken In Trade
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares9.html
F+/f; solo-f; FFM/f; D/s; naked; outdoors; collar; exhib; petgirl; caught; transport; cage; emb; mast; climax; cons; X
Part 10: With Friends Like These...
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares10.html
FF/f; FMf; D/s; naked; cage; collar; encased; petgirl; emb; fantasy; hosp; M+; mast; cons/reluct; X
Part 11: My Full Dogification
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares11.html
FFF/f; MFF/f; D/s; naked; cage; collar; tail mask; hood; paws; sheath; petgirl; cons; X
Part 12: Embracing my Canine Transformation
http://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares12.html
FM/f; M/f; D/s; naked; collar; tail; mask; hood; paws; sheath; petgirl; surprise; emb; display; cage; cons; X
Part 13: A New Kind Of Torment
https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares13.html
FFM/f; D/s; petgirl; cage; truck; transport; naked; cuffs; hobble; collar; leash; bond; discovery; memoryloss; cons; X
Part 14: Forgiven
https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares14.html
FFM/f; D/s; petgirl; naked; memoryloss; cons; X
https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares15.html
M/f; F+/f; oral; bond; leash; straps; tape; diner; tattoo; contract; enslave; spank; naked; hum; strip; teen; cons; rom; X
https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares16.html
F+/f; M+F+/f; fpov; bond; chain; collar; cabin; D/s; hum; naked; slave; cons; X
https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares17.html
F+/f; fpov; bond; naked; collar; chain; hum; outdoors; blindfold; gag; public; cons; X
https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/mysummerofdares18.html
F+/f; MF/f; fpov; bond; collar; strip; naked; public; blindfold; chain; college; cons; X
The Property Of Dana And Tracy
https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/property_of_dana_and_tracy1.html
M/f; frottage; oral; chain; collar; captive; naked; slave; cons; XX
https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/property_of_dana_and_tracy2.html
M/f; F+/f; fpov; bond; sex; chain; naked; cage; exhib; rom; cons; X
https://www.boundstories.net/storieslr/property_of_dana_and_tracy3.html
F+/f; fpov; mast; petgirl; outdoors; leash; collar; cage; transported; cons; X
Please feel free to leave your kind comments & feedback here about this story.
Thanks ;)
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I loved the first 9 parts, and said many brilliantly conceived words about how moving, fun and naughty they were, so Jackie, keep on feeling inspired, please!
Thoughts on part 10 to follow, once I get more caught up with things, but I am heading this way, be assured of this :)
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I am going to write this as I read part 10, commenting as and when I have something to say, since I suspect I will miss key thoughts if I just wait until the end to write my comments :)
It is no wonder Gregory is suspicious, and this being something this friends organised is the more likely course of events. Still, more likely does not actually mean its what happened, life does like its little surprises. The club? Now that is an interesting word, full of possibilities, openings and potential :) Something that deserves further exploration, hint, hint!
Having watched the show as Jackie got out of the car and showed herself off so, it's no wonder Gregory things this was all staged and arranged by his friends, his suspicions make even more sense now.
His present... how delicious! The thoughts and feelings that must be going through Jackie, and her friends, at the perfectly reasonable, to Gregory, line of thinking that she is a treat being offered up, without having a say in it or what happens... surely to good an opportunity for her friends to totally dismiss, but it has to be handled carefully.
A more dominant Tracy, the Tracy / Dana dynamic is growing, and becoming ever more interesting. Oh my! Tracy, you evil genius you, that's inspired! Now it is a common statement that actions speak louder than words, and clearly Tracy wants to push the pet angle, still, converting a flustered and accident prone Jackie into one who is "basically begging" to be treated as a pet, regardless of her words, I do admire and respect that, and it puts a very happy smile on my face :)
Oh Jackie, Jackie, Jackie, punished for your "alleged misbehaviour"? You don't yet seem to have worked out that firstly, your friends know about your actual, real misbehaviour, and secondly, we are getting well past the point of needing excuses for punishing you, it is enough that your friend's want to, and that you crave it and love it *evil smirk*
As for your new status as the "spoils of war", or as I would think of you, the trophy / slave, its not so obvious yet just from the story, but given the story and the forum conversation, the bet between your friends shows that you have been the spoils of war for a while now, you just haven't fully caught up with your new status is all *muwahhh*
Considering Dana vs Tracy, I am starting to think that perhaps Tracy is the more subtle, more conniving one of the two. Dana is starting to feel more direct and up front about her dominant behaviour, while Tracy is starting to emerge as someone who is sneaky, watching for and exploiting openings, settings things up in advance. Which can appear less dominant from the outside, but is actually just a different approach to control. Plus we are seeing they have a fluid dynamic between themselves.
Ah, and the bets expand in the story, and Jackie is discovering how much she does not know about the internal dynamic of her friends :) I really like how you are mixing the internal relationships in with the bondage and naughtiness, I feel we need both to bring the characters to life and to really involve the reader in the bondage and wickedness :)
Tracy, wow, so much said so quickly and efficiently, and really ramping up the power and intensity of the experience for Jackie, all while letting Jackie know her friends are onto her naughty behaviour, and consequences are going to start arriving any moment now...
I find myself pausing to consider and think through:
>> If I specifically asked for things in my diary that I had no intention of doing it made me a hypocrite before my friends, as well as challenging the trust I had placed in them.
Strictly speaking yes, I agree, but I don't see this in simple black and white terms. Until very recently, arguably until about 10 minutes ago, Jackie did not realise how fully and completely what was written in her diary might be realised by her friends. Her diary has been all about expressing and communicating her fantasies, dreams and desires. Now one key element of these is that she not be in control, that all of the decisions be taken out of her hands.
Still, there is a fundamental difference between fantasy and reality, a fact that Jackie is suddenly being confronted with, and that I am sure her friends already realise. Also, there is the whole class of "I like not liking it" fantasies, where not wanting to do something, experience something, but being made to experience it anyway because her friends push her into it, is what the fantasy is all about.
Being exposed to a stranger fits well here. A significant part of the power of the fantasy lies in really NOT wanting it to happen, but having it happen even as Jackie is desperately wishing it isn't happening, so in that sense it's something she wants, while not wanting. Something she would not do herself, but will end up very much enjoying, even as she is massively embarrassed, when made to do so by her friends.
I think that makes sense when written down :) After this, it will be interesting to see what Jackie writes in her diary going forward, now she realises anything and everything she writes down may actually come to pass... such power, such freedom, such a rush... so long as she is suitably, actually massively horny, this is likely to encourage her, while discouraging her when she has just cum and feels more sensible and level headed *evil smirk*
Gregory offering mentorship, very mature, sensible and level headed. This is really nice to see, someone adult and mature, being sensible, yet careful about this, opening the door to the girls, but not pushing or pressuring any of them! The world needs more people like this, and being like this is generally the better approach longer term as well.
Oooh, a private discussion between Gregory and the two friends, Jenny's stomach must be doing flips at this point! Plus of course they are right, the cage does need to be checked for size *radiates innocence*
*rolls eyes* I wonder if this is me being far to cynical, or Jenny not really catching up yet with the way things are going, and what her friends are clearly thinking. Tracy's recently revealed sexual leanings have very little to do with who will be "paying" for things here, instead it is all about who is the slave and who is the master. The whole point of having a slave is that they are the one who gets offered up in payment, especially when Gregory has just made it clear he is already eyeing Tracy up and getting ideas.
Again I find myself wondering if it's me or Jacky... Jacky does not seem to have caught up with the thought that a pet does not need a coat in a cage... perhaps I really am a pervert ;)
Muwahhhh, Jackie is so busy fretting over the lack of a lock, which I suspect will be very swiftly fixed, that she didn't even see the coat removal looming in her immediate future, yummy!
Now that is an interesting statement, why would Tracy think that Jackie had conspired with Dana? Is there reason for this? Or just the emotions, the uncertainty, fear and delicious submission speaking?
<< 'Command me firmly' I thought in my mind, and I will try to be worthy of such commands.
Now that's a striking turn of phrase, and sounds like it would make an excellent quote from her diary, or more likely an excellent addition to her diary at the next opportunity, since I am not sure it would have made it there yet *smirk*
Oh my, absolutely delicious, absolutely wonderful! The change in Jackie's mental approach, the liberation, the acceptance, the embracing of being a bad dog, since she is not in charge, and thus no longer has responsibility for things, for any of this. The clues and hints have been there for a while, but things really are coming together now! Of course, I do strongly suspect Jackie is wrong in one particular, I very much doubt her friends, her owners, will allow her such freedom of motion and action for being bad, but that is a "little detail" that she has yet to discover for herself :)
*sigh* and *grrrr* I feel a short rant coming on fast. I cannot fault Jackie here, the pet or the author, but it still depresses and upsets me. Why should Jackie the pet have to think in terms of "my rather ordinary small breasts". Ever look at any of the websites devoted to female beauty, rather than raw porn? Those websites tend to celebrate small, pert and beautiful breasts. Watch men, watch Gregory, breasts and women are all beautiful! The constant diminishing of women, and calling out their perceived faults rather than their self evident beauty and attractiveness... I find it all so depressing and upsetting. It is simply not right!
Settled down in the cage, such a lovely sight and mental image :) Now that is a very interesting dream! Also, the first strong hint, from memory, of a more male sexual aspect to the bondage games, and the possible fate of our bound lady. More than that though, hinting in her diary about being abandoned at the hospital? Such wicked dreams you have... such naughty fantasies *teasing smirk*
That ending, so teasing, so wicked, so perfectly well timed! I mean, her friends must know what Jackie is likely to be doing all alone in the cage, she has demonstrated that tie her up and leave her alone and this is what happens, after all. And now Gregory, a man with extra toys, is in on the open secret...
I do find myself wondering if he has a chastity belt, or other devices that will have the same result, in his possession, and that is up for negotiation... he has just seen first hand that Jackie needs the "help" *evil smirk*
Having read this, and thinking back, I am of the opinion that the title of part 9 should be "Taken In Trade?", with the question mark added, since even here, at the end of part 10, the nature of any payment is still not clear. I think the sense of wondering and hinting works well.
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Thank you for your kind comments. I spent a lot of time on this one, I finding that the deeper we go into this adventure the harder it is to write. I suspect that is because your thoughts keep me up on my A game, or at least to the limit of my abilities. There are also several distinct characters in this one, and their actions have to square with their developing personalities, a good trick for me when writing one story, let alone several at the same time. ( One wonders how Lobo does it.)
(The following is quite jumbled and in no particular order, I apologize for that in advanced, but your thoughtful comments demanded a response sooner than later.)
I struggle with titles all the time, and I agree with you that "Taken In Trade?" would have been a better title for this one. I will award myself five firm smacks with the paddle for that little error, to be delivered without mercy by the firm hand I sometimes require. lol
Gregory's club will be making it into a future episode, as will Gregory, he's just too much of a character to use and discard. The girls couldn't just dump their loving friend off with a stranger either, even a nice one, but if he became a trusted friend he could always pet sit, or borrow Jackie for a show at his club. Such actions must be taken incrementally to be believable, and desirable to participate in.
Tracy and Dana are growing on this little adventure as is Jackie, the sweet freedom of total dominance within Jackie's sight should the girls just take that next step. The girls each had blundered into total control of their friend, but that may have to be pointed out in the diary as well at some point, as was the welcome nature of the experience for Jackie.
The lost bet conspiracy I was referring to happened when Jackie first discovered that she was the subject of the girls wagers. That particular one had Dana manipulating Jackie into choosing to be a pet once initially at the summer house, and lead to Tracy sitting in Dana's car while holding her leash and making her keep pace with the car on the very long driveway. Tracy then earned Jackie's paddling in her place, and that's where we discovered the intimate relationship between both dominate girls.
"I like not liking it" is an excellent way of stating it, and I may steal that from you if you don't mind. I also think the "command me firmly..." thought should end up in the diary, but only if Dana and Tracy ever develop doubts about Jackie's desire for such commitment.
Tracy has been the unofficial number two of the girls three way relationship for a very long time, and number two always has to try harder. Right now she's on top, but stuck with a pet instead of the maid she desires, I wondering who might be compelled to play maid for her?
Jackie still needs to misbehave to receive what she wants from the girls guilt free, (at least for now), just as playing strip poker is really just a guilt free excuse to strip for your fellow players.
Jackie is getting more body confident as we go along as well, she going from running in terror with a slammed door at the hospital, to laying down nude on the center line of the of the county road after a naked run in the rain to get the mail. Gregory watching her crawl into her new cage was a perfect time for the submissive little pet to question if she "measured up" to his expectations however, this her first dare performed for one outside of the girls tight group. I suspect she may still do this for a time as new boundaries are broken, but in the company of her stunningly turned out friends such might be expected.
Gregory also has some toys that will keep Jackie out of trouble and properly on edge for motivational purposes, in or out of her cage, all at the exact time of her submissive sexual awaking, a sadistic coincidence if there was ever one. I also suspect that with all that erotic energy, (once the safety valve of self entertainment has been unnaturally tampered with), poor frustrated Jackie will be driven into all kinds of trouble.
Thank you again for your kind words, and please excuse the randomness of my response, I am most certainly NOT on my A game today, Jackie.
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I have enjoyed the transition of Jackie through the 11 chapters so far. Her inhibitions seem to be evaporating with each new experience and her current mindset that of being a pet appears to be something she truly relishes. To what end will this take her? Does she really care? Will she begin to see Dana and Tracy solely as her owners and not friends? Will her persona of being a girl/pet evolve into her simply being a pet? Interesting questions that I look forward to learning the answers in subsequent chapters.
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Thank you Drulema, I have enjoyed writing it. I think that in the short term Jackie will be "forced" to fully embrace her pet persona, and that in addition to her new accessories will keep the kink level very high for her. All three girls are on a mission of discovery on their first summer of adulthood, and the way this is going we get to experience it along with them.
Pets are fun, but a lot of work, and I see more practicality in a maid for Dana and Tracy, most especially if they decide to attend the local college instead and live at the summer house with their friend possibly doing the same. Jackie could serve her friends (in true maid fashion) while not in class to pay her share of the room and board, Dana's parents allowing them the use of the summerhouse instead of footing the room and board at another more expensive school thinking all three girls would be more likely to watch out for each other together than separated.
I could also see Dana's or Tracy's parents making the condition of no boys at the summerhouse during school, thinking that such conditions might keep their little darlings safe, little knowing what we do about how that will likely turn out.
Thank you again for your kind comments, Jackie.
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Thank you Jackie for responding. I enjoy your style of writing. Things aren't just happening with Jackie, but rather her emotions are expressed and a basis for her actions is there in her thoughts. She likes what's happening, she trusts her friends, she may not know what's around the corner, but she is curious to find out. She may be apprehensive, but she is not scared. This may be her only opportunity to explore taboos and her kinky side and she relishes where this may lead her. Though I agree that maintaining a her solely as a pet is work for Dana and Tracy I think it would be something all three would like to continue past this summer, but more on a "as time allows" basis. Having Jackie as their maid seems not only practical, but allows for different scenarios to be played out. My opinion would be for Jackie to remain naked and possibly with a collar of some sort that would be a constant reminder for her of her status though maybe not a blatant symbol of bdsm; something more subtle. In lieu of that maybe a small tattoo with Dana's and Tracy's initials within a chain design perhaps. After her time as pet, she would come to see herself as less of an equal to Dana and Tracy; always follow behind them, not sit on furniture and speak only when allowed to. Her submissive side would become more pronounced and take over her persona. These are just my thoughts of how I perceive the girl's evolution between themselves of course centering around Jackie.
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Thank you for some wonderful suggestions Drulema. I like the power exchange going on here, and I have always felt that the sexiest part of any body is what is happing in ones mind. Jackie started out somewhat submissive, most especially in her pretty friends company, but she has been conditioned to this thought process for some time. Her friends obviously care about her, but they are privileged girls, and having a pet or a maid to do what they don't want to have to for themselves seems desirable to them I'm sure. One could argue that Jackie had been groomed for this very task for years by her friends, but I think it could also be somewhat more innocent, her friends just discovering how deep this kink in their friend runs in their own summer of discovery and wishing to use this discovery to their own best interest.
The giving of power to another is exciting to me, but along with that is the full responsibility for that person's well being. In Jackie's servitude, (no matter in pet, or maid persona), there is a certain liberation from the responsibilities for oneself, (must remember to feed and bathe the pet), and for the right person this is a huge turn on.
I was considering leaving her in the dog chain collar with tag as a kinky little reminder of her status, and I could see the maid Jackie having two uniforms, one of just her skin, or her skin and the apron for when the girls were alone, and a more traditional uniform if in company or for other reasons of practicality. A tattoo of possession on her little rump where a traditional bikini would cover it could be fun, she reflecting back on her experiences years in the future no matter how things worked out.
Thank you again for your kind words and thought provoking comments, Jackie.
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Jackie's summer of discovery is somethig she has envisioned and documented in her diary. It hinges on her trust of her friends. Will she continue down the path she is taking and how far will her submissive side take her. Her friends are also discovering things about themselves that may have been simmering under the surface and being together tending to Jackie may bring something out between the two of them.
Jackie is obviously becoming secure in her own skin, her mind is telling her "it's just another small step" based on her fantasies and how far she has come to this point and the next and the one after that. There's still a question in her mind as to will there be a final step and will she be willing to take it? Will all of her past experiences lead her logically to take that last one? Will there be any hesitation (dipping her toe in first) or will she have been conditioned up to that point to just take the plunge? Will her decision (if there truly ever is one) be based on everything that has come before or will it hinge on her friends and her trust (and maybe love) of them?
A proper maid uniform, hmmm! Would be interesting to see if she is required to wear it only for the girls parents! Will not wearing one when Dana and Tracy's friends are over be her decision or her friends? Will there be a rule that she wear the uniform when parents are over occur to Jackie to only mean parents and she surprises everyone when she is nude when friends are over and not think for a second it's not what Dana and Tracy meant?
Being taken to the club as a pet provides some interesting scenarios and I think some real serious training and immersion on Jackie's part. Will this be a critical point for Dana and Tracy? What really happened to Gregory's previous pet!?
Don't let any of these thoughts deflect you from your intended course for the story. Just some random thoughts I hold the author responsible for for writing such an interesting story!
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summer of dares, part 11
Thoughts as I read part 11, finally getting there :)
I should probably go back and re-read at least the last few parts to refresh my memory, but I want to get on and read part 11, and I have a back log, so I will just go with what's in my memory.
Ooh, poor Jackie, interrupted so close to her goal! I would call this wicked, but, she is locked naked in a dog cage, and has been caught masturbating several times now by her friends, when she is supposed to be "behaving" herself, so it is wicked, but its exactly the sort of wicked we are looking for and enjoying. An evil mind is wondering if Jackie was being monitored, so people would know the correct time to come and interrupt her dream... *evil smirk*
An interesting perspective on how she is changing. But considering that her private sexual fantasies, as revealed by her diary, are being brought to life, that she is literally living her sexual fantasies 24 / 7, many miles from home, with no safety net and no backing out, well, it would be a surprise if she was not constantly horny :)
He prefers sir, reminding her of the power dynamic. I do wonder what this hours long conversation covered, thats a LOT of time, considering a naked woman in a cage, to explore wicked thoughts and ideas! I do wonder what the "its more than luck" comment is pointing at. Is there something clever here? Or just the observation that it takes hard work and trust to make these things happen, along with the luck of meeting and knowing the right people.
I like his sad but accepting response to thinking that Jackie wants to be released so soon, the confusion over the nature of "going". He may want her captive, but he is reasonable and fair about things, not pushing when he should not.
Oh dear, friends not instantly rushing to her rescue... are they just being naughty? Treating her like a pet? Or don't they understand the actual situation? Or maybe a bit of one and a bit of another?
Now that is a very telling turn of phrase, and a fascinating insight into Jackie's mental state. Her friends come in and stand over her, rather than treating her like a cherished pet! Clearly thinking of herself as a pet really quite strongly by now.
Pets cannot talk! Rolls on the floor laughing! Oh, someone's in trouble now! But also, it is interesting to see how far, fast and firmly this is being pushed. I do wonder, guided by the story codes, just what the conversation and collected items have been suggesting and implying...
No borrowed coat, no surprise really, but also, so much for avoiding putting on a show for Gregory *very evil smirk*
Have a shower but no loosing your motivation?! I think this is the first time her pre/post orgasmic state and level of motivation has actually been mentioned by her friends, but it just proves they know exactly what is going on, they are monitoring it, and given Jackie's naughty ways, I am expecting to see more steps taken soon to control how "motivated" she stays, and for how long.
Being joined in the shower, washed like this, it is interesting on several fronts. This feels so much more casual and relaxed on her friend's part, than earlier, when she was washed down as a dog. But that might have been a different friend, and things have moved on since then.
Jacky failing to realise that her friend might be keenly interested in her more modest breasts, so believable, yet so sad. It is the person and their responses as much as the size of the curves that really matters.
Ooh, total immersion in pet role?! This sounds good! Also, wisdom and experience from Greg, deeper knowledge of what they are doing and the forces they are playing with, something very important here. *evil smirk* if all three of them like her as a pet, showing that Jackie's views and wishes sometimes have to give way to what her friends want from her :) And the talk of punishment, so wonderfully and delightfully firm and commanding, the emotions that must be running through Jackie... Yummy!
Smirk, the idea that Jackie, down on all fours, is almost modest compared to what she has done before... technically correct, yet it does make me smile, considering the wickedness of her outfit and what is happening.
I am having to puzzle over:
>> As if answering my silent question Gregory opened a special looking box he had been holding, he apparently electing to put whatever it was on me himself, the girls and he sharing a smile that gave me a foreboding feeling. I at least knew they approved of whatever his surprise was, but my friends had changed as of late, so this was getting to be an easier hurdle to cross by the minute.
why is this getting to be an easier hurdle to cross? Yes, your friends have changed of late, becoming far more commanding, firm and wicked, but you are also changing, unleashing your sexual submissive nature in a way you never have before. Perhaps this is the point, you are all adapting the the new role of mistress and slave? That feels like what you are saying here, but I had to stop and think about it a bit.
I do like the comparison of Gregory's command, vs her friends still learning what command is like, and doing it by accident, a very good sense and insight into how this is, and her feelings and reactions :)
Very textured paws... keeping her out of trouble in more than one sense I see! Evil, I love it! :)
Motivated indeed! Soon the building, ever building lust, is going to do a lot of pushing and motivating... muwahhhh!
It has taken me an age to get here, but well worth the wait. Hopefully you have plans for where to take this? I am not sure if I want to see Jackie be naughty and get punished, or get the hinted at awesome reward... perhaps both?
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First off I must apologize for not responding earlier to your as always well thought out observations, but I have had a lot going on lately. The "voice of command" part where Gregory's words turn into Jackie's actions, (or earlier when the same happened with her pretty friends briefly) has happened with myself on occasion. It is a wonderful experience when it happens, but very difficult to ride that high lever of utter submission for very long in the real world with other real humans, at least for myself. That giving of control to another trusted soul, even without the promised gift of ultimate physical gratification, is where I think Jackie wants to visit on this vacation to see if she likes it as much as she suspects she will. The physical desire I think is what is motivating her and breaking down her paradigms, I myself capable of some very wild things when motivated the same way, the payoff for that submission when or if it is allowed to happen almost indescribable.
The after part I think could be a potentially serious crash for some, (as in what have I done?), but never for one with a loving and playful partner equipped with the complimentary dominate version of their own submissive kink. This I think for most of us is more practically a place to visit on occasion for fun and entertainment, (like a vacation away from home), but a difficult place to stay indefinitely, like living at one section of Disney world for years at a time.
Dana and Tracy, and possibly even Gregory aren't doing this exclusively for Jackie though, they are doing more giving at the moment, but I know for a fact that they plan on doing a fair amount of getting at some point. Once you freely give something to someone else after all it's theirs to do with what they please, whether that's your coat, or your freedom, it's all the same from a certain point of view. One would expect a gift given with love would and should be treated well by the recipient, but that in the end is really up to them and more a reflection of their own character.
Jackie is potentially the ultimate gift for all three if some form of sharing could be worked out between them, this something I think might be worth exploring in the following chapters.
Thank you for your observations and kind words, Jackie.
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At the risk of drifting off topic here, your comments do trigger a couple of thoughts, and important points.
The voice of command, the submission, giving over control, from my personal experience and observations over the years this has a LOT to do with both trust, history and setting. With the right setting, the right surroundings and expectations it can put everyone into a more receptive mood, both dom and sub, making the switch easier to make, and easier to maintain for periods of time. It can be a LOT of work on the dom's part, but with three people to share the work, keeping control of Jackie becomes quite doable.
For the setting, alone and isolated, and once the props, the clothes, lack of clothes, bondage, etc, are added, this is all going to help to make Jackie much more receptive, especially when horny, or otherwise chasing a reward :) Nothing like a bit of positive encouragement and reinforcement to help things along.
As for a crash, some people are prone to a down / depressed mood after the intense high of a positive experience. Readjusting back to "normal" life and all that. Here you have already touched on a real aspect of this effect, how Jackie's mood and behaviour changes so much when no longer horny and searching for her release, and the resulting mood "cycles".
Yes... once the trust has been given over, along with the control and the keys, what then happens is no longer something Jackie has any real say over, or control over... She is dependent on the good nature of her friends, of her owners... There is some real wickedness to her friends, loving and safe wickedness, but real wickedness all the same, and I am very much looking forward to seeing where this gets everyone, and the fun times to come :)
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Jackie! When is the next chapter of this cool story going to be posted?
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Just read Chapter 12 and it was a delightful read! Jackie is fitting into her role as pet nicely and fulfilling one of her innermost fantasies. So, Dennis is going to transport Jackie's new cage back to the summer house. Sounds like Jackie's petrification will last awhile and Jackie will be undergoing training by Dana and Tracy with the possibility of being shown at some future show. Nice! A show will undoubtedly involve grooming which may involve another of Greg's friends? Jackie seems to be warming up to the idea of being "shown". I wonder if she "shows" well if others would be interested in acquiring her? So, looking forward to the subsequent chapters and seeing how she progresses.
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So yummy!
After a strong start, things slowed up a bit when they arrived at the house, and like Gregory, I agree that the back and forth between maid and pet was stopping the feelings building up in the most satisfactory way.
Now we're solidly in one of my favourite places. The heavy foreshadowing of the cage door catches wasn't wasted. There are some touches I love here. The bristly gloves to hamper any pet naughtiness, the human pet show, the 'truck' bed with the cage.
The stage seems set, I look forward to exciting new events. Poor Jackie, she's going to be so frustrated. I'm all a-quiver, waiting for her to discover how eager to please an appropriately motivated puppy can be.
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Thank you Drulema for you kind words, and I must apologize for my tarty response. I think Jackie will train up well, and I also think she has found a way to upstage per pretty and well dressed friends. I do wonder if the girls will tolerate her being the center of attention for very long, and if they don't what they will do to put things more properly back in order from their perspective. They have either unknowingly, (or quite intentionally), been grooming their friend Jackie for a life of servitude, and for her to be stolen away by one of the men in this story after all their hard work would be ironic, especially in light of their general preference for female lovers. What did happen to Gregory's first pet? Now that's a question, was she stolen away by another pet owner with deeper pockets after a good showing, or did she run away on her own after the kink of their relationship had run it's course?
Thank you again for your thought provoking words, Jackie.
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Thank you Amy. I always struggle with how much to put into a story, too many details make for a boring read, too few leaving you to have to explain some detail after it becomes relevant, like the lack of a proper cage door locking mechanism. Such would almost seem a given in this world we play in, half a dozen well placed small pad locks permanently trapping Jackie inside the cage, or at least until the key holder decided to let her out. I don't believe Jackie ever pondered loosing the use of her fingers or hands in this manor, her own abilities diminished and trapping her in the cage rather than her friends enhanced by some mechanical means.
She will be much more dependent on them this way, possibly to the point of irritation, and while Tracy and Dana's position on top will be secure, it comes at the cost of loosing a human servant that I think they will come to see between them as being more practical. Dana and Tracy are pampered and privileged, no one expects them to want to cook and clean up after themselves, and why should they when somebody else can do that for them pretty much free of charge, or at least for room and board?
I think Jackie will get off on being displayed in her identity concealing mask, but what she might not realize is that her pretty friends will be recognized, and when the three are seen out and about at some later date together everybody will suspect she was their masked pet at the show. I think that will be the motivation for her continued service to her friends well into the future if she should have any second thoughts, as would be a discrete tattoo that would link her pet persona and the human one should that become necessary.
Thank you again and please excuse my tarty response as I have had a lot going on here lately, Jackie.
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Finally I have been able to settle down and properly enjoy reading part 12
As before, I am going to write this as I read this next part of this wonderful story. I have just gone back and re-read parts 10 and 11, to make sure that my memory is refreshed on the most recent events, even though I have a fairly clear memory of the story arc to this point.
Re-reading these two parts, I am really struck, again, by the sheer density of "little" details, each of which adds so much flavour and detail to the characters, the emotions, and the richness of what is happening here! A lot of erotic stories have characters I care about, but few stories, few writers, have such nuanced and fascinating characters, where the inner state and thoughts of the characters are of such interest, and such a point of consideration for me as I am reading and enjoying :)
No stairs yet... hang on, I don't recall stairs being an issue. This is interesting, where are we going to? What are we up to now? The same building or a different location? I assume the same building, but we are clearly setting out to go further and explore new parts.
Bound and free, controlled yet free to act out within the boundaries of your role... yes, the duality is fun and fascinating, isn't it :)
*very evil smirk* the planets not aligning, or perhaps, as before, your self pleasure acting to limit and control your willingness, acting as a break on the run away train of experience, a break that is now being disabled if not totally removed! Things are lining up to get very interesting indeed going forward :)
Oh dear, is our little Jackie pet starting to feel frustrated at the realisation of her dreams, fantasies and desires? Muwahhhhh!
OK, now I am a little confused, perhaps I should have gone back more parts. We seem to be upstairs, or at least Jackie is, yet the sense is that she is also on the same floor as both the sitting room and the front door. This seems an unusual house layout. A minor point though, the arrival of food, and perhaps more importantly another man is much more interesting and intriguing at this point in time!
"bearing gifts of food for hungry humans", now that is a telling turn of phrase, a telling way of thinking about these things! Jackie really does seem to be accepting and sinking into her pet persona here, and drawing the distinction between humans and pets! Also delightfully limited in her ability to move and hide by her bondage, by her outfit :)
OK, I just did not go back far enough, we are deliberately upstairs and the front door is downstairs. Excellent building arrangement though, the stairs acting as another barrier, another point of control for wayward pets *evil smirk*
Oh dear, does our pet not expect others to visit the house while she is staying over? What ever gave her that idea? *evil smirk*
Well duh! Of course your friends, the girls, are in on your exposure like this, Gregory does not strike me as the sort of person to make such a silly mistake, but it is good to see you working this out, and also realising that yet again you are being pushed forward. Which brings up an interesting side thought, while kept in pet persona, and without full use of her hands, Jackie won't be able to make any additions to her diary, so the "pushing forward" of events is going to have to come from others...
Well, clearly our pizza delivering friend is well informed on the pet lifestyle. But a show?! It seems the girls don't yet know about this, but they also seem open to the idea... oh dear... *smirk*
Rules for how stock is transported?! Oh my! This is getting VERY interesting, very promising indeed!
Oh my! LOL! Conversation as spontaneous as the next sunrise indeed! What a lovely way of putting it!
Again, talk of reciprocation, of payment in some form or other... You keep teasing me like this, with this open ended question, what is on offer and who from?
Decision to make, well behaved or not, AH, and OH! OH again! OH! OK, so the girls new all about this, and when the lie about not deciding to go to the show happened, I read that as them being surprised at the news of the show, but no, suddenly it seems the lie was about deciding, since going to the show was already the plan. And behaving or not, a very clever and in fitting way of getting on going permission to keep pushing things forward!
My dear Jackie, vowing not to have second thoughts is all well and good, but it might not always be so easy if things keep on going forward, and exploring new heights of wicked kinkiness!
Um, does the word "maximum" from Dennis have some meaning here? I don't think this is a reference to anything earlier in this story, so I will just have to wait and see it seems.
Oh my! Suddenly Jackie is discovering and coming into her own power here, and using the power and appeal that has always been hers to grab a man's attention and to hold it most firmly on her! But also the clear reminder and demonstration, via the name tag, that she is property, property of her friends, and theirs to do with as they will, and their current will is to keep Jackie most firmly in pet mode and status for now...
I want more!!! Please be writing more parts to your wonderful stories, please :)
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Thank you so much for your wonderful insights, they force me to write better, or at least try to. Jackie is in for the long haul, that much is obvious, and I intend to let her let go and just enjoy the experience for what it is, comfortable in the knowledge that her friends love her and are ultimately responsible for her. They may at some point double cross her, or more accurately put their wants and "needs" above those of their friend, but such would be in character for them and their pampered upbringing as compared to Jackie's. There has always been an implied level of grooming with Jackie, they with their own long term opportunistic plans that I have yet to state clearly, unless of course some handsome man should come along and spoil them.
This story is a quality vs quantity thing for me, and I hope for your patience as I work on it.
Thank you again for your kind words, Jackie.
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Starting with quality vs quantity, the fact that I write my thoughts on each part, virtually line by line, should say it all :) Yes, I would like more parts, more quickly, and even to talk you into returning to one or two of your older stories that have not seen any new parts in quite some time, but quality is what really matters here!
Some of your thoughts here really rather surprise me, and I wonder why that is, why my perspective on this is quite so different. Thinking back, there have always been hints and comments about Jackie being a "helper" or even "maid" for her two friends, but in the story so far, in the scenes so far, this has always taken something of a back seat. It is there, but mostly what I am seeing, picking up on and responding to is the work her friends are having to do, the time, energy and sometimes money that is being devoted to making Jackie's fantasies come to life, that it has felt much more like they exist to look after Jackie, than Jackie is there to look after them.
Plus, probably coloured by personal experience of how much work each side has to put in for scenes to come to life :)
But yes, there does come a point where their needs, desires and wants start to take priority over Jackie's, especially since there is a strong sense that they have been reading and responding, very promptly, to the new entries Jackie has been placing into her diary.
Which does leave me wondering what forms of payment are being hinted at and discussed with the two new men who have just appeared to help us with pet Jackie. We know, clearly, that her friends are into women, but there are also clear hints that both of them admire a good looking man when one appears, and probably don't want to pay second fiddle to Jackie. But how is this to play out?
A lot of it depends on the psychology of it, of how things are presented, worded and framed. Offering sexual services can either be love making, something shared, something about both parties, or it can be quite one sided, one way or the other. Somehow I don't see Jackie being offered up for sex at this point, it would go against the keep her horny and denied plan, and I feel it would make her friends jealous. But what if Jackie is offered up to provide blow jobs, perhaps still while locked in a cage, keeping her clearly marked as an "animal", this would offer a form of usage, of payment, without automatically interfering with the friends desire to keep the men's attention on them as women, rather than on their naked friend.
The men appear worldly enough, experienced enough that they may well see and accept this distinction, but still, it might require Jackie to be punished for "using her body to try and steal the men away" from her friends, even though the friends were the ones to offer her up in the first place :)
The waiting for the next part gives me plenty of time to look forward to what you have in mind, and to keep up on life's other distractions, so don't rush, but also don't dawdle, I still have other stories of yours to pester you about as well :)
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I recall an amazing writer that wrote 12 chapters of an awesome story about a girl and her summer of dares. I wonder what happened to this writer and now I seek to find out. I would hate to think the end has come to Jackie and her adventures.
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I very much appreciate your interest, and I assure you that I am still writing this story. I have the ending already in my head, but getting the girls from here to there is my present stumbling block, and I also have some other projects running at the same time.
The girls are good friends, but Dana and Tracy's privileged lazy teen character traits will have to play into this at some point, the last chapter leaving my alter ego Jackie as the center of attention, something that Dana and Tracy just can't have. There is an element of patient construction in the girls relationship with Jackie, not that the three aren't good friends, but just that one of them is expected to serve the other two without compensation, nor expectation of compensation.
Jackie is therefore likely to become a "useful tool" for the girls exclusive use unless someone spoils their plans, and seeing how pets are a lot of work, and neither Dana or Tracy are inclined to do any more work than necessary, I don't see how a twenty four seven pet is a practicle long term "tool" for either of them. A short term play toy, yes, especially if such play helps Jackie fully submit and know her place in things.
These are the issues I intend to address in the next chapter/chapters that I am presently writing, and thank you again for your inspirational comments, Jackie.
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I am more glad to "not hear" about medical issues then I am to hear that the story is rambling around your head! Usually when a writer or artist I follow leaves a story alone for so long, it's because of, well other things besides creative block.
Not to influence the way you continue Jackie's story, I had been thinking that her submissive nature would increase and pet play would become a permanent part of her being and Dana and Tracy would seize upon it for their benefit. I also felt that maybe Jackie would be separated from them somewhere down the road, either temporarily or permanently,
However the story continues (and I hope does not end soon), I am sure I and other readers will be drawn further into it.
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Ugh!!!
I was so excited to see and update to Jackie's story and read it slowly, savoring every emotion, every interaction, every thought going through her head and then... Argh!!!
If this story was an averagely crafted one, I would just go on to the next one, not giving it a second thought that I had to wait for more, more, more!
But I admit I hate sitting on the edge of my chair for the next chapter as Jackie appears to be getting deeper into "subspace" and her role as a playful puppy.
So, with all dignity tossed out on my part, when is the next chapter coming???
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Thank you so much for your kind words, I am writing the second part of Jackie's 'missing time' adventure as we speak, but it was impossible for me to jam the whole experience into just one chapter without it looking like I had done so. Dana and Tracy are more than partially responsible for what had happened, they deep down terrified at what could have happened had fortune gone a slightly different way, the seriousness of this "game" and their shallow actions at odds with each other and in need of a fresh look, but to be fair they are teenagers.
I intend to explain Dana and Tracy's unique and individual motivations toward their even more unique pet in the next chapter, the girls having to come to a new understanding between themselves though for this to happen. I expect that there will be some friction between the major players, but they all love each other, and as long as they keep this in mind it should all work out ok.
Gregory and Dennis are the wild variable here, but both men couldn't be any more different. Gregory is thoughtful and a long term thinker with a strategic plan of his own that we have yet to learn, and in contrast Dennis is a fun loving mix of hormones and sneakers with more predictable desires and asperations.
In the end though it was Jackie's adventure, and her desires on the subject obviously matter, I at odds whether to have her have total recall at some point, or just to document the parts she can remember in her diary for later use. She could do this in such a way that would goad her pretty friends into a repeat performance when they read her written words on the subject, or those same words could scare the girls off from ever allowing the Jackie pet persona to appear again for fear that they might loose her for good.
Thank you again for your kind words, Jackie.
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Summer of dares, part 13 thoughts.
Finally here, this has been sitting on my "I want to read and comment on" pile for a little while, right on top, and now it's time, thankfully :)
*smirk* Jackie seems very comfortable and happy with being the centre of attention. Certainly she is not showing any signs of awareness of the pending price for upstaging her friends. So having this so clearly marked and pointed out is rather amusing, and just adds to the sense and feeling of anticipation that is hanging over this, and what is about to happen next.
Now that is sweet, so romantic and lovely, such trust and faith in Jackie, as she once more embraces handing over all of the control, and all of the safety concerns that go with it to her friends. Yes, it is amazing that she gets to be free to enjoy subspace like this, but I do still wonder what the price of all of this will be, and when it will start to come due. Of course, that is part of the fun, the waiting to find out :)
Strangely comforting, that is an interesting turn of phrase here. From the outside looking in, feeling so relaxed and comfortable in subspace may indeed seem and feel strange, but with the necessary level of trust, of experience and comfort, of course Jackie is going to be sinking into this, it is clearly speaking to a core part of who and what she is, and the feeling of letting go like this is quite amazing!
As for it being sexual, or not being sexual, the rules get a lot more mixed up and interesting by this time. Yes, your naked female parts are being touched, but thats just a side effect of the action, not the point of the action, so it makes perfect sense to me that this does not feel sexual in the moment.
The comment about Jackie looking like a willing participant interests and puzzles me. It is almost as if she is passing on all responsibility for taking part onto someone else, yet this is the whole point. She is a willing participant, in the sense that she has said to her friends "take control and do unto me".
Huh?! This seems like a fairly serious context jump, so just have to wait and see what happened. I do like that she is still tied so that she cannot release her pent up passion, we need to keep her interested and well behaved after all *evil smirk*
Crying was a little puzzling, but emotional low, with you now. The bigger the high, the bigger the drop on the other side...
Watching the wording, watching the way Jackie feels she knows and trusts Gregory is "odd", I think that is the best word. Her reactions and apparent knowledge of him speak to quite a lot of time, exposure and trust, thing that just had not had the time to properly develop. So the time gap helps to explain this.
I must say though, a time gap like this that needs to be filled in, this really is Not a story telling technique that I am familiar with, so I am very curious and a little on edge to see where this is going, and what happened to get us to this point.
Ran away, well away, into the woods?! This really does not seem to fit with what I know and expect here. Was this a function of the puppy personality? Time will tell, but thats really quite confusing.
Being revealed naked and spread out like this, in a way the lack of any form of embarrassment seems quite normal and reasonable to me, even as it is being pointed out that this is considered noteworthy by her friends. Why though... I think I am taking this view because of the very relaxed and trusting way Jackie is responding to Gregory, she is reacting like someone who has had quite a lot of time, contact and trust with him. Against this background being shown off as a naked and bound "slave girl", her now default and fairly constant state, seems quite normal and reasonable.
I am actually more concerned about the bruised and scratched up state of her body!
The fact that naked and making food all seem so natural and reasonable now fit with the general sense of progressing well as a "naked slave", but do not fit so well with 2 solid days spent as a dog. The mystery deepens.
Um... now Dana is showing serious signs of being really pissed with Jackie. The mystery does infact keep on getting deeper.
Why the anger? The same question as already asked, but now it seems so sharp that loosing the friendship, the friendship that has helped to make all of this possible in the first place, possible. That is some serious and deep seated upset and anger.
I wonder to what degree Gregory is after the "wrong" woman here. He clearly seems very taken with Jackie, which makes perfect sense for a dominant male, but I can see her friends really not liking his preference for the "plain slave" over them...
Yes, I agree, what the hell is going on here? Jackie is still naked and tied up, serving her role, but her dynamic with her friends is obviously going to be very different to her dynamic with Gregory, and he has just effectively accused her friends of being partly behind a major mess. It is telling that Jackie's strong and immediate response is to leap to the defense of her friends, and in effect to attack Gregory in the process.
So why is Gregory trying to reinforce the hierarchy here and now, like this?
Jealocy?! A powerful emotion. The hints suggest that her friends were competing with each other for Dennis's attentions, and that Jackie the puppy somehow got into the middle of this competition, and went looking for her own share of the attention... but this is just trying to put the pieces together, and leaves one hell of a lot still to be worked out and understood.
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I found myself in a struggle to get the girls from "here to there" and at the same time remembering that the girls, as teenagers, (even though the obviously love each other) should be expected to do something shallow and teenagerish. Dana and Tracy found themselves lacking in attention after putting so much effort into this ostensibly for their friends benefit, they going to the proverbial well of their appearance and sex appeal to again capture the spotlight from pet Jackie. Pet Jackie then escaped from her cage and took off, something real pets will do if they feel unwanted in their adopted home, of if their in heat and looking to breed...
I plan on explaining this missing time in the next chapter, and Jackie's debt to a few strangers who helped find her after she had slipped into full pet mode and became lost in the woods. The fright of Jackie getting this deep into character will likely have an effect on any possible future pet scenarios thought, and one of the girls will be happy about this, and the other not so much.
As to the actual missing time and gap in the story, I wanted to try to tell this from Jackie's perspective, and to her everything that happened once in full pet mode happened to the pet Jackie and not the human one that can fully recall it. It's a very scary scenario, and one that I don't think the girls will want to try out again, at least without some safety built in this time. Jackie may also be committed to do something in repayment for the strangers help, at least one time, but she might not even know this yet.
I may have left this chapter with too many unanswered questions, but I will correct that in the future, Jackie.
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You did leave a lot of unanswered questions here, but I find this is common with your writing. Since you like to have plots with substance, lots of ideas at once, the result is that things move forward, but raise as many questions as they answer.
Yes, you are right, I myself have been loosing track of the ages of the girls sometimes, seeing them so adult, at least in my own mind, this does cause me to sometimes loose sight of their teenage nature and age, so it is good to be reminded of this.
The whole mind state of being a pet, how this shifts her mental state, how she behaves, I really don't have much of a sense of this, its quite outside of my knowledge, so I am really fascinated to see how this develops, what you have to say and to show us here. Moving into new territory is always interesting to my mind :)
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Part 14 up today
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I couldn't click my mouse button fast enough to read this chapter! Not disappointed at all. So, my questions with everything is how is Jackie going to stay as a pet, be trained along with her friends so she can be shown at the pet show and all perform perfectly, and will she stay as a pet with Gregory during her training and afterwards? Looking forward to more chapters with the proverbial "bated breath"!
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Thank you so much Drulema, I've been struggling with some serious writers block lately, and your words of encouragement obviously help with that.
At the beginning of this adventure it looked like this might be the girls last summer together before they went their separate ways, and now that looks much less likely, but somebody might have to do the menial things for both Dana and Tracy that they never really have had to at home. Sure they had been given the chore of cleaning up their rooms or even their houses from time to time, but Jackie had been manipulated into that service in their stead when the girls could get away with it.
Did Tracy and Dana each grow up with a maid because of their wealth, even a part time one? I don't think I've covered this, but it could explain/reinforce their stereotype of cleaning and general housework being somebody else's job. If so, both girls could at some level be willing to do almost anything not to have to do such things deemed below them, enslaving their less wealthy friend seeming logical from a certain selfish perspective. Again, the girls are all teenagers, and some teenagers, especially privileged ones, can be quite lazy if left to their own devices.
Dana and Tracy are now on the same page with all this, their perhaps unintentional grooming of their friend coming to fruition. Maybe the girls didn't even intend to create a quasi slave originally, but now that they have one, (by accident or design), it makes sense to use her rather than letting Gregory steal her away for much the same. Neither of the girls really need a pet, one would be fun and all that, and they may still play at having a pet when it suits them, but a full time live in maid instead means Tracy doesn't have to play maid herself.
This of course sets up a conflict as Jackie is committed to play pet at least one more time to be shown publicly by all three in all her nearly naked glory. Will this entail some serious training in a public setting beforehand?
I suspect she will once again slip into full sub space pet mode at some point, but this time with far more security so she can't possibly escape. Perhaps an early version of a shocker collar could be employed, but I don't know if such a thing existed yet in the timeframe that this story takes place. Maybe even Gregory invents the first shocker collar, Jackie being his guinea pig of sorts, and Gregory then becoming handsomely wealthy from his invention?
I think that part could be fun, what are your thoughts?
Thank you again for your kind words of encouragement, Jackie.
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I agree that Dana & Tracy should have their own slave/maid and Jackie's mindset at this point is conditioned for that to happen. I also feel as you said, that Dana & Tracy are of the same mind to keep Jackie so maybe all 3 will attend the same college and have their own place off campus away from prying eyes. Jackie would attend classes, maintain the residence as a slave/maid, do the girl's homework and also provide sexual relief. I do feel that Jackie should be trained as a pet with some assistance from Gregory and be shown at least once prior to becoming the girl's slave/maid. Jackie's acceptance at being naked among other people seems "normal" for her, but may need reinforcement by being "shown". As far as security for Jackie as a pet, maybe something like an "invisible fence" can be modified to limit Jackie's movements. Maybe Dana & Tracy would enjoy a day or two of "pet" Jackie once in awhile. It would be a shame not to since Jackie's mindset has totally accepted it. However their lives continue, I'll be sure to enjoy the journey.
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After careful consideration my first reactions are "um" and "wibble", both in a good way :)
What has happened here seems somehow both totally natural and reasonable, but also quite strange and a bit "off". Now to see if I can get these thoughts to line up nicely...
Nope, I am going to be jumping around a bit here. First Gregory, he seems so... disconnected from all of this. My main feeling and sense that his focus and interest in all of this is Jackie, both as a submissive and as a pet, with a very "distant" interest in her two friends. Not the normal reaction I would expect from a red blooded young male, when presented with two lovely ladies who have just engaged in a blatant threesome just to make sure they are the centre of attention, and to feel desired and important.
I do understand that Gregory is much more interested and focused on the pet element at work here, and also much more aware of, and bound by, the responsibilities that come with being in charge here. I am left with the sense that what Gregory wants here is diverging quick quickly from what Jackie's friends want, desire, and feel up to handling here... yet still they have commitments to him, an obligation to complete...
Watching Jackie accept and basically embrace all of the responsibility for what happened feels both very right and very wrong at the same time. Right in that it is fitting, it matches so very well with her submissive nature, the realisation of her fantasies, the shape of the desires that she has shared with her friends and put so firmly on display. Even Gregory is supporting and encouraging this take on events, with his acceptance of the ongoing restraint, insisting on being called Sir, and obviously looking to keep on getting access to Jackie in her pet persona.
Yet for all of this a part of me wants to ask, and to demand, what of the responsibility of the others for putting Jackie into this position to begin with? Even as this may be an "unfair" focus, it is part of the price that the dominant pays in this world, the price of responsibility. So yes, yet again the youth of the girls is shown off, but also the massive level of trust, and the sense that they are almost a single "being", all three joined so closely and tightly together.
Looking once more at Gregory's point about how deeply into her pet role Jackie went, I am left with the thought and feeling that we are rapidly approaching, if not already past, the point where Jackie, for her continued happiness and stability, needs to keep her dominant friends both in her life and in charge of her life, to give her the structure and "freedom" that she wants and needs, even as she feeds them ideas and encouragement.
Which I assume is what this story is partly pointing towards and at.
Looking forward, it is clear that the friends want the benefits of having a "slave", without such a massive overhead of responsibility as comes with having a full time pet. Yet given that the idea of a pet came in part from them, and given the ongoing responsibilities here, I cannot see "pet" Jackie being left to far behind or alone...
A conversation with all of their parents, something is obviously up and being planned, longer term, and much bigger in scope than simply the holiday together.
I like, a lot, what I am seeing in drulema's post, but a couple of thoughts occur to me. Having "maid Jackie" keeping house, running around after them, etc, makes perfect sense for the girls while they are away at college, and longer term, since they are not going to want to give up on this free and fun labour. Yet enrolling Jackie into college herself, having her do both her own classes and their own assignments, they risk spreading Jackie to thin, and also giving her to much of a sense of her own independence... not something they are going to warm to.
Plus there is the ongoing risk of having a submissive, naked and bound maid around the house pulling attention and focus away from them when they have guests over...
So I find myself thinking along a slightly different front. Having Jackie with them at college, but with a light course load, something more focused on her new "career" as a maid servant perhaps, along with some system to keep her confined to the house when outside of classes. The comment about the timeline and what technology is available has confused me slightly, since I don't recall picking up hints of this before, but it does complicate matters.
Simply locking Jackie the maid into restraints, an outfit that will attract all attention in public, and keeping the house keys out of her reach will help, but isn't guaranteed on its own. I suspect there is some form of "obvious" answer here, but I also wonder about some form of "ankle chain on a runner" that would give her freedom of motion about the rooms in the house they want her to have access to, while keeping her constantly locked up, so she never has the chance to escape.
Beyond this, to handle the problem of her distracting guests from the ladies of the house, I am thinking a separate room / building out back for the maid, keeping her separate from the body of the house, so out of sight, out of mind at times. Also an outside run for the times she needs to be kept as a pet, to keep her in practice, but also properly under control / lock and key?
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I intend to have all three girls petition their parents to attend the local college instead of going away to the schools already chosen for them. In Dana and Tracy's case this will be sold as a better budget option for their wealthy parents that will allow the three friends to stay together and keep each other out of trouble. In Jackie's case this will be something she can afford, most certainly if she attends part time, which I hadn't considered until you suggested it... thank you.
Will each of the girls have to pay room and board to Dana's parents to stay at the summer house while at school, even a token amount? Or, will they just have to have regular visits from Dana's parents or older brother to ensure the summer house is being kept up properly? Jackie will have to earn her keep one way or the other, perhaps Jackie working off her debt with the girls for the "rent money" they had fronted from their own accounts, as if an indentured servant.
I intended this story to start in the 1970's, although I didn't state this specifically. The large car with it's V-8 engine and large trunk, corded phone on the wall of the summer house, and lacking cell phones with GPS maybe not making this as clear as I had intended though. I think this time frame makes the girl's kink just a little more "out there" and ahead of their time, I thinking, perhaps erroneously, that girls romantically and sexually involved with other girls was just a little less common back then. I could obviously be mistaken with this, but that was the premise I was going with.
I think also that girls from that time frame weren't all necessarily college bound as it seems today, getting married off and being home raising a family more common than it is today. There is nothing wrong with either, but it seems to me, where I live, that such things were possible in the 1970's on one paycheck, where today it almost always takes two.
I liked the idea of a shocker dog collar, (already invented in the 1970's), married together with some kind of invisible fencing technology, (not invented yet) to keep Jackie on the property and out of harms way. Could Gregory invent this, or even perfect it's design and make himself quite wealthy. I like the idea of Jackie being his guinea pig to work out the "kinks" pun intended, but what are your thoughts?
Gregory also has a little hidden guilt at the Jackie running away incident, something that will come out eventually as Jackie remembers more and more of the details of her missing time while on the run in pet persona. I intended it to be just a little unbelievable that Jackie, (on hands and knees), could outrun Gregory on two legs and escape into the woods to disappear, unless he were somehow preoccupied or distracted.
I hope your not disappointed with the direction of the story going forward, and as always thank you for your thought provoking comments, Jackie.
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First things first, "disappointed" is simply NOT a word that applies, at all :)
I am seriously enjoying each and every part of this, and as I start to work through my rather large story backlog, I have an eye on your authors page on gromet's plaza, so many more of your stories to discover and explore! :)))
After my last reply I remembered a rather terrible, from my point of view, experience with "tree climbing". Simply not something I enjoyed at all, but the way the safety harnesses work came back to mind. Basically it was a "double lock". In order to release side A, you had to secure something to side B before side A could be released. This way the customer was guaranteed to always be secured, via the lock and harness, to the safely line. I don't remember very well how it worked, but the mechanism was fairly simple, and without a spare "key" you could not get out mid way round.
It occurred to me that something like this would aid as a fairly simple security measure for Jackie, while she is being kept in one building or one area. Something simple while the shock collar is looked into :)
This would require some extra form of "control", something external to hold over Jackie to make sure she didn't go running off when at her classes, and outside of direct supervision. I know and accept that to submissive Jackie the very idea is unacceptable, but after she ran away as a puppy, everyone is going to want some extra safeguards in place. It can start with something as simple as no cash, no money, no extra clothes and not learning how to drive. Harder to run away then, but only a start point... something may come to me in a bit.
The closest to "disappointment" this is coming is missing returning to the mystery and interest of the "deserted" mental health hospital, a venue that seemed so very full of promise, and also its own mystery or two that you teased me with some parts ago. Of course, once based at a local college then it is within reach once more, if and when a change of venue becomes useful.
Looking at the deepening and changing relationship between the girls, it's sometimes hard to call them women, I do think a change of direction is required, making this into something deeper, more meaningful and longer lasting! Simply one summer of dares and it is over... this no longer fits, not with the changes that are taking place, and the looming reality of having to hire your own maid, or horror of horrors, do the work yourself for her two entitled friends!!! Much as their parents look after and indulge them, it seems unlikely that they would be sent to college with a live in maid to tend for them! At least not thanks to their parents.
The clues for the historical setting are all there, especially once listed, I just never really picked up on them, being much more focused on other things :)
Certainly society in general seems / looks much less accepting of their differences than it seems today. Of course, society tends to be more accepting of rich people doing "eccentric" things, so this is another point of control for the friends, and another line of social control, as Jackie is expected not to act up around her "betters", at least in some social settings.
Given the very strong focus from Gregory on pet play, and the fact that both Jackie and her friends are drawn, to a degree, to this, says that some form of dog control is going to be needed. Given Gregory is well established inside a good sized (they have shows) pet play culture, there is plenty of scope for him to have contacts who have looked into a shock collar, even if this isn't something he is going to develop entirely on his own.
A related thought, if he starts developing this, but Jackie's friends are able to come in as business partners for his fledgling idea, they bring the money and some contacts, he the technical skills, Jackie the test model and test case... This could help to tie things together a little more neatly.
Yes, Jackie as a dog escaping seems "to easy", but down on all fours, obstructions are very different than they are to an upright human, especially one not looking to wade through mud, thorns, slippery banks, etc. The sort of terrain dog's love to disappear into, which are a total pain to follow on two legs! Plus, how can Gregory not have been somewhat distracted, and had his mind on other things? *evil smirk*
The idea of Dana's older brother, and "payment", it raises an obvious question and thought. One form of payment is obviously Jackie offering up some form of sexual services, we are already showing clear movement in this direction. BUT, also, anything that happens has to be done without invoking to much jealousy from her friends, even as her friends are happy to use sex to bribe and manipulate a boy they fancy having a three way with.
This actually, in a way, leads me back towards pet Jackie, since having "pet Jackie" in a sexual setting is much less "threatening" than "here is our friend, another woman, competing with us for sexual attention and interest".
ps - how do I encourage you to revisit "dumped by the side of the road" one of these days? :)
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All wonderful ideas, thank you for sharing them. I wonder of handy Dennis could be the one to install the ankle cable run to keep Jackie in place inside the summer house when not attended by her friends? It would make sense as involving some outside contractor would raise all kinds of questions, and Dennis is already up to speed on the girls kink so this would be logical as well.
I don't know how one would either hide such a thing, or explain it away during some kind of surprise inspection from Dana's older brother, or even her parents as it is their house. That part could be fun, especially if the older brother "caught" Jackie naked and attached to the cable run on an unexpected inspection. Would he be cool with the girl's naked games, or wish to turn them in if Jackie and or Tracy didn't offer up some "assurances" that this was a voluntary situation?
What kind of relationship do the siblings have? One of loving respect, or of nagging competitiveness for their parent's attention? Is Dana the favorite, or is the brother, or are there even other's in the family and is Dana the youngest and looking to make a name for herself?
Having the girls as investors and profiting from Jackie's servitude would be fitting on several levels, and I could see some extensive R&D on this project that would ensure some long term pet time for Jackie. This might not be what Dana and Tracy really want, but I could see them willing to use their pet in this way none the less to bring Gregory's invention to market.
Could this be the girl's shared school project, bring a "fictitious" idea through the patent process and to market for final grade? The girls could be business majors after all, so this could work.
Could Dana's brother end up being involved, either as an advisor, or an additional investor, his silence on the unique status of Jackie's imprisonment bought and paid for in this way? Has he always had a secret crush on Jackie, perhaps he even accidently seeing some of the naked pushed into the pool dares the girls have played at in the past?
The girls have to go back to the hospital to retrieve Jackie's things, but will they be there? Was Jackie's dream a premonition, and are they preparing to demo the expansive complex to prevent kids from wandering around inside and possibly getting injured while the girls are on their vacation?
Could Jackie's missing or unrecoverable things include her driver's license inside her wallet, inside the locker in the hospital? Could this be something she just can't admit to loosing, or something once admitted, her parents unwilling to arrange a replacement for to teach some lesson in responsibility?
I could go back to dumped on the side of the road, the dare jar is still nearly full, but in possession of one who might just see the wanna be dom as the more natural submissive. I was kind of going in this direction to make it not so predictable, perhaps even inviting a third party in to be dom to both girls. The girls training time could be designed to bring this to light, this not the first time in human history that one went looking for what she thought she wanted, only to find that she was mistaken.
Thank you again for your thoughtful words, Jackie.
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Many questions to think on, many interesting ideas to consider...
Yes, Dennis helping with any "handyman" jobs makes sense. I suspect it won't just be the cable runs that are needed. Extra locks are likely to be useful, after all, if Jackie doesn't require clothes, but still needs access to rooms to clean and tidy them, why allow her the ability to open wardrobes, etc? Extra overhead for her keepers, so just another element of her "upkeep" that they will have to be "paid" for... after all, it is unfair to inconvenience them so just for Jackie's "benefit" without some proper thanks from her.
The changes might not be obvious at first, at least if Jackie isn't naked and chained up, but even a casual visit or two to the house will start to raise questions and suspicions... odd little things that on their own aren't worth mentioning, but leave one wondering if something strange is going on...
Dana's brother, even Dana and Tracy's siblings... Thinking back on what I know and have seen of Dana and Tracy, they are both strong willed people, they can be competitive / argumentative at times, both quite used to getting their own way, people who are willing and more than able to impose their will on others. Yet they are still teenagers, they don't have the maturity of adults yet.
Given this, any siblings are likely to either be very quiet and shy, effectively submissive in this situation, or strong willed and often at odds with the "stupid and immature" actions of the "girls". Actually, I can see exactly this sort of description being used upon first discovering what is going on with Jackie.
This opens up an interesting angle, someone with a more mature and level headed approach to things, getting a bit more attention to be paid to sorting out the every day practicalities of keeping a maid / pet / slave at home. But this would of course interfere with Dana and Tracy's total control over Jackie, which is just something else that they will need to punish Jackie for *evil smirk*
With a bit of care this can all tie in together. On the surface keeping Jackie as a slave is just a silly idea, just waiting to go wrong. So it will take time and effort on Jackie's part to show and convince that this is something she wants and needs. More than this though, if you can show that there is a business opportunity here, a way to turn this "childish hobby" into a device that makes money, once development is done, then this puts a very different perspective on things. This allows some skirting of the ethical issues here, allowing us to focus more on this is what everyone involved wants, and look, we can even throw in plenty of sexual favours to sweeten the deal.
Yes, prolonged pet time for Jackie will sort of work for Tracy, if I remember correctly, and certainly for Gregory, but not so much for Dana. But this will be required to actually pursue the R&D that is central to making this idea work.
The hospital seems so ideal, a home away from home, especially when work needs to be done on their house to make it more secure and suitable. Also, if and when Dana and Tracy want to have friends over, parents who are not in the loop visit, etc, they are going to need somewhere safe and secure to keep their property where she cannot run away again. So having the hospital demolished doesn't seem helpful at all, but yes, using the possessions already there as a start point for exercising more control over Jackie, and leverage via Jackie's parents sounds ideal :)
Dumped by the side of the road is a story I haven't returned to in a while, but it managed to strike a very deep cord in me, and I have often hoped and wondered if you would return to this. So if the desire to explore this did strike you, I would love to see the results. But also, I want to see more of this story, and the other current stories you are working on as well! :)
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Part 15 up today.
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Well, you did it!
You wrote another chapter that kept my interest from start to finish!
Now, things look to be getting a little more defined at the same time a little more complex.
Jackie is now the maid, servant, slave & pet of Dana & Tracy (though how much time she will spend as each is undefined - currently).
She also seems to be at ...the beginning of a beautiful friendship - Rick Blaine. :)
And what does the future hold for Jackie & Peter, Tim & Frank, hmmm?
And how are the girls going to explain Jackie's "living/sleeping arrangement"?
I thought Jackie getting the tattoo was perfectly timed & placed (LOL). I'm imagining it says "Property of Dana & Tracy", but I'm also sure that's way to expected.
If it had some reference to "pet", I could see Jackie being made to get a ring pierced "somewhere" so Dana could later add a tag to it.
Can't wait (really, I can not wait!) for the next chapter!
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Thank you drulema, I rewrote that one more than once, the girls relationship wandering into this new deal territory. I think the three brothers will be fun going forward, and also make some competition for Gregory. I left plenty of room on the contract for more signatures, and I think the tattoo will be a paw print with the initials of the primary "owners." I can also see some kind of prototype invisible fence contraption in the future, perhaps with the demonstration being at a future pet show.
I still want this to be fun, but maybe just a little more serious form of fun going forward, Jackie.
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Fun? YES! I think Jackie is testing her submissive nature and her diary entries show that. But they are becoming more serious as she slides into what is becoming more of a 24/7 role of servitude. The paw print tattoo is a good idea, but what do you think about 2 or maybe 3 paw prints, each with Dana's, Tracy's & possibly Greg's initials?
And does the summerhouse have a basement? Maybe a room where Jackie can be kept "stored" away? I'm sure Greg would have a few items to add that would keep Jackie restrained in there.
And of course, the "pet" show must go on!
Did you get my reference "the beginning of a beautiful friendship"?
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First of all, I love old movies, but I haven't seen Casablanca in years. The quote fits perfectly though, because Jackie is marooned there at the summer house now, and by her own hand.
I think the tattoo will have room for several sets of initials, and the date it was put on, this part perhaps critical, but I don't want to give away the entire story just yet. Gregory also made a huge mistake with his contract, but more on that later...
Where to keep Jackie when she's not "in use" or would otherwise be inconvenient? An outside only entrance to the basement comes to mind, perhaps one locked from the outside with a heavy door when necessary? I also like dumping her off at the abandoned hospital, or perhaps just pitching a tent someplace remote on the property with a heavy chain attached to a tree to keep her put. The boys even had a tree house on the property once, and Jackie could always be left there for a day, with the ladder removed, or she somehow restrained to keep her from climbing down.
One of the boys could catch her in the treehouse though, but would he take advantage if he did? I could also see the treehouse being filled with Playboy and Penthouse type magazines from their own teen years, or even with the new looking means to restrain Jackie in place, I'm thinking shiny new eye bolts and padlocks. This would give away it's more recent uses, even if Jackie wasn't presently locked up inside it when they visited it, and invite further curiosity.
Just some random thoughts on the direction of this story going forward, and thank you for some wonderful ideas, Jackie.
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Yeah, I miss the old movies; they had substance.
Regarding where Jackie can be stored - if it's an old summer house, maybe it has an old root cellar or storeroom that hasn't been used in years. Maybe use one of the old mattresses stored in the attic.
I like the hospital idea too; maybe kept there over night or for a day or 2 with enough food and water of course.
I'm imagining if she had to be kept out of sight, it would probably need to be for a day or longer. I doubt anyone stopping by would be staying for just a few hours.
Whatever direction future chapters go or any new implements introduced I anticipate another great read!
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All great ideas, especially the root cellar. This particular summerhouse didn't have one, to the best of my knowledge, but that doesn't mean the one from my story couldn't have one. I have come upon them while hiking, just stone structures built into a bank with a domed roof, but a stout door of either steel bars, or thick oak timbers could always be fabricated by someone handy, if I only had such a character...
Thank you for your kind words, Jackie.
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LOL, if only!
Ok, a small old wine cellar - what's a fine summer house without one!
And it has probably been replaced by a wine refrigerator so the wine cellar hasn't been used in years.
Old homes had root cellars - at least mine did. Not very clean as I recall and quite cool and small with all the shelves in it. but remove those and a lot more room!
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Before starting I have just re-read parts 13 and 14, to remind myself properly of where we left off, and to get my head back in the right space for these characters :) I am also reminded again of just how delicious all of this is, and the wonderful erotic charge it carries!
The first thought is simple, this part seems quite a lot longer, GOOD! I get so into enjoying each part, finding them so short, it can get me all worked up and going, but then it stops, leaving me normally with more questions than when I started! Tease!!!!
I am tempted to mutter something about what happens to evil teases, but this is a different conversation, for a different place.
Well, that’s one way to start the next part with a “bang”. This suggests a sudden change of direction for all three of them, picking a new college, setting up to be long term residents in this summer house. Still, it’s no wonder that there are going to be some conditions, we have just been considering that in their own way Dana and Tracy are still teenagers and immature, at times, so no wonder there is some concern at handing them to much on a plate.
*smirk* yes, you are 18, and thus an adult, but this doesn’t make you the bill payer, apparently a little detail that you are not used to considering or dealing with :) Definitely a well off and entitled background.
The three of you keeping each other out of trouble, such a lovely world view, and no doubt it makes a great deal of sense from her parent’s point of view. Of course we all know it’s not going to be quite that simple don’t we *smirk*
LOL, the contrast between the phone call with her parents about all of her options, while pointing out the current, and hopefully ongoing reality of not actually having any options of her own, or even choices of her own, just as she wants it to be :)
You know, the tone of the thoughts about being the maid for both friends, and also the one doing most of the course work / homework, you almost sound hopeful, like this is something you are looking forward to and very much want to do... strange that, really :)
Not considering how long term, how permanent these changes are going to be... well, only moments ago you were basically “away with the fairies”, so deep in sub space that you became the pet you were being. Before that, mostly you have just lived your own life, wanting and perhaps pushing, in your own subtle ways for this, but not living it, not getting much of it. I doubt any of you really have any sense of what the scope of this will be, but your friends will have a much better sense, in the sense that they know how living with a maid is and feels.
But for you, really stepping into the unknown, leaping with great energy from a very high cliff into the unknown, with only your friends and their love for you to catch and support you! Brave, epic, amazing, loving, powerful, and perhaps foolish, but oh, wow!
Now that is an “interesting”, as in I have a tingle, and I am wondering if I should be worried, turn of phrase. You are willing “at the time” to do anything for the girls. Then again, you really don’t know what you are getting into, so how can it be otherwise. Still, there is a certain ominous note to this comment...
Now that surprises me a bit, how come Gregory is so surprised that it is going to take the girls so much time and focus to become properly presentable to appear in public? The degree of this might be more than usual, but surely the basic principle and point is something that he is well familiar with? Perhaps he has just spent a lot of time moving in a different world, with different rules.
Gregory really is remarkably “calm” around the diary writing, so it does raise the question of how much of it he has read or knows. We are LONG past the point where the diary can be considered to be private in any sense, but until now it was only shared between the three girls... time will tell.
Ooh, now this is an interesting line of thinking. A contract of servitude, since she is not the one paying the bills. You can make the argument that not doing this does make you a hypocrite, but I do feel that you require a fairly specific world view, point of view, to reach that conclusion and to be sure of it. Certainly not a point of view that most would take, instead taking this more on a day by day basis. Still, the logic of this is sound and in this situation hard to argue. Still, do you have any sense of what you are opening the door to here? Probably not, but how else to set about finding out?
Adjunct professors, now that is interesting, this makes Gregory older, and in all likelihood more mature than I had somehow been thinking. He has always felt very mature and wise for his years, but somehow, without a good reference point, I had thought of him as basically the same age as the girls, which had also puzzled me in the background, since he seemed very mature and wise for his years. So this actually puts things into a better light and makes more sense of them.
AGAIN with the massively leading, yet almost subtle, hints and comments! The decision to make the contract has already clearly been made, yet the comment that it is just for the three girls “at the time”... screams how the number of involved people is expected to increase over time!
Of course, just taking the people already in hand, Gregory seems likely to be an ongoing, even if only intermittent partner to all of this, and there are the siblings of both of your friends, most especially of Dana, who it has been hinted will be involved in looking after the house, and thus around and in contact with at least some of your kinky goings on.
OH MY GOD!!! I am really torn at this point, in part I am so impressed and proud of her, giving Gregory, and more specifically Dana a complete blank check, so to speak, for the contract that is to be drawn up and signed, stating up front that it is expected to run for years, and to bind and control her actions totally and completely. Only with the trust, love and background between the girls could this be a good idea, which is why part of me is screaming “red alert!” very loudly. Nothing says dangerous idiot who has no idea as “take me, I have no limits, everything is fine”. Again, this amazing blend of innocent, passion and determination!
As for this striking a cord in Gregory, well, yet more evidence of how deeply his connection and history into the world of kink and the realities of dominance and submission run!
I feel unsure, uneasy, unsettled, by her returning again to the thought and the point that there needs to be such a serious punishment for her running off on them like she did. I can see, follow and understand her thinking and point of view here, what is driving this for her. But at the same time I keep on thinking that this came about due to things outside of her control, and instead she needs “healing”, not punishment. One of those times where perhaps my natural instinct to be a romantic gets in the way, or perhaps just a different point of view. I don’t disagree or object, I just feel uneasy... it depends on how it plays out really.
Beyond this though, the point about keeping the heavy punishments for failing to keep up the contract makes perfect sense. After all, by now we all know (well Gregory probably doesn’t) just how much her drive and motivation drops away after an orgasm, so she knows going into this that there needs to be something to help keep her focused. Plus, and this is just occurring to me, obvious now I have thought of it, how much of this is her asking for harsher treatment, bigger punishments, to be taken, pushed and forced further and further, without actually just coming out and asking for it.
By framing it like this, she is making sure that it happens, that it has to happen, it is only right and proper that it happens, but its not her asking or requesting it... WOW, impressive bit of cunning there! I like :)
Your outfit, OK, so it’s pervert thinking, but I love the mental image of the sweatshirt looking like, and then becoming, the only thing that you are wearing :)
Upstaging your friends again... well, looking like that it’s not really a surprise. You know, you do seem to be doing a LOT of upstaging them at the moment... talk about racking up the punishments!
WOW, that was fast, getting the details the girls want in the contract worked out and agreed in just the time it took her to get ready... this suggests they are rather broad and sweeping, leaving LOTS of room for the details to be discovered later, no doubt deliberately.
Now that is interesting, clearly her interest in and focus on Gregory has already moved well past the casual comfortable stage to the “I must have you” stage... things are getting more complex, and also more interesting here. On this front, we don’t (I think) know what Gregory teaches, so we don’t know how easy or hard it will be to avoid being his student. Still, sensible rules for the college to have.
OK, now you are being deliberately mysterious! Corporal punishment, sounding really severe in the contract, makes sense. Only the girls and not you can amend it, makes sense. But this other part... what are you getting at?!
Now I am just being down right suspicious, but the copier and the contract, pressing the button twice, we aren’t setting up a stray and “at loose” copy of the contract are we, ready to be discovered by some 3rd party, thus drawing them into this? Or is this just reasonable detail about what real life is like?
The stern and menacing Dana, something we are familiar with, even if it does feel at odds with her presentation. At the same time, it is amazing how far she has come, all of this has come, on this journey so far!
That is one question answered, and already setting the stage for all sorts of fun, wicked or just problematic outcomes. The housemaid is required to be naked, and is guaranteed to be punished for asking for any form of clothes at all! It all depends on who will be visiting them, and how expected, or unexpected, the visits will be...
Why is a black pen an important detail? I recall once hearing that signing in blue was a good policy, since that way you can tell it’s not the original if it is then copied via a black and white printer. But this feels like something else entirely, that Jackie doesn’t know either. And finally we have a date, putting all of this into a date range / sense.
Back to the earlier point about who is covered by the contract, now make quite clear with all of the space being left carefully clear for future signatures!
A tattoo, this seems amazingly fast, but at the same time, we are moving into a different world, a different stage now.
OH MY! “not OUR tab”, talk about an interesting and very telling comment, especially given the firm and special emphasis. It’s now explicit who will be paying Gregory for all of his kind help!
Nods, suddenly Jackie is getting a better, a solid and real sense, of the MASSIVE step she has just taken, the height and depth of the cliff she has thrown herself off of, and also of just how seriously and completely her friends are looking to accept and embrace this new world and reality!
I am enjoying the contrast between the setting of the tattoo studio and the owners manor, playing on expectations and setting so very well :)
Yep, sharing Jackie’s sense of shock, almost a sense of horror at how things are going, but at the same time this is a very real example of *exactly* what you have been asking and pushing for, a very real and visible reminder of things that you will remember forever. As for the “generally no one will ever see it” point of view, normally correct. I do note that at this point Jackie actually still has no idea what the tattoo looks like, and won’t know for some time, given it’s placement.
Interesting perspective on the cost, and actually needed, since inflation has a power all of its own. Also though showing in another sense the investment into her being made by her friends and owners.
Oh dear, testing Dana like this, not that you see or feel it like this. And your reluctance to pull down your shorts is perfectly reasonable, but suddenly clothes seem like such a luxury, one that you are suddenly loosing!
Now they have her naked its time to go for a drink next door... yep, fits the new normal, but still, bloody hell, things have come a LONG way and moved SO FAST! Then suddenly we have the caring and sensitive checking from Sean, seeing the marks on her skin, needing to make sure she really is OK and not in trouble.
Seeing the straps... no, you wouldn’t ask would you? Well, yes you do, proves me wrong, but delights me so much at the same time! Talk about making sure to make her own fun :)
Just when I thought I had caught up with Jackie’s state of mind, she is looking forward to her friends getting a report of her bad behaviour as well! Really looking to keep on pushing them, everything, the entire situation forward!
Challenge accepted from Sean, I *really* am coming to like this man, such a wonderful combination of caring, sensitive, yet no nonsense and sure of himself!
It is so good to see someone really struggling and pushing against her restraints, to really make sure that they are as solid, firm and unyielding as possible! No half measures to be accepted here, plus only listing a couple of straps as tight enough, again asking for more in her own gentle yet relentless way...
Of course Sean doesn’t take advantage of you, look at what we know of him, but the comment, it tells us everything we need to know about your raging hormones and where you head is in all of this :)
Joking about ratting her out to her friends, again, the people are so alive and real, so believable and human :) Oh dear, forgetting “sir” every time she talks to him, well, the contract has only just gone live! Then basically pushing Sean to do the spanking himself, since she will be so much more cruel, delightfully devious :)
Sean still checking in with her, as he should, and as is only fitting and proper!
Now that is really curious, the mystery tattoo stands to help open up new business opportunities for Sean, clearly then it is something he has never done before.
Locking off sex for her, cruel, but also a fitting point of control. But doing this at the very same time as ordering her to find a very special way to reward and thank Gregory, it leaves one wondering what she is going to be offering... also very minor editing point, at the end of this paragraph it is Dana whispering, not Tracy as you have put.
LOL, Gregory has to get her home by sunrise, but if not, it is Jackie who gets punished, not him! Plus the whole “these two are your parents effect at work here... so yummy, especially with the audience!
Offering herself up so very clearly to and for Gregory, while Gregory is showing such maturity, restraint and awareness... yes, they are on very different pages here.
OK, the “oddness” is ramping up a bit now. She is pushing Gregory fairly hard here, yet if anything he is backing away... Looks like we are about to start getting some answers though, good!
That was a very good way of handling some of his insecurity, and of helping to get him focused and back on task. Again though, really pushing and NEEDING the firmness of control, the taking, the forcing, absolutely needing something serious to be held over her head as a punishment to force and enforce her behaviour and compliance. This is just becoming clearer and clearer, but in a way has been there for quite some time, just focused into her diary before now.
Such a sweet and lovely ending, a really precious note and time. So many questions left unanswered for now though...
Have I mentioned that you are accused of being a wicked and evil tease?
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Thank you for your kind thoughts, and yes, I am a tease, but I love characters that have depth to them. I think this leads to more questions, and sub plots, but I like that. I was worried with the length, but there was a lot to tell, and I struggled with this one particularly, the getting the girls from "here to there" requiring several rewrites.
I love keeping the girls together for college, although I will admit that this wasn't my first thought when I started this adventure. It was a forgone conclusion who would be doing the bulk of the actual doing between the three though, the contract I think just making the chain of command (and consequences) clearer for all concerned. This in effect also makes Jackie a tradeable/barterable object for the next five years or so, Jackie potentially the coin that buys that which the girls want. This could be all in good fun, or even start out this way, only to morph into something darker by the time the girls have a much more limited "need" for Jackie.
I too loved the naked and hobbled "reality" while discussing the theory of choices on the telephone, by this time such things being "business as usual" for both the girls, and Gregory.
I think Jackie is conditioned to expect to do the work, both out of obligation for food and rent, and as a matter of "grooming" by her pretty and privileged friends.
Dana and Tracy are used to having a maid, but on and off while growing up. I hadn't intended this, but what if they had an endless rotating group of them, each families' eccentric nature driving away good help time and again? Such abnormal tendencies might not be noticed by those outside the family, but a live in maid might not be able to take such things, even a very sweet one. Or, it could be a money thing, as in we can't afford a maid and college for three kids at once.
I am of course writing this fictional account post experience, so saying that I was willing "at the time" implies that at some point my participation became less than willing, hens the need for the contract, and swift and harsh punishments to keep me properly motivated.
The copier mishap I may or may not use in the future, but it does imply that there might be a copy of that very kinky document laying around someplace, just as the black pen implies that a black and white copy of the signed document and the original might be hard to tell apart. Back then I don't even think there were color copiers, at least ones that were affordable, even for a small college.
When I went to school I had some adjunct professors, they actually were the better ones to be honest, and while the ones I had were older and worked in the field during the day, my understanding was that adjuncts were non tenured staff. So in this case I had intended Gregory to be just a few years older than the girls, but self conscious about his rather average endowments, possibly his last pet dumping him because of this, once the novelty of their shared kink wore off.
For a young professor self-conscious about such things, it might make sense to grab one in her teens while she was just a little not so worldly and wise. As the saying goes: "There's nothing wrong with average, until you've had extraordinary with which to compare it with." To go along with this line of reasoning, I think Gregory was intimidated by both Dana, and Tracy, the girls outward sex appeal just a little more than Gregory thought he could handle, especially if he had been dumped for being less than man enough for his last pet. If that's the case, Jackie might have to build him up just a bit, despite he being older and so apparently "in control" of himself.
There is a lot of room for additional signatures on the contract, but perhaps Jackie didn't realize this, or intend for it to be this way. We are just going to have to see where this part goes...
Sean is a good character, but I don't know what to do with him yet, and his tattoo bench is awesome, I so want one for myself! He is like the intimating muscular biker guy... who loves puppies; in other words, a walking contradiction.
Stripping Jackie naked in the tattoo parlor; I could so see that happening, what a rush to be made to do something like that, especially for a teen where nobody knows her.
The end I thought was fun, Jackie finally getting something for herself, sex wise, but not from either of the girls like one might have expected to happen first. And, setting up Dana and Tracy to have parental like control over Jackie I thought was ironic, seeing how they are the ones that need some control and discipline themselves.
I only caught the editorial whoopsie after you pointed it out, so I award myself five firm swats with the paddle for such, unless you think that too light.
Thank you again for your insights, and yes, I am a wicked tease, Jackie.
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Something darker... thinking about this, I can see Dana and Tracy coming to consider their little submissive maid as a very “normal” thing, and as the time at college goes by, and they get caught up with their studies, their social lives, and Jackie’s role becomes more routine, they will have times when they pay less attention to her, treat her more casually, and as a result could think less about the impact of their actions on her, especially with the contract in hand, giving them such total free reign.
So not deliberately getting darker, but slowly getting darker as it becomes more normal, something they just do casually, without thinking to much about it.
Your comment a few posts back about a big mistake in the contract still puzzles me though. From what I see / understand of it, the contract is Jackie’s way of saying “I am yours, I really mean it, do what you will, how you will”, so while the contract is not legally binding, it is binding, but the exact wording of the contract doesn’t matter so much to Jackie, it is all about the intent and focus of the contract.
So I am not sure what mistake could exist, since in Jackie’s world she has already given her friends full and total control over everything, and encouraged and supported them in making sure to take a properly harsh hand with her, to make sure that she never forgets her place in all of this.
As for at the time, even “now” Jackie recognises the key need for their to be strict punishments to keep her motivated and focused in her submissive service to her friends, even as it seems clear she has no real idea of how far or deep all of this is going to go and take her!
The idea of Gregory needing to be supported and built up makes a lot of sense, and so does the idea that his previous pet / girlfriend dumped him in part because of his small penis, even as this really does make me quite *angry*. Their are solutions here, especially with someone who is able to support and help her pet kink so well... of course, if his last pet was playing at being a pet, and simply grew tired of the game, combined with wanting a more directly stimulating lover.
So yes, I can see him needing and benefiting from a supportive and comforting girl / woman, even as the fact that Jackie’s pussy is now off limits actually works to his advantage, directly distracting everyone from his size, or lack there of.
Sean... I can actually very easily see Dana and Tracy simply viewing him as a useful means to an end, finding the sight of the naked and very helpless Jackie as a delightful bonus to marking their property, and then never thinking of him again until it is time to take Jackie back again. At the same time though, I can see Jackie carrying something of a torch for him, and trying, in her own gentle, polite and subtle way, to try and get to see him again, perhaps to be handed over to him as a “model” now and then, providing a different approach and feeling to one of her “handlers”.
No, the length was NOT a problem at all! Remember, at this point, to really get the most out of this stories you have to be happy to be invested into something with a fair bit of length, complex characters and lots of “moving parts”. By this point length really stops being a consideration, so long as the length actually has content, and isn’t just fluff and filler :)
As for being a tease... no, I don’t think a few firm swats are really going to do anything here... I am not sure you are properly considering how you are leaving certain very sensitive, delicate and invested readers hanging, waiting for pleasure to be continued and completed... for days, weeks, months, sometimes years... I am thinking that the proper treatment for a tease tends to include a good amount of teasing and being left on the edge to consider her actions more properly and fully... with a good number of firm swats thrown in for good measure, obviously, to help focus the mind! You did ask... and I am avoiding being to wicked here, but a certain, suitably wicked thought does occur to me... *evil smirk*
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I'm terrible with chastity, with being left on the edge, but I don't mind doing such things to others, I think in some measure that makes me a hypocrite. In any event, I am trying to write more, my writers block/lack of motivation seeming to be gone, for now.
I think the "mistake" in the contract is the one that makes it transferable, or expandable, to whomever signs it. This "gift" of Jackie's intended for the girls alone, others, with other motivations, maybe not quite so nice and merciful. The girl's siblings come to mind, especially Dana's, as they might have a rather distorted world view on how to treat the "family's servants." The boys could be just wonderful, or much less so, especially to one perceived as below their lofty social status.
It could be something else too, I sometimes like to leave little "red herrings" lying about in my stories, there to weave into the plot later, if needed. The photocopier incident is one such thing, but the presence of an additional copy of such a kinky document is sure to be a problem, if found by the wrong person. What if the dean were to somehow discover it himself, he then suspecting a white slavery ring operating out of his own college?
Could Gregory or Sean become suspects in all this, Jackie having to "spill the beans" to protect each at some point? Instead, could somebody at the college think this was a great idea, tricking Jackie into signing a second contract with a latter date, making the first "null and void" and attaching her instead to this second "owner?" Or perhaps a second term of ownership, after the first had expired?
I see Gregory as perfect for Jackie, in the end, but how they get there is the real story.
Thank you again for your wonderful and thought provoking words, Jackie.
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I see absolutely nothing hypocritical in liking doing something to someone else while not enjoying being on the receiving end yourself. This just suggests you are not a "perfect 50/50" switch... given that I have never come close to encountering such a being, this is hardly a surprise, even as people seem to feel that this is an ideal that should be striven for :)
Still, perhaps be careful offering yourself up to wicked pussy cats who are overly eager to find MOST excellent ways to motivate you... *evil smirk* then again, perhaps you want to be highly motivated... 8)
As an avid and happy reader of your works I am really pleased to hear that you are writing more often and more smoothly, so long as this makes you happy, that is what matters in all of this after all!
Others having power over Jackie, yes, Jackie does seem somewhat eager to encourage those with power over her, which is definitely likely to encourage wickedness in those who are already prone to it. I also suspect that some males who find themselves with power over Jackie won't be that interested in listening to the rule about which parts of her body are off limits to them... but then again their is a difference between what Jackie chooses to offer up voluntarily, and what is taken by her owners...
Jackie wants and needs a certain wickedness in how she is treated, but at the same time I still want to see her taken care of, treated well and looked after, even as she is given the wickedness and dominance that is required to keep her happy and healthy. Now who wants it both ways at once? :)
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Thank you, I'm always mindful of being a hypocrite, and I do at times need motivation, but fortunately not at this time.
I love the idea of one of the brothers lusting after Jackie, perhaps even more than one of them? I could imagine the boys secretly watching the three girls in the pool from a distance, perhaps from one of their bedrooms even. With Dana and Tracy looking similar enough at a distance, body wise, both boys could have had a collective "YUCK!" at the thought of checking out their own sister accidently. Jackie's body type is certainly different, even at a distance, and she has no brother to contend with either, as in "don't even think about it with my little sister!"
This might be unnecessary with the headstrong attitudes of the girls, but they might not be aware of it. Could both girls be so interested in each other only because all the neighborhood boys have already been chased off by overprotective brothers with good intentions?
I could then imagine Dana's brother coming up to the summerhouse for a surprise inspection, or perhaps even some emergency repair, only to find the subject of his own teen lust naked and collared on a run cable, or hobbled even. What would Jackie do to keep the girls little secret quite? What would the brother demand she do?
Just some random thought on the next chapter or two, and thank you for your kind words, Jackie.
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Hypocrisy exists, but I don't think I have ever really sensed any from you :) As for motivation, I mainly try lots and lots of positive encouragement, feeling that it works best. But, well, you only need to ask... *teasing smiles*
Somehow I don't see either Dana or Tracy being put off by brothers warning off other boys, instead it seems to me that this would simply be seen as a challenge to their feminine wiles and natures, to prove that they are so desirable and irresistible, as they naturally view themselves, as rich and entitled "women", that they simply need to show the natural and obviously always present desire by any male for them is stronger than the fear any brothers generate.
Which, if you think like this, would make the idea that their naked maid / slave is the one that men prefer, would only make them more angry and feeling that the naughty naked slave needs to be punished for being such a wicked little tart!
Based on this thinking, given that both friends are quite open to men when it suits them, it may simply be that they generally consider males to be "beneath" them, easily manipulated and shallow, while they share a common enjoyment of teasing and controlling Jackie, and from here a growing closeness came. Any sexual aspect of controlling Jackie would be transferred to each other, as the "worthy" target of such feelings, since they do consider themselves to be superior to Jackie, even as they love and treasure her.
My gut instinct for Jackie being surprised by one of the brothers is panic, freezing like a deer in the headlights, denial, wanting to hide. Certainly she would be the "first" to offer herself up, in any and all ways, to buy the silence of any brother, but I don't see her making any such offer spontaneously. Once she is over the shock of discovery then yes, but if upon discovery she is put on the spot, questioned, badgered, answers and demanded, and since her situation, naked, bound, a captive, cannot be explained away, I see her having to allow her "owners" to handle this, while trying to distract the brother with herself, to protect her owners.
As for what the brother would demand, I wonder... would it make sense to argue that as a "pet", an "object" that is "part of the house" - by dint of being secured to it, Jackie automatically comes under their control, along with the house, rather than Dana's control? This is before the contract of ownership comes up, which would only and naturally reinforce this idea... yes, this might be an idea for you to toy with *wicked smiles*
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Terrific ideas, all of them, and easily worked into the next chapter or two, thank you for them. I especially like the concept of the girls seeing boys as beneath them, and only good for a specific limited purpose. Your observations on human nature are also much appreciated, as in Jackie's shock at being discovered in all her naked glory while tethered to the house itself.
I have to balance this with this being "business as usual" for Jackie once weeks into her new life. I have had the experience of doing some deep woods self bondage myself, the ordeal I had planned for myself this particular time leaving me without a stich and handcuffed behind my back for almost the entire day, so long in fact that naked and in the woods felt almost normal by the time I had recovered my key. There are also the experiences of my significant other, he getting quite used to being naked around both "Ken" and I, but I also realize that he's a guy and wired just a little differently than I am.
I wonder if Jackie might have "borrowed" one of her friends expensive Walkman personal radios, she jammin out to some favorite tune of hers and oblivious to the visiting brother, and his good manners call ahead on the wall telephone that she didn't hear, she only realizing he was there when he walked up to her from behind with a shocked look on his face of his own? I don't know for sure if they even existed back then, but in Apollo 13 (that happens around the same time period) Neil Armstrong had a Walkman on the ship, so perhaps one of the wealthy girls could too?
I could also see the visiting brother wanting to take Jackie out someplace (like on a date) away from the girls, just to hear from her own lips while away from them that she was okay with all of this. This would make him a good guy and potential competition for Gregory, (and not a scoundrel), so I have to think about that one carefully.
As I said, all terrific ideas, and these get my creative juices flowing, thanks again, Jackie.
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Jackie does need her "normal" time, but this normal time isn't going to happen around the house, her friends / owners are not going to want her getting ideas above her station. Of course, that is just likely to make them angry with her when they are reminded, yet again, that men, being male, are more interested in the naked slave girl than they are in her stunningly attractive owners... apparently forgetting that dominant, bossy and forceful women often aren't as easily appreciated as naked, pliant, chained up slave girls!
No doubt also Jackie's fault :)
Personally I always find strong personalities to be interesting, but it does seem that the average male cannot handle a strong women, and Jackie's owners are definitely strong women :)
It would be very good to see one of the visiting brothers want to take Jackie away from all of this, to try and get her side of things, to try and convince her that she can reveal the "terrible secret" that his sister is using to control and manipulate her... all the more so if there are hints of manipulative behaviour in the girls history, having tried to use secrets to manipulate the staff, when staff have been around...
Her friends are not evil, but I can see a strong and wilful rich teenager trying to take advantage of some "secret" over the household maid to bend her to her will. All the more ironic if such "secret" is already well known to her parents, rendering her "power and authority" powerless, empty, and having it backfire on her. A small background moment that would help to shape a warmer, more concerned and considerate male presence in Jackie's life.
As for Jackie borrowing an expensive walkman, well, if it has been a week or two of basically "normal", college, cleaning the house naked, nothing really standing out, yet building sexual frustration, especially with serving her owners / friends breakfast in bed each morning, seeing them sharing the same bed, having them rub in their frequent sexual release, reminding her of her own denial, she is likely to want to encourage some more "fun play time", or punishment, depending on who is describing it :)
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Part 16 up tonight, enjoy!
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Before reading this, I just re-read part 15, to get back into the flow, and to remind myself of some of the specific details, and exactly where we left off. Wow, part 15 was sexy, erotic, and really grabbed my emotions! It also left me with so many random questions, all of those little hints, all of those comments about important details that are just not filled in...
Now though, onto part 16, and as before I am going to write my thoughts as I read the story, since I suspect I will have quite a few thoughts to share :)
“puppy love”, I am not sure if I want to groan at the “pun”, feel sympathy that Jackie isn’t being wrapped up in the fluffy fairy tale that Gregory is offering, or just point out that just before the end of part 15 Gregory was still asking her what she wants, which really isn’t what she wants, she has just suggested and signed a VERY harsh sounding contract, to avoid having to make her own decisions after all :)
Now THAT makes me think and feel that Gregory is a proper gentleman! I do respect and enjoy the idea of a man who is so capable, also willing and interested, as to wring every last orgasm from his partner that they can handle. Still... it does seem a shame to stop just because they cannot handle any more pleasure! Still, that sort of torture and punishment doesn’t really seem to be something that Gregory will be trying to inflict any time soon, if at all. Maybe later, when he feels more wicked?
Nods, it does beg the question of if Gregory will get to have “normal” sex with our little slave. I suspect it will be offered up sooner or later, but from memory keeping Jackie wanting and desperate is generally a good part of the day to day plan going forward, so not to often.
Not wanting, not deserving clothes makes perfect sense in this situation. It is the innocence of it that seems odd... the only obvious way, off the top of my head, that this makes sense *ah* a second thought. First thought, I was referring back to her time as a puppy, clothes being a human thing, not something that a pet gets, or expects. Another angle though might be the sense of her friends being her “parents / owners”, her being just an object, and an object simply doesn’t need or deserve clothes. It’s not about sexual exposure, its simply the nature of an object. As for the sexual nature of being exposed in public, Jackie is clear that she views her friends as far more attractive, sexy and desirable, so isn’t thinking in terms of showing off her incredibly sexy body as an exhibitionist might.
Tracy taking the lead on her return home does seem slight odd, but there is starting to be a clear division of labour, of responsibility between her two friends, her two owners.
You know, part of me objects to her sleeping in her cage without being locked into it! Somehow that just feels wrong... but it cannot be helped if she is expected to get up and get breakfast going for the household. It really does bring me back to the thought that some form of ongoing “household” bondage is called for, to really reinforce and remind her of her status and position.
I do enjoy the “subtle” reinforcement that she has not a single item in the laundry basket, even though she is the one doing the washing :) And we are still waiting to learn about this tattoo!
Nods, yes, now is it just Jackie, or all three of them, who are starting to see and realise the scope of the task of keeping her as a slave and servant? After all, even with the contract, she does have her own needs, and her friends clearly both love her, and get a great deal of pleasure from seeing to her needs.
Now that is interesting, another point suggesting that Dana is unhappy with Jackie for some reason... and this after she was silent when Jackie got back from her time with Gregory. Envy at Jackie getting a man herself? I am going to have to wait and see, or it could be to do with Dana’s parents... any number of things really.
Oh dear... brewing conflict, Tracy not bring it up either... its not clear yet what Jackie has done “wrong”, but maybe things have gone to far, to fast? Not that Dana seemed in the least bit unhappy with the idea of the contract, and she was all for the tattoo, and having Jackie “pay” Gregory...
This does bring up a point, a question that’s going to be ongoing, is Jackie just a naked servant in the eyes of their guests, or a sex slave? The expectations that (mostly male) guests are going to have will obviously be very different depending on the answer here...
*smirk* your labour being offered up as their thank you to the men, well, yes, but this idea has come as much from you, at this point, as it has come from them :) Again though with all the mysterious hints! What is going on?! Oh, I LOVE the insight into Jackie’s head, into her world, but this is really leaving me wanting more, and wanting to know what is going on with her friends...
Returning home soon... seriously, PLEASE tell me that you are going to get some more use out of the mental hospital?! I am not sure why, but I REALLY do want to see more use of that location, and all of the wonderful opportunities that it offers up for wickedness :)
*rolls eyes* they have plans to discuss that Jackie doesn’t need to know about just yet - well DUH! Slave! Still, having said that, *REALLY* tempting and interesting tease here, what are you getting at here??? I especially like:
In the end I maybe even deserved this though, as there are consequences for one's actions, both good, and bad.
now THAT, in context, is a comment that really makes me tingle!!!
Disturbing silence and tracking her... love the mood setting!!! As for the kitchen, I almost want to say that you are labouring the point about her work load, but actually no, I do think that this needs to be spelled out clearly, and the point reinforced like this. It is important, both for the scale of what is happening, but also to properly set the scene and mood.
Good to know that both men offered to help. As for showcasing your abilities in the kitchen, perhaps this is just a combination of what is expected of a domestic servant, and good training for the years to come.
OK, I feel very torn here. Saying that she has stolen attention from her friends, due to proving that she can cook and feed everyone, and being the one to take all of the orders and deliver all of the food, especially while naked, is silly and wrong, since this is only happening as a direct result of the orders she has been given, not due to some deliberate choice on her part. Having said that, if something is wrong, who is most likely to get the blame? The slave, or the owner who gave the orders? Sometimes the owner will accept the fault is theirs, through their orders, but especially given the warning comments about Dana being really unhappy, there is only ever one person who is going to be held responsible here...
Now why is Gregory the least happy to see the dog chain? I would have expected Gregory to approve, whole heartedly, of pets being kept chained up, assuming this is what the chain is for. Perhaps Gregory is having second thoughts about Jackie as a slave / property, rather than a possible girlfriend? But there aren’t any other obvious signs of this, at least not so far. Ah, and she makes exactly the same point, and it turns out there is a reason, which we will hopefully learn eventually.
Huh? So the chain is justified, but asking:
"And the other option?" Gregory asked sympathetically.
a clear sense that Gregory is trying to argue her corner, and everyone agrees the meal was very good. Yes, the cook can see the areas that need to be improved, such is often the way, but clearly there were no major issues the others saw. But why is it here, apparently so related to the question of the chain?
OK, so apparently they were hoping, or at least looking out for, some major problem to justify something, a punishment of some sort? Maybe?
Now I almost want to cry, to hug and cuddle, reassure and treasure Jackie, her feeling like a child, reminded so strongly of a clearly unpleasant childhood memory... powerful emotional stuff!!!
OK, what the hell?!?!
So, she has to clean the cars, this makes sense, and seems, on the surface, like a “minor” point. Clearly this mysterious plan A is a significant step up from plan B, and it seems that Dana is really pushing for it, but why the need to find a valid justification? Aren’t there enough reasons already in hand? Or does she need to bring everyone else round to agree to plan A?
Now THAT is interesting! For all that, in her logical brain, Jackie seems to be considering rebelling, finding her treatment to be far from her liking, but the moment she is given the “proper” command, as in the command in the “proper” manor, her body simply responds and obeys! So a key part of her is very much on board with all of this treatment she is receiving!
Ah, so again the thinking that she wants Gregory to see her has a partner, not as a slave, as an object. Yet, for all of this, once the kink is flowing, you clearly want Gregory to be treating you much more like a slave than a partner, don’t you? :)
Awe at the tattoo?! Come on!!! What is going on here?!
Ooh, NICE tattoo! I like this :) Yes, no wonder there is a fairly serious emotional impact from this! It really is an ownership mark, but we did basically know that going into this, didn’t we?
Nods, and finally we see that Dana is REALLY not happy with Jackie right now!!!
Dana not having any fun either... nod, of course, now it is stated it is obvious, being this bother and angry is going to sap all of the “fun” from this for Dana, and that is just going to make her mood even worse.
Well... that is quite the ending, and quite the set of unanswered questions! What the hell are they planning and working out that they need so many materials for? What are the unknown plan A and plan B all about? Why is Dana so angry? Although here at least we do have a few clues.
I am assuming that Jackie isn’t going to be left outside all night, but that is far from certain at this point. In fact the darkness, the locked door, the blinds going down, all strongly suggests that outside and chained up all night is exactly what is going to happen. Hopefully if so a blanket, or some such, will at least be provided.
Strong stuff, powerful writing, and as always, it seems with you, I am left desperately wanting more, NOW!!!
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Thank you Feline. There had to be some conflict in this story, and I think the mention of Dana's brother has maybe stirred something up with her, although the precise relationship to that, and her irritation with my alter ego, might need some time to come out. Maybe it's just dawning on Dana that Jackie really has it all, despite Dana's perceived advantage, appearance wise. I also think having whatever you want to eat just by asking for it, and not having to work around the house at all, might have the effect of both "pretty" girls blowing up like a tick in the coming years. It could even be a fun twist if they both packed on like fifty pounds each while away at college, sweatpants and college sweatshirts the only thing that fits them, their fine clothes no longer an advantage.
The project they're all collectively working on is designed to keep Jackie tethered to the summerhouse, but still allow free reign within the walls of it so she can work, the chain, or maybe a small part of it, just one part of the system that they are designing.
Dennis is going to be doing the work while the girls are back home again, the summerhouse modified under a safety pretense, one that Dana's parents will pay for as they don't want anything bad to happen to Dana and her friends while away at school. Gregory isn't necessarily happy about the safety aspects of chaining up Jackie either, at least when nobody's home, the two not seeing eye to eye on this little detail. Gregory can only offer council to the girls, really only advise and steer things in the safest direction, and Dana is like a woman on a mission in this and won't be talked out of it.
How Dennis is to be "paid" for his services is another matter, the materials for this little project coming from Dana's father's checkbook, but his actual time is another matter. The thing, this system they designed is related to something you had suggested, so I thank you for that. I just had to find a way to hide it in plain sight, as did Dana, there a certain irony to getting her father to pay for the very things that keep their indentured servant from running off. Her parents would be furious with her if they found out that she had manipulated her friend into slavery, almost as furious as when she had screwed with a family maid once and made her so angry she up and quit without notice. They made Dana clean her house as punishment for that little outburst, but in true form she manipulated Jackie into doing it for her.
As far as cooking and being fully responsible for a holiday meal like this, I remember the first time I had done so, in a little kitchen with few extra pots and no microwave oven too. It's a lot of work, but there is a pride to it too, as in "I can really do this." In the context of the story, I wanted to show how busy and worked almost to the breaking point Jackie was here, obviously Dana at least looking for her to fail and justify their harsh sounding "plan A." Not with family and friends specifically, but I have been in the company of people that "hoped I failed" and the feeling comes through to me clearly, but perhaps I'm sensitive to such things.
I also think Jackie doesn't necessarily mind living away from home, perhaps things not so rosy and perfect there, this of course a reference to the childhood memory in my story, but I have no real world reference for this. It's a detail about Jackie's character though, perhaps a partial explanation for why she clings to her two pretty friends like she does, and why she has allowed them to groom her for servitude. Maybe Jackie even serves like this in her own home to a lesser degree, cooking and cleaning, so doing this for her two friends is really nothing more than an exchange of masters, with some obvious kink thrown in too.
I do plan on revisiting the mental hospital, the girls pretty much have to so they can collect Jackie's things, but after that I just don't know, that part might have to be a surprise...
I don't know about offering Jackie up as a general purpose sex slave either, although we went almost all the way there with Gregory as a one time "thank you" for all his hard work. Could this be what triggered Dana, even though Jackie didn't go "all the way" with Gregory while parking in the dark with him? Maybe Dana is sweet on Gregory too, at least until she finds out about his "little" problem, or is that perceived little problem? Maybe even Dana has never had a guy that she couldn't seduce, if she wanted to, Gregory blowing off her implied offers and then pissing her off with Jackie as a result. I know first hand how illogical hormone driven teenage logic can be, and this could play into that nicely too.
Maybe this "date" with Gregory was supposed to be one sided, as in Gregory using the teen for his exclusive carnal pleasure, taking and not giving in return. Perhaps Dana expected Jackie to be returned to her that night with the evidence of some rough usage, and when she came in instead with a tired and sated smile, it set Dana off?
As far as the not deserving clothes, I think that's a fun state of mind, but not specifically sexual, at least to me. It's more innocent, but maybe only to Jackie, where the summerhouse's guests will likely see this as an offer, an ease of access to Jackie's female charms. She's submissively compliant too, what guy wouldn't like that?
The next chapter should be fun too, lots of action, and yes, my alter ego does at least get a blanket to sleep with... on the porch all night long.
Thank you again for your kind words, Jackie.
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The comment about the girls weight reminds me of a background thought I had when re-reading part 15. The clear expectation on Jackie’s part, almost certainly completely correctly, is that her friends are going to have her doing basically all of their homework. Now at first this is ideal, and just what her friends want, away from home, waited on hand and foot, and no unwanted obligations or work, while getting good grades, and free to go out and party all the time.
But with time this will alter some of the underlying points of their relationship. It isn’t going to suddenly change the submissive nature of Jackie, or the dominant nature of her friends, but it is going to shift knowledge of the classes and the skills that come with it into Jackie’s hands. It is going to shift some of the underlying power in this situation, something that her friends really aren’t going to see coming until it is rather to late, I am sure!
It will also be good for Jackie, increasing her general skill set, which will help her in the long term, which I approve of :)
Good to see that a system is being worked out for Jackie’s captivity, yummy! I can definitely seeing Gregory being “wiser”, more adult and cautious about all of this, much more aware of some of the risks that you have to watch for in all of this, while Dana really does feel like someone diving in head first and going full force forward, without really considering where this is going to take her, or them.
You bring up some very interesting points about Jackie’s home life and background... yes, she has always felt comfortable with her friends, looked to spend as much time as possible with them, while also being content, if not actively eager to take on the submissive role and do the jobs. Thinking about it from this point of view, looking back, there has never been any sense of push back or difficulty with Jackie spending a lot of time with her friends, going off for a week on holiday, or now heading off to college with them... it could very easily be because she is seen as much as a burden as a part of the family at home. There is a common theme that women are second class citizens (angry muttering) so it’s easy to see that her home life is one of work, responsibility, and being generally disregarded and not cared about. Given this sort of background, being “valued and appreciated” for her work by her friends, as well as having a familiar role, of “general dogs body” would be comfortable.
No, I very much doubt that you are sensitive to the feeling that people are looking for you to fail. When I have come across people / situations like this, the one(s) hoping you will fail are hardly subtle about it, instead almost wanting to rub your face in the point.
Considering the 3 girls and Gregory for a moment, the two friends are used to being the “main attraction”, they have everything that men should want. But for various reasons Gregory is much more interested in their friend than them. When she is sent off to “satisfy him and pay him”, instead of being just used, as is probably what the friends are used to from most male company, she is gone for a long time, and comes back clearly very well satisfied herself. Not what they were expecting at all, the whole waiting up for her to return screams that they expected her to basically provide Gregory a quickie or two, and that was that.
But this feeds into the bigger general question of paying for Dennis to do all of the required work, work that is “only needed” due to them having a slave to keep in hand. Oh I am quire sure that Dana, and probably Tracy, are REALLY into the idea of keeping their little slave chained up and captive all of the time. But in simple terms, what do any of these three women have to offer men?
Social status doesn’t work any more, not while you are so far away from home, and competing with so many other college students. Money? A lot of what men are going to want, and are going to be looking for here, boils down to sex. The two friends can offer a threesome, should they choose, but both of them have to be on board, and they don’t want to cheapen this very enticing offer / trade good. Beyond this, if the man in question just wants a quick sexual thrill, then even with her vagina off the table, Jackie is still the “ideal” candidate... how are her owners supposed to compete? How are they going to compete?
And indeed, how do they stop her being seen as simply a sexual object for the taking?
Gregory wants something more from her, which is only likely to make her friends more jealous, and also less willing to listen to his advice and perspective.
I only really see two good approaches going forward. Trying to compete with a naked “sex slave”, which is how she is going to be seen by default by everyone, isn’t going to play to her friends strengths. So maybe keep Jackie in her puppy persona more often when they have people round. This will at least create some distance between the sex toy (animal) and her owners (human). Or lock her into some form of chastity belt, to simply take her off the table as a simple option. But this still doesn’t remove the temptation, or her oral skills.
So I keep wondering if making Jackie very casually available for sex, for certain select men, is the solution that her friends will settle on, on the theory that if she is just always available, to “everyone”, then she is less desirable and attractive, making her attractive, and possibly threesome offering friends the “high end” option that you want to work for and desire, while also paying for the work the men do. I am just sure this “feels right” though, but so far I am not sure what else to suggest. I will see if it comes to me :)
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These are all great ideas, and I appreciate them. For some with practical considerations, getting an education is about gaining knowledge and acquiring skills, and for others it's all about the document, the actual skin hanging on your proverbial "I love me wall." But, this less prestigious small college isn't an instantly recognizable ivy league institution, and none of these three will likely enter the work force anyway, so the actual degree is of a lesser consideration. In this scenario Jackie could easily get the most out of this, doing the actual class work for her friends at home.
As far as Jackie's home life, this is the 1970's so most women were expected to cook, clean, and have lots of babies, or so my perception of the time goes. I know that's an over simplification, because there were women engineers and doctors involved in the Apollo program, and obviously other places too. Back then I got the feeling that you didn't hire on a woman for a "man's" job, unless it would be stupid not to, as in she was far too good a catch to let the competition get her instead.
As far as the sex toy version of Jackie, I could see condoms skirting the girls strict forbiddance of Jackie's girl parts, and I have a feeling that they were more common back in the 1970's than they are today, the "pill" I think safer today than it was back then. Any of the men Jackie was gifted to could always use the "pull it out and pray" method instead, ignoring the girls forbiddance in the heat of the moment, and that could add some excitement to the entire situation. Wouldn't it be fun if Dana's brother was gifted Jackie to buy his silence on the whole "friend as naked slave thing" he having a secret crush on her pretty much forever, and then he knocking Jackie up, Dana and Jackie then becoming sister in laws?
I don't think I'll do that, as it would cut Gregory out of the story, but it would be fun.
I do like the idea of the invisible fence being tested on Jackie in her pet persona, and this would keep her in pet status and less available, sexually, to the visiting guys; when she wasn't cooking, cleaning, and doing homework. As far as offering Jackie up to almost everybody, or even a select few, I don't know that I want to do that, but I'm not sure myself what to do either.
Thank you again for some great ideas, Jackie.
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Yes, it is easy to forget the time period this is set in, and the fairly serious differences in how gender and roles are seen and how "set" they are in society and peoples minds.
Thinking about the restrictions on Jackie, a rather evil thought occurs to me. All it would take is one of the visitors to the house to mention the presence of Jackie, and "casually mention in passing" that she has to follow all orders, and end up speculating that if she is told to shut up, well, a naked and chained up sex slave who hasn't told you (because she was ordered to be silent) that she isn't allowed to offer up her vagina for sex, combined with her being *very* desperate...
It isn't hard to see how entitled male friends of Dennis would enjoy taking advantage of this loophole... after all, I am *sure* Dennis would never think of making spare copies of any keys to the property, just in case he needed to check on his work while Jackie's owners are out, and she is home alone... I wonder what it will take for Dana to start to realise, to see, that leaving Jackie alone at home, chained up, naked and ordered, under very strict penalties, to obey everyones orders, is leaving a massive amount of temptation out to others, who aren't going to see Jackie, or the situation, the same way that Dana and Tracy do.
Possibly rather dark, but also, a good, if maybe brutal, way of getting Gregories point of view to be taken a hell of a lot more seriously, and the general responsibilities for slave supervision and safety to become very clear! Then again, locking Jackie into a cage, to really limit others access to her body, also works, and probably fits much better with Dana's current state of mind and emotional views on unfair competition :)
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Part 17 up tonight, enjoy
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Well, whatever has Dana in a lather, she is not mercilessly taking it out on Jackie, though Jackie is the handiest one to punish being Dana & Tracy's slave girl. Not informing Jackie what she did to earn Dana's wrath is a punishment in itself and I think is meant to keep Jackie on her toes as it were.
Jackie, having asked for and signed a contract binding her initially to Dana & Tracy will obviously live to the letter of it. Fun and games is over. She now is property; property owned by Dana &Tracy. Beginning with having Jackie get the tattoo to now, Dana has been making it totally clear she owns Jackie. But she is not going to let any harm come to her property either. Is it because she still has feelings for her "friend" or simply because she enjoys her dominance over Jackie, i don't know. In any case, she is setting precedence as to what will happen to and with Jackie over the next 4 years.
I like that a lot of the groundwork for the next 4 years is being set in detail over these last few chapters giving us an insight into Jackie's thoughts as things progress.
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I love that there are no real ground rules for all this between the girls, except for the diary, and now the potentially harsh contract too. All of them together are figuring this out at the same time, ("on the fly" so to speak) and I'm trying to show all the characters growing into this with each other, giving a sense of realism to this fantasy. Of the four so far I think Dennis is the least deep character, but possibly because we don't know what makes him tick just yet.
The summerhouse itself is a real place from my past, so this helps with the setting in my mind at least, but I'm trying to paint a picture of the idyllic nature of the place without getting bogged down in the details.
Dana and Dennis are working on an evil surprise for Jackie, one that Tracy is reluctantly on board for, and Gregory even less so. I think it will "anchor" any ill feeling she may develop about her servitude to the house itself though, not that this is necessarily by design, but rather happenstance. Not that this is exactly the same thing, but your puppy doesn't hate the vet, she does associate the antiseptic smell of the vet's office with unpleasant things though, so this is why it's so hard to get her out of the car once you're there with her.
Anyway, the scene with the billboard is just something that trips my trigger. I love the being dumped off naked and helpless someplace, and I have stood near billboards like that, hearing the rush of traffic passing just out of sight while my mind wanders to the endless kinky possibilities...
Thank you so much for your words of encouragement, such things keep me motivated to tell this story to it's conclusion, Jackie.
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I actually got impatient, and just read this, since I wanted to enjoy this, before coming back and pulling my thoughts together :)
The harsh night outside, her treatment, and clear position in the household is making it quite clear that her friends aren't having any problems adapting to the roles of harsh task mistress, or keeping her in her place. But at the same time, we are still left in the dark as to what she actually did wrong here, still leaving the best working theory that the presence of a "naked and available sex object" was unwanted competition.
A tricky problem to solve that, since if she is actually being kept as a naked and available slave, so "property" in a very real sense, she is going to be very much perceived as a sex object / sex toy, by lots of people, her friends indeed. So how do they compete with this? One thing asking a bunch of emotionally mature adults this, but I do have to remember that we are still dealing with teenagers here...
Very interesting that Tracy and Dana are taking different approaches here, but also as it should be, for while the two do seem to move in perfect harmony at times, at other times it is quite clear how differently they view and approach things, and they have different feelings and needs here. As for a wake up call as to the nature of your slavery, well, you did insist on a very harsh contract to keep you on task, regardless of your views and changing feelings!
Yes, some information on what she did "wrong" would be helpful if her owners want her to behave differently in future, but if the root problem is more down to the fact that she is a naked slave, then there is nothing she is in a position to do or change. Not that this is automatically going to save her from the wrath of her owners...
It makes me smile, her observation about having to get used to no privacy when using the toilet, since there are clear hints, and interest, in keeping her in dog mode, and dog mode isn't going to come with human toilet privileges, we can be sure of that! :)
I can see her keepers enjoying not being quite so "responsible" for her while back home, but at the same time, I can see them missing the feelings of power and control, and also of convenience of having their own personal slave on tap 24/7. Well, clearly only one person is to blame for this lack of being properly available as a slave, and she is likely to end up being punished, in some form or other, for this terrible state of affairs *evil smirk*
Also yes, very much an experiment, where most of the risk, and in a sense the rewards, fall on your shoulders alone.
Having to "come last" with Gregory as well is another interesting example of logical consequences of this whole situation that she simply didn't see coming, but at the same time, I do enjoy the sense of maturity with which she accepts that having someone being much less equal can help to defuse tensions.
No wonder she is confused about leaving all of the food there, but also, yes, there are going to be lots of things about your own life and treatment that you won't be told about in advance, and most certainly won't be consulted on either!
I do enjoy the simple sexy delight of travelling in daylight so nearly naked. Also it is very interesting, reasonable but still a delight, how she is already looking for ways to "push" her owners into taking her in hand. Only a few hours after fearing being left chained up and alone in the house, and she is looking for more :) Yummy!
The comment about being reluctant to admit that she would have been miserable, left at home, alone and abandoned by her friends, if they had gone off to the fancy university without her seems "odd", in the sense that surely this is to be expected, given how close the three of them clearly are, and have been for so very long? The whole sense of this being an escape from her normal life reinforces this point. But at the same time, it is good and important to see how she feels about her owners, and still very much wants to be with them, for them to be a "group".
It's amusing, the speculation about the adults having manipulated some of this situation to have come to pass, but my suspicion is much more that the adults simply accepted and took advantage of the three of you wanting to move out and move on with your lives as a unit, giving all three families space and time to themselves once more.
Now that is an interesting statement and perspective, separating out the summer house as the cause of all of her work and obligations, from her loving friends, who are still very much her friends, and having different feelings about them. At the same time though, for all that it seems strange, it also sounds good, since having a good relationship with her owners and friends is very important all the way through this.
Dumped by the side of the road, both a very fitting fantasy, the ideal time for such a "fun" little game, but also a lovely reminder of your other story series, that I still have very fond memories of, and a ludicrously hot fantasy!
The comments about the girls enjoying food so much make me smile, since this puts me in mind of our conversation here, including food and weight over time. At the same time Jackie being used to doing without so many things, making this return to normality easier on her, is an interesting "other side" of things.
Leashed up here like this... the idea of her as a stripper for an audience is interesting, and I wonder if this is an idea that will be returned to. I don't see her needing to go out and earn money like that, but maybe requiring the house slave to put on a private performance is something some of her male, and perhaps female, "owners" will explore... after all, once you have a slave, might as well make full use of her!
As for the nickname, off the top of my head this feels like the first time she has ever actually been named :) Just a passing thought, but still it makes me smile.
Now that is a powerful, and easy to overlook moment! The truck horns, the fear, the very real suspicion that she has been spotted, but instead of her main fear being her own safety after she is grabbed and kidnapped by a passing trucker, she is fearing for her friends, their reactions and feelings at loosing her!!! THIS matters, this shows us the heart of Jackie, and her views on her friends, the love and trust that is enabling this "game", this "experiment".
And there is the "other half" of this trust and love! For all that they have done together, that the girls have done to Jackie, Tracy stayed to watch over her, to guard her, and as soon as Dana realised the risk and the danger she was straight back, moving instantly to protect and save Jackie! It is a two way street, this trust and love, after all!
In a lot of ways I think we needed this change of emotional pace, and a clear reminder of where everyone stands, even as I suspect things are not going to be quite so "back to normal" as Jackie is expecting... well, we can hope can't we? *evil smirk*
Now off to catch up with playing maid, which I only discovered was updated a few days ago.
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Thank you for such wonderful observations. In the contract I had to put a name, so I expanded my Jaackierabbit nick name into a real sounding name, Jaqueline D. Lapin (aka Jackie the rabbit) in French, or so I hoped. I guess a second meaning of lapin can also mean a castrated male rabbit, amusing to my better half I'm sure, but I didn't know about that meaning when I had written that, and I obviously not a woman who speaks any French, other than just a few words I've picked up over the years.
I think that the girls are fun, but also teens, and they all have to grow into this with an open mind. I like the hating the house, not the people in the house mentality, something I think psychologists might call transference, or so I saw on TV once. The next chapter explains this hating the house thing just a bit better I think.
The escaping from her potentially boring life at home is a real thing, and I can't blame her in this, just as I can't blame her and the other's parents for working out how to get an empty nest just a few years sooner that normal.
I also feel that it's easier to really let go when somebody else has your back, and is responsible for the mess they've gotten you into. I could also see Jackie playing stripper one time on a dare, perhaps even at the billboard's porn palace. It's something I've always wanted to do myself, but I don't have near the courage to do so publicly, but in this story's context, doing so far from home and friends could be an acceptable risk.
I am curious as to the hot fantasy associated with Dumped On The Side Of The Road; is this something I could write into another chapter of that series? I think there still might be a dare jar someplace, and we could put almost any dare in there, as well as having somebody else join up with the girls for fun. If you're interested it might be fun to put your ideas into that story, I have done this before with character names and I think it's a fun distraction as we can name the characters anything we like.
Just a thought, let me know what you think, Jackie.
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And part 18...
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I might have had quite a bit to say...
I am going to write this as I read the story, as normal. Got to say, really looking forward to this! You have me all a quiver with excitement and anticipation :)
The hospital, ah such fond memories! The tone, the feeling and nature of this fascinates me. Jackie is asking for this treatment, she is encouraging her friends, and making sure that they know she is still very much looking forward to and very much still into such treatment and games. I do like and enjoy this, I feel it matters and is important, since with the contract being signed and “going live” it is tempting to stop thinking of this in terms of their friendship, but that is still so important, so much at the very heart and core of all of this, so much a part of what makes this what it is, and makes it work as it does.
Then again, we are now in a different place, we are back home, with parents on hand, so things are going to feel so very different, and to some degree also have to be quite different. So reminding her friends that this is still something she wants and is something she is comfortable with, even this close to home, matters and is important :)
Having said all of this, the comment about the hospital having a certain feel really gets my interest, but we are left hanging, and wondering how long we have to wait to find out more about this feel and the implications of it. Still, the hospital holds a fond place in my heart, so I do hope to see more of it now and then, as you well know :)
And now the focus on the contract, which does loom rather large on the horizon. Yes, a lot of the “weight”, in the sense of having to dream up and implement things, now rests on the shoulders of your friends, but at the same time, the weight of complying with, frankly, who knows what, rests entirely on your shoulders. How creative and wicked your friends can be, without any oversight from parents does remain to be seen, but the early signs are clearly very good indeed!
The comment about the years of conditioning, leading to this point, is fascinating, and does a good job of reminding us that this very extreme situation really did not spring forward fully formed, but instead has a long and very important history and background.
The “back home at home they weren't exactly measuring my childhood bedroom for alterations” paragraph, I actually had to go and read this 2 or 3 times before I realised you were talking about her parents reaction and behaviour in all of this. My mind was still on her friends, with visions of her friends measuring her childhood room for conversion into a dungeon cell :)
Having said that, the talk of the types of mischief you got up to when your parents were away is probably not the sort of mischief one normally has to worry about from a group of teenage girls! As for parents getting up to mischief, well, why not? Its not as if fun and an interest in mischief suddenly up and disappears one day ;)
The consideration of what the families will be doing, and how the value of the gift of the summer house will be paid for does make me smile. After all, there is the general thought and observation that kinky tendencies have a tendency to run in families ;) At the same time, I do wonder how big a gift letting the girls use the summer house is seen as? If the house is largely unused most of the year, as it feels, then it is a smaller gift in the families eyes than it might otherwise seem. Not that it is a small gift at all, but not quite on the same scale as it might otherwise seem.
I was wondering how the time at home would be discussed, it turns out basically skipped over, then again, we don’t have the time or freedom to really move things forward here. A part of me wants to know more about what could have, or did happen, but I suspect it was quite a bit of not a lot. Plus, there are all the hints about what has been prepared, I want to know!
*giggles* how to explain the lack of space for her clothes, then again, she does need a few, just not that many, and hardly a full or fashionable wardrobe! Not that we want to be explaining this to widely now do we? *smirk*
Now that is interesting... is this secret, being the target of a grand prank, just a general comment about the contract, or a fairly major heads up that something major is coming this way? I am going with a warning of something major, after all, most readers won’t have followed the forum conversation about all of this, or paid attention to the thanks at the top of the story, that also suggests something significant has been worked out.
The collar is back, that should be a familiar and reassuring feeling. Yes, it would have left marks, but the planed lie about the tattoo is much more interesting. Actually a very good excuse and justification, but at the same time a strangely accurate, if lopsided, take on events :)
Ramping back up again, the journey is good, since it gives everyone some rather useful time and space to shift mental perspective on our slave girl, and their relationships. The almost mysterious comments about the summer house though, and the two of you becoming one... I am tempted to start from the point of view that it is just a house, the location of your slavery, but this makes it feel much more, something much grander and more complex... I feel some serious weight developing here... most curious and very interesting!
*giggles* so taken with her fantasies and memories of the billboard and your brief, if powerful, experience here on the way down. Of course now you have explained exactly what you were dreaming, and perhaps even lusting after... well, clearly your friends need all the help they can get seeing you as a sexual submissive and object of male sexual use... since thoughts like that would never have crossed their minds otherwise... *evil smirking* Then again, and having said all of that, how keen are they on sharing you with men, or more to the point, having men focus more on the naked slave than the glamorous and beautiful slave owners... time will tell.
Smirk, I do love Tracy’s logical response to the two fantasy options. Of course, there is nothing quite like firmly and directly saying “no, never” to your owners, especially over something so “simple”, to them, as showing off their slave girl in public... I doubt this defiance, since that I suspect is exactly how this will be perceived, is likely to go down all that well with them.
And there goes Tracy, pointing out how unwise it is to go telling her owners what they can and cannot do with her... bless her!
The third wheel comment fits nicely, but also does a good job of showing the closeness and togetherness of her friends, and reminding us of the nature of this triangle relationship.
*smirk* yes, well, it is SO reassuring that her two friends are not being endlessly chased by boys. They are clearly such “pure” and “good” daughters, obviously a real honour to the family, girls to be held up as shining examples of how everyone should strive to be... slave owning terrors!
Ah, now my shy, innocent and sheltered nature is showing. I find myself wondering if teenage boys not really being interested in or capable of showing a girl a proper good time is really just something from those days, or an ongoing issue. I have some reasons to suspect it is more of an ongoing issue, but who am I really to say? Still, a reminder that when a girl needs a good time she has to find other ways of getting her satisfaction...
Ah, wondering if the girls really are going to hold true to their threats, or is that promises, for how you are going to be treated and used once you all get to your new home... plenty of hints to reassure us that the girls are more than ready to follow through! You do make a good point though, you are going to have to practice before you are ready to be put up on the stage for the truckers and do your show!
Ah, and the other side, this I do feel is going to be a very real and very ongoing issue... how many males are going to pay your pretty friends all that much attention when there is a naked slave girl around and potentially on offer? I am not sure that the solution to this is clear yet, but sooner or later this problem is going to require a bit more attention.
Now that is interesting... back to Sean, remembering when she was naked and VERY securely tied to his bench. Yes, you teased him a lot, you were naked and fully “available” and “on offer”, but I would like to think that given you were there for a professional service, and no one actually offered you up as a sex object, that most people would have showed the same restraint and common decency. I know, I am a romantic at heart ;)
Now that is even more interesting, and screams of something to be explored later, the need to right the wrong you did to Sean. As memory serves Sean has already said what he wanted as follow up, and it wasn’t actually a slave girl offered up on a plate, but it does remain to be seen if he would be interested in a naked slave girl or not... not fair to assume he would be, but it doesn’t seem so unreasonable to ask. How to get your friends on board with this point of view though? Being fairly rich, coming from money, to what degree, if at all, do they consider those they just pay for a service? Plus they didn’t have the quality time you had with Sean, they just dropped you off and left after all.
Half an hour out and it is time, something else they have discussed in “secret”. I actually like this for more than the obvious and immediate wickedness of the moment and the action of making her strip. It is a nice reminder that a lot has to happen in the background, between her owners, their work and responsibility in all of this, its not just reaping the rewards of having a naked slave girl after all :)
Half an hour out by car seems to far to make her run that distance, but they are letting her keep her shoes... time to find out.
Now that is an interesting, and remarkably adult thought and question - the one if Jackie’s parents feared her relationship with her friends was toxic. I don’t think I really have any basis for forming an answer, but on one paw her friends are actually very loving and supportive, in their own way. They do use and manipulate, but they also love and treasure... so I find myself quite on the fence about this, but the decisions have been made and set in motion, so in a sense it doesn’t matter. Still, it is an interesting piece of context and background to all of this.
The truck, the memories of that night, becoming more timid around Dana to not make her angry, remembering previous conversations here, I am suddenly thinking “conditioned behaviour”, a thought that would not normally be anywhere so clear or obvious to me. Interesting...
A surprise... oooHHHHHH! *excited bounces*
Now that is a properly wise observation, one I sort of wish more people recognised. Being in charge doesn’t mean you don’t make mistakes, but it does make you responsible for sorting out afterwards.
Yes, helpful advice about clean underwear *rolls eyes* the emotional rollercoaster is in full swing, but no wonder really, given all of the uncertanties about this, and the very real concerns about how your friends are going to feel and respond to the very situations they set in action and bring about!
Interesting, the way Dennis is speaking about her, but then again, he has spent how many weeks laying the ground work for her to be much more of an “it” than a “she” I suspect...
Indeed, how to move back and forward between being a student and being a slave. Perhaps just a slave ordered to study and learn? It is a simple enough start point that could well help.
Dana is surprisingly deferential towards Dennis here, and yes, you are being bitchy and petty, but given that this is clearly something about you, and it is being done right in front of you, while also keeping you literally in the dark about it, thats not really a surprise. Plus you are hardly back and settled into your slave head space are you? :)
OK, this is starting to make more sense, a road test, and to stop the maid wandering off, while still being totally mysterious and really getting into her head at the same time! Evil and inspired!
LOL, lazy privileged asses! Brilliant! But yes, also, this does suggest that for all of the, quite unknown at the moment, amount of work that Dennis has done on this project, he isn’t really on the same page as the girls, at least not yet.
Gags, keeping slaves safe from themselves for many years now, see how kind they were?! :)
Yes, you really haven’t had a lot of man attention of late, or any sexual attention for that matter, but that denial has been going round. As for rewarding Gregory for enslaving you, well of course! It isn’t as if he just passed you a plate at dinner, he had to put together a coherent and very serious, and totally custom, legal document, and help to make sure you were properly converted from a free woman to property! Such quality work deserves a proper reward after all.
I do wonder if Dennis “needed” to come up behind her like this, but until we know the details, it doesn’t seem unreasonable. Still, it is offering his crotch up for her bound hands, and his reaction is quite normal and to be expected under the circumstances. But still, only just arrived and already we need to wonder how her friends will react to men responding so well to their naked maid...
Nods, interesting now you can properly see Dennis. I suspect a lot of his mixed reaction is to do with the move from an intellectual puzzle / general task to the reality of a naked and chained up “slave” attached to his construction. This does rather change the feeling and nature of the experience doesn’t it?! Its no longer just a piece of mechanics, but now it has actual real world implications on a real person, and you are part of this!
A real sprinkler system is actually very good, from a safety point of view, but the fact that all of the families, the parents, contributed to the cost of this... well, this constant restraint device, just makes it feel all the more... i am not sure what word I want, perhaps intrusive is a good one? The idea that her parents put in a good piece of the price of keeping her a total prisoner... amazing thought!
Nods, it does feel like we are seeing a new side of her friends, and more than that, the cost, complexity and work that went into this system is simply staggering! At this point any vague thoughts about them not taking this seriously, about them not taking full, complete and ongoing use, almost to the point of abuse, of the slavery have been wiped away. Her friends are going all in, full bore here!
*snort* well you did just spring this on her, what do you expect her to say? Stunned silence seems very much like the right and expected result.
A second car on the track? I am also curious. A spare makes a bit of sense, but somehow I would not expect it to be mounted like that, but it could well be. Still, somehow it suggests something else, but at the moment I don’t have any idea what or why. But yes, mind boggling is very much the right response to the work that went into all of this!
There I was thinking “no rush to bring in slaves clothes” when you go and drop a whole new level of control, forward planning and cunning on us! Could her entire wardrobe have been planned out with this restraint system factored in in advance? Yes, but only if her friends are massively and completely into keeping on top of the details, and really making good use of their slave, and totally dominating her in so MANY different ways!
The padlock on the track, such a simple way of locking off areas she isn’t supposed to access or explore yet.
We are a solid step forward from not seeing her clothes come into the house, with even the two items that came in on her disappearing!
Then though, they just go off and leave her with Dennis... has Dennis been given guidance as to what is allowed and expected? Are they just trusting in his judgement? Now I have to wait who knows how long to find out and to see more of this!!! AAAAGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!
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Hello Everybody,
First and foremost thank you for this amazing story. It's the only teenagedrama in ten years that captured my attention.
I'm reading your stories since years and well today dumb me registered for the first time that there was a feedback forum. So yeah... it's fitting that my first comment is relative to "My summer of dares".
So yeah... sorry for being 6 years late to the party.
English isn't my first language. (German > French > Dutch > English), so I'll keep my comment somewhat short because the fact that I can't write out my thoughts due to a limited vucabullary tends to drive me crazy. Maybe I'll add some more smaller comments over the following days and weeks.
My first piece of feedback to part 18 is, that it had me antsy and somewhat on the edge of the seat. I feel a storm coming soon.
I had the impression that one of Jacky's needs (feeling loved and cared for) isn't fulfilled, that she's getting frustrated but is unable to communicate efficiently.
The insight to her thoughts was very reveiling to me. I'm a grumpy old dom, I did my fair share of frustrating my sub (and had later to deal with the fallout). With more experience, I'm now able to discern the early state of my sub's frustration, but I've seen this situations always from the outside. I feel that your story gave me some very valuable insights in what's going on in the sub's head... the confusion, the turmoil, the frustration. I really think that I'm understanding a littlebit better now...
Our trio is living through a mutual breakdown of communication. First Dana couldn't (of didn't want to) communicate her grievance's to her slave and lashed out. (For that she deserves a serious tongue lashing from someone.) Now it's Jacky that's unable to communicate about her grievances.
Well... in my experience, cute little subbies who are feeling that her needs aren't met (it doesn't really matter if it is structure, discipline, caring, love...) start to communicate. Or they do it verbally like adults (that would be out of character for young Jacky) or they start communicating 'alternativly' by becomming mouthy, bratty, antsy... or by tacitly opting out (slacking, only going through the motions). I somewhat doubt that our inexperienced dommes would know how to handle a lashing out Jacky. They would need to go on instinct - maybe they are lucky, maybe they are not. Some BDSM-relationships last, some don't.
In my experience, a mutual breakdown of the 'longterm' communication is the best way to get you some serious heartache, when things fall apart.
About 'Jaqueline D. Lapin', you had me grinning there. The traduction was to the point.
About Dennis persuing Jacky: of course he does. A dominant pursues submissives not dommes. It's what we do, it's what we are. It's like being surprised that the straight guy goes for the girl and not for the two gorgeous blokes. That has nothing to do with males in general wanting pliable women. Dominant is a sexual orientation, not a livestyle. We are born this way it doesn't change. I've tried as my wife tried not to be a submissive. It - doesn't - work. :-)
In my eyes the dommes just don't stand a chance in hell. For a dominant a submissive is in 99% of the cases more interesting then a domme, looks don't matter, money doesn't matter. It's a little bit like physics. Dom and Sub attract each other. Two pure dominants, that's mostly really complicated if it works at all.
Seeing the shortage of Subs and the affluence of Doms in the setting I wouldn't even be surprised if gradually another dynamism would ensue: Everybody 'competing' for Jacky's attention. Maybe by intensifying her experience - If Jacky would be so delighted about this, I can't say.
These were my 5 cents for today. :)
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Thank you Feline, as always, for such thought provoking words. I possibly wasn't as clear as I should have been on who was proverbially measuring my alter ego's room for alterations, or almost helping her pack, but I wanted to demonstrate that Jackie's parents were almost eager for her to get on with her own life. I personally can't read the word "parents" in an erotic story though, it's just something very non-sexy to me, so I try to use any other word to denote parents, like, for instance "folks."
Anyway, that being said, what are your thoughts on having Jackie's "folks" paying off the continuing debt of having Jackie stay at the summer house for college? I could imaging Tracy's folks simply writing a check every month, but Jackie's might not be able to write that check. Could Dana's folks take it in trade maybe, and would this be sexy in the context of an erotic story?
Dana's folks might need some handyman type stuff done around the house, snow shoveling and lawn care come to mind, now that the boys aren't home, as do maid services. Could they cater and serve an empty nest party at Dana's big house, submitting to their more wealthy neighbors as repayment, in uniform maybe? Could it be as suggested, that kink and submission runs in Jackie's family, and this the real reason that Dana's folks made this generous offer? Maybe one of Jackie's folks is the object of hidden lust, and this an elaborate plot to have what somebody shouldn't want? Maybe I should just give them names, then I wouldn't have to say parents, or folks, or whatever?
I don't know if any of this would be sexy though, but it would be a fun plot twist, as in "meanwhile, while Jackie is cleaning house, somebody else back home is on his or her knees, or back, saying thank you in their own humble way."
I also think Dennis has built something incredible, but now he has a "what now?" kind of moment. As T.H. points out, there is a surplus of dominant personalities here, and one "in demand" submissive, so Jackie will be the hot commodity going forward.
The second car on the pipes I only intended to replace the first, incase it got worn out, thinking to demonstrate the level of foerthought that went into the engineering of this project. I suppose we could always hang a second house slave on the pipes, or hang Jackie by her wrists or ankles and slide her someplace as punishment though, or even for easy use.
In any event, thank you again for your kind words, Jackie.
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Thank you T.H. and welcome to the party. I am humbled by your compliments, and also humbled that this is your first post here. I like this part of writing, the feedback part, almost as much as the writing part; it's fun to see how others see these stories. That being said, I have taken your observations to heart, Jackie is the lone submissive here, and this is the 1970's as in bake some cookies and when is dinner? So she is a hot commodity here, and the girls may need the ego boost from putting her in her place.
Dennis got tag teamed by Dana and Tracy once, more as an ego thing on his part (can I take care of two girls at the same time?) rather than desire, but your thoughts on doms not attracted to doms is valid. Jackie is needy, perhaps she is looking for the disipline and rules she never had growing up, Dana and Tracy providing this in an odd sort of way, and the needy Jackie latching onto this.
The Lapin sirname was one I made up, but when I had I thought it was simpy "rabbit" in French, not "castrated rabbit" but it is funny. If I write into the story that Jackie's parents, or folks, are kniky too, and this is where she got it from, in part; it would make an especially ironic sirname for her possibly submissive dad. I hadn't planned this, and I don't even know that this would even be specifically "sexy," but it is ironic.
Anyway, I do need to figure out what I am going to do with Dennis going forward, I literally left Jackie almost hanging there and unwrapped for him, but will he take the bait, or want her more on his own terms, and not as a one time gift given by the girls? If the girls give Jackie to Dennis, they will, by implication, have the ability to "ungive" her as well, and the dom Dennis might not like that.
As far as the girls are concerned, they are teens, privlaged teens in the case of Dana and Tracy, so we have to make some allowances. Dana wasn't behaving like someone "in-charge" that particular night, but she will learn, likely at Jackie's expense though.
Thank you again for the kind words, and welcome, Jackie.
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Hey Jacky,
About the idea of kinky parents. It's your story and all... I just want to warn you to be careful about making the same "mistake" as a lot of authors do, where everybody, every named and unnamed character, mommy, daddy, neighbours, the mailman and their grandmas are somewhat kinky and into the scene. I mean, I understand that a lot of people in the scene are tired to be ethernally in the minority and it would be fun having more likeminded people around. But if you want create colonies of kinksters, why not depicting a specialized gated community for BDSM-people?
BDSM-open people are a minority. Having whole colonies of kinksters in a story can stretch the suspense of disbelief to a breaking point and beyond.
Let's summarise: We have clique of 3 girls who are into it. By happenstance their neighbor of their summerhouse shares the same kink (petplay). Okay... I'll buy that. These things happen.
Some of his buddies are at least open to share in the fun. Well they are young men, testosterone and stuff...
But now the probabilities of having even more people into this stuff are starting to run very low.
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T.H., nice to see you, you make very interesting points, it is nice to see this from another perspective. And your English is very good for a 4th language!
For the story, if I wasn't splitting my attention quite so much, and read slightly further before commenting, then it would have been a lot clearer who was looking to make possible changes to her childhood room, so while the story wasn't 100% clear, it was far from unclear. But I didn't want to read to far ahead before getting the various thoughts and reactions I was having down on paper for you.
Jackie, my first thought on reading your question about payment for Jackie's portion of the bills was to bring Jackie along in her capacity as a sexy maid during the holiday seasons. However this was just a first instinct, and as I considered it, I was not sure how well this would work, or how much sense it would make.
Already we have the looming situation of her friends brothers discovering that she is kept as a naked slave, and the complications and implications of that discovery. So in that sense her status as a maid is going to become an open secret in the family, but where the lines get drawn with the whole "its a naked girl, I want" we don't yet know. So far the only real line is that sex is off limits, but this still leaves our slave available for providing oral pleasure, as has already happened once.
Having an unpaid maid present in her friends houses over the holiday seasons is going to count for something, cost wise, and also you can argue that her friends parents would pay all of the costs of the summer house, and more, quite happily to put their precious daughters through college. Dana and Tracy are going to view this as their right, I am fairly sure. I am tempted to say that the cost implications should be added to their leverage over Jackie, but given the contract and the fact that this is actually what Jackie wants and is looking for, this is rather pointless, and in a sense distracts from the heart of their power dynamic, focussing more on "money" and less on their relationships with each other.
Arguably you have opened the door to the question of what all three sets of folks will do now that the troublesome girls are off at college, with Jackie's speculation on this, but that is a long way from suggesting anything kinky. Before reading T.H.'s very good point about this I was actually considering the question more from a point of focus.
At the moment we have a small, if slowly growing, cast of characters at the college. If you wanted to do more than lightly touch on what is happening at "home" then you are going to be adding in several more characters to keep track of, and how much attention would they get? Would it help or hinder?
From an emotional point of view, from a "how my tummy feels" point of view, the idea of Jackie's folks being asked to contribute to the running costs of Jackie's slavery is very appealing and powerful, but there are lots of ways of paying. I am currently left considering, and leaning towards thoughts about how different types of skills and labour are valued very differently. Blue collar skills are seen as much "better", higher status and pay, but are they actually more skilful and impactful? A side issue from the stories point of view, but mechanical skills, perhaps owning a garage, could well fit well into Jackie's folks lifestyle, and this could provide a way for them to provide various "low value" services, a parallel of sorts with Jackie, while also showing off the real difference, where her folks contributions are negotiated, reasonable, on their terms, while Jackie's services are demanded, taken and entirely unreasonable, and without her having any say in them.
The general points about Jackie's headspace, her being in demand from several different people, and also the communication problems are all well made. T.H. you have pointed this out very clearly, pinpointing something that has been sort of bothering me for a little bit. Jackie is very aware of the problem with Dana's reaction before they went "home", but this has yet to be resolved, and is currently an issue that is just waiting to rear its head once more.
As for payment for all of Dennis's hard work, and very skilled work, while he is a male, how accepting is he going to be of taking advantage of a captive? It's clear from his reaction that already he is having some problems / concerns over the reality of keeping Jackie chained up all the time, even though he was the main source of this ability. Does he have the maturity to worry about her consent? We don't want to scare him off, but he really isn't coming across as relaxed and comfortable here.
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I have something in mind that the two of you will, I think, like. Bringing parents, "folks" into this any more than I have (by having them fund the plumbing project) kind of bothered me at one level to be honest, and I think I might leave all three sets just a bit ignorant on what their little darlings are up to so far from home. In their world the girls are just good friends, and their focus is to get their children an education, while keeping them "safe" from any boys that might come along.
If and when the brothers discover their sisters' kink, they will be disenclined to share it back home, but rather use it personally for blackmail type motivation. The "I'll tell the folks" threat left hanging as a last resort...
Thank you again for the thoughts, I think this makes for a better overall story, Jackie.
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Jackie, my focus is on the submissive who has a diary full of kinky fantasies that have started to materialize. Dana & Tracy have enjoyed the little things they have had Jackie do and have been learning how deep her submissiveness runs and have taken control of her via the tattoo and contract. Jackie has drifted into subspace several times and though she has verbally but lightly put her foot down on several issues, she has quickly reverted back to her submissive side which by now she wears like a tightly wrapped cloak around her. Being naked and alone with Dennis at this point or probably any point in the story is not something she would object to. If Dennis has any qualms about having Jackie orally pleasure him, Jackie will instinctively take the lead. Not topping from the bottom, but doing what her submissive persona tells her she is to do. Any male, no matter their age, would stand there and watch as this naked, willing, young girl performs orally on him. Her submissiveness at this point doesn't require any thought of the contract or tattoo; she is operating on auto pilot. Will she balk at being ordered to service more than one male at a time, I'm sure she will, but inside her mind she will provide the logical reasons why she should do it, would do it and finally submit to doing it. This is where i see Jackie at right now. All along, things have been " a kinky thing to think of herself doing" to "a kinky thing I want to do". Now she is at "yes, I'll do that".
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You bring up a good point drulema, about Dennis and his desires. I had him as a "happy go lucky" character at first, but that was in a group, and I wanted to give him some more depth as a character, make him just a bit more than horemones and sneakers. He's one on one with my alter ego now, and he can be just a bit more himself, and while he'd love to do something with the stripped and available Jackie, he might not like being expected to perform on command for the girls, like he had when he got tag teamed by them. Perhaps he has some regrets about that, as in that didn't go quite like he thought it might? Perhaps he even realized that the girls had used him at some point, and perhaps he's feeling like that again, with being coaxed into building this elaborate restraint device to keep my alter ego from wandering off a second time?
In my mind he's an alpha, but a reluctant alpha; and while just a few years older than the girls, he's still young and learning what personally makes him tick. I like stories with impossibly put together alpha characters, but in reality I think it takes time to "grow" such a character, and Dennis is more in the beginning stages of this. Greg, at the same time, should be way more confident than he appears, being a college professor and all that. I'm not a teacher, but I can almost imaging the ego boost from having a whole class full of young adults looking up to you, not only as in a position of authority and knowledge, but in looking up "at" you standing at the head of the classroom.
Greg has had a shock recently to his little world though, enough of one that he's given away his pet accessories to the girls, but he's still willing to mentor them, meaning that he's still "into" it, into the kink in some measure, but that he's given up on finding a willing playmate of his own. He's a young college professor though, so this "mentoring" probably comes naturally to him. My alter ego complicates all that obviously, making him second guess himself, and as a result Greg was likely conflicted on doing the slave contract at all, but he did it anyway, with a suggestive smile on his face at first. Did he become reluctant at some point too?
Maybe if, or when Greg aquires another human pet, maybe it will be with a contract this time? Perhaps in this way the girls have taught HIM something, teaching the teacher, so to speak. Or, maybe Greg has really given up on a pet of his own, thinking a maid like Jackie might be a more practical investment?
Just some thoughts on the next chapter or two, and I very much appreciate seeing this from your point of view, Jackie.
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Hello Jackie,
I am a late arrival to this story but I wanted to take this opportunity to tell you that while I am a frequent if quiet visitor to Gromet's Plaza, your latest addition to Clowning Around was led me to this story and I have to say that it is an incredible tale. I have read your other literary works before, but it was in a haphazard fashion reading only those titles that caught my eye. But after reading Chap. 18 of My Summer of Dares, I simply had to read the entire story from the beginning and I am certainly glad I did. In fact, reading your story finally led me to sign up for membership to the forum. And I am kind of glad I did as it allowed me access to this discussion thread and learn that the five pages of thoughts, comments, and plot suggestions have been thoroughly covered by Feline, and Drulema and to a certain extent, T.H. . I have since then deleted those five pages which is just as well, given that I had written those pages with the fear in the back of my mind of ending up like Rodney Dangerfield in the movie "Back to School" where in order to impress his literature professor played by Sally Kellerman, Rodney hires the author of the book that the class is on to teach him about the book. If you watched the movie, you know then that Rodney gets a F and Sally Kellerman tells him that he doesn't know anything about the book.
Anyway, I have noticed that you frequently employ a built in time limit as a means to control the length of the story. Like what you did with Clowning Around which centered around the time from one Halloween to the next Halloween. You used the summer between high school and college to limit the story. This does bring up the issue of how to continue the story. And I certainly hope that you do as this would be a great novel, but it may need a title change. We are talking about the next four years of your alter ego's life here. By the way, This dinosaur who still owns a typewriter just recently discovered the convenience of Kindle, and having read some of the books available on Amazon, your work outshines the vast majority of the books of the same genre there. That is my roundabout way of saying I would be willing to buy your books. In fact, your chap. two of Clowning Around has all the other Pony Girl books on Amazon beat as a opening chapter. That is another story you must continue. It's that good. I also have some thoughts, comments and plot suggestions there too, but I am scare to look at the comment section at this time.
There are two things I do want to bring up about this story so far. The first is the black out episode that your alter ego went through. You basically described Dissociative Identity Disorder. Did you use it as a literary tool to move the story? I know that in the discussion thread, this was talked about briefly, but Gregory as an adjunct professor and someone who supposedly is knowledgeable about the world of D/s relationships and kink in general seemed awfully insistent on having your alter ego put on a performance in payment of the help from "The Club". Given how quickly your alter ego immersed herself into the mindset of "Pet" while only a few hours in the cage, I would think that Gregory would be hesitate to force the issue given the risk of another dissociative episode which actually might be more severe. Brief note: there is always a triggering event which was sort of alluded to in that chapter which Gregory even brought up. It is hard enough to be a pet, let alone a working slave. But to be both at the same time? And having conflicting desires as to whom to serve? Dana and Tracy? Or Gregory? I don't know which way the story will go but I would not be surprised if another or more severe black out would occur if the club event takes place. One of the possible causes of DID is childhood abuse. Not that I am saying that the parents are at fault, but you did say that your alter ego had been groomed for years to be subservient by Dana and Tracy. And DID does not get better without treatment. If the blackout occurs, a decision is going to have to be made. . That open diary may be filled with adventures, but it’s got the potential for a lot of snake pits as well. Dana and Tracy for all their willingness to indulge your alter ego her fantasies are still very young and they may simply not know enough to keep things safe.
The second point is what your alter ego said to Tracy,
"Dana was right" I confessed, "I am useless right afterwords... I wish I weren't though".
Your alter ego is addicted to the endorphin high of kink. La petite mort. (although technically, that refers to right after the orgasm). What I am alluding to is that moment just before the orgasmic release and that is a feeling that a lot of people seek out. I think it is called Edging nowadays. I am talking of course about chastity. If your alter ego were to wear one, she could be taken to the very edge and not be able to seek relief regardless of her efforts. (The pain from those rough textured doggie paw gloves will not stop anyone from sexual release if they are really desperate. All that will do is to associate pain with pleasure which is not a really healthy thing). She could be trusted by Dana to never have coitus with any man because she can't, and thus she can be trusted to be in the house with all male and female visitors. (Dana does impress upon me to be the possessive type who doesn't like to share unless she gets something out of it regardless of her friendship with your alter ego). And it would forcibly impress on your alter egos' psyche that she is indeed truly chattel. As in Dana deciding to throw a party and tells your alter ego that she is to service everyone. In fact, a cool way for your alter ego to learn that the ownership of her indenture contract has been sold after graduation is to simple by left attached to the summer house and told to wait for someone to come who will be holding two keys. Maybe Gregory will simply make a deal with Dana's parents after the four years and buys the house from them, with a side deal with Dana to buy that indenture contract. Interesting tidbit: Indenture Contracts still exist in US jurisprudence, one version of which is one involving debt between two parties. Second interesting tidbit: In the 1070's there is the Anne Hugessen chastity belt. While other belts have been known to exist, these were one off custom jobs and crudely made because for some reason, everybody kept copying those fake medieval monstrosities. The Anne Hugessen I believe, was the first mass produced CB which was adjustable. It is still crude by our standards today but it was cutting edge back then. I am sure that a good rubbing with Unobtainium polish will make the CB a joy to wear for long term. And there is always the custom made one of a kind route. A person who has friends in the kink world would undoubtedly have friends who have access to machine shops and stainless steel. Oh I could go on and on but I need to stop because I am beginning to drool.
One more thought. The "car" on the overhead sprinkler track is properly called a trolley and overhead tracks are not that uncommon even in the 1970s. Such a tracked system can be installed outdoors at your alter ego's waist height in an oval configuration so she can do some running for exercise. All she has to do is to hold on to the slack of the chain and keep it at her side as she runs. A contemporary example of this system can be seen with the dog runs that the east germans had set up along their side of the Berlin wall. Those trolleys had rubber wheels to keep things quiet as the dogs went back and forth towards people trying to escape to the west.
So I will end here and I hope I did not speak out of turn. I certainly hope you do continue and can't wait for the next installment.
Respectfully yours,
Neosteeled
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First off I must say welcome to the forum Neosteeled, and if I had some small part in your joining, that makes me feel just wonderful. I sincerely appreciate your kind comments, you humble me and make me blush with your praise.
I love the interaction here almost as much as the actual writing part, and I think the suggestions and input make for better stories. I also use the interest on the fourm to measure the interest a story generates, because in it's (Gromet's Plaza) present configuration, I really don't know how many reads a story actually gets. Not that I write for this goal, I really just like to share the kinky thoughts in my head with like minded souls, but it's nice to know; as in what story should I spend my time working on.
Your observation on built in time limits, story wise, is an interesting one, because I don't always realize that I do that to be honest. I did it in this case though, to limit the scope of the story, my alter ego even narrating that her/my summer of dares were coming to an end, in the first sentence of chapter 18. The next chapter starts the next chapter of the girls lives, and I will title it with something new then too, but still linking the two stories. At first the girls seem like they're having kinky playful fun with each other, indulging my alter ego out of love, and maybe something else just lightly hinted at. Dana and Tracy are privileged, and it's left less than clear in the story if grooming their submissive friend to do their bidding is intentional, or an accident.
Jackie's DID blackout episode I intended as a way to get the girls from "here to there" so to speak, she perhaps just overwhelmed with all that kink, and the closed in motion of the truck and covered cage. And, I think she ran away in her pet persona after both of her friends had tag teamed Dennis in such a way that she couldn't help but to know. My alter ego was interested in both young men, and one had been stolen right out from under her, by both her best friends working in concert.
I think that was especially cruel of them as they prefer each other, only taking Dennis because they wanted the attention, wanted to prevent Jackie from having a potential "win" over them. It was shallow to be sure, but all three girls are still teens at this point, and I plan on them growing in this journey that they're on together. I also plan on Dana perhaps trying to steal Greg away from my alter ego as well, just so that she can have him fully first, before Jackie. Again it's shallow and cruel, but both pretty girls are last born and used to getting what they want with both their appearance, and their birthright status.
I didn't specifically know about the DID thing, so thank you for that. I will write that into this story, but in a way that maintains the kink, and doesn't drift into any abuse, as that's not the least bit fun. This is an example of how this forum colllaboration works for me, others have some wonderful input for the things I'm working on, and I sometimes use them to make for a better overall story. It takes time to write like this, but I think the stories are much better this way than I ever could do all on my own.
I myself have drifted into the mindset that "this house ownes me," and I thought it might be fun if the house really did have posession, as in a "physically attached and unable to leave" kind of way. The track and car/trolley were a suggestion, and it took a little longer than I thought it should, to have my alter ego attached to it, story wise. I wanted her on it though, and feeling trapped as a result. This will prevent any more running away too, but it's also obvious that Greg isn't thinking this is a good idea. It does reinforce what Jackie now is, and her primary purpose though, but I doubt that Jackie envisioned herself being chained to the house itself when she wasn't actually in class. The sucessful test usage of the long dog chain while Jackie washed cars that night should have been a warning. For the girls it might have just been a proof of concept though, as in "we could actually do this."
I also don't know how wanting, vs needing it is for Greg to show Jackie one time at least; to repay all the help that the club gave in finding the runaway Jackie. So, in other words, he may not have all that much choice here. Will she go into full sub space again? Possibly, but you can bet that they will keep a better eye on her this time.
I agree with the hard crash right after the big O, but I've seen this before, so I assumed it wasn't a limited thing. My SO is about useless right after, so I decided to give my alter ego this characteristic, although truth be told I can be like this too sometimes. As far as a chastity device for my alter ego, I don't mind putting one on my SO, and we have in fact played with them for some weeks in a row, but after a while they lose their effectiveness, and good hygiene is always a concern too. I also have to deal with a twenty eight day cycle somehow, so I don't know if that would work long term. As far as rubbing yourself raw if lusted up enough; that would leave evidence, and lead to consequences.
As far as a good working plan, I don't know that having a perpetually naked and desirable Jackie chained to the house and serving the guests like a slave will be good for Dana and Tracy's fragile egos. I kind of thought that might add some friction to their relationship. As far as selling the summerhouse with a human accessory attached, I really like that idea and may use it too. The outside dog run would be hard to conceal though, and I think the leftover long chain could more easily be attached to almost anything, including a large tree in the woods, if they needed to hide Jackie for a parental visit someplace, or something like that. Feline wants me to use the hospital again, to maybe hide Jackie, and I think I will at some point, it's just too much fun not to go there again.
As far as Clowing Around, I have used the I.P.R.L. before, and I plan on meshing the stories together that mention the organization, but I have a little writers block going on at the moment. I'll get back to that one though, because the characters are just too much fun. I'll also explain where those other ponygirls came from too, but it's related to both The Investigative Reporter, and somewhat loosely to The Reluctant Racing Pony...
Thank you again for your very kind words, and the motivation too, Jackie.
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I'd like to note that amnesia isn't exclusive to DID. Amnesiac barriers can also occur as OSDD-1a, and there are other non-plurality related possible causes of amnesia. When I was reading the story I kind of just assumed that the forgotten events were traumatic and that was what led to amnesia. Though if you like the idea of making Jackie plural, I wouldn't be surprised if some endogenic systems might exist with limited memory sharing, though I haven't knowingly met such a system. That might be an idea for how to go about that, like that maybe Jackie subconsciously created a headmate through her fantasies or whatever. (Hard for me to be specific since my system is traumagenic, but I'm sure there's a story potential there, like with Jackie learning of her headmate, creating a headspace on her off time, and interacting with them in the headspace.)
Side note, I don't know how familiar you are with plurality and plural terms, but just in case it's helpful, Pluralpedia is a good resource for that.
Anyway, now that I'm posting here, let me say that I love this story. This is the first time ever that I'm actually following a story like this. There is just so, so much to like. I'm glad it doesn't rely on tired BDSM clichés and is its own thing. I love the story. Being gray ace, I'm extremely happy that there's more to this than just sex, sex, sex, sex. Us being a transfemme system, I love that language describing the main character's body isn't any more specific than it has to be within each situation, which means even though it's obvious that the main character is cis, it's very easy to imagine ourselves in the same position as her for the most part. I love that the characters act like flawed, realistic humans with missed expectations, miscommunication, jealousy and all that stuff that real relationships have, without resorting to making characters abusive.
Needless to say, I'm very much looking forward to seeing how the rest of the story goes and very glad that I found it. You're a really good writer. I'm in particular very curious what Dana was upset about (though I have an idea of what it might be), and also interested to see how college is going to go and how it's going to be woven together with the characters' secret life at the summer house.
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Welcome to the forum CarelessBox, and thank you for your kind words. I had intended to have my alter ego blackout and awake bound to the bed only as a good way to get the characters from her to there, so to speak. Something overwhelming did happen to her while she was lost, but not traumatic. The DID thing is an education for me to be honest, and OSDD-1a even more so. Thank you for that.
I have it in mind that Jackie can get to that sub-space under certain circumstances, it's why she plays at being a pup so well. I also think she may be able to better control the "depth" of that experience going forward, if not overstimulated into an episode.
She is a teen though, and this is the 1970's so I don't know how well versed anybody is in plural behavior. That being said, I could also see the owned house slave being of one mindset, and the studious college student being of another. I have implied that both Dana and Tracy are expecting to get by on their looks and related wealth, rather than their academic intelligence, where my alter ego has to work harder, as she doesn't expect to coast through life.
I don't really like to describe my characters in exacting detail, unless it's necessary to make the story work. I like that the characters can be almost anything you want them to be, and coming from your perspective I see how that works in a good way. I can't say that I had this in mind, but I'm very happy this works, as in this is a good reason to continue.
I like real characters too, flaws and all. The girls are teens though, and they and their friends will grow along with this, they pretty much have to. I think it might be fun if Tracy and Dana, who by all accounts have everything going for them, come out second best at the end of this. Girls having intimate girlfriends in the 1970's was I'm sure rare, and possibly looked at not so accepting as it is today. Likewise, having "pet play" back then had to be very unique, as in if the college found about Greg's hobby, he might get fired. Perhaps there were even rumors floating around the school, of a girl kept naked in a cage, after his old girlfriend suddenly left him?
This could be a secondary reason why Greg wanted to give away his pet accessories, and the conflict he feels at showing Jackie personally. Dana and Tracy will actually show Jackie though, and while my alter ego will be somewhat disguised, the girls won't be, dressed to get attention like they always are. Everybody who notices the two pretty and well turned out new to the pet world girls will eventually know who the third is, Jackie getting outed by her friends in this way; and her "I don't like clothes" preference will eventually become a well known secret.
I go back and forth between having Dana truely interested in Greg, or only interested in preventing him from ruining what looks to be an easy, away from home cruise through college for Dana and Tracy; if he should somehow pry Jackie away from the girls early, despite the contract. Tracy might not like that, but it is Dana's family house, Tracy and Jackie technically invited guests that could be dis-invited. I did a little research, and the ratio between girls and boys at college in the 1970's was very favorable to the girls, as in almost one and one half boys for every girl, (depending on the school) making them potentially quite popular... if they wanted to go that way.
As far as the girls abusing Jackie, I see some rough punishments, if earned, but nothing evil as they really do love each other. You might have to punish a loved pet, to make sure she doesn't run away and get squashed on the road, but you're doing that for her own good, and you still love her while doing so. Certain actions have consquences, and all of that.
Anyway, thank you again for the kind words, and the education, Jackie.
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Hello Jackie,
I wanted to thank you for your reply to my post. I have to admit that being able to communicate with an author is exciting to me, like attending a book signing and having a chance to speak with the creative mind behind the book. By any chance, are you a published author? If not, I hope you will consider that at some point.
Anyway, I have to admit that your story and the world that you created for it has got my researcher brain buzzing. Problem solving the nuts and bolts of your story while remaining within the time frame is quite educational. and it shows just how much we take things for granted today. For example, you said that you wanted to come up with a way to get your Alter Ego (AE) to return home to the summer house at the end of classes and to generally maintain control of her. This would be easily solved with the technology we have today, but The first american mobile phone was the Motorola in 1973 and it weighed 2.5 lbs, and only had power for 30 minutes. And best and most portable transceiver available to the public would be the Radio Shack 40 channel CB walkie talkie. These examples would be the most readily available tech that can be modified into a remote transmitter. And that presupposes a means of attaching a honking big electronic gismo to AE that can not be readily removed by her. (hint, hint) But to paraphrase one of my most favorite authors who always made it a point that in his stories, the speed of light is 299 792 458 m / s, gravity is 9.8 m/s2, and all the stars are orbiting in their right place. But where you can have Elvis alive and stuck in a nursing home because he needed a break but the impersonator he hired to cover for him keeled over dead in a hotel penthouse bathroom. (Bubba Ho-tep, an actual movie. Bruce Campbell was hilarious as Elvis).
So all the tech that you can conceivably use will have to be analog and mechanical. The good news is that in the '70s, the science of advanced metallurgy and precision machining, and Tang had already been developed. (Thank you NASA). But is all this really necessary? Your AE has already said that her situation is inescapable. There were not authority figures to question what was going on, and any attempts by her to seek help from anyone including the cops would reveal her complicity as well as put her friends and Greg in potential legal jeopardy. The fetters and chains that AE creates in her mind will most likely prove to be far stronger then anything physical.
And there is the problem of the relationship between AE and her two friends, specifically Dana. So far, in the story, Dana does appear to be the queen bee and will not take to AE pulling the spotlight away from her well. While she could steal Greg away from AE, that works on the idea that Greg won't see that he is being manipulated and that Greg is a shallow jackass. (This sort of ties in with the impression I got from reading about Greg selling off his pet girl gear. While it could be said that he was fearful of his lifestyle being revealed after his breakup with his girlfriend. I see it as a guy who is still heartbroken after losing his girl and wanting to remove all reminders of a love lost. If Greg was seriously worried about the college finding out, he could simply call upon his friends at the "Club" to just remove all the evidence from his home. Kink gear can get very expensive and no doubt, his friends would snap up all that stuff gladly). So how does Dana deal with the potential rival? Well, like in Clowning Around II, where our heroine recognizes that she and her promiscuity is the problem that had to be "removed". Dana could just remove AE as a rival by making AE a non factor with any man by removing her womanhood i.e. putting AE in chastity. So it doesn't matter if AE is naked and leashed on her run in the house. If AE can not engage in "normal" sex, men will stop seeing her as a woman capable of a normal relationship and just regard her as a house fixture.
Honestly, I can't come up with any other means of control that can be easily concealed, be portable but still comfortable, be non-removable, and get AE to return to the summer house because where else can she go? AE can still walk off the campus, but a chastity belt is going to be VERY hard to explain away to anyone specially a parent. Which ties in with AE and the pleasure she derives from her desire to be placed in potentially compromising positions such as her stint under the billboard, and her naked walks around the abandoned hospital, and her walking around with only a flimsy covering.
There is one last thing I wanted to bring up and that is regarding some of the misconceptions of chastity belt play. While it is true that in stories and in real life, it can be used as a means of involuntary control, and as a means of punishment, the reality is that one can not be forced to wear one. There is always an element of consent. The person who consents to wearing a chastity belt is saying to their partner, "This part of me, I give to you". The person who accepts that gift is then bonded to the wearer and becomes responsible for the care and well being of the wearer. The best example of this is a story written by Nerbus entitled "Xi". The premise of the story is of a woman who is haunted by the loss of her love, and begins to withdraw within herself. But a belated gift and a talk with a good friend gets Xi to begin seeing other people again. Sadly, the story was never finished but I believe the last words of the last chapter was a good way to end the story.
"The belt had been cold when it first came in contact with her delicate flesh. Shivers ran up her spine. When she locked all the pieces in to place, the belt felt really tight. But, Xi felt comfort in the tightness. She felt happy and protected. Secure. Invulnerable. She did not even think about the fact that she didn't have the keys until the bus had driven for some time into the growing darkness of twilight."
If you have the time, another good story about a woman who learns to accept her chastity belt and learns to love the man who put her in it is "The Suit' written by Don Quixote.
OK. I will stop annoying you now.
Neosteeled
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Thank you again for your kind words Neosteeled, and it's not a bother at all, I enjoy this part of writing almost as muh as the actual writing part. I'm not a publshed author, (other than here), and while I appreciate your sincere flattery, I don't think I'm good enough for that. The second factor is I love doing this, and if I were to turn it into a job I don't know that such would be the case, as in "Hurry up and be creative, you have a deadline!"
As to chastity play, my SO and I have done that, and it's wonderful fun, although he's the one exclusively wearing any device when we play like that. We use either a Holy Trainer Nub, or a stainless steel knock off version of the HT in a larger tube version, but both have their limits as to how long they can be worn without bad side effects. I agree such "play" is more loving and consenual and really can't be forced, but the power exchange in having the key to your partner's manhood is hard to put to words, other than to say it's very empowering, for me.
In my mind though, I don't like the concept for me, even though I know that in the middle ages women wore devices for this purpose, or were perhaps purported to have worn them. I also think that back then, just like today, a determined soul could find a way out of such a device. Anyway, while I think the belt could be fun, I don't want to put her/me into it. Call me a hypocrite.
As far as Greg, he may have lost the love of his life in the form of his former pet, and I think Dana might be hot for him simply because she can't have him. She wants, and then she gets, she been raised like that, "no" a word she's seldom heard growing up. Greg doesn't think with his man bits either, and he may even have some confidence issues as to his endowments, so finding the right girl could be a struggle for him.
Dana is highly attractive in that "fresh and new, I'm not from around here" way, but she's also been around enough, even as a 1970's teen, that she will know that Greg is less than "hung" although that all by iteslf shouldn't be all that big a deal. Guys come in all different shapes and sizes, and average can also be wonderful. She and Tracy once tag teamed Dennis though, and Dennis is big and strong all over, and overflowing with manly confidence. Girls are drawn to that kind of confidence, and not just shallow girls either.
Anyway, Greg will be hesitant to hook up with Dana for more than one reason, and I see that infuriating Dana, and making Tracy jealous too; are not the two girls a couple?
I also intend to have Greg and Dennis, (and maybe even some of the girls siblings), involved with a project that Gerg is workig on in his spare time; he did have some electrical tape in his trunk, and he likes to tinker with things. His idea is for a prototype dog shocker collar, and my alter ego will likely be doing the very early testing on it in her pet persona.
I checked, and such things were already around in the 1970's, but very big and clunky, and expensive too. The early units had big batteries attached to the collar though, and they didn't contain inside a predetermined perimeter like modern ones do. I think the group of family and friends might eventually form a company together, with my alter ego as the first test subject guinea pig. I could see selling this idea to some big wigs, with Jackie wearing the collar and being put through her paces in some high rise office building, to ensure it was safe enough to be used on a beloved pet.
Using the CB radio, (or a very early brick in a bag cellphone) to make sure my alter ego was properly attached to the house might be a technical challenge that would take a while to fabricate, and story wise I think I may have spent too much time already on the pipes she's to be attached to. I have to think of a 1970's solution to this probem of making sure she's naked and attached to the chain the moment she gets home from school, assuming one of the girls isn't taking her there themselves...
This could be in the form of training, as in "when you get home you do this first, or else!" The "or else" could be pretty bad, as in there is no way my alter ego would ever want to risk getting it. I also know that they make a special kind of padlock where the lock only closes if you pull the key out, and there may be some clever way to use that in conjunction with a realtor's key box to access the door key to get into the summer house, the rare times she comes home alone. If she has no car of her own, and if the girls confiscated her drivers license, she might have to rely on others for transport to and from anyway. This would be a serious lack of freedom for anybody, and it would certainly remind her every day who she was beholding to...
Another idea might be to have Jackie grab the daily school newspaper, on the rare days she's to be home first. She could have to stand in front of the bathroom mirror naked and chained, while holding the day's paper in her hand, she then snapping a polaroid instant picture (selfie) with the other, her inverted reflection proving that she was following the rules on that particular day.
I don't anticipate Jackie's course load to be that of her friends, they "helping" her to pick classes that gave her free time built around their schedules, and also allowed for doing their homework. Such would be practical too, as the girls have one ride to and from school between them.
Anyway, thanks again for your kind words and wonderful ideas, Jackie.
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Hello Jackie, I hope that you do consider publishing but I can understand if you are hesitant. Fun stops being fun when you have an editor frantically whispering in your ear about how soon will the manuscript be ready. I for one am just happy to be able to read your work, and I do not exaggerate when I say that your second chapter of the Clowning Around story has got most all of the pony girl books on Amazon Kindle beat handily.
Anyway, given that we have to deal with 1070's technology, one way I can see how one can compel our heroine to enter the summer house disrobed is by adapting positive inventory control methods as featured in a lot of the Steampunk victorian genre which utilizes a lot of complex and intricate clockwork mechanisms. Metallic security tabs can be riveted onto the few articles of clothing AE wears when outside the summer house and in order to enter, she would have to disrobe, one article at a time and insert the security tab into a slot on an mechanical panel controlling the front door via an electro magnetic lock. The final security tab needed to unlock the front door would of course be embedded in a slot on a metal collar that must be locked onto AE before being released into her hand (You would need the tab to unlock the collar). (Those steampunk aficionados really love Rube Goldberg gadgets, the basic concept was actually in a story I read ages ago). The security panel would have an override key that Dana et al would possess just to make getting in and out of the house easy for them. Perhaps a member of the Club is someone who is into manufacturing intricate bondage devices?
With regards to the potential twists and turns facing our heroine, what more can I do but to quote Willy and say, "The suspense is terrible... I hope it lasts".
Thank you, Neosteeled
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Hello Jackie,
I totally forgot that Greg is an academic, so he would have fellow colleagues who are into the sciences.
"There is a long history of humans tracking animal movement for specific game management goals. Prehistoric communities of hunters-gatherers tracked and anticipated animal movements (Epp, 1988; Shaffer and Gardner, 1997) to enhance access to food (Kornfeld et al., 1999; Benedict, 2005). The first radio-based animal tracking systems were developed in the 1950s and 1960s (LeMunyan et al., 1959; Cochran and Lord, 1963). Although a predominant use of these early systems was to provide track information for wildlife management (Silv, 2012), a few also provided biotelemetry data, for example related to activity, respiration, temperature, cardiovascular, gastroenterological, and neurophysiological function (Lord et al., 1962; Kimmich, 1980). The technology to track animals in a truly remote manner was first applied in the 1960s and 1970s (Craighead et al., 1971, 1972), and was expanded with the development of the ARGOS satellite system in the 1980s. Again, these early remote tracking systems were most frequently used in applied settings...."
https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fevo.2019.00519/full
This should work as a basis at least of a tracking system. Hope this helps.
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Thank you Neosteeled. I have it in mind that Greg is interested in electronics as a hobby, but using others on the staff as a technical resource is a great idea. I could also see keeping the true nature of his invention secret being a challenge too though. I'm not deeply into psychology myself, but I could also see the girls eventually consulting with somebody at college on the particulars of Jackie's unique circumstances, anonymously of course. This might be a student further along in his or her education, and that student could want to get involved with Jackie's enslavement as a proof of concept for some principal or another. I don't know that this would turn out well for the girls though.
Thank you for the ideas, I truly appreciate them, Jackie.
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And... a whole new chapter. I swithered over whether to make this a new forum post for feedback, but as there's been so much discussion here, I thought it made most sense to keep it all together. Enjoy!
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I enjoyed reading the story and Jackie's thoughts about Gregory and Dennis, Dana and Tracy, her enslavement and hunger for sexual release. How her present situation is a culmination of her kinky fantasies, each one bringing her to be the slave of Dana and Tracy, having her body tattooed, her signature on a (slave) contract, and her being chained naked inside the summer house. At this point in her life, she truly is a slave, owned and the property of Dana and Tracy.
Can't wait to learn what develops from the phone call.
One question - Is this chapter 19 of My Summer Of Dares or chapter 1 of The Property of Dana & Tracy. I hope it's the latter because it would be the beginning of a whole part of her life.
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First off, thank you for the kind words, I sincerely mean that. The original title had only encompassed the summer before college for the three friends, but the characters were such fun, and there was such interest in them that I decided to tell the whole story. This necessitated a new title, something a little more open ended, and my alter ego truly is the property of Dana and Tracy, so this works. Teann and I worked out the title change, but linking it to the original series, because while it can be read as a separate work, it makes more sense to have read Summer Of Dares first.
The Jackie character is very loosely based on somebody near and dear to my heart, and let me just say that not everybody that finds themselves "owned" is unhappy with the situation, if it's handled with some measure of love. Just as proper earned punishment is a million miles away from abuse, "owned" is quite far from unappreciated, or unloved. To me these are just the parts we play, a combination of our experiences, desires, and a million other things. Jackie is owned, but safely owned, if that makes sense.
Along those lines, does Lisa miss playing at being a pet, or does she miss Greg enough to try to reconnect? From Dennis' point of view such might not only clear his conscience, but remove a competitor for Jackie. Does Lisa attend the upcoming pet show, maybe just as a spectator, and not an actual player? Do the two meet up and talk together, as Jackie is locked in her pet cage and is forced to listen?
Anyway, thank you again for your kind words, Jackie.
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Your explanation for the title change makes complete sense; a chapter of Jackie's comes to an end with her seeing her diary fantasies coming to fruition during this summer and a new chapter begins during the first school year with her being owned property to Dana and Tracy. Now the 3 girls know things have become more serious and that Jackie is committed to being the other girl's slave, be it as their servant and/or pet.
I understand full well how someone can feel secure and happy being owned by another. Their life is less complicated in many ways within this new world they exist in - no decisions, no responsibilities a more simple life in many respects. Their attire is simple - their skin, collar and cuffs. Their food and drink are provided for them as is where they will sleep. Jackie knows the girl's care about her and they also know they are responsible for her. Fulfilling Jackie's fantasy also offers them something they never imagined - someone willing and bound to do their bidding without any push-back. So this is not a one-sided arrangement; all parties benefit.
Since you mention Gregory's previous petgirl, I assume she will be entering the picture and would be a way to eliminate Dennis' competition for Jackie. Maybe Lisa is still enamored with being a pet again and is at a pet show having been invited by someone from Gregory's club. Or, maybe she has returned to being a pet of someone that Gregory knows and is entered in the same pet show that Dana and Tracy bring Jackie to for the first time. As pets at the show, would they be allowed to allowed to talk?
Though I would enjoy having Jackie as a permanent pet, I know that would not be Jackie's nor the girl's wish. Having her in her pet persona only when training for and being entered in a pet show would be more plausible - maybe 20% pet & 80% slave/servant.
One thing that's interested me since Jackie got tattooed is there any possibility that she would want or be willing to have her nipples pierced and ringed? Also, will the girls explore bondage and restraints on their own
to use on Jackie? Would be interesting to have them fumble their way applying an armbinder or yoke onto Jackie or placing her in a hogtie for either punishment of simply to reinforce their control over her. Having Jackie only chained inside to the house would seem too "normal" after some time.
All I know is no matter how you write each subsequent chapter they will be entertaining. You have written a few stories (this being one of them) that I still go back and reread.
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let me just say that not everybody that finds themselves "owned" is unhappy with the situation, if it's handled with some measure of love.
Bondage and d/s themed stories are one of the few places where political correctness is still being held at bay. As your story points out intentions do make a difference, a crucial point lost on those who can't understand the mental kink that puts all of us out there on the fringe. Holding together such a relationship requires some extraordinary effort, as much from the dominant as the submissive side. Doubts creep in, yet its those good intentions that hold off the demons that give us the strength to push out unwarranted fears.
As far as being a bully, to be honest I hadn't really ever thought of her that way before, but love can also blind you to another's faults
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I don't necessarily love every single thing they do
There's an example of determination over doubt. Love is accepting imperfections. "Owned" takes it a step further, unconditional trust matched with the massive sense of responsibility of holding another person's fate in your hands. Is the trust earned? Yes and no, more like the results reaffirm the submissive's initial faith in the dominant.
Just as proper earned punishment is a million miles away from abuse, "owned" is quite far from unappreciated, or unloved. To me these are just the parts we play, a combination of our experiences, desires, and a million other things.
All through the story Jackie remains chained by the neck, though she often seems to forget about it. It's not a punishment per se, more a reminder that if she doesn't behave then that proper earned punishment will make itself known. There are rules, perhaps unsaid but still understood, as when Jackie returns to using "sir". It isn't abuse, merely the part she plays in the game of life. The chain is a tangible symbol she is valued and appreciated, to the extent that possessive dominant streak comes into play, to guarantee she won't wander off.
I confess I am strictly a one on one type, especially when it comes to d/s themed stories. So I did have some trouble relating to the story as a whole, but that's just me being an obnoxious, overbearing caveman. It is a pleasant change to find a story with character interaction rather than scene description. I prefer stories where what goes on inside is more interesting that what happens outside.
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Thank you so much jakbird. I love physical things obviously (we all do), but I find the most sexy and sensual things happen between the ears. For me, everything else can be perfect, but if I'm not "there" in my mind, it's just not gonna happen. Now that being said, getting there is all the fun, letting somebody talk you into something perhaps ill-advised is a true adventure, and I try to have this kind of playful interaction with my characters.
Likewise, loss of control, owned by another, or even gifted to another for a time is also a huge turn on for me. It has to be the right someone though, the right conditions too. Love and trust have to be there though, otherwise it turns into a horror show.
Your preference for one-on-one situations is logical to be sure, as I know firsthand how unstable and hard to manage a three-way relationship can be. To be the bottom most component of that three-way thing though, as in Summer Of Dares and my alter ego, any doubts you might have would be trampled over (in a loving way) by the fact that there were two who were theoretically agreeing on the course of action taken against the third. It wouldn't matter to you if it was a dictatorship, or a straight up democracy, only the good will and charity of those above you would matter.
The girls aren't evil, but they have their own ideas of how things will go, on the division of labor, and Jackie has been conditioned to follow her two pretty friends pretty much wherever they lead anyway. I think you said it best when you pointed out that at some point "Sir" is again appropriate, or when traveling someplace with the girls, you just get in the back of the car, because you know you belong there.
I think at some point in this story Dana and Tracy have to grow into this role that they have just a bit more, as you pointed out, they are very responsible for their friend, whom they still love dearly. Attaching her physically to the house itself might seem a cruel and extreme step, but if it prevents her from getting squashed on the main road; it's justified. It might also seem cruel to some to put a shocker collar on your dog, but if you live on a busy road, it might also be prudent.
I'm not quite certain how to write this into the story, but real pets we've had (crate trained, even though I don't like such personally) have used that crate as a "leave me alone" space. Whether it's a whole bunch of people in the house, or fireworks, or a thunderstorm, that crate becomes a special hiding place for them. I think at some point Jackie will need a space like that too, a short "time out" space for her to hide in or go to when it gets a bit much for her. Maybe her pet cage will work for this, or maybe they put her out on a chain run someplace away from the house. I imagine a cable dog run strung between two massive trees, but only because I have experience with that specifically at another summerhouse/cabin that we went to a bunch of times.
Thank you again for your kind words, Jackie.
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A cage can be a "safe place" for a sub or pet, someplace they can go and not be bothered. Their owner can add things that would make it more comfortable food and water bowls or a modified feeder with an attachment for water and maybe food if it is put into a blender first (use your imagination). Toys can also be placed inside the cage for the sub/pet to play with (again use your imagination).
A cage can also be a place not so comfortable and safe for the sub/pet if the owner desires. Having it's wrist and ankle cuffs locked to the corners of the cage for instance If the sub/pet is wearing a head harness, having it locked to the top of the cage for one or locking it's cuffs together behind it's back and then to the top of the cage for another.
I love the way the story is going and the title change i think is appropriate if things get a bit more serious on the bdsm front.
I think your idea of having jackie tied to a long rope or chain tied between two trees far apart will help reinforce her position in the 3-girl triangle It would also allow her to get some sun and fresh air. Maybe those two trees would be close to the lake so she can have a nice view. Of course, this could also be a situation similar to the time she was tied to the billboard (snicker).
Looking forward to the next chapter with great anitipation.
Oh, I wonder if that single telephone ring at the end of the last chapter was a signal from the girls that they were on their way back to the house?
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OK, so instead of getting caught up neatly on my backlog I am diving right into this, since I REALLY want to know what is going to happen next! I think I have a good enough memory of where things left off that I can just go with reading the new part, without backtracking first, so let's see how that goes.
First the "preview", it is interesting, since the feeling and tone almost make it sound and feel like Jackie's two friends have been deliberately working towards this end for years now. In a very real sense they have, but it still seems odd to consider such careful and deliberate long term planning and guiding / shaping of the situation starting with early teens... then again, it comes from Jackie almost as much as from her dominant friends, and once the idea was there, which fits well with their upbringing and expectations in life, why would they not look to make it a reality?
Still, and yes, this is a big and significant step forward for all of them!
The sense of shock at being abandoned, naked, chained up and very "helpless", in a whole load of ways, then confronting Dennis without expectation, the feeling is captured well there! It is good, reassuring and important, to me, to see Dennis start by being concerned / worried when confronted with his "solving the mechanical problem" suddenly turning into "captured human, captured woman", even if she is a bit more on the borderline between girl and woman in people's minds.
Yes, they are your friends, and they do love you, in their own way, but that isn't actually what he asked, is it? The idea that being abandoned here is more shocking than being chained up doesn't really surprise me though, there has been enough bondage by this point that being placed back into serious restraint is almost "normal" at this point, given you are all away from home once more, but tied up and then just casually abandoned like this... yes, that is a significant step further, even if it is a very logical step, and something that happens to "pets", if that is the right word here.
I am getting a serious education - so it is OK to sell myself into slavery to pay for my education... well, in a sense what else is the typical very low paid and no skill job? It's just less full time and demanding, but without people who care for you... its "different", but when pushed, how to defend / justify it's "different"? That's an interesting question isn't it?
Well, you and Dennis are coming at this from VERY different perspectives, so different languages isn't to unreasonable a description of things.
Ah, turning to Dennis not graduating, his shift in focus suggests that he is accepting, to some degree, her point that this is how she pays for her education. Given how hard he is working, and that he didn't graduate, I am guessing he can see the massive value of what she is getting, so can accept her paying a fairly high price for it.
Some parents won't be able to shoulder the burden of helping with education costs, and that is assuming a loving and supportive family, and sadly not everyone has one of those... not by a long shot.
If memory serves correctly Jackie, you were told you need your owners permission to have anything in your pussy, but there are certainly other ways to give you the sexual relief you desperately need and desire. But, for a "decent" man, that may be a step FAR to far... so much depends on how people understand this odd situation!
*smiles* the Dennis who was so caught up in the technical challenge, interested in the "can I?" that the more nebulous question of "should I?" disappears, especially when he actually had very good reasons for thinking nothing would ever come of this thought experiment :) I can completely see this... but we haven't quite been told what the hours he has earned are to be paid in / with have we? Although there is one very obvious answer standing right before us... but if Jackie is the payment, how are her owners going to feel about sharing her? They have definitely been rather possessive so far!
You know, I think I am actually getting a bit sweet on Dennis, trying so hard and honestly to diffuse the situation, calm and distract the girls. But I see the trap, he gave his word, and if he is someone who values his word, and I sense that he is, then, well, that's that isn't it? It also explains why Greg is currently absent, he is presumably angry with Jackie's owners.
The "dumb pizza guy?" Hardly, especially given the elegance of what you have built, but yes, people are often judged by their jobs. But what reasons did Dana have? This strongly suggests there is more at work here, so what more? Are we going to learn of this?
Dana as a male would be a serious bully... I have not thought of her like that, but it does fit the flashes we have seen of the dark side of her nature.
Well, when Dennis is being asked to explain how this masterpiece of engineering came to be, he has every right to be rightly proud of what he has achieved, and in front of a naked and chained up "pet" he hardly needs to be humble, especially if said "pet" is a key part of his pending payment... Yes, given that this went ahead, him agreeing to make it to humour the girls does sound a bit silly, but seriously, under "normal" conditions it was a solid bet on his part. As for who gives out money like this, people who have a lot of money it seems, and who have very entitled daughters who are expecting / demanding to have their needs met! :)
How many classes did Dennis need to get his sheepskin? Does sheepskin refer to completing his education and graduating? Context suggests it does, but it's not a term I recognise at all. As for how much of the money that has been given to Dana, that has been poured into this project would have paid for his remaining classes, I suspect not that large a proportion of it. There seems to be a serious wealth divide at work here. Then again, Dana comes from a background where "owning someone" doesn't seem quite so outlandish or unreasonable, definitely a position of wealth and privilege.
I am going to need to stop and consider for a few moments now. We now know what Dennis has been offered / promise in payment, and yes, there is a serious question of why he wants Jackie over her friends. It is very easy to see a male wanting / choosing a threesome with two beautifully curvy women over the "skinny pet / slave". But I really do think this is the wrong perspective, but I am not quite sure what I feel the right perspective is here...
OK, we need more information. But, I keep coming back to two basic points. First point, a dominant / pet owner / slave owner needs a submissive / pet / slave in order to be what they want to be. Second point, Dennis has had all summer, and a fair bit of contact, I assume, with your owners, to pin down the details of what he wants as payment, so if he really does want Jackie, and at this point it seems fairly clear he does, its because that is what he wants, just as much as that is what he was offered. After all, by his own words, it was anything he wanted, and he has decided that means Jackie!
From an "outside" perspective, the problem is that you yourself sought out Gregory specifically so that he could draw up a slave contract, you yourself organised that you became a slave, an object to be used and abused, and made sure that there were enough, and serious enough, punishments built into the contract to keep on serving. At this point using you as a prostitute, should your owners decide to do so, is well within the boundaries of what you have sought out and agreed to. But that simple and bare statement of facts ignores all of the emotional complexities of this, plus your relationship with the girls, your owners.
Yes, you were offered as payment to Gregory, but it never was that simple, was it, even if your owners may have thought that it was.
A great deal of this is going to hinge on how Dennis treats and views you, if there is respect, care, consideration, and so on. Things that are not yet clear or known at all. Certainly him starting out by wanting to know if you are really happy with this situation is a good sign though!
That makes sense, Dennis not wanting to be called sir is going to pull you away from your submissive mindset, a very good and important point! But I do hope that this is because he is trying to approach this whole situation, and you, with care and respect. If so this is a good start. But yes, this is a VERY radical change in your situation and role, and you are going to need time to adjust and adapt.
OK, you have remembered the rules under with you went off with Gregory, and actually, yes, we don't know if they still stand. The idea of the girls leaving you with their cast offs is dark, but it fits with your emotional shock and struggles, having been dumped into a totally shocking and unexpected situation!
I am curious as to the dark thought you don't have the energy to chase down, but you already have enough going on in and through your head right now! In at the deep end really doesn't even start to cover this, does it?
The insight into Jackie's years of training to be the submissive, the worker, is very well done, it fits perfectly there!
Could do with the money rather than some tail - OUCH but also giggles! The term and speech feels just right, but it also speaks to Dennis seeing a bigger picture, but also being trapped by a, realistically, completely unforeseeable situation. He never expected to be here, but now he is, so now what?
I completely see where Jackie's thoughts on how Dennis "must" see her come from, but I cannot help but point out that they don't line up with his words on the subject! Still, its going to take more than a few nice words to get through the emotional mess going on here!
*ah* that explains the "not as good a friend" as he should have been to Gregory. The emotions keep on getting more tangled here!
The massage, nothing here screams that Dennis is an overly "bad" man, and I do have the ongoing feeling that he sees more in Jackie than Jackie currently sees in herself.
Well, its not really a surprise that your parents are looking forward to having the house to themselves again, that just seems quite natural and reasonable to me, especially since they think you are off to embrace your dreams, have a wild time and enjoy yourself. Which in a sense is the plan, just not in a way that they would ever imagine :)
OH MY! Dennis really doesn't know what to do here or about things, and REALLY isn't going to push, and is looking to protect and shelter Jackie! HA! So he is a decent person after all! But yes, this is a messy situation, and what are her friends expecting to have happened? In theory he should have some idea of that himself.
I think the "tail" comment should be seen more in light of the "maximum" comment, not the other way around. No matter how much she offers, how attractive she is, her body doesn't pay his bills, sad to say.
No surprise that Dana threatened to spank the bitchiness out of you, that sounds about right, but also, depending on your mood, you might have even been acting up and out to get a response from her like that *knowing smile*
You know, given she had run off in her pet persona, and nearly got run over on the road (EEEEK! PANIC STATIONS!) suddenly chaining her up like that, to the house, actually does seem very reasonable, the safe thing to do, a sensible and reasonable thing actually. It looks totally different in that light, and a very long way from her current situation.
Again, different perspectives here, and knowing different things. Given they had already seen you as a pet, chaining you up for a few hours and having you wash the cars isn't such a big leap really. But clearly the girls, or at least Dana, was in a VERY different mind about things, and how they were to progress. We still don't know why she was so... so worked up that night, for all that we have been told there was a reason.
OK, so Dennis doesn't see you outside on the porch, chained up, the same way you do. But he has just confessed to thinking with his little head. He is thinking in terms of a naked woman, one he has been offered in payment, one he actually REALLY likes the look of and would like to have fun with, chained up, naked, exposed, available... he isn't thinking about your emotions, but probably thinking far more about the visual, about spying on you, about playing with you... yet still he asks how you still feel about your friends, and thus he is still asking about how you feel about your current situation.
Ah, yes, I also missed that he didn't really tell you plan A first time. Then again, you are also avoiding his questions to a degree to!
Pleading the fifth... now to be fair it could have been a plan A that "no one was seriously going to go through with", at least in his mind, thus making avoiding telling her more acceptable. It does leave a lot of questions hanging though... but for all of that, he is trying to walk a path of being a decent person here, which gets him a lot of good will in my mind.
Not technically a question, being playful or avoiding the issue, or both, I wonder?
The fact that the men feel they have to take some steps to avoid the girls "forceably" separating Gregory and Jackie is rather disturbing, but does sort of fit the pattern of the girls wanting to have undisputed control over their little slave girl. I do wonder how well Gregory and Dennis can navigate this minefield though!
But, but, waves paws around a lot... GRRRR OK, first, REALLY good to see that Dennis really wants to be sure that Jackie is doing this willingly, even if she then "needs" to be forced. This is the decent and proper thing to do!
But asking, wondering, how he checked the girls were willing and happy when they aggressively took him to bed and fucked him... seriously, to start with they were free and you are naked, chained up, helpless, and saying "I need to be taken, forced, made". IT IS SO DIFFERENT!!! There, I feel better for saying that :)
Good, this matters to Dennis, he is someone I can get behind in all of this :)
Well that is a suitably clear and obvious answer, Dennis is now in the clear with you :) As for the power of being picked up, well, you want to be made to do things, that sort of raw and effortless physical power is going to turn you to jelly in nothing flat!
In the kitchen, and the fact that Dennis is deliberately avoiding giving her the stimulation, the release that she wants does indeed speak to the idea of a dominant responding to and wanting a submissive, and Jackie is massively, obviously and completely a submissive, someone to control, use and dominate!
Now that was sexy, powerful and well done, but also rather unexpected! Then to learn that Dennis deliberately didn't bring any condoms... if I had to guess I would say it was because he needed to be sure, really sure, that Jackie was OK with all of this, and didn't want to get caught up in the moment and regret it afterwards.
What he actually wants from her is a surprise, but at the same time its nice to encounter a male who isn't single mindedly obsessed with receiving oral sex :)
Well, this has definitely moved the story and the events forward one hell of a big step, but at the same time it has raised one hell of a lot of questions, questions that I do hope we will start to receive answers to with time!
As for the phone ringing, a wrong number, a message about people coming home, something else? If it is a warning people are coming home, it seems fast, unless the girls expected just "a quickie" from Dennis. More questions :)
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The one ringer was something I remember from a very long time ago, phone calls expensive, and incomplete ones, ones not answered, giving change back from the payphone they were likely placed from. Dana is wealthy by birth, but cheap too, especially with her own cash, or even change. Also, if something had been happening at that point in time, stopping the action to answer would be a cramp.
The pet cage could be used as anything really, but I have to think about that part, I actually like Jackie having a "safe space" to retreat to. I could even imagine relocating the cage to under an overlarge end table, covering it with a cloth when naked Jackie had to be made to disappear for a short while, like a surprise visit by somebody in authority.
I'm also happy that you like the title change, and I agree that things have to ramp up here a little, it's to be expected without any parental supervision, living on their own and all of that. I think at some point "acting" normal around others will be the act part, and naked slave mode with be the default mode for Jackie going forward.
Thank you again drulema, I very much appreciate your thoughts here, Jackie.
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Thank you, Feline, there is something about the Dennis character that makes me want to give him a bigger part here. I don't know for sure if Gregory will end up with Jackie, or Dennis will, or even if she will just continue to serve the girls going forward. The girls are entitled, and I think they just see certain others as slightly below themselves, as in I may love my pet, but I love my mate, the one I share a bed with, even more.
Jackie is a tool for them, but they still love her, it's complicated to be sure, and they are likely trying to sort this all out too. I like that they are all growing with this together too, coming of age in the 1970's like this challenging to be sure.
I also think that Dennis F-ed up something special for his friend by thinking with his guy parts, so he might be disinclined to do too much of that going forward, in as much as a young man can.
I also like that Dana's motivations aren't purely evil in chaining their friend to the house, and she might even feel some responsibility here for what she and Tracy had created; an at times mindless pet that runs the risk of getting run over, or of having less than honorable men take advantage of her should the girls have gone through with their original plans of leaving Jackie behind as they went off to school together.
It's just a thought, but what if Dennis took some of his payment in sublet form, renting Jackie out, but not for sex. Housecleaning, homework, waitress work at the pizza place maybe? Just some ideas on how "tail" can become cash, without involving her girl parts specifically. I'm not sure if Dennis' payments should be free of any restrictions, as in all of Jackie is fair game, but if that is the case and he does take all of Jackie, he may well ruin a second woman that Greg wants for himself.
The sheepskin is a degree, I think at one time they were actually printed on actual sheepskin, so this is the 1970's reference that I used.
I also like that Dennis isn't all about getting oral from Jackie. Despite what is common in porn, in my humble experience not all guys want that, at least all the time anyway. I use that cliche many times myself when I write erotic things just like everybody else, but I've known guys that just aren't all that into it. Giving such is obviously quite submissive for me, and I get off on that aspect of it myself, but it really is giving without getting in return, and most guys don't want to make out afterwards either, so it kind of cuts the passion for me, even though I know that sounds counterintuitive.
I agree that minimum wage teenager jobs can be a lot like slavery too, but being chained to the house and subject to corporal punishments kind of bumps that up a notch. The girls won't fire her, but she can't leave either.
Anyway, the girls somewhat innocent summer of teen dares is officially over, and now the real fun and education begins, Jackie.
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I don't have too much to say.
First congratulations for finishing the first story-arch. The summer of dares ends when the summer of dares ends. Cuddo's for not preptuating it to ethernity.
I don't if it is feasible but I would think about some other title then "property of Dana and Tracy" something less... in your face maybe.
You did a lot of heavy lifting in the characterisation of Dennis and Gregory here.
I'm looking forward to the continuation of the story from here on.
Thank you for all your effort!
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Personally I do find the heavy focus on giving men, and with some authors, women, oral sex seems overdone. But that is partly because I just think so much of the more "subtle" stuff gets overlooked. The power of touch, there is so much skin area that can be teased, caressed, explored... there is so much to be said for teasing, going slowly, exploring a build up, etc.
But that is by the by, but still, it was actually very refreshing, and adds good depth to Dennis to see someone who is trying to be beyond and to move beyond just thinking with their penis :)
Reading the idea of having Dennis use Jackie as a general worker, its very logical, but I have an immediate "NOPE" reaction to it. It's very logical from his point of view, it solves problems and gives him some much needed income from all of this work, but I just cannot see Dana and Tracy going for it. To start with, it removes their "slave / pet" from their home, so they loose having her available on demand... it occurs to me in saying this that I am thinking that they just assume, naturally, that their calls on Jackie override Dennis's calls, so when they are around, even if she is doing something for / with Dennis, she can be called away to tend to their wants, or just because they want to show their power over her, and thus, by extension, over Dennis. Keeping everyone in their "right and proper place" in the power hierarchy.
Beyond this, having Jackie dressed, as would be required, and unrestrained, but not at school, it goes against their growing world view of her as a pet, and acts against the general training for her being a slave, a pet and an object.
Remember, its just a few hours ago that it was suggested she should get up on stage and strip for a bunch of truckers, and Jackie made the mistake of saying no. While I doubt that was a serious suggestion at the time, I cannot help thinking that having been told No, Dana and Tracy will conclude that this now HAS to happen, probably more than once, since their slave has to learn and remember her place, and learn not to contradict her betters. So less about the actual act and more about the defiance.
Also, thinking about it, I don't see Dana and Tracy wanting to "share" their maid. Yes, jumping labels here, but Jackie is being put in a position to serve several different roles for them.
As for considering how fair / unfair all of this is for Dennis, I doubt the idea has ever even occurred to the two girls, but they will probably have their own opinions on how he gets paid, gets to use their property "under loan" or even "under supervision". And this is before considering if they get jealous at seeing a strong man wanting Jackie over them...
A lot going on here, and really looking forward to seeing more of this, and also hopefully learning the answers to some of the outstanding questions :)
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Not all guys like oral, it's just the way it is. I know porn type movies like we used to go to back in our teen days (in an actual XXX movie house) always had like three acts, and that was obviously one of them. Ken, hubby, and I all used to go together as a joke, and I'm sure I wasn't the only one who got seriously wound up afterwards. I sat between both guys in the dark theater, and it would be a lie to say that both sets of hands didn't go exploring on me, this about as close to an actual threesome as we ever got together. I was usually one of only a few women in the place, (if any) as it was usually single guys sitting well apart from everybody else. I suspect my presence gave them something additional to self-entertain to, especially since we didn't exactly hide out snuggly closeness.
As far as guy oral, I guess it depends on how it's done, as in kneeling before a man submissively, or in bed between his legs, or in a 69 where he's doing something wonderful for you at the same time. Most guys don't exactly want to make out right afterwards either, so for me it kind of cools the action, giving without getting, depending of course on the exact conditions. That time with Ken in the tent when he used some rope was just super-hot and sexy though, but that was more of a rarity to see if I actually could, rather than a go-to activity. Maybe that's because I wasn't as good at it as I thought I was back in the day, or maybe other activities are just more fun and sexy. Maybe Ken was just getting the Cathy incident worked out in his head, and he really was pretending that I was her for a bit, making me/her choke on him for a few seconds. I didn't mind because I knew he'd never really hurt me, even if he did leave me with a sore throat.
Anyway, I wanted to give Dennis this particular characteristic, because he shares it with another real-world character, but I don't want to spoil the story just yet.
I also agree with your observations as to the girls lending out my alter ego for work outside the summerhouse proper, where control might be hard to maintain. I think I've set up a conflict though, because Dennis wants to turn this "job" of his into cash, so it should be interesting to see how they sort this out. Not to be too cliche, but if guys are logical, and women are passionate, they obviously see this from different angles to be sure.
As far as performing a striptease at the truck stop, this is another ultra-hot fantasy of mine that I never had the courage, nor true opportunity to do. Being somewhat less that confident in my appearance back then didn't help, but the guys in my circle of friends probably thought I looked just fine, and I have an actual nude picture that maybe confirms this. Still to this day when I look in the mirror, I see what's wrong, not what's right, it's just the way I'm made, the result of a million different experiences that I've had, just like we've all had.
Anyway, thank you again for your thoughts here, Jackie.
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SO tempted to go on a rant about how society is so geared to making people, so often women, feel deeply insecure about how they look, their figures, every little detail, every possible difference from some invented ideal... but I doubt I would be telling you anything you don't already know. Logic is one thing, and years of indoctrination is another thing entirely...
Just don't think less of me if I want you for your mind as much as your body, OK? ;)
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Logic is one thing, and years of indoctrination is another thing entirely
Add in hundreds of millenia of evolution too. As one of those detestable, partriarchial males I am still hardwired to look, despite decades of training in ordered, rational, logical thinking.
just don't think less of me if I want you for your mind as much as your body,
There are plenty of stories for those who want the body first. Thanks to jackierabbit for deviating from the norm (is that possible, given the subject matter) in providing an alternative to those of us who seek the mental over the physical.
And in defense of indoctrination, moral judgment is intimately tied to perspective...
Jack Peacock
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Part 2 of the newest phase of this story up tonight, enjoy!
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Going to write this as I read, as normal. Thinking back, remembering where we left off, Jackie is chained to the rails in the house, naked, and has, to some degree, been handed over as a sex object / toy / slave, status really not clear, to the man who put in the rails, but who hasn't been paid all that well for this. There were also some odd comments, there seems like quite a lot going on that we don't yet know about.
He also just finished having a sexual encounter with her, even if not straight sex. Yep, that seems a reasonable enough memory, so lets see what we have here!
It makes me smile, this sudden sense of Dana being so frugal, but I suspect she is suddenly faced with spending "her own money", rather than money that is more clearly her parents, which she seems happy to spend fairly freely. It is also a reminder that this is set in another time, the idea of phones being like that is quite different, but its also very clear and straight forward.
Tracy suddenly being free to be herself... she is so helpless and trained, yet at the same time she really is free in a lot of ways, suddenly she just does not have to pretend or put on a fake self any more. She gets to embrace the fact that she really is a submissive and helpless slave. That brings a MASSIVE lack of freedom and choice, but she really is free to embrace and accept that this is who and what she is... so yes, freeing in a very specific manor :)
I wonder if you are reading to much into Dana not being present when you were handed over like this. It could simply be that Dana and Tracy are making use of their time to do what they want, while also leaving you to "entertain the help", since I am left with the thought / feeling that this may be how they feel about him... who's name I have forgotten. But yes, it is also time and activity management, but keeping and managing a slave is quite the time consuming activity! Good thing you have two, or is it more, keepers :)
I like Tracy inviting Dennis to the shower, it is good to see her showing her views on him and the experience they just shared so clearly. There is probably still a concern at work that she is being forced here, so showing that she actually wants to have intimate moments with Dennis should go a long way, assuming he is any form of decent person.
OK, it has to be said, even if it doesn't help or matter. It isn't Jackie's breast size, even if they are really rather small, that makes her so sexy and appealing! Still, given the general obsession at large with bigger breasts saying this won't help, but still, it needs to be said, so there!
Not getting spanked in the shower... yes, obviously, it is a lack of naughty behaviour on your part. Or... just throwing it out there as a random thought, maybe he is busy wanting to think with his penis given he has a wet, naked and slippery "sex slave" literally in his arms, offering up just the sort of sexual activity he has just shown he really wants, and that is his focus?
Still, the fact that you clearly need to be spanked more probably needs to be written down in your journal, since if you don't let your "owners" know, they might not provide!
An interesting question, of what you offering yourself up like this to Dennis tells him about you, but I find myself starting with the simple view that you are showing that you like what you have seen of him, and enjoy both the way he is gentle with you, but also the way he can take control of you. I suspect he isn't looking deeper than this while fucking between your thighs, although he may well have deeper thoughts later... only time will tell.
A good question about privacy while in the shower due to the chain length. I suspect this was just "lucky", simply there being enough to do already just getting the system installed and working. But once this is discovered it is likely to become a deliberate feature, and may even spurn other changes to doors and chain length... *evil smirk*
The girls get back, I think there is a mistake here. I think you meant to say they were only finishing now because the hot water ran out, otherwise they would still be in the shower having fun. Having said that, the comment about Jackie being a slave, nearly an object to sell or rent... wow, that is a powerful mental perspective! I wonder how close your friends and owners have come to such a thought!
Conditioned to accept your place, yep, there have been enough comments about this that it rings very true. The comparison between yourself and an appliance is new though... I wonder how this compares to being hired help or the maid... but of course the maid doesn't travel in the trunk, so actually yes, you have been taken a step or two further haven't you?
*smirk* it always amuses me the way that so many people seem to think that for men receiving a blow job is the end all and be all :) Dennis clearly sees things in you that he likes, but has he has already proved, his sexual tastes and desires are not automatically what you expect them to be, so perhaps he isn't all about a kneeling woman offering oral sex? It would be nice to think he had a bit more depth than that. After all, taking sexual pleasure from a slave is one thing, but having the slave willingly offer herself up to give you what you really want? That is a different and far more powerful thing now isn't it!!!
"doing unsafe things safely" *giggles* not quite a generational thing, but at the same time, a world view that seems very prevalent in the kinky community, and perhaps the world at large needs to consider taking on board, a bit more care when doing unsafe things, and recognition that unsafe things can be done, if done with a bit of care. As for Jackie's change and improvement in her mental state, its amazing what an orgasm or two can do for you ;)
True, Dennis was very reluctant to use you, but also the presentation, level of helplessness and general background were also very different! So not really comparing like with like. Plus your friends have been using you for years, we have a lot of history giving using you "normalcy" here, so again, not comparing like with like.
Mood, and how people are feeling, is always going to have quite an effect on how they act. Yes, you running away as a "naughty pet" put a lot of pressure on people last time you were all up here, but as we have just noted, you have all been doing unsafe things, and they, by definition, aren't always safe, or go according to plan. Still, there does seem to be a lot of wisdom to the general point that you need to watch Dana's mood especially, and try to help keep her feeling happy.
As for the concept of you intruding on their intimate time by your very presence, I suspect they have more than one solution already in place for this!
Such deep thoughts about how having a submissive there helps their relationship along :) Still, very valid and reasonable though!
Divide and conquer? That definitely sounds like over thinking it, when there is manual labour to do with the shopping, and a slave to do it :)
On one hand the idea that all of this hard work and infrastructure would not be used most of the time, to keep her helpless and locked down, really does seem crazy. At the same time, the idea of keeping a naked slave locked up so much of the time probably seems even more crazy to many people! Given that it looks like it is going to get a lot of use, a break in case of fire is a rather sensible solution :)
Gregory having a possible problem at work, instead of his previous pet I am thinking back to the photocopier moment, when the slave contract had to be run through an extra time, wondering if an extra copy was left laying around. Still, the ex pet girlfriend is a far more logical theory for him to have to watch his behaviour really closely!
As a longer term thought, I do wonder if the girls lack of attention to their school work and homework will become an issue, since Jackie is handling so much of it for them. But who cares about that in the moment? We will see.
Thinking ahead with the cage position, so you can be hidden away if needed. Wise. But also the lack of sexual contact is having an effect, not really a surprise there though.
And there we go, touching on the point that the girls do actually need to learn something to progress :) No shock that Dana doesn't want her slave to be teaching her anything ;)
Very clever Jackie. As for what you were thinking, I seem to recall that partly, you were thinking "this is my life long dream come true, take me, own me, use me!" *smirk*
People visiting is looming, and at some point it has to be addressed... somehow. As for Jackie having to many answers in class, if you put in more work the gap might be smaller... again, not an answer that is really going to appeal now is it? ;) But at the same time, slaves do have to be kept in their place somehow or other!
At least something is being done about the homework load, and it should help to get more of the information into both Dana and Tracy. What are we going to do about Jackie getting very horny and not getting any though? Also, which is is all very important, and scene setting, we are also due for some more sexy times aren't we?
Oh... it was the copy of the slavery contract getting Gregory into trouble! That seemed a bit random. But they are going about this in a strange way, and how is this going to effect the girls, and the actual slave?
It is actually really good to see Dana suddenly standing up like this, and going protective towards Gregory. Good to remember that she is more than just the evil slave owner ;)
No details or comments on the project Gregory is working on, just a simple "we will help", discussed between Gregory and Dana really. This suggests your owners know what is going on here, even though you haven't a clue. As for the show the club is owned, you are going to be "loaned out" it seems... *smirk*
A rather "random" mental images for what is going to happen at this pet show. As for the girls desire and need to show off and attract a man, perhaps they are under long term pressure to find a good man and marry, even if only for appearances sake. This is rather the expected role of a woman, after all. As for Dennis using them over your cage, I would like to think better of him by now!
Alone with Dennis finally! A brothel is it? The lack of sex and constant work really is wearing on you isn't it?
Foreplay in the kitchen, yay! See, he really is into you as a person, not just as an object or payment. Also his comparatively cold reaction to the girls makes sense, since they have rather left him in a difficult position. In contrast you have actually been warm, kind and overtly interested in a rather accepting and non demanding way.
The whole naked in public, now that is a fascinating point of view for how her going to the show is going to work, and yes, in a way this is going to be vastly more natural and easy for her! But also, is this a hint of where things are going to go, for one thread of this story? Is she going to place top three, and have to go off do a much bigger show? Is this one way to push more of the pet aspect of all of this, that from memory, Tracy also wanted to explore and play with more?
You being such a good pet at the show, how the girls will react will I think depend a lot on how they are treated. Will they be held up as excellent pet trainers, or looked down on as ignorant of the pet world, and just temporary leash holders for an excellent pet? That could certainly get you into some trouble though!
Grrr, why would bringing condoms to a hot date make this an arrangement rather than a date? Definitely says far more about your head space than I think it says about his head space, but then again, you are in rather an extreme situation.
Smirk, stranded on a deserted island with a scuttled boat? A very vivid way of describing this, with an emphasis on the cost they would demand of you!
See, Dennis really is coming across as a good person, a good guy! There is hope for some males after all!
Dennis really isn't quite the person we thought he was, once you get past the hormones and getting caught up in the moment. His earlier treatment of her during sexy time also makes more sense now as well! But how is Jackie going to get "taken and used" by having him take care of her needs and desires? How well can you use your clear intelligence to explain your desires and needs here... this could be difficult!
AGGHHHH you bring us to an emotional boil, and just stop! GRRRRRRRRRRRRRR
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Thank you Feline, I worked on this for quite some time, but I have the story in my head, I just have to get it written coherently in a way that doesn't feel rushed. I think I have to bring Lisa into this story too though, maybe to eventually steal away one of the two male characters, but I haven't decided which one yet. I like the upcoming pet show, and the big show next, maybe Lisa attending as a spectator to see who is there. Would she see either guy with a new pet and decide to move on, or would she come down and say hello? Might Lisa be a contestant instead, bitten by the pet show bug and needing to compete in the big show herself?
Gregory's side hustle needs a guinea pig to test some things out, he has an interest in both electronics and pet safety, so my alter ego would be perfect. Maybe he even involves Dennis the craftsman, the two friends eventually working on something together.
Anyway, just some ideas going forward, and thank you for your thoughts, it helps to see how others see this.
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It is important to offer good feedback and encouragement where I have something useful to say :)
As for bringing Lisa back, this sounds like it would be a way of defusing some of the emotional tension going on between Dennis and Gregory, which would certainly help, since both of them are clearly going to be involved, and part of all of this, for some time to come. They are to deeply connected and involved to just disappear without leaving a hole, after all.
Showing Dennis doing more complex work would be good, to remind people that he is more than a simple handy man.
As for Lisa and the pet show, I wonder if she could enter herself as a pet? Just wondering what her financial situation is, and how much interest she would have in any prize money that might be on offer. Another possible approach, if you are looking for more ideas.
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Hello Jackie,
I like this addidtion very much especially the insights we get into Jackies.
You surely succeed in depicting young Jackie as the dream of about every D-Type worthy of the name,
Smart, kinky, beautiful, kinky, humble, kinky, openminded, kinky, thoughtful and last but not least, really, really kinky.
I would be surprised if she wouldn't raise a few heads at the pet show.
About the people attending the event I would expect that the little group would get some attention of some experienced players.
It takes a village to raise a child, it takes a really kinky village to raise a good D-type and Dana and Tracey could use a watchful eye and some guidance or there little cabal will blow right into their faces.
Especially Dana won't like to hear that, but it needs to be said nonetheless. Dana seems to me the "law student"-type. Strong willed, cocky to the point of arogant... and utterly clueless about her own weaknesses.
Lawyer speaking.
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Thank you T.H. I'm thinking there won't be another teenage trio at the show, and certainly Dana and Tracy will be unique as owners of record there. Dennis will be there though, but I could imagine the turmoil when he goes to park his truck after dropping the caged pet off in their assigned spot. I think it might even be fun if Lisa was there, perhaps as a spectator, and the interaction between all of them if she came over and said hello would be wild. The club helped find pet Jackie after all, on the spur of the moment, so maybe they'd want a group picture with Jackie in her pet persona, and maybe that picture will eventually get shared around campus.
I could maybe see somebody in authority from the school finding out about the girls unique interests, linking it to Gregory's found fabricated contract of ownership; the school then demanding some proof that this is a consensual relationship. Maybe a surprise visit to the summerhouse, the girls' off campus dorm, only to find a nude and cheerfully serving Jackie chained to the house itself. Does this come around and somehow get Gregory fired, maybe not for direct causation, but if Gregory was a contracted professor they still may elect to replace him and pay out his contract to limit his exposure to the students.
I also think Dana specifically is privileged and used to getting her own way, but I'd like her inner strength as a character to shine through, not become a weakness to be exploited. It's one thing for me to have a single character or two with some depth to their personalities, but in this one I'm really trying to show each individual character as unique, not set pieces there to fill a spot in the plot. I suppose if I'm successful or not remains to be seen though.
I think the next chapter or two will be exciting, and I can't wait to write them, which is very motivational for me as a writer.
Thank you again for your kind words, Jackie.
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I think that this is my favourite story of the thousands on this site :)
I think I understand Jackie and to a lesser degree Tracy but I would love to get deeper into Dana’s mind to really understand what makes her tick.
Maybe a chapter written by Dana would enlighten us as to her motivations and secret thoughts?
Thank you for an amazing story and I can’t wait for the next episode
Mark
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First off, thank you, that's high praise to be sure as there are thousands of wonderful stories here on the plaza.
I thought they were fun characters, and I'm working on Dana's motivations a little more in the next chapters, but I'm trying to tell this one from a single point of view too. Dana is a bit headstrong, but she's a natural born leader, out to prove herself in the 1970's, which is still very much a man's world. He folks want to control her, her brothers too, but her - to date - successful relationship with my alter ego, and even Tracy, tells us that she is comfortable in this role, maybe even unjustly. She may ultimately attract and retain a man of her own, but he will be an accessory, something that is expected, but not really necessary.
Dana is still a teen too, living out on her own with her two friends, and there is much to learn yet, both in school, and out. Humility doesn't come easy to Dana either, so the learning part could be a bit of a struggle until she sorts that out...
Anyway, thank you again for your kind words, Jackie.
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Hi
I have reread the whole story again and there are a few loose ends that I am curious about!
Part 4
"There was a forgotten store room rumored to be up in the back part of the facility that we were told about, but who told us about it must remain a secret for the time being."
I wonder if this will turn out to be Peter? ;D
I ended up walking down the same flights of stairs that we had left the broken wheelchair in front of when we became panicked on our first visit, and I walked right past where it SHOULD have been not even realizing something was amiss. Several steps past I stopped and looked, clearly seeing our earlier footprints in the dust, and the wheelchairs marks as well. The prints I had just made lead up to where I stood, and could be seen with the greater light seeping into this bottom floor area, as could the second set of wheelchair tracks leading back toward the room we found it in. There were no extra marks in the dust that I could see, and I became spooked for a second, but then realized it was likely just my friends screwing with me. How they knew I was going to take the way down I had chosen a mystery to me, as was the method they had used to move the wheelchair without making any more footprints
Interesting - how did the wheelchair disappear? Also I was wondering if someone else was secretly watching her. Again maybe Peter had overheard a conversation between Dana and Tracy about the planned adventure?
Plan A
" And, if she misses one single spot on anything, we go straight to plan A, without a second thought" Dana conditions darkly.
Does this imply that the sinister Plan A is much easier to implement and therefore could be as simple as locking Jackie in the cage for prolonged periods using padlocks? Please put us out of our misery and let us know what Plan A actually was!
Again thank you for this amazing story and I can't wait for the next chapter (hopefully very very soon)!
Mark
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Thank you, I do intend to get back to this one as I love the characters, I think it's a nice combination of naughty, loving, and fun.
The hidden room maybe has some more treasures to be found, and one of the brothers may have shared the secret of it's existence. As to the wheelchair being moved, I wanted to imply that the old hospital is haunted, and that it therefore isn't someplace you'd want to spend the night in, especially naked, chained, and alone. The girls might have to get rid of their servant if family is scheduled to visit, and I thought that might be a fun place to dump my alter ego off for a few days as a last resort if that happens. Dumped off naked and cuffed with no way home, it's a hell of a feeling even for just a few hours, let alone a few days...
As to the plan A, I was thinking a serious physical punishment, strokes with a strap or a belt while chained laying over the extra large dog crate; something harsh and not all that nice. There are two problems with Dana taking this option; A, Tracy doesn't seem on board for it, and B the guys most certainly won't be either. It's her summer house, but there are limits on what she can actually do, even to an indentured servant with a contract while disproportionally pissed off at her. The message is perhaps unclear, but to me Dana is being told that while she may act a certain way, there may be consequences for those actions.
I have a project that I'm currently working on (that's almost done), and then it's back to this and a few others.
Thank you again for your kind words and the motivation, Jackie.
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Well, thinking in terms of her being kept as a pet, sometimes pets need to go into kennels, when their owners are away, so it makes sense to think of the old hospital in these terms, at least to me :)
Really looking forward to when you get back to this wonderful and amazing story! :)
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Thank you, and I will credit you with the concept of dumping my alter ego off at the abandoned hospital as an out of the way parking place for my alter ego. Dumped off almost anywhere naked and bound really does something for me, but in the real world it's a rare treat anymore; more and more people hiking in our favorite play areas post covid, less free time too. A club sanctioned kennel for human pets could be a wild story element too, but that would imply that there was a whole bunch of pet girls that remained so 24/7/365 and I don't know if I could make that fly, story wise.
I will get back to these characters, and some others, but I felt compelled to retell Ken's Birthday Gift from my point of view. The first part is published, the second in edit, and the third I'm working on. Just telling the first part (exposing the secrets that were kept back then) feels kind of therapeutic to be honest, so while a distraction to the other projects, maybe a necessary and liberating one for myself.
Thank you again, Jackie.
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Looking forward to catching up with Ken's Birthday Gift, which is in my to read pile, so good to know that there is more to come there.
As for the kennels, I had thought when I wrote that about a more organised kennels, but it would require a lot of back story and extra characters, or someone else to take charge and be in charge of our little pet. Plus, I really like the idea and concept of her being taken back to the abandoned hospital and locked up there, all alone, for a little while. It is a deeply powerful mental image after all :)
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Hi
These are fun characters, and the overall story theme is fun with some kinky corporal punishments but nothing evil. The three girls really do love each other and Dana and Tracy have proven to be fairly responsible for their friend.
I know the girls are best friends and love each other, but do they have fun together (outside of the kink environment) as one would expect from nineteen-year-old girls? Do all three best friends talk, laugh, hug each other as teenage girls do? Do all three go to coffee shops, giggle over clothes magazines, go to the cinema, play sports, swim in the pond? Even in the house (albeit naked and chained) do the three best friends chat and have fun?
I assume they do, but this is not evident from the script and I would suggest having some narrative showing that the three best friends mostly do normal fun things with some occasional kinky fun (accepting of course that Jackie’s dress code, chain and household chores are accepted as normal)!
The last time all three giggled was in the car after the 'tied to the billboard' dare and genuine affectionate conversations between Jackie and Dana are rare:
"Do you still trust us?" Dana asked softly. "I know Tracy escalated this game of ours by including Greg
"You really don't remember any of this, do you?" Dana asked. I shook my head from side to side, which prompted Dana to get up and give me a big hug while I was still seated. "Can you ever forgive me, or us, for what we've done?" she asked.
Unless normal teenage fun is shown in the narrative, the reader may incorrectly assume that the girls are mean to Jackie 24/7 and any real friendship has been lost. This story is different and better than most others in this forum because of the deep friendship and fun between three best friends.
I can't wait to see the pet show, meeting Lisa, revisiting Sean’s tattoo parlor, Greg's R&D project, a return to the abandoned hospital and a striptease at the truck stop, but the main event will definitely be the Walkman scene with Peter!!!
Many thanks again for such a great story with so many fun elements
Mark
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The girls definitely love each other, and likewise I can't imagine that they see a future with them being separated, at least from a teenage perspective. I agree that there has to be a playful human side to these characters, but I have to mix that with some conflict too, otherwise it might get boring. Perhaps one of the girls does something really foolish and out of character; and all three break down in a fit of giggles, kind of like a TV blooper, or a movie outtake. This might remind all of us that while this is a serious game, it's still a game, still fun.
Stripping at the truck stop porn palace might be serious fun (something I never had the courage to do myself), but what of the girl's own egos? Is their interest in each other enough to drown out their needs to be needed, the center of attention? In the controlled environment of the summer house Jackie gets the attention, but it's also pretty clear who owns who. Maybe though, the girls see this trap ahead of time, and they drop Jackie off there for her amateur's night "show" letting her do the deal on her own, maybe left thinking that she might have to find her own way home afterwards?
Does she instead infuriate the girls by making real money doing this, but do the girls claim that cash for themselves? Or do they charge her taxi fare for a ride back home, or even for something to wear if her "dance" clothes had been destroyed or lost? A hundred dollars for a rag to wear, or a large burlap sack with a hole for her neck comes to mind, or maybe just the empty threat to be left for the truckers to eventually deliver her back home?
So many possibilities going forward, thank you all for the wonderful ideas, Jackie.
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Hi Jackie
Just wondering if we will see a full copy of the contract that was signed?
I would love to see the detail 😊
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That's a magnificent idea Mark, I'm thinking the signed contract is on display on the wall someplace, with the owners of record clearly visible, with room for more signatures in the future. It would be a simple thing to have one of the new characters read the contract aloud, maybe ask the maid if she specifically read and freely signed it.
How would Dana's brother not rat Dana out for "owning" another human being, her friend no less; have him also become an owner of record, part of the conspiracy. Working on My Personal Trainer now, and then on to this and a few others. The dog show is next, I intend it to be fun for the girls.
Thanks for a great idea, Jackie.
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I have only just recently gotten into this story series and have enjoyed it quite a bit.
Are there plans to continue it further?
(Sorry, I didn't even notice the more recent posts to this thread either.)
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Thank you oOo, it's been a fun story to tell really. I'm working on the next chapter now, but the nature of the way I write, and the varied things I write too, means the chapters come slowly. The girls are all growing into this experience together, and I'm trying to show a version of that, teens growing into mature women. I've personally done some less than well thought out wild things (both as a teen, and beyond) that I've fortunately survived, and the girls will do the same here as they really love each other. There are of course all different kinds of love, and while you might love your new car, dog, and husband all at the same time, if forced to choose one over the other...
Anyway, thank you again, your interest motivates me to continue the story to the definite conclusion I have in mind, Jackie.
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Part 3 of "Property of Dana and Tracy" up tonight, enjoy!
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The next part is finally here, happy happy days!
Right, a short delay while I re-read the last part to properly remember where we were, since just starting reading this part, since I am eager, is telling me that I don't remember exactly where we got to...
And we are back. Off to almost a shocking start, the idea that we start with our little captive fantasising about being kept chained to the runners on the ceiling in her new home, with basically her husband, or is it owner? As she says, it is incredible how something so bizarre, shocking, and all consuming, can become so normalised so quickly in her mind, in her world. Which leads to the comment about her having been conditioned over so many years... that really strikes me, and makes me wonder. I can see and accept her friends effectively conditioning her in the later years, but for so many years? She has always played such a secondary roll in their lives and relationship? Or is this also coming from her home life as well, where she was raised with a focus on the idea that women are lesser, do the housework, keep quiet and in their place?
I am not sure we are ever going to get an answer to that question, but it seems from this comment that at the very least none of the adults in either family ever noticed, or cared if they did notice, that Jackie always ended up in the position of "servant" to the other girls. Surely this must have been noticed to some degree by at least a couple of the adults, but if so, it wasn't something that needed to really be noticed, or corrected.
Now this night with Dennis does make me smile, since it is warm and loving and romantic, but it also makes me smile, since I feel Jackie is taking a narrow, if not unreasonable, view of her servitude here. As the slave, the contracted and owned slave, it isn't her place to say how she should serve or be used by Dennis, or anyone else she is handed to. So Dennis wants something other than a chained up sex doll, he wants a woman to "take charge", but that is still service, still putting him first and doing what he wants, for him and his ends, so it is still submissive and service, even if it seems like it isn't.
The morning after, well, its no shock or surprise that Jackie is much happier with life when she is getting sexual release, feels desired and important to someone else, and is simply happy. Keeping her as a slave is all well and good, but she does need her own rewards to keep positively motivated, for all that the contract is designed to make sure there are PLENTY of punishments hanging over her head, if she ever needs them to keep motivated as a slave!
And here is the confusion, first time reading this, I got to Jackie showing, and her not doing the housework at the same time, and had forgotten it was the dog show about to start, so was left trying to work out what showing was on about - clearly not showing her pregnancy.
The oh so casual comment about others also having this extra, this extended control over her, that sends tingles places! While this is very clear, in the sense that it tells us that Jackie is in for something, and that something will be quite all consuming, it doesn't actually tell us anything specific. I also really like the casual manor in which she is told how her future will change, but that she obviously and clearly has no say in this at all. Still, it is very good that they are making sure to reassure her and tell her that no one is cross, angry or upset! This does need to be made clear after all!
As for aiming for the first place finish, do her owners recognise that this means Jackie is then expected to go on and show more, at further away and bigger shows? I assume so, but have they considered this at all I wonder?
The speech also contrasts wonderfully with all three sitting normally at the table, almost as if they were equals, reminding us that they still have their roles and positions in the hierarchy, and this never goes away :)
Starting her time as a dog immediately, dumping the clean up on Tracy, yep, it really does feel that Dana organised and "directed" that outcome. This could easily have come up after she had cleaned up otherwise... power games between the friends? Or something else? The interaction between the friends does strongly suggest something else, but will we learn I wonder?
Telling Tracy not to be a sore looser? It feels like a rather encouraged, if not downright manipulated loss...
The ketchup and comment about being spiteful, I strongly suspect I know exactly what is being hinted at here!
I wonder how much of the teasing is genuine, and how much for Jackie's benefit, but it feels very natural and real. Interesting that Tracy is always pushing for them to go easier on Jackie, especially when the very harsh and controlling slave contract came completely from Jackie herself! Still, we are clearly seeing that Jackie does need some love, attention and care herself in all of this, for her own happiness and motivation.
Only needing one slave (maid) in the house though, so if Jackie gets a day off from playing maid, what will they do with her instead? *evil teasing smirk*
*smirk* of course you are up on the furniture as soon as everyone is out! Some things never change :)
Now that is odd, why the strange looks when they are greeted by a dog on returning home? Is it really a surprise that your dog has stayed in dog mode all day? Or are you still not really considering that being a slave, and also a dog, isn't just play time for Jackie, but that it is about something deeper and more important in her and for her?
An interesting observation about how quickly the girls got through the jobs, most people want to just get these things out of the way though, that's perfectly natural. But as a slave, what off time do you have to look forward to? Is it better to be busy and occupied? Or could being more efficient get you a bit more time to sleep perhaps?
They seem quite accepting of her in dog mode, even treating her as a dog as she climbs onto the sofa for attention. Of course, this is paired with putting into her crate for the night.
An understandable dream... and a great fantasy, but a nightmare in most likelihoods.
Oh joy, dog barking to wake the house in the morning, having slaves is just work, work, work!
I am tempted to comment on another round of Jackie comparing herself negatively to her two friends, especially since she clearly has Dennis very interested in her, keen to spend time with her, and very interested in her body. But this time the comparison is actually useful, in that it helps to reinforce her dog persona, so that is interesting, and may even help with the days events.
Interesting indeed that Dana is taking Tracy's maid role so very seriously! Expecting her to be naked, and so polite to everyone, I did not expect this. More depth and interest to these two!
Taking Dennis into your confidence like this is its own form of intimacy you know... so you do have your own ways of competing with the new naked maid, even if you don't completely see or recognise it.
*snort* there is a WORLD of difference between letting a submissive "be in control" of you, and taking orders from your two friends, or just one of them, when they have already taken significant advantage of Dennis, and left him in a bad financial situation. You really do need to see more of your own value in all of this!
Oh dear, and yet, I cannot help but smirk, seeing that by playing so hard into being a dog, you are suddenly set to be transported both ways as a dog, and that Tracy, who is normally on your side, thinks this is a good idea! A reminder that while your friends aren't equals, they both have their own interests in keeping you as a slave...
Tracy doesn't want to go outside naked, I am reminded of the comment, I think now from the last part, about how much more natural and relaxed Jackie is being naked than most of the other pets, and this is another sign of it. She has had plenty of training on this, and it shows!
Again, while you are in the truck and considering your two friends using Dennis, remember that they have "used" him in more ways than one, and not all men want or desire the same things...
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Dear Jackie,
I only came across the story through the current chapter. Since many things were unclear to me, I searched for the original story and read all 20 parts in one go.
Wow, what a story! Not just a sequence of action, but with plenty of room for the development of the protagonists and their feelings. With lots of BDSM, eroticism, arguments and dramatic twists. Just the way I like it. As someone has already written, one of the best stories on Gromet's Plaza!
What fascinates me the most is that the author is a woman. Not a male fantasy with too much testosterone, but really from a woman's point of view! This gives the story a deep credibility.
The protagonist is also called Jackie. Is the story, at least to some extent, autobiographical, or is it at least based on such desires?
I'm already looking forward to the next chapter next year and can hardly wait :-)
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Great to have this story continuing and the atmosphere seems much more fun loving and positive.
Jackie needs love and attention and I’m glad that she is allowed develop her relationship with Denis (winks and all).
18 year old girls would hug each other every day and because Jackie’s dress code, kink, bondage and household chores are accepted as normal, I would hope that the girls hug, hi five, giggle and have fun EVERY day. Keeping her as a slave is all well and good, but she does need love, attention and care. It’s good that they are making sure to reassure her that they are not displeased with her in the slightest. This might remind us that while this is a serious game, it's still a game, still fun (your words).
I liked the invitation to set a plate for herself at the table. I liked the confirmation that Tracy petitions for easier treatment of Jackie. I liked that her chained stay outdoors was limited to half hour in temperatures above freezing!
AT LAST the cage is padlocked – that’s what cages are for!
Giving Jackie Sundays off would be good and I would like to see Tracy chained and collared as part of the maid’s duty. Dana has won two wagers and I hope that her luck will run out. If she loses the next wager, then precedent would state that Dana would be naked, collared and chained as a maid for a day!!! Maybe she would gain a better understanding of Jackie’s predicament if that happened!!!
Tracy rubbed Jackie's naked back and head just like one would a real dog looking for some affection. Yes - we all noted that the girls shared a look which Jackie caught!!!
At some point, I would love to see a friendly and open conversation between Dana and Jackie where Dana genuinely asks Jackie if she is still ok with their game. This is reasonable as any D type will always check in with their sub.
Last summer, I experienced three REAL summer house events which were interesting. Firstly the postman walked right into the house with a parcel that was too large for the post-box at the gate. Imagine if Tracy was caught naked. Secondly the electricity company arrived to inspect the outdoors lines – imagine if Jackie was clearing up naked by the lakeside – she would have to hide outdoors for over an hour. The third event could prove to be the most important. An elderly lady neighbor arrived with an apple pie to welcome us back for the summer. Imagine if this lady lived in the next house by the lake and is a friend of Dana’s mum. After a phone call to Dana’s mum, she learns that the girls are living in the house an decides to call with an apple pie. The consequences of a person who speaks directly to Dana’s family discovering a naked chained slave would result in the girls losing the house and everything else. Dana may panic and change the rules to avoid this. In panic mode she may insist on closed blinds/curtains, clothes for the maid (it’s getting cold anyway), the removal of the chain, more time locked in the cage, asking Denis to install some kind of alarm on the pathway and more!
This story is different and better than all others in this forum because of the deep friendship and fun between three 18 year old best friends and I can’t wait for the next episode.
One question - you said that you have a definite conclusion in mind for the story. Does this mean that we will learn how the girls developed in their lives with marriages, careers, family etc. That would be great.
Mark
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What else is going through my mind:
My daughter is 22 years old and she moved out when she was 19. At that time she wasn't nearly as mature as the three girls in the story are. And she still needs my help sometimes: with contracts, trouble with the phone company and so on.
In my experience, teenagers that age might see past the next 2, 3 years. but to commit to a slave contract for 5 years, even beyond college, is extraordinary.
But everything is written so convincingly that even these doubts become secondary. And the love of the three will carry them through all difficulties.
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Thank you Feline, this took me some time because I did a total rewrite to an almost finished chapter; not liking the direction I had inadvertently taken things. I think Dennis is a complicated character, maybe not really knowing what he wants, but who could blame him with such options on his human menu?
I also think my 1970's alter ego may have been conditioned to this life of servitude by friends and family, as in traditional family units back then had the wife home raising the kids and managing the household, while the husband earned the paycheck. Was her parent's attitude one of "why bother?" with higher education, or her mother's one of "get an education so that your not permanently hitched to any man?" Perhaps her own mother wasn't happy with her own lot in life, and she wanted her daughter to have some other options for herself; which would have been very forward thinking for the time period.
Perhaps the parents involved in this adventure hadn't corrected the girls opportunistic use of their friend because they didn't see it as abnormal, or maybe didn't see it at all? As for Dana and Tracy, I think they and their parents see others serving their daughters as normal and expected, being of the somewhat wealthy class themselves, so to be fair to the girls maybe this is normal and expected.
I myself have, at times, felt chained to the house, so I thought my alter ego should as well, although in her case quite literally. The dog on the forbidden furniture was just too fun not to include, as was my alter ego shooting herself in the proverbial foot with her early dog character, guaranteeing her a ride both ways to and from the show caged and nearly naked. Dana and Tracy are going to do much the same, as they expect a first place finish, not their per merely going through the motions. I perhaps expect some unique spectators to be in attendance, maybe an old girlfriend with interest in the lifestyle, or even somebody from the college. Dana and Tracy will draw attention dressed and looking as they do, and anybody who recognizes them will surely be looking for their side-kick, so for my alter ego anonymity will be impossible.
As far as Tracy losing her bet to Dana, perhaps Dana wants a bit more submission from her lover, just to remind her who the top dog is. Does this end up being playful between the two, or open Tracy up to some other options?
I also think my alter ego being comfortable in her skin, outside, will show, will be noticed by the judges. Tracy's hesitation at actually going out of the front door nude is most natural, at least for me. I've done some fun self-bondage adventures early on a Saturday morning, like first light early; stripping down in my car and cuffing myself up for the ordeal of finding the earlier hidden keys to get back inside my car, and back into my clothes. It's wild for me, this feeling of being abandoned someplace like that, even self-abandoned, but the feeling you get when slamming your car door, locking your clothes and keys in the car, the commitment in that; just WOW!
So for Tracy, downstairs and nude, while still inside the summerhouse, might still feel like home, even with Dennis there, but step outside and it's a whole new game, at least to me.
As far as being greeted by a dog when the girls got home from their human pursuits, perhaps not what was expected, or perhaps a secondary bet yet to be disclosed.
I'm looking forward to the dog show to be honest, it's ripe for all sorts of new experiences and interactions...
Thank you again for your view of this, I know I've said this before, but it really helps me to write better, Jackie.
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Thank you John, that is high praise as there are many wonderful stories here at the Plaza. As far as being autobiographical, I've been fortunate to have done some wild things when I was younger, and I was also fortunate to have survived them unharmed. That part wasn't exactly an accident, but in a risk vs reward mindset not always well thought out either.
So, being playfully stripped and enslaved by some teenaged girlfriends during a sleepover, I've done that, it was playful childish fun. Doing some fun, less than fully clothed dares and adventures, I've done that too, again innocent fun, nothing really sexual in that. I don't want to say how old we were, but you get the idea, innocent fun for all.
In an alternate universe, yeah I'd like to have some of my alter ego's experiences, but I also like this life that we've built, so visiting these adventures like this is the safest way to experience them now, and sharing them here is fun; so I kind of hope somebody gets to enjoy that too...
Now, as far as the real things that I've actually done with my boyfriend, now husband, and some select others, that was wild, like what was I thinking wild. There was just something about getting a few like minded people together, friends, the egging on that takes place. So, as a result, I've done some things that I maybe don't fully regret, but I also see no need for a repeat either. Maybe it's frontal lobe maturity, or just bored teens with motive and opportunity, and even raging and curious hormones; who knows?
As far as the teens 1970's maturity, in my humble opinion in the 70's, and maybe even the 80's, a eighteen year old was an adult, or at least most were. These days there seems to be an extended adolescences, maybe it's economic in nature, or what we as parents are doing that's different than what our parents did, again, who knows? In the story Dana's folks are paying the electricity bill, the tax bill, and even the oil bill, so while they are somewhat on their own, there still is a safety net of sorts. So, the illusion of independence so as to gently grow into maturity, without the total burden.
This as well takes place during Vietnam, so there were plenty of teenagers that had to grow up way too fast for that. Keeping that in mind, I could see Dana and Tracy's parents wanting to keep their brothers in the education system and away from that, although I don't mean to be pro or con on that specifically, it's just a fictional story element.
Thank you again, Jackie.
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Thank you Mark, and yes I do have a conclusion in mind, but one that also allows for a revisit down the road. I also have it in mind that Dana's brother will pop in on the girls at the parent's request, with a phone call first though, otherwise that might get a bit creepy. He doesn't want to be perving on his sister obviously, but perhaps her two friends have been lusted after from afar, but as in too young back then and not really approachable. They're legal adults now though, just a few years younger that he is, but familiar too. Were there friendly smiles and soft words from the brother towards Jackie the few times the two interacted back then, my alter ego reevaluating those now once his interest is revealed?
He's a young man with some character and depth, and he's not wanting to really catch his sister (who has matured into a stunning and voluptuous young woman) anything but fully dressed. When to treat the child as an adult though? "When her actions and maturity demand such" is the obvious answer...
Sibling rivalry aside, he maybe doesn't want to see her fail either, but his 1970's sensibilities might not allow for Dana's intimacy with another woman, so the girls might have to cool it while he was around, unless he can be distracted with another. Does he catch my alter ego on the house chain-run anyway, and then read the contract left hanging on the wall in plain sight, maybe seeing the trophy that was won as well, with the owners of record and the date won.
What does he do when he discovers this, if he discovers this?
Was the brothers job really to chase away any male suitors, just like when Dana was younger and living at home, the unintended consequence of that being a sister who desires her friend first; this the very definition of safe sex, even before prolific STD's. I've read that your first taste of love is the best taste of love, and if that's so, Dana might have some trouble developing other tastes more in tune with her parent's desires. Maybe this is the real reason why the three are living together so far from home, my Jackie alter ego theoretically keeping them out of trouble. Maybe the girls grow out of their lust for each other though, or maybe they just find easily bent husbands at college that check that particular box for them.
I like your possible scenarios of accidental discovery, but I don't think any of the parents will want to go backwards by having their youngest children move back into the proverbial nest in failure. So sending a neighbor to snoop, to learn secrets best kept in the family, might not happen.
Thank you very much, I always get such wonderful ideas from these interactions, Jackie.
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The comments here about maturity interest me, and make me smile. It doesn't take much looking back at history to know that people were considered adults at 16, or younger, for many years. The question of how adult or mature people are at any age is very open ended, but it does seem that in western English speaking countries, people are often not that mature or self reliant at 18 or so these days. Were they more so before? This story is set quite a few years ago, when parents probably expected more from their children by this age.
But there is a whole pile of different answers to find here, for different groups, ages, locations, etc. Also though this is fantasy, even if it feel very real, believable and realistic.
The slavery contract is, I am happy to accept, far to extreme and one sided to be signed and accepted. BUT, I have certainly met people at this age, and several years older, who would more than happily offer up and sign such a contract, all caught up in the delight of it, without any real understanding of some of the longer term risks. Remember that a lot of makes this work is the history and trust between these three.
Dennis does have a whole pile of options being presented to him, but I do enjoy the sense that he is mature and worldly enough to understand that there is more to look for than just physical pleasure with a woman, and that the interaction, connection, and having someone genuinely interested in what HE wants and needs actually matters a whole lot! I struggle to see Dana and Tracy as really that interested in what Dennis wants or desires for himself :)
So looking forward to the dog show, and yes, Tracy comes across as VERY real and believable in her reaction to being naked and going outside. Jackie in contrast has been actively trained and conditioned to find her nakedness, helplessness, exposure and down right objectification to be both natural and expected. That IS going to show, and make quite the impression at the show :)
So much fun going on here to enjoy, savour and look forward to more of :)